God is Rapidly Ceasing to Exist! A Review of Reaper's Creek by Onision (Part 2)
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- Опубліковано 9 тра 2019
- It's the epic conclusion to Onision's worst book! How will this rambling, nonsensical, self-filating "story" wrap up?
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OK but
Greg in his second book: "Verbal language is stupid, because it helps cause genocide"
Greg in his third book: "Yeah, Daniel just committed mass genocide lmao"
i am starting to believe that onision is neil breen's bastard son
Next book, the main character is Hitler
@@TheAlyssa2469 will he do anything wrong though?
Bro ... What isn't verbal lauguage lmao is he literally just saying words are stupid
@@murciadoxial8056 That's an insult to Neil Breen
HE TOOK HIS DADDY ISSUES SO FAR AS TO PROJECT THEM UNTO GOD HIMSELF I'M DEAD
Ty for making my night with this comment
Isn’t that what Tyler Durden did?
@@GigaChadh976 lmao
You are rapidly ceasing to exist.
Regina H Lol even Jesus had less Daddy issues
This feels a lot like how RPGs start and end.
First Mission: Investigate the Creak
Last Mission: *DEFEAT GOD*
Reaper's fantasy (feat. daddy issues)
No need to be mean.
Most RPGs actually have some kind of build up to killing God, Onision’s book seems to just jump to that goal randomly.
this just sounds like everhood tbh
first mission: talk to a frog
last mission: kill the fucking sun
Kirby games
All I can think of now is Persona. 😂
Onision literally used the “He went in creative mode” as the main plot point
Daniel is just a dude with command blocks in Minecraft
@@lam2142 someone tell Phoenix this.
That’ll sort Onion boy out.
@@lam2142 Ironically enough, the story about a group that gets access to a command block is far better written than whatever this is.
Finally we can say it boys.
Twilight is a better love story than Reaper's Creek
Twilight is better then any book Greg could come up with.
@@cheechang1877 Anything, even some BDSM rape Naruto fanfic would be better than anything Onion Boy could write.
@@LocalArsonist1908 what?
@Hannah Avila I am Reaper and I must ask can I tell you about my problems?
Fuc yea, twinkly vampires r better than this.
Daniel: Yaaaay! Children and parents now have the power to instinctively find each other no matter where they are!
Abusive Parents: Yaaaaay! Now we can find our victims no matter where they hide!
😂😂😂💀💀💀
Exactly what I thought!
I did not think about that. I mean, obviously neither did Greg, but I'm not over here trying to magically fix everything wrong with the world in giant, stupid ways.
Vaultsurvivor 101 as soon as I heard that part the first thing I thought was “what about the people who abuse their kids?” Greg would explain it away with something along the lines of “I sought out and killed all the abusive parents in the world in an instant” had he not been so stupid to not see the flaw with his own god-characters decisions
CJCroen1393 exactly!! This new skill is awful!! Even if my parents aren’t abusive, I’d hate having my parents ALWAYS knowing where I am no matter what...
Ironic how an atheist is so obsessed with playing God.
An atheist who accuses God of forcing his will on humans forces his will on humans when he becomes God
@@milkwater1204 like I think this concept could work, showing how with that sheer level of power nobody could avoid becoming a monster, however Onision has about as much self reflection as a lobotomized cockroach
@@operleutnant7235 it already has worked. Have you watched Bruce Almighty?
He's not an atheist, he tried to start a cult years ago. And despite claiming he didn't believe in it anymore, he still exhibits basic beliefs he made for the cult.
He's only an atheist because he wants to be God.
Theory: Daniel and Julia have a child: Theresa Sullivan, aka protagonist of the terrible book titled Empress Theresa. They give her to regular people because they seem like the type of people to do that. God-Mom is now a grandmother, so she'll spoil her granddaughter. Theresa is spoiled so much that she gets HAL's powers, can screw up the planet without consequence, and has everybody love her to a cult-like extent.
But hey, that's just a theory! A BOOK THEORY! Aaaaand cut. (sorry not sorry)
*Pulls off glasses slowly.* _Dear..God. You're RIGHT,son!_
YES
Yeeees! It explains it all!!! That explains how weird the author of Empress Theresa is! He is one of Onion's characters that weren't thought through all the way.
@@jbones6930 ABOUT MICRO-GOD!:
More Authors should
study 'Nen' from 'HunterxHunter'.
Its not for no reason called THE Best Magic-System/Power-System.
THE best. Not 'one of', but 'the' Best.
That goes in General,
but more specific for Krimson,
who strucks me as someone who likes to
write about Strategy-Stuff and complex systems.
So i highly recommend everyone reading this,
but especially the Great Krimson himself,
to learn about 'Nen'.
When i hear from him about Micro-God,
i just think about how much he would like
Nen and what he could also maybe do with it.
I think he should dive into Power-Systems; he would enjoy it!
Genuinely a good theory
Reminds me of when you play pretend with that annoying kid who just says “no actually I was too fast and beat you, no actually I have a secret superpower that makes it impossible to die”
God, I was thinking that the whole time. Greg is such a petty child that he has to make himself magically overpowered that nothing is challenging or interesting.
BULROG HAS ALL THE POWERS. NYAH-NYAH-NYAH NYAH-NYAH-NYAHHHHH, NOW YOU ARE A CHICKEN!
He probably mains hitokiri in for honor
lol, you worded perfectly what i thought the entire time watching this!! we have all known a kid like that or BEEN a kid like that. the sad thing is that onision is a grown ass man who's STILL on that level
my brother is that kid
I think Onision only hates the Christian God simply because he’s jealous of him the same way some 14 year old girl would be jealous of some famous celebrity. He just WISHES he could be God.
Elizabeth Meyers hit the nail on the head
bingo
Elizabeth Meyers theory: onision is deity kin
Yeah. Onision is a megalomaniac. But he's not Jesus and he's not fucking Elvis. He has to step down.
I think that is about to be done already.
He’s not an atheist. He believes in God but he just fucking hates God xD
"We have an overpowered fourteen year old, his overpowered reanimated corpse, going up against the last third of God."
How... did he manage to make a fight that is *that* description... BORING?
Written by a competent writer, that could be an excellent finale to a JRPG
@@heroofthewinds7765 written by a competent writer you have half a final fantasy game
@@thisstatementisfalsenothin5312
Or Tales of Xillia.
@HiddenDirector
This is what happens when you lack creativity...
@@heroofthewinds7765 Written by a competent writer, you have a soulsborne game
2:24 Oh, right, the assassin. The assassin for Julia. The assassin chosen specifically to kill Julia. Julia's assassin.
I read that in Kronk's voice ngl lol
You and Strange Aeons have been too kind with all this onion boy lately
OMG yesss I watched hers the second it came out
It feels like Christmas
I know a guy who might know a guy who knows a guy with stuff you'd all find even more mockable.
@@scamlikely9964 that exists?
@Just A Random Person
www.amazon.com/People-Things-Roberto-Pinchas/dp/172419142X/
Onision's books at least try to have a plot and he hired someone to make professional-looking covers. This uses a picture of a poster asking for kidneys as the cover.
When Daniel becomes "a different person" his hair turns from brown to golden blonde.
Daniel goes Super Saiyan.
Lotus wrong. dont forget krimson keeps saying he went into “god mode”. He is super saiyan god mode
Oh no, Daniel becomes the Ubermensch! Onision was actually a National German Socialist all along!
@@pjnoonan1423 Judging from Onision's... *ahem* I mean Daniel's overall mentality, I would suppose that the Nazis would have him sent to the gas chamber first before the Jews, aryan or not.
The ghoul has white hair now...
It actually said Daniel's hair was flowing, so he's basically Super Saiyen 3.
"There are a number of ways you can kill a child god, It's not that dificult" Is a sentence i never thought i would hear in a book review.
I dare Onision to try that with an Atropal, a D&D undead unborn child god. Those things are like, CR20 above...
Old Testament God had no problem murdering children. PLOT HOLE.
There should be a comma before god.
@@RobertMcBride-is-cool was gonna comment the same thing but I like how the comment works either way.
Someone didn’t watch Hercules.
Just realizing he's wearing gloves like the book is a biohazard
A mental biohazard
@@truecassowary8320an infohazard
@@truecassowary8320thats called a cognitohazard
"nails became as strong as steel"
That sounds fun for anyone with ingrown toenail.
atleast the pain will be over fast
Oh fuck. That mental image makes me want to die.
Clipping sounds fun
Jesus..... Those poor lesbians
@@cheezyfilmsproductions1842 AKDHDKSKDLJ
"There are a number of ways to kill a child, God. It's not that difficult!"
-KrimsonRogue
Quote's out of context are the best.
Especially if you move the comma.
"There are a number of ways to kill a child. God, it's not that difficult"
@@jameswatson6876 And that is why punctiuation is important. Amen.
@@jameswatson6876 this isnt mine originally but here is a pretty good one on the importance on punctuation and capitalization.
"Let's go help your uncle, Jack, off his horse."
"Let's go help your uncle jack off his horse"
@@left-2-write28 also a lesson in capitalization
I just love this comment chain
This book terrifies me not because of the pedophilia, but because this is a window into Onision's god complex. We have a child who would be a horrifying villain in just about any other work of fiction being presented as not just a hero, but a self-insert for the author. Onision is telling us that this is what he'd do if he had this power.
Me before watching this: My writing is terrible, I'll never finish my story!
Me after watching this: Never mind, I can't possibly be worse than this.
I watch these when I'm writing and start to fill like I'm bad
@@mementomori771 I like to watch these while I write, so anytime my brain picks up on anything I'm hearing, I avoid writing similar things into my own work.
@@toxic_shr00m ABOUT MICRO-GOD!:
More Authors should
study 'Nen' from 'HunterxHunter'.
Its not for no reason called THE Best Magic-System/Power-System.
THE best. Not 'one of', but 'the' Best.
That goes in General, but more specific for Krimson,
who strucks me as someone who likes to
write about Strategy-Stuff and complex systems.
So i highly recommend everyone reading this,
but especially the Great Krimson himself,
to learn about 'Nen'.
When i hear from him about Micro-God,
i just think about how much he would like
Nen and what he could also maybe do with it.
I think he should dive into Power-Systems; he would enjoy it!
I hope he dives into Power-Systems,
as i know he would enjoy it and be good at it.
And if he does, he should of course Study the King of the
Discipline.
For real. The shitty novella I wrote when I was thirteen is better than this, which is impressive, because it was BAD.
@@bubblegumbunny SORRY FOR BEING RANDOM, but:
We have some real Issues on UA-cam. And we also do have the Reportbutton. The Flag-System. The Reportsystem...
Go figure why i say this.
I hope you can go and use youtubes searchbar either in a generic way ('H0t Lesbian babes lol h0t booblife lol') or in a more specific way: 'Normalizing N-dity'.
The latter is an honestly crazy Channel that uses Body-Positivity as the most excuse-like Excuse I have seen in Decades:
Go and see for yourself its its reportworthy.
I wont say no more and leave the judging to you (though i still ask for help here and now),
but just 1 'Hint':
Look out for the Gender-Ratio.
The Male-Female-Ratio and such... its very, very telling...
imagine harry potter killing voldemort and the dialogue is just
“as soon as i realized who he was i killed voldemort so fast, his face fell flat in his noodles. 🤪”
Sound terribly like something that would be written in "my immortal" tbh, but like, without typos
The funniest part is that Voldemort was enjoying noodles to begin with.
@@rosesongoku6980 what type of pasta do you reckon that Voldemort likes. I'm guessing chicken alfredo. Maybe spaghetti with garlic salt, melted shredded cheese, and oregano.
@@left-2-write28 Definitely with some meatballs
@@left-2-write28 Sounds about right to me.
This story makes so much more sense if we just assume Daniel got knocked into a coma by the school bully in the forest aaaaaaaaall the way back at the beginning of the book and the rest of this is his fever-dream as his parents turn off the life support and he... (wait for it)... rapidly ceasing to exist!
Hey. That would actually save the Plot!
No you dont understand this is one of the few times where I would actually take the it's all a dream then the fuck up that's this bo-booo-oooook no God dammit I can't call this shit a book, it's a mass of paper where the words are written with shit
highkey one of the only times "and then i woke up" would save the book
Accepted
When you said Daniel was setting out to fix society, I thought he was going to use his mind-control powers to take away all violent/pervy impulses from humans. That would be invasive but understandable. But giving people CLAWS and greater strength and NOT fixing those impulses? How is that going to DECREASE their ability to hurt each other? Also, making parents and children always able to find each other seems like a good thing until you remember all the abusive relationships in this book alone. Jeez.
Yep I was expecting something like "Make a Hive Mind" or "Make everyone live in peace".
But no we now have fecking wolverine nails (with out the regeneration power).
So yeah have fun cutting your nails with a grinder and slashing everything you accidentally scratch.
Also orphans must have a great time ... knowing where... their parents are... even if they are dead.
Well to be fair the only way to stop a bad guy with razor sharp steel claws for fingernails is a good guy with razor sharp steel claws for fingernails
@@TheTdw2000 I wasn't entirely clear on this detail, but are the steel nails for women only, or did Greg grant them to both?
@@saulesalejos4483 What I wanna know is, does it give the grandparents the ability to find their children and grandchildren?
Not to mention how weird it would be after your son is 18, like you just instinctively know your son is at his gfs house at midnight.
"A man who looked like what most anyone would imagine God to be." ... So... Morgan Freeman?
The basterd he killed Morgan Freeman
Three years later, this comment still got a well-earned grin out of me.
"The grim reaper has come to kill our main character."
DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT, DO IT!
YES, YES, *YES*
I'll bring the popcorn
If he does, then the Grim Reaper is the real hero of the story.
If the main character dose die in the story than that would be the most happiest ending ever
@@ExAid21 that wouldve been a really good ending death appears and He just dies, Power means nothing before death
So:
- Manipulating
- Limiting contact with girl parents
- Not being liked by girl father
- Assuming he is always right and other people are wrong
- Underage relationship
Who does that remind us of now? Hmm... Cant wrap my Kombucha around it...
To me it seems like the "relationship" in Reaper's Creek is a gender bent version of his and Lainey/Kai's marriage, the "relationships" in This is Why I Hate You was to represent the arrangement they had with Sara or whatever else happened after Kai came out as bi and Abigail from Stones to Abigail is just his ideal and what he looks for in potential mates...
But that's just my theory.
Morphing Taxi It’s telling that even him retelling the event in the book, he sees nothing creepy or wrong with a fifteen year old having sex with an eleven year old.
My ex? 😂
I'm sure he'd like to kill Taylor's father too.
I swear everytime i see onision on UA-cam through another UA-camr (I would never give him a view count), I just want to punch him in the face so hard he'd have to eat soft foods for a week or get full dentures
Anyone who questions why God let's bad things happen to the people he made has clearly never played the sims
More Authors should
study 'Nen' from 'HunterxHunter'.
Its not for no reason called THE Best Magic-System/Power-System.
THE best. Not 'one of', but 'the' Best.
That goes in General,
but more specific for Krimson,
who strucks me as someone who likes to
write about Strategy-Stuff and complex systems.
So i highly recommend everyone reading this,
but especially the Great Krimson himself,
to learn about 'Nen'.
When i hear from him about Micro-God,
i just think about how much he would like
Nen and what he could also maybe do with it.
I think he should dive into Power-Systems; he would enjoy it!
@@loturzelrestaurant Who asked
Oh my god wait you’re right 😂
Oh fu*k we’re screwed!
we are all god's sims and he has left us in a pool without a ladder
When he was crashing through yards I imagined him T-posing with his legs closed. Just sliding hundreds of miles.
Greg in the Reaper's Creek Forward: This is just a book about me,
Greg in chapter 14 of Reaper's Creek: Here's how me and my clone would kill god,
I mean, maybe if you drop like, a couple kilograms of acid, you'd have a trip like that.
I gotta admit, I didnt expect that the power creep of this book would build this fast
I remember when Daniel was just fighting people, not aliens and assassins, and then death, and then god.
Greg: Me and my clone killed God. In this essay, I will-
"Also I became my own furry chadsona and am strangely romantic towards my clone"
Greg bashes Christianity and proclaims atheism, yet calls his "gift" a god given one. Inconsistent rot
Whispering Jack and he talks about how great a goddess is.
Well the god in the book isn't the Christian God so I wouldn't say that's really all that inconsistent. But the fact that said god is the antagonist of the book and the main character sees his powers as god given, that is definitely bad writing.
Wild Card Bitches Yeehaw I’d almost argue his god in the book is a Christian one, while he doesn’t blatantly say it, if you recall the part about the pasture he does say the pasture is a Christian one, and other times he specifically alludes to Christian beliefs such as the trinity type thing. Then when speaking about the devil he says God made the devil up and passed it down, which the devil is primarily a Christian belief. You could say this isn’t the Christian god but the way Onision acts id say he had the Christian god in mind while writing this border-line psychotic manifesto. And it’s still very inconsistent taking everything into account
@@Hawksrule I agree, considering Daniel refers to God's flood, of which the Christian God is one of the only religions that the modern world gives credit to the world flood mythos(several other religions and cultures had glokd myths but nobody talks about it) translation: I dont believe that Greg is smart or cultured enough to know of other religions with floods so let's just assume its christianity.
he hates the abrahamic god because it's a threat to his own godhood
"he was wearing a funny costume, i bet he thought highly of himself"
1) WHAT
2) THIS GUY SHOT YOUR GIRLFRIEND AND THIS IS WHAT YOU SAY?
i'm just imagining a clown with big, goofy ass shoes, tons of makeup and a massive, fat, colorful dress holding a gun and looking at Daniel with a dead stare. They both look at each other for ten seconds or so, the girl is laying dead between them, the air is whistling
It's hilarious
"I laughed and grabbed her by the throat."
- Joker (2019, dir. Todd Phillips)
I really was expecting it to say "Why so serius?"
But maybe that's just my sanity leaving my body as this story goes on.
HES WEARING GLOVES
HES SUCH A
and I can't stress this enough
SAVAGE
@Gee Gonzalez I mean you gotta point ngl
Did you watch part one? He started wearing them after the CP scene and he said “Nope! Y’all need Jesus!” 😂
@@luvrgrl32 dang guess i forgot
Omg! I just realized he was wearing those! A-ma-zing!
I spit out my water as soon as I saw he was wearing gloves lmaaaoooo
"It cannot get worse than this"
Do not tempt the Onion
Do it
@@anduro7448 you don't know what you're asking
@@tirzxh If i remember correctly someone said that he can do worse if he tried
Jake Miller aaaand it got worse
This comment did not age well he's making a new book.....about sex and it gets VERY detailed
Chrimson: "It can not get worse, than this."
Empress Theresa entered the chat.
Let them fight
A CLIFFSIDE SHOUT-OUT?!?
YEAH!!!
Then along came Titus Uno, Certified Word Salad Mixer.
And looks like Ready Player Two might rise to the challenge from the looks of it.
“At least he’s not into incest”
well that aged poorly
Please don’t tell me he touched his kids I fucking beg you
*sighs* What did he do now
@@blueshell292 i feel horrified every time i remember he has kids
@@blueshell292 nah, I'm pretty sure he just admitted to making out with his cousin while she was sleeping one time. He said he just "kissed" her but it's Onision so let's be honest there was probably some full on molestation going on. His defense was basically that boys will be boys and that she was asleep at the time so therefore it didn't hurt her because she didn't even know about it. I don't know all the deets, I've just gathered these from other comments
@@sarahamira5732 holy shit that’s awful. how is this man not in jail by now.
Daniel's girlfriend forgave him for murdering her dad, then giving them a coffin full of money as compensation
But his mother couldn't for making his eyes explode once years ago, which immediately grew back 😔
1 like = 1 prayer
The worst part is that she didn't even know he was responsible for it
The gross relationship between "Daniel" and Julia MIGHT be real.
Check this out:
Greg talks about his ex girlfriend Julia: ua-cam.com/video/sdfjjW5C0ow/v-deo.html time stamp: 0:52
@@amatsukiko
That is phrased suspiciously like clickbait
@@sadrabbit53 it ain't clickbait though, since I usually don't wanna give onion son any additional view
Humanity: Twilight has the worst love story in fiction
Onision: hold my beer
But be prepared for the rant about how evil alcohol is
Hold my la croix
I could write a worse love story in this reply section if you want me to
@@truetransoul586 do iT!
Still, Twilight was published by a real publishing house.
So it is still the worst in that aspect.
Krimson: Agent 47 usually uses a suit with a red tie,not something funny.
Agent 47: Aight,im bouta go get my fish and clown suit.
Agent 47: flamingo time
@@bepisthescienceman4202 *flaps arms and flies away*
I like the blue flamingo suit from hitmqn 2
So THAT’S the costume the assassin was wearing.
I can fix this entire book with a simple thing excluding the obvious errors and shitty descriptions:
Have Daniel kill god's dad and in his final breath, have him say "And the cycle repeats.......". This will create a subversive ending that was less of a Gary Stu becoming a god but instead a boy driven to madness by his own powers. This will justify his actions as we see them get more cruel and brutal. Daniel resets the universe and makes a new one where everything is as he plans, The Body becomes the new grim reaper and the rocks are formed to give certain mortals powers that will eventually make them part of Daniel's army. The story can end with a simple child simply referred to as "the child" discovering it's powers the same way that Daniel did all those years ago in a final chapter told from the third person and it finishes by saying "like I was told, 'the cycle repeats'."
Sure you'll need to make some extra tweaks to make this work organically but this can actually work in theory. In addition, a potential sequel could involve said child try and break said cycle. An actual underdog who gets corrupted by the same way Daniel was but eventually when he understands why all this happened (maybe through an interaction with The Body or Julie) he decides that if he kills god (Daniel), it will all happen again, leading to a complex dilemma. Let a mad god rule over everyone and everything or become just like said god and be separated with what friends he has.
Edit: so with a few years of experience writing my own characters later, I have come with some more albeit minor details, even one that kinda can explain THAT scene (albeit it should still be cut down and toned down for the love of all that is sacred).
So what if Daniel’s descent into absolute insanity and godhood was a case of a somewhat misguided boy getting increasingly arrogant as his views on good and evil slowly become more and more extreme as a result of his time with his powers fueling his expanding ego. What if all of this makes him crooked as he eventually begins to use his little hypnosis powers to gain favors and THAT scene could be followed by a moment of clarity in which he frees the people he hypnotized including Julie.
This bit of clarity doesn’t last long. Juuust long enough for the reader to think that he’s gonna actually change for the better by forgoing his powers and hiding away. He’d probably fall back to his old ways via an alien attack in which at first he tries to kills as few people as possible yet the power trip was too fun for him to stop and he commits a genocide. That or it’s where the plot escalates to the “kill god” section. And when he becomes the new god, he spares Julie because he holds just a small sliver of pity for what he did to her. This could aid as a motivation for her regarding the whole follow-up book idea I mentioned earlier.
Alas, as one of the replies here mentioned, Onision either isn’t creative enough or has enough humility to make a character who isn’t a shallow power fantasy self insert.
Dang, that is such a cool direction Onision will never be creative enough to take. Damn shame. It could have been so good.
A book series or a book that starts from the villain’s perspective and moves to the hero’s would be such a cool idea.
i'd read that version
“So women have teeth in their vaginas now eh Daniel”
1 second
2 seconds
3 seconds
*Dies*
*Rapidly cease to exist
Krimson NEEDS to watcha ND review legion man, it also deals with an all powerful character, but he doesn’t know he’s all powerful, he’s also has schizophrenia, there’s one scene like in this book where he brainwashes his gf basically and they have sex, but his unlike onisions bad writing , this has extreme bad side effects, so basically hates him completely after that
Going as far as teaming up with the villian of the show
Sorry for these little spoilers krimson if you ever read this
The Anti-Onision Literature Club is being blessed all over these past two days huh?
@@firstname_lastname840 Oh how I wish Monika was here to delete him from existence
Onision makes me want to commit Sayori
Jen M
You mean make him rapidly cease to exist?
Can't wait for him to write a 4th book...
I've read a good advice in one Russian writer's blog. It goes like this:
To understand how good or dumb your plot is, pretend to write a letter to some close person, like your mother, as if you've been describing them the whole plot.
I don't think Onision would have any quantity of honesty to drop everything right after the kid uses powers for the first time, let alone the darn child porn scenes.
I can't comprehend the fact that this garbage gets published and sold. It's literally another terrible fanfic you'd see on the internet.
Hey, can you give a link to this blog please?
@@captainfiri7619 ABOUT MICRO-GOD!:
More Authors should
study 'Nen' from 'HunterxHunter'.
Its not for no reason called THE Best Magic-System/Power-System.
THE best. Not 'one of', but 'the' Best.
That goes in General,
but more specific for Krimson,
who strucks me as someone who likes to
write about Strategy-Stuff and complex systems.
So i highly recommend everyone reading this,
but especially the Great Krimson himself,
to learn about 'Nen'.
@@loturzelrestaurant Ooooookay...what does this comment have to do with the discussion? It's not about the blog or the video. You should've just posted that on Goodreads or Amazon or some other website that sells and/or discusses Krim's book, rather than on this UA-cam comment thread. Especially if you want Krim to notice that or some shit.
@@loliconnoisseur5739 Who cares about Randomness?
Aye?
@@loturzelrestaurant Just because it doesn't really matter doesn't mean you should just do it. You wouldn't just pop in on an anime discussion just to post NHentai codes now would you? It's just jarring and makes no sense.
24:03
There's a story in hindu mythology wherein someone gets a blessing that does 2 things:-
1. It gives him a long healthy life of 200 years.
2. It allows him to make anyone to sit on a particular chair as long as he wants when he wants. He can only do it once.
Then, when Yamraj(The God of Death) comes to collect him he uses it it to pin him to the chair prevent himself from dying. This also prevents everyone else from dying. Hell ensues, and he eventually gives himself to Yamraj to stop it.
That sounds exactly like the myth of Sisyphus
@@TheTdw2000 Yeah, most myth’s are the same but with a different coat of paint.
First Miss Æons yesterday and now Krimson?
Y E S
CHOPPED BE THOSE ONIONS
Chocolate Gore i know we are so blessed today
amen
Dawn yes, yes we were and amen for that
I came home to this after a busy shift at work. It was strangely therapeutic.
@@strawbebbiejam ABOUT MICRO-GOD!:
More Authors should
study 'Nen' from 'HunterxHunter'.
Its not for no reason called THE Best Magic-System/Power-System.
THE best. Not 'one of', but 'the' Best.
That goes in General,
but more specific for Krimson,
who strucks me as someone who likes to
write about Strategy-Stuff and complex systems.
When i hear from him about Micro-God,
i just think about how much he would like
Nen and what he could also maybe do with it.
I think he should dive into Power-Systems; he would enjoy it!
I love how greg is so unimaginative with something as unique as a battle between two metaphysical all powerful deities and turns it into a generic slug fest
Oh my bad i forgot that greg also took a being as vague as GOD and turned him into a physical being with daddy issues.
Mr. Grinns It’s rather telling.
So God of War done wrong. Ok, so Kratos was a mortal, but he had the power of a god.
@@WillieManga So, God of War
WillieManga except God of War was fun
Listening to this plot summary is like listening to a child describing their dreams
Fun thing is
Onision's omnipotent Self insert would probably make a pretty intimidating villain
Like a sociopathic kid with limitless powers who can rewrite the laws of physics sounds like some cool anime villain shit
Kind of sounds like that episode of Twilight Zone where the kid was overpowered and everyone in the town feared him so they do what he wants(also shown in the movie)
DID YOU MEAN: SCP foundation reality benders? (I highly recommend SCP-531-D and Termination_Order if you wanna see this)
Noah from Yu-Gi-Oh says hi(except unlike Onision he's a well written character)
I don't think he would make for a good villain. He's omnipotent and can't be killed. There is nothing anyone can do against him, so any plot with him as a villain would be two pages long and end in "...and then he exploded their eyes. The end."
Sounds like Henry from The Good Son put into an isekai
Dude if I woke up with teeth in my vag I would not be thanking *anyone*
...Not a sentence I ever imagined myself saying
I would need another toothbrush for my pussy teeth. Also could I eat or chew gum through my vagina? Is there a tongue there, too? Can my pussy teeth bite my pussy tongue? What about periods?
I have a lot of questions about this.
Onision probably watched the movie Teeth when coming up with this. It's about a woman who has... well, sharp teeth in her vag. At one point she gets raped and ends up biting the guy's dick off. He ends up dying due to blood loss. Oh, and when she stands up, it just falls out. Like spitting out half a hotdog.
She can't even control when to...bite.
Would those teeth need a dentist? And if so, how weird would that be?
Does it start with baby teeth, are they retractable like Toothless?
What would happen when giving birth?
Would braces be required if the teeth don't grow well?
I could go on, but I have so many questions now.
Me too
Well... your butt didn't eat your tong. It was the pussy... (okay... I'm so done with his words... my mind is blowing)
"Dude, enough with the religion bashing." -Me, an atheist
Agreed, and I'm also an atheist.
You don’t need to be a Christian to get annoyed with how far up his own ass he is
As a Catholic we bash the church and make jokes about the church being filled with peeds but with anything follow the rule of three not the rule of three million onion boi.
Athiest too. I'm a person of science, but YEESH. People are allowed to have faith in whatever they went, Onion Boy!
There’s nothing wrong with atheism. The problem is 30-year-old men who complain about religion the way 13-year-old edgelords do. Atheists owe it to themselves to get educated about religion; if you’re going to not believe in something, it helps if you know what it is you don’t believe in and how it works. That way you understand WHY it’s bad, and if you don’t, your worldview comes from a position of ignorance. If you’re 30 and you’re still treating religion the way you did when you were younger and had first learned that atheism was even an option, you’re doing yourself and everyone in your life a disservice.
The coffin spawning scene could have been amazing comedy if it was magically transplanted into a good novel.
I'm listening to the video like a podcast while I'm at work and as the coffin part came up I nearly lost it Infront of 3 poeple
Nietzsche: I wrote that the ideal man must "kill God", as a representation of a man divorcing himself from societal values to forge his own moral code, to then influence the rest of mankind with it
Onision, buying replica Blades of Chaos online from his mom's basement: *BOY*
It’s amazing how much of a difference there is between actually being an atheist and hating religion because you never grew out of your angsty teen years
can't wait to feel even better as a writer.
I'm sure you're an amazing writer so heck yeah feel good about yourself ^^
ain't that the truth
Just think
“My writing might not be perfect, but at least I’m not a 30+ year old man with middle school level writing, writing about a manipulative, overpowered, blood thirsty, 11-14 year old Gary Stu who has sex with his 15-18 year old girlfriend that he may or may not have subtly mind controlled, oh and also... aliens”
No kidding, I always think my writing is bad till I hear this.
Makes my 15 year old dyslexic fan fiction seem like a published professional work.
If you ever think you have an inflated self esteem, console yourself with the fact that you've never imagined yourself as a better version of God who gets laid a lot.
Halloween Man That’s not how you use the word “consolidate,” buddy. You’re looking for “console.”
Zero Blackwing Still better writing quality than Onionboi
You don’t know my kinks.
[Sarcasm]
You don't know me! You don't know what I can do!
You have no idea how high I can fly
'You'll never get away with this! Fuck you, Batman!'
I don't know if it was how you said it, the line itself, or the combination of the two, but I couldn't stop laughing here for nearly a solid minute.
I have now spent about 2 1/2 hours watching a book reviewer that I have never seen before ripping apart a terrible book written by a creepy UA-camr who I have never heard of before. What am I doing with my life?
Eh, oh well. Subscribed.
Heh, same here. Empress Theresa brought me here, and I stayed for other cringe.
"It's not that hard to kill a child, God." paraphrased is one of the funnies things I've ever heard lmao
@@oianony7098 plz explain it
@@oianony7098 oh thanks ,i get it now and it is funny.
I laughed so hard!
Tenth Plague time
no one:
greg: god bad
"god bad, dad bad"
"god bad, dad bad, own writing bad"
God bad, Dad bad, me mad, world sad.
Daniel Pettingale I’m WHERZING
God rapist
Dad predator
The writing from Onision genuinely gives me fond memories of the kind of scribblings myself and other children would write in elementary/primary school: incoherent, unexplained, poor grammar and spelling. In children, it has the innocence of someone that doesn't quite understand the world, how it works and how other people will think, read and react both for the context of the story and the reader. It is however, no innocence for Onision, more a concern.
Well true as it may be, I for one did not write about myself as an omnipotent being who solves all of the world's problems in a horrific violent way. If someone writes crap like this, then there is some serious issues with that kid's morality.
let’s not forget the fact that onion has a “doll” for lewd purposes that he called julia so......
Wait what??? I know I shouldnt be surprised at this point but I am very much surprised and disgusted. Why the hell does he need a sex doll, he has a spouse that still has female genitalia
@@left-2-write28 "Still has female genitalia" is the most hilarious and the most horrifying thing Ive read so far
@@SinWeissfell its surprising what you'll stumble into where Gruggles is concerned.
@@left-2-write28 Your comment is up there with someone mentioning "Giggle zones" in the angriest voice. You did well, I'm proud of you
@@SinWeissfell haha. Thank you!! that genuinely made my day(night)
"After The Body killed God, he ran for Governor of Minnesota and won."
Jesse Ventura vs God in a Hell in A Cell match.
@@Xehanort10 The winner faces Vince at Backlash
Lol please no. We don't want him
@@makaylahegg9264 Wasn't he your governor?
I LOL'd hard when Krimson called 'The Body' the laziest name for a professional wrestler. Was he ripping on Jesse Ventura or does he not know there was a wrestler nicknamed 'The Body'?
Time to rewrite the ending with Kull, starting from where greg/daniel goes to confront him.
Kull sits in his throne, a cheek resting on his hand. The room's nearly completely dark, with the only light seeping in throw incomprehensible writings on the walls. Daniel recognizes it has the same kind of code he uses, but it's nearly indecipherable to him. Instantly, daniel does what he always does and tries instantly smiting Kull. But it has no effect. In fact, nothing even happens. No lightning, no explosions, no disintegrations, Kull just sat there, look at Daniel with his sunken eyes.
Daniel looks to the body for help, but as soon as he does, the body falls apart like sand onto the floor, quickly disappearing afterwords. Daniel's reduced to the status of a child. No, not even that, of a new born maggot, unable to even crawl on it's own.
"You think I didn't see this a million times?" Kull says, cracking a smile. "Omniscience. It's a boring thing. But even without that, nothing you do here would work."
Daniel looks around, panacing, all the control he loved stripped away in a heart beat.
"We use the same type of "code, that's what you called it, right?" Kull mocks. "The difference is that I've had an eternity to master mine, you've only had years."
"Listen here-" Daniel starts but his words disapeared. His mouth moved, he wanted to, needed to talk, but nothing came out. Even his own voice inside is head vanished.
Kull can't help but chuckle at this and says "Ever time something get's a hand at the "code" they always think they're so high and mighty. You. That "god" all of them. Speak."
Daniel begins berating him for creating God, for allowing suffering in the world, for all the horrors and atrocities to have every happened. And just as quickly as his voice returned, it left. And Kull begins speaking again. "I don't do any of that. That stuff happens on it's own. That "god" guy was just like you, someone who saw between the thread sin the universe and learned how to manipulate them. No different then I. Except I know how to handle being a "god" amongst those so called. I found my "code" so long ago that I can't even remember. And when the universe dies, I reset it.
There's millions like you with that same power, all at varying degrees across this universe. Welcome to the club kid."
Whelp that was a fun exercise in how to rewrite a story Good night everyone!
it was pretty good but there were some typos and you kept switching tenses.
Honestly, I really enjoyed that. You should try writing more! Maybe even do a parody of Onion’s book, but eons better!
@@galaxycat9966 Probably because they were imitating Onion Boggart Boy?
If I wake up with vagina teeth, I'm having a fucking psychotic breakdown because that shit is terrifying and I can't even run away from it because its attached to me. I'd never be able to look at that part of my body ever again, I'd be trying to repress that horrifying memory from my brain. I'd probably shower with underwear on just to make sure I can't be reminded of it.
Just think, if a GOOD writer got a title like "Reaper's Creek" it could have been like, a cool supernatural mystery like a creek that gets that kind of name because unexplained dead bodies of locals keep showing up in the creek or something. And that I dunno, the culprit is death itself and maybe the people of the town were doing evil rituals and sacrifices to extend their lives and cheat death and ol' grim's just able to get their job done thanks to something with the protagonist or maybe it's a way to get into both the ups and downs of death as a concept or something.
... instead that kind of concept and title will forever be associated with a story so terrible and mastabatory, I think onion boy may have literally been fapping to his ego the entire time...
i want this written now.
@@StardustLegend I second this
Determination I third this
fourth it
I mean, I think Reaper's Creek and I picture a Nail Gaiman style short story of a creek where the water flowing is the sound of Death's voice that compells people to let themselves get swept away in it's current and become a part of it or something along those lines with maybe a first person narration from the creek reflecting on it's victims lives and circumstances right before death and the urban legend narrative that forms around that whole thing... alas, poor humanity, cursed with that being the title for Onision's book
“But wait, it gets dumber!”
This entire book, summed up
But wait, there's more!
@@skankyassmarty220 butt weight, theirs moar
I feel like "time for punishment" sums it up even better, personally.
Regarding the whole "Parent and child can now find each other psychically" a thought I had is, when does that wear off? Like does that still work when they reach adulthood? Or is it for life? Because ignoring the problem with abusive parents because someone else already brought that up, no matter how good or well-meaning your parents are I'm sure that, say 20-year-olds like me wouldn't want their parents to know where they are at all times.
KrimsonRogue: "The Body?! Sounds like the worst pro wrestling name ever!"
Jesse Ventura: "You're a dead man."
"Fingernails became strong as steel."
Man, that's gonna be some tough manicures in the future.
*puts on a wielding mask* buckle up, Samantha
No manicures, you just go to the hardware store and buy the strongest saw you can find
Also, unless he also made human bones as strong as steel, those nails ain't gonna do shit for defense. They're just gonna get snapped off the skin like a twig on a tree.
Poor Julia.
do they still grown n u just can't cut them?? seems dangerous
It's Onisions self insert Death Note fanfiction that's even more poorly written then a Wattpad Naruto fanfic and extremely bad magic world lore, I am crying!
All the same, "Hacking the universe" is a very interesting power for a villain to have if you do it right. I had an idea for one that had something like that, but agonized over ways to limit him. Hearing Onision describe it as "hacking the universe" kinda gave me a solution that would have worked wonders for his book (but didn't because that would imply Onision knew even the simplest thing about coding): If you can recode the universe then chances are you can accidentally create a myriad of bugs that break the universe.
Variables changed, now stars are collapsing
Imagine Greg joining a D&D campaign, he would absolutely ruin the whole group.
He’d be the type to bring make believe kid logic tot he game. Like “MY character would dodge this” and “no he can’t get hit because he’s godlike!”
It’d be so insufferable to have him as a player I just know it.
"there was no longer an imbalance in the sexes"
Did Onision just make Mpreg real?
Ooh the fandoms would be a HELLFIRE.
I read it as a sjw imbalance. Like woman are as strong as men and are equally respected and blah blah blah. Mainly because he uses the word "gender" instead of "sexes" but that might just be me.
@@corruptangel6793 No no, definitely mpreg
Please. Only good thing he'd ever do is give my bff the ability to have a baby of his own
@Hannah Avila Thank you, I appreciate the well-wish for him
Onision legit has a God complex. Probably why he hates religion, his Siseca cult failed so he's taking his frustrations out on religion.
I'm agnostic and even I'm tired of his religion bashing
What kinda stuff did his cult have? Black leather robes? Ceremonial black eyeliner? Prayers to the darkness from the comic The Darkness?
@@feralchangeling97 Nothing of that
Greg is so untalented and useless that he just took some aspects from many popular religions and combined them into one
The funny thing is that he still managed to be incoherent with his "religion's rules" and some of them just don't make any sense
@@startro0192 like "don't cheat on your spouse unless you're horny" type of rules? That sounds a lot like him.
@@feralchangeling97 Lmao, yeah.
It's not surprising because he says tons of bullshit like these in his books as well, like constantly
That kind of bullshit that makes you say:"But wait, you said this specific thing earlier on, the thing you said now doesn't make any sense"
@@startro0192 from what I can tell, Greg has a narcissistic personality disorder, anti-social personality disorder, and likely an Oedipus complex. And he wrote a book.
Sisyphus, the man who cheated death.
-Locked him (death/Thanatos) into a box
-Lied to Persephone
He was punished for eternity to roll a boulder up a hill where it would roll down the other side. There he was to push the boulder again. A pointless task. Just as it is pointless to defy death.
Clearly, someone has not read that story before.
Do you believe Onision could have read _ANY_ story and still write something like this?
I got some “Death and the Winemaker” vibes. I recommend watching it, it’s very good.
3:55 I'm sorry, but my brain, in a desperate attempt to find something enjoyable in this book, replaced "Time for punishment" with Monokuma's silly little, "Let's give it everything we've got! It's punishment time!" Definitely an improvement.
“There are a number of ways to kill a child, God; it’s not that difficult!” - Krimson, 2019
#In a sing-song voice# "It gets dumbeeerrr!" -also Krimson, 2019
"Nothing becomes of it!" - Also also Krimson
“It gets worse!” Also also also Krimson
I mean he's right, it's VERY simple to kill a child
@@dodojesus4529 Right? Like five minutes unsupervised in a pool should have done it.
For all of the “shock value”’ in this book, it’s incredibly boring.
Greg is the only writer in the world that could ever make killing God this boring.
@@left-2-write28 almost impressibg but in a badway
It's like Greg watched all of Bad Writing Advice (great show, btw), and took it all as ACTUAL advice.
23:50
Also he "Contained" Death
But didn't did the same with:
Illnes, plague, hunguer, pain, madness, age , etc. Etc.
Imagine being so sick that your body can't stand itself and you can't die.
What would containing age do? Would everyone just not exist? Knowing Onision, it probably would lock all women to the statutory age he prefers.
@@KaiKrimson56 Which is -3, knowing this guy.
That reminds me of the “End of death” cannon from the SCP wiki
when he started explaining the black stone i couldn’t stop laughing because the only thing i could think of was a brain tumor
Wait no that's an actually interesting concept where a brain tumor could awaken some psychic god powers. That would take some actual work and thought. We can't have that around here.
In the wise words of Peter Griffin
“I’m a tumor, I’m a tumor, I’m a tumor~”
@8:43: Which Captain Marvel?
Bloodborne.
@@averin5193 uh-
I keep picturing The Body as completely limp, limbs flapping in the wind as it flies through the air.
I imagine it as like a head less torso with arms that spins like a helicopter to fly in a t-pose position
I keep picturing The Body as Jesse "The Body" Ventura.
I personally pictured him as Daniel’s finger puppet
Oh god that's brilliant
Lotus not 80s action Jesse Ventura, though, more like current Jesse Ventura. We’re talking conspiracy theorist, ghost-hunting, failed-governor-campaign Jesse Ventura
"God is A less impressive version of Voldemort" is the best out-of-context sentence in The History of ever.
A CLIFFSIDE SHOUT-OUT?!?
YEAH!!!
Well, he does have a nose, though. All that magical power and Voldemort could not fix that?
"Agent 47 likes to wear something inconspicuous like a suit with a red tie."
Agent 47: Nods approvingly.
"I don't see a lot of assassins wearing funny costumes."
Agent 47: Sweats nervously.
Clownsuit Agent 47 armed with a literal fish and explosive cupcakes.
@@crowdemon_archives I literally thought of a clown when Daniel said the assassin wore a funny costume.
This book should be called, "The Edgelord's Guide To Atheism."
As an edgelord atheist im offended
Perfect title, sums this all up.
QUEEN FAMOUS then i guess it's "The wannbe edgelord's guide to atheism"
Greg isn’t even atheist at this point. He’s just straight up antitheist
@@Sowono Athiests can be antitheists though, so he might be both.
thank you Krimson, this makes me feel even better about my incest gnomeo and Juliet bdsm smut fanfiction
AC Unit ‘harder zaddy’ frog moaned
Link or doesnt exist e___w___e
I’m scared
Give us a link
👏👏 link please
"Daniel The God-Butcher" doesn't have quite as good a ring to it as "Gorr The Godbutcher".
The edge is so strong that I cutted myself in half.
Just remember that a forest rapidly ceased to exist so that copies of this book could be published.
Most of our Paper comes from corn husks
my 5 minutes of researching say that most paper comes from wood pulp. but even if you're right, corn husks shouldn't be wasted on onision books either.
At least this time he found a legal way to destroy nature.
the term "Gary-Stu" should be changed to 'Greg-Stu" hahaha
Greggy-stu
@@Onewingerdraven EVEN BETTER
Onion-Stu
Alexandria Crayne I would sign this petition so fast lmfao
More like Greg STEW, because krimson is burning the shit out of onion boy HAH HAH (okay I’ll leave now)
Imagine if the story was about exploring the ways becoming a god could change someone and the world. It would be a great story. Oh wait, Watchmen already exists.
As a Christian, its funny that he made God a monster, but yet not only God is actually loving god who is faithful to He's creations, but Onision is truly an evil person and has done equally as fucked as he portrayed God. Ironic. And also Onision actually tried to start a failed religion that was pretty much a ripoff of Buddhism (No offense to Buddhists).
He tried to incorporate Buddhist ideals, except he somehow managed t- Nah, scratch that. I'm pretty sure he just reads the incredibly generalised statements about Buddhism and thought he could just incorporate them into his own little cult, without figuring out the meaning behind said statements.
It's a bit like "taking the actual Bible a little *too damn literally* to the point of aiming to live like a nothing but an angry caveman raging at modern human inventions" kind of thing.
Government uses Onision's books to torture terrorists into giving away location of their base.
I think I would rather have the water boarding.
This is a crime against humanity
That is against the Geneva convention
*inside, how the CIA torture and interrogate prisoners*
Naw...that’s Empress Theresa’s job
"but wait, it gets dumber" may as well have been the title of the book
Might as well make that a story in the far future, thanks for the idea
Naming my autobiography this
The title should just be "I killed God, his Fart Dad, and Aliens."
this review is a comfort for me, because every time i come back to this, im reminded that if i do write something, the bar for a BAD story is so low, i'd have to actively dig under said bad to be worse than onision
"It can't get worse than this."
Laughs in Empress Theresa
Being a victim doesn't make a character an underdog by default
Nor is it meant to be their sole character trait. I dont think Gruggle gets that yet.
Daniel is literally a fucking God, he's not an underdog and he's not a victim for very long.
“...But this assumes that Death itself is an evil thing...”
Well for narcissists like Greg, Death IS a bad thing. That means that they can’t continue the show they think they inhabit and that no one can gaze upon their ever lasting glory. It also means that eventually they’ll be forgotten.
Source: Experience with narcissists who use threat of suicide as a means of manipulation
He did that too, the whole suicide threat manipulative shit. He admitted to it and acted like he was justified.
@@left-2-write28 in that case, the Angel of Death is a good guy. he'd conquer the evil one, and save us all a collective headache.
@@xaldrortenderofthevats8948 Agreed. As a rule I never tell anyone to kill themselves save for very close friends that know I'm joking, but for Gruggles the Sad Clown, I may be willing to make an exception.
I'm scared as hell to die but idk if that makes me a narcissist lol
@@NinjaSox7 being afraid of death is natural and doesn't mean you're a narcissist. The reasons behind the fear would be more telling
The fact that Daniel keeps getting more evil while while his powers develop would be cool if I thought onion boy actually knew he did it
Yeah the story of a mentally ill child slowly becoming a god would make for a really good horror book it it was self aware
It would've been cool if it did turn out that Daniel had been controlling Julia. Then when he puts the stone in her head because he thinks they're in love, shiboom shibang, she regains awareness on top of having the same powers as Daniel. So she remembers all the stuff they did, how he forced her into sleeping with him, and so tried to take revenge.
Better yet if she actually succeeds, she destroys Daniel and takes up the mantle of MC. Then... Idk, she tries making alterations but then screws everything up and so ends the world along with herself.
It would still be stupid but at least it would be interesting.
Think about this:
Onison thought this book was worth actual MONEY
He thought this book was worth MONEY
worse: he actually MADE money off of this book
Certainly was worth the money with all the hate reading!
Data point of one: I put it in my kiln and found it makes decent charcoal.
Unprofessional Professor normally I’m against book burning but this “book” is only useful as fire
I'm Jewish. Allow me to give my two bits on the subject: you shouldn't burn books, unless they contain material that might actually hurt people. Onision's books, 50 shades, the twilight saga, Holy Terror and Main Kamf are books can that can, will, or even have in certain occasions harm people.
Thank you for coming to my TED Talk.