I went over this a few times and noticed little things being telegraphed throughout the story. 1. When Big Mac is looking around the town seeing various ponies interacting he spots Raindrops chatting with Cloudkicker, and then he sees Raindrops *again* slowly moving toward the edge of town... toward the Everfree Forest. 2. After the encounter in the forest Big Mac is following Applejack, Cheerilee, and Redheart back to Fluttershy's cottage, and the line says that Big Mac was following the *four* mares back to the house. Whatever this thing is, it is so good at very subtly inserting itself in with ponies that none of them notice something is wrong... most of the time. Also, this story reminds me of the creepypasta of "Anansi's Goatman Story", where the horror is in the realization that there's been a pretender, an invader hiding amongst everyone else.
***** Admittedly, I didn't get it when I first listened to this audio reading. I knew I was missing something, so I read through the actual written story for myself. The act of my eyes scanning over the words made it more clear and it was *immediately* evident what was happening. Going back and listening to the audio a second time just topped it off, and this is still one of my favorite MLP horror stories.
Hahna Lo Yes, that's the long and short of it. This thing has the ability to mimic ponies and is placing itself in crowds of real ponies without their knowledge of it. There is no discernible reason for this. Once the creature is discovered, it tends to reveal its true form, a being which smells of burnt hair.
This is so subtly creepy. So the creature can blend itself in to the point that no one notices its presence beside them. The story tipped us off to that multiple times, always adding an extra pony to the ones we were following. If there were five ponies, then there were six. If there were three, then there were four.
To be honest, I instantly noticed it said *four* mares when there were only *three* mares that when to Fluttershy's house, I was confused when it said that, but at the end I understood why it said that
13:45 *“Big mac’s breath began to shake. As she’d lifted her head, turning her gaze towards him. He suddenly became aware...of the sent of burning hair.”* 14:00 *Hears loud noise* *I gasped.* “Lilac, doesn’t think she’ll be sleeping tonight...”
If people need me to explain the end then here you go (Not sure if its a hundred percent accurate though) Big mac woke up to find himself face to face with the thing he saw near that tree he went to. The creature I think killed Cheerily since Berry Punch was never in their group to begin with and they were "sharing" a blanket.
I was convinced Big Mac will stumble upon his baby sisters corpse at the end.Misterious foul stench, Apple Bloom nowhere to be seen...you know, tension building.And the actual twist...not so much.
IKR! Hes so underrated and hes the most powerful character in the show. Well his physical strength anyway. I bet if he wanted to he could have easily beat this creature whatever it was.
'Ha..!' ''Wah! Crap.. Why'd that scare me..?'' 'Cheeralee was sharing her blanket with Berry Punch.' ''Wait... when did Berry get there..?'' I really couldn't remember Berry Punch being there.
The real horror is that whatever creature is involved in this story, smells like ass, and just sticks around everybody who of course have to deal with the nasty smell. Tbh, whatever that thing is, it's an inconsiderate jerk >:V
Toward the ending where you said " as she suddenly turned her gaze toward him as he smelled the scent of burnt hair.." I started to smell burnt hair in my house and my sister is right next to me sleeping, back faced to me!!! SOMEONE SAVE ME!!!!>_
Sabrena Moore No, Skinwalkers are Native American Mythology. They wear the skins of animals and transform into the said animals, the only way to tell them apart is by their putrid aroma. Though this one may not be wearing skin, it still takes form of ponies and gives off a rank smell. So I only made my theory-
That was a fantastic darkfic reading and it was quite creepy. Also very good choice in cover art. it's quite creepy and very unsettling, I feel like that thing in it is staring into my very soul. O~O Also, I"m very impressed with the voice actor of Big Mac. He sounds exactly like he did in the show. I'm also very impressed of ObabScribbler, she always seems to find such talented voice actors for all of her fanfic readings. Which just brings them to life. So great job, dear, keep up the good work. X3
Well, that was eerie. I find myself wanting to understand a little more than we're given, but it's very immersive and all the parts are read wonderfully.
SPOILERS SO D9NT READ This is the type of story where it’s impossible to make a good sequel Because 1. The only way to do so would to be to explain the “thing” that is berry punch WHICH would ruin what makes the monster so scary The unknown the greatest fear you could use against someone is the unknown because then the person begins to subconsciously think of the worst possible things at least by theirs standards and bias So they end up making their own worst nightmare remember your own imagination can scare you more than anyone else’s That’s really why this story works It uses your fears against you It uses the unknown
(Waits for video to load) If that cheerful Pony Tales jingle plays, I'm going... (video starts, cheerful Pony Tales jingle plays) ...to....... (walks out room)
I absolutley loved this! I wish I could draw things for this, sort of animatic. If you ever need something alike tell me because this was stupendous work and gave me the absolute chill. The immersion was fantastic and the narration was brilliant. The voices were perfect.
Freaking awesome!! I was a little disappointed how short it was though. Also, I was wondering if you're going to be doing any horror fics anytime soon; sort of like an extra awesome Halloween spook!! Your dark fics are definitely 20% cooler than any other fic reader's!! :P
2:16 - 6? There is only 5 of them mentioned; BicMac, Nurse Redheart, Cloudkicker, Raindrops, and Cherry Berry. 5:20 - Wait, how did Raindrops get there so quickly...? 8:30 to 8:50 - WAIT, why are there two Flutters?! 😨 8:14 to 11:05 - Group of 5?! There is an extra in our count; there should only be Ms.Cheerilee, AJ, Nurse Redheart, and Big Mac!! 😱 13:25 - B-Berrypunch...?
At first I was like "what a snooze fest", but now hmmmm..... now I'm like....woah. I read a comment and now hmmm... I get it. Love MLP! Keep up the good work everypony! 👍 🐎
Something to do with a yellow pony that looks like flutter shy that causes the smell of burning hair apparently trying to steal someone’s soul or something.
It’s something that’s following Mac around impersonating other ponies. The focus is drawn away by Apple bloom missing but rewatch and listen to how often there’s an extra pony in the group...
Question Scribbler. Do you have a chance to access Wattpad? Myself and many others on there have fanfics and though I can't speak for us all, I do think that some of us would appreciate that you try to look at ours if not read them. I can't say my stories are really good compared to some but I think many of us would agree that it would be nice if you could try to look at our stories there.
I think my confusion about the story is with the writing. It took some further reading to get the gist of what was going on, it was hidden too well in the story so nothing seemed out of place until Mac went to touch Fluttershy and she wasn't there but that was when the story was mostly over. The whole burning hair thing needed a better explanation too, is there a sequel or prequel that could help with that?
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I went over this a few times and noticed little things being telegraphed throughout the story.
1. When Big Mac is looking around the town seeing various ponies interacting he spots Raindrops chatting with Cloudkicker, and then he sees Raindrops *again* slowly moving toward the edge of town... toward the Everfree Forest.
2. After the encounter in the forest Big Mac is following Applejack, Cheerilee, and Redheart back to Fluttershy's cottage, and the line says that Big Mac was following the *four* mares back to the house.
Whatever this thing is, it is so good at very subtly inserting itself in with ponies that none of them notice something is wrong... most of the time. Also, this story reminds me of the creepypasta of "Anansi's Goatman Story", where the horror is in the realization that there's been a pretender, an invader hiding amongst everyone else.
jack squatt Wow, I never really noticed those few things. I also agree that it reminds me of Anansi's Goatman Story.
*****
Admittedly, I didn't get it when I first listened to this audio reading. I knew I was missing something, so I read through the actual written story for myself. The act of my eyes scanning over the words made it more clear and it was *immediately* evident what was happening. Going back and listening to the audio a second time just topped it off, and this is still one of my favorite MLP horror stories.
+jack squatt i don't get it. it seems that something that smells like burnt hair keeps changing form to match others or something?
Hahna Lo
Yes, that's the long and short of it. This thing has the ability to mimic ponies and is placing itself in crowds of real ponies without their knowledge of it. There is no discernible reason for this. Once the creature is discovered, it tends to reveal its true form, a being which smells of burnt hair.
+jack squatt With possibly evil/murderous intentions?
"ponyville could not have asked for a better nightmare night" NOPE! I've read "Something sweet to bite" I'm good. XD
I've listened to it... And had *her* appear as my sleep paralysis demon
Ah yes, Candymare😭
Have you read the other candymare stories.
McDonalds: Hi what can I get you
Me: A BIG MAC
I'll like a sweetie Bell on the side lol
Jamison Christner small, medium or large?
Medium please and thank you LOL
@@DJ-LD can also have a Applejack with that order too
LOL😂😂
This is so subtly creepy.
So the creature can blend itself in to the point that no one notices its presence beside them. The story tipped us off to that multiple times, always adding an extra pony to the ones we were following. If there were five ponies, then there were six. If there were three, then there were four.
I knew something was wrong when they said Berry Punch's name.
I was like, "WAIT! She's not supposed to be there!"
To be honest, I instantly noticed it said *four* mares when there were only *three* mares that when to Fluttershy's house, I was confused when it said that, but at the end I understood why it said that
13:45
*“Big mac’s breath began to shake. As she’d lifted her head, turning her gaze towards him. He suddenly became aware...of the sent of burning hair.”*
14:00
*Hears loud noise*
*I gasped.*
“Lilac, doesn’t think she’ll be sleeping tonight...”
If people need me to explain the end then here you go (Not sure if its a hundred percent accurate though)
Big mac woke up to find himself face to face with the thing he saw near that tree he went to. The creature I think killed Cheerily since Berry Punch was never in their group to begin with and they were "sharing" a blanket.
I was convinced Big Mac will stumble upon his baby sisters corpse at the end.Misterious foul stench, Apple Bloom nowhere to be seen...you know, tension building.And the actual twist...not so much.
How does he find her corpse if she’s nowhere to be seen?
We need more fan fiction with Big Mac as the main character. We just need it.
IKR! Hes so underrated and hes the most powerful character in the show. Well his physical strength anyway. I bet if he wanted to he could have easily beat this creature whatever it was.
'Ha..!'
''Wah! Crap.. Why'd that scare me..?''
'Cheeralee was sharing her blanket with Berry Punch.'
''Wait... when did Berry get there..?''
I really couldn't remember Berry Punch being there.
right hold me please
+Inkie Pie Hi, Marblestone!
Tomboyish She-cat X3
Nameless User IT DA SKINTROTTER( pony skinwalker)
Cookie Controller iiiiiii,ii
gotta say. Big Mac sounded like Obama
Barmac Obama
+CallMeCrayzie XD omg yes!!! Love it!!!
+Pinkamena Diane Pie :3
CallMeCrayzie you are the best lol
The first equestrian American president
Big Mac's voice scared the hell outta me
lol
Love Life
What?!
😂😂😂😂
WEEE WOOO WEEE WOOO WEEE WOOO!!!
The real horror is that whatever creature is involved in this story, smells like ass, and just sticks around everybody who of course have to deal with the nasty smell. Tbh, whatever that thing is, it's an inconsiderate jerk >:V
Toward the ending where you said " as she suddenly turned her gaze toward him as he smelled the scent of burnt hair.." I started to smell burnt hair in my house and my sister is right next to me sleeping, back faced to me!!! SOMEONE SAVE ME!!!!>_
NO1 CAN SAVE YOU NOW!!! MUHAHAHAH!!!
Ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!
XD
Berrypunch is coming for you. She failed the first time. *The smell of burnt hair again invades you're nostrils* 😈
Rare iiii
If it took the shape of Fluttershy.... Is it a skinwalker?
Bluh...
I doubt there's a real answer.
Yṳṁḕ ḊṙḕḀṁ Is that supposed to be a Markiplier reference?
Yṳṁḕ ḊṙḕḀṁ it could be an aswang, which is a similar creature from phillipino mythology
Sabrena Moore No, Skinwalkers are Native American Mythology. They wear the skins of animals and transform into the said animals, the only way to tell them apart is by their putrid aroma.
Though this one may not be wearing skin, it still takes form of ponies and gives off a rank smell.
So I only made my theory-
Lucas Johnston
Yeah, the fact it takes the form of ponies and gives off that aroma seems to click.
Yṳṁḕ ḊṙḕḀṁ I'm talking about the aswang, which is also a shapeshifting creature from Philippino mythology
That was a fantastic darkfic reading and it was quite creepy. Also very good choice in cover art. it's quite creepy and very unsettling, I feel like that thing in it is staring into my very soul. O~O
Also, I"m very impressed with the voice actor of Big Mac. He sounds exactly like he did in the show. I'm also very impressed of ObabScribbler, she always seems to find such talented voice actors for all of her fanfic readings. Which just brings them to life. So great job, dear, keep up the good work. X3
Scribbler is such a talented voice actor. These grim fics are strangely captivating, thanks to everyone involved in this!
Chilling! A very nice read as always~
CALL THE WINCHESTERS!!!!!!☺
the picture just stars into your soul!
Pyre light yep, it kinda scares me haha
and i stare back. devouring what remains of its soul.
+Scribble The Artist what soul?
Pumpkin Pony our soul
Scribble The Artist we share a soul? i didnt even know i was associated with one
I am just going to come down into the comments until the story is done, that thumbnail is staring at me in a creepy way >.>
lol
Sadly I can't escape it :( I'm I my iPod..........
come to think about it its so scary i dont even scar at it too i just stay on fb to listen
I'm playing Subnautica while listening.
Same
I've been listening various MLP creepypasta/darkfics and it's so refreshing to see a horror story that doesn't rely on gore.
This channel is my addiction
Well, that was eerie. I find myself wanting to understand a little more than we're given, but it's very immersive and all the parts are read wonderfully.
SPOILERS SO D9NT READ
This is the type of story where it’s impossible to make a good sequel
Because
1. The only way to do so would to be to explain the “thing” that is berry punch WHICH would ruin what makes the monster so scary
The unknown the greatest fear you could use against someone is the unknown because then the person begins to subconsciously think of the worst possible things at least by theirs standards and bias
So they end up making their own worst nightmare remember your own imagination can scare you more than anyone else’s
That’s really why this story works
It uses your fears against you
It uses the unknown
Of course Sweetie Bell knew what burnt hair smells like.
Awesome job.
that pic scared the shit outta me
lol
+Nicolle lee Me too
it also scared the heck out of me
ikr!!! it's spooky
I QUIT so spoopy!😂😂😂 I've seen worse.
and then they were all brutaly murderd! THE END!
Oh my gosh that pic is creeping into my thoughts making me more insane than I'm already am from watching another dark fan fic
(Waits for video to load)
If that cheerful Pony Tales jingle plays, I'm going...
(video starts, cheerful Pony Tales jingle plays)
...to.......
(walks out room)
Well, im having a bit of a staring contest with this thumbnail.
Loved the fic reading, and the voice actors were spot on, great work , this gets me in the Halloween mood ^^
"as she suddenly turned her gaze toward him as he smelled the scent of burnt hair"
"OH I GET IT,i don't get it"
Theory: an undead changeling is stalking Big mac.
I absolutley loved this! I wish I could draw things for this, sort of animatic. If you ever need something alike tell me because this was stupendous work and gave me the absolute chill. The immersion was fantastic and the narration was brilliant. The voices were perfect.
That moment near the beginning when cloudchaser holds big macs stare is probably a hint that she is the creature.
The whole time it said about burnt hair and seeing stuff, my brain went:
Hallucinogenic drugs in the sweets. THATS THE BAD PART
Ngl this fanfic reminds me of “Let her In”. One of my fav MLP fanfics
had to listen to this a few times before finally figuring out what was going on
That picture is the single scariest thing that I have ever seen in my entire life. Celestia help me!
please explain the ending. Not sure it was hinted earlier that big mac plus nurse red heart killed berry punch, but someone please explain x.x
Berry punch wasn't in the group in fluttershy's cottage and the 'thing' wasn't berry punch at all.
YES! I love Lacerator Lyra! One of my OCs, Doting Glow, got repeatedly horn impaled during the Dreg Battle Royale.
i feel like i'm dying when i look into its eyes
Me to...
me to cuz im on my period so it makes me feel dying even more
Freaking awesome!! I was a little disappointed how short it was though. Also, I was wondering if you're going to be doing any horror fics anytime soon; sort of like an extra awesome Halloween spook!! Your dark fics are definitely 20% cooler than any other fic reader's!! :P
Big Mac: Good heaven's. What is that smell?!
Creature: Smell?!
Big Mac: 🤢
2:16 - 6? There is only 5 of them mentioned; BicMac, Nurse Redheart, Cloudkicker, Raindrops, and Cherry Berry.
5:20 - Wait, how did Raindrops get there so quickly...?
8:30 to 8:50 - WAIT, why are there two Flutters?! 😨
8:14 to 11:05 - Group of 5?! There is an extra in our count; there should only be Ms.Cheerilee, AJ, Nurse Redheart, and Big Mac!! 😱
13:25 - B-Berrypunch...?
I dont get it....Why does berry punch have a burning smell?
Berry punch wasn't with the group when they arrived at flutters cottage.
The monster was pretending to be her
I would like to know who's the ghost pony is, cause it's a burned/possible murdered victim
same
me too
I dont get it. Also, did anyome else jump a little when big mac woke up?
Well done intro!! I love it!
wow, so it just leaves you on a cliff hanger?
At first I was like "what a snooze fest", but now hmmmm..... now I'm like....woah. I read a comment and now hmmm... I get it. Love MLP! Keep up the good work everypony! 👍 🐎
I've been haunted by that thumbnail since I was three. I watched this for the first time yesterday. HOW!?!!!???!?!?!
Omg so scary I was so scared I cant even describe how scared I was u earned a subbie :)
God I love any story with big Mac, under rated character
Very nice, cave me chills. But I didn't understand what it was with fluttershy and the smell on burning.
Now u'd wish mlp wasn't a reality. Cuz u'd never know wtf's in the dark trees of the everfree forest
I’m the Princess of the Night, so of course they run in fright!
Nightmare night gimme something sweet to bite~ She pounces as she giggles eating everypony alive!
Okay, WAT DA FACK? Oh my God, that ending!
Hahahahahaha I was playing fallout 4 and when you talked about berry punch being yellow I got jump scared by my super mutant comapanion
Wow that was great!! I love you guys videos!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHHA I LOVE THIS PICTURE
how can u like a pic like this
now that I see it kinda seems pretty cool and creepy too
Amelia Rosetta Rose Hi I'm Darkness nice to meet you and I kill people with my scythe.
@@darknessdeathbringer1349 I hope youve touched grass since you posted this comment.
So it was flutters the whole time!!
Awesome. The same rules of halloween apply for nightmare night as well. I wonder who the ghost pony is, hope there's a part 2
That face at first '3' Uhh... Love it :DD ^_^
I'm glad suki is getting better :) I'm sure she is not out of the woods yet but i'm still glad :)
I literally just a notification right as Big Mac woke up 😭😭😭
I probably shouldn't have stared at the pony through this video....at night....in a dark room.... I'm gonna turn on a light
I respect you Scribbler Productions!))
*Something strange!!*
*in the neighborhood!*
WHO YA GONNA CALL?!
I dont thing I remember berry punch staring at Big Mag or bring in the house
ohhhh crap.
I just read the description, and im in for a good time.
And stop staring at me with them big ol' eyes!
Thumbnail:
you all did so good... way cool /)
Love you dark fics
Man lost silver cant catch a break. First he loses his limbs now he became a pony
I’m a pony
*Emerges from the void and starts singing*
I'm too stupid to understand. Can someone explain what happened?
I don't get it either
Something to do with a yellow pony that looks like flutter shy that causes the smell of burning hair apparently trying to steal someone’s soul or something.
It’s something that’s following Mac around impersonating other ponies. The focus is drawn away by Apple bloom missing but rewatch and listen to how often there’s an extra pony in the group...
What happened next? WHAT HAPPENED NEXT?!? CURSE YOU, CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!
They probs died after that.
Oh now's not the time but when a girl is trying to confess to you, you get distracted and smell the air 😅😑
Im laughing and crying at this because I cant smell and have no idea what any of these things smell like!
So glad it am already on the toilet
Now really glad i am on the toilet
Andree Villarreal this comment actually made me laugh haha
Came out on my B-Day, feel so special. :3
So it was berrypunch the whole time!?!?
to me the dark fic are the best!
I don't get the ending.
Fynn the Fox There’s a creature pretending to be other ponies and sneaking into their group. It realized Mac knew it wasn’t a normal pony
@@jimmyelkordy3752 so a changeling?
ObabScribbler, I got nightmares from the picture..
It was creepy and I LOVED IT!
Big mac makes me hungry
I didn't understand what happens
Applebloom was allright? What was that smell? Am I asking stupid questions?
+Puddin 29 Thought i was the only one
Ashley Pryce I understand you sis. T.T
Read the comments
I'm really terrified of that picture
Question Scribbler. Do you have a chance to access Wattpad? Myself and many others on there have fanfics and though I can't speak for us all, I do think that some of us would appreciate that you try to look at ours if not read them. I can't say my stories are really good compared to some but I think many of us would agree that it would be nice if you could try to look at our stories there.
GET AUT OF ERE STALKER! Lol jk
Rofloflcopta really?
... is it bad that I'm unsatisfied with the end? XD I want to know what the thing is!
Are you telling me luna didnt sniff out the skinwalker?
I think my confusion about the story is with the writing. It took some further reading to get the gist of what was going on, it was hidden too well in the story so nothing seemed out of place until Mac went to touch Fluttershy and she wasn't there but that was when the story was mostly over. The whole burning hair thing needed a better explanation too, is there a sequel or prequel that could help with that?
I don't understand the ending why was berry punch yellow and the scent near her I'm a little confused
So, this month you're doing darkfic, how is that different from your normal? :-P
So what's the ending? I don't get it
Ok that was terrifying...
I did not start the video yet: one guess, the scent is going to be rotting flesh.