I Am The Storm

[Verse]
Beneath the crimson sky I ride alone
Shadows whisper tales of lands unknown
Clashing swords sing songs of ancient lore
Steel and thunder ready for the war
[Verse 2]
In the hall of echoes I stand tall
Brothers fallen warriors heed the call
Through the tempest I carve my name
In the winds of Valhalla lies my fame
[Chorus]
I am the storm feel my wrath and might
Through the dark and cold I bring the light
With the roaring waves I rise above
Fury of the gods strength of their love
[Bridge]
Ravens fly they guide me through the night
Guardians of the skies with keen eyesight
Forged in fire heart of stone unyield
Victory is near battles never sealed
[Verse 3]
Mountains quake beneath my iron tread
In my wake the fields are stained in red
No retreat till victory is won
By my blade the dawn of new begun
[Chorus]
I am the storm feel my wrath and might
Through the dark and cold I bring the light
With the roaring waves I rise above
Fury of the gods strength of their love

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1 interesting song but....
In my personal opinion it needs some work.
My personal view on what might be done.
The verses lines feel disconnected and more like a sung line then a connected whole.
The flourish at lines end sounds neat but disconnects them. Making it feel like poetry in music rather then an ai song.
If you wanted to alter this.
Take the verses and instead of a single voice.... Have the lines jump between voices. With the flourish as a transition.
Or.
Take the flourish out and then add in a behind the voice rising element.
You can definitely use when the vocal points stop to drop emphasis but.... Constant exactly the same flouish.. Starts to wear a bit on the ear.
.....
Sure other artists definitely do stuff like it. The better ones learn to use very small variables in the musical accents to add to the song.
Essentially bring the verses more in line with the chorus.
And varry up the floirsh a bit.
Possibly play with the idea of call and response lines. If you feel like it.
Solid attempt at a good product. Actualized and on UA-cam.
But there is definitely room for growth.