Passive voice. Ugh! That was the bane of my existence as a beginning writer and I didn't even realize it until someone edited some of my things. I like your videos. Other videos would just make a list of the _don't do these_ type verbs. Your explaining why in a way which teaches more about the reasons behind it all than those other videos.
I tend to write about donkeys with internal monologue as the narration. For example: Woah, those donkeys look super pissed! I bet it's Horacio's fault.
Latin drops "to be" rather frequently, creating verbless sentences, which are surprisingly clear in context. The best education I've received in the English language, concise writing, and logic in general is Latin. I highly recommend it. An example, "visa necatura" can mean "having seen the woman who was about to kill cruelly." 2 words definitely > 10.
Kitty 😂. Making a repeat appearance. I've been writing lately so haven't wstched most of your videos in whole lately but will go back and watch them. Ahhh...thank you for explaining "to be" verbs. I never understood it when mentioned in how to write/ craft books.
Am I grateful for learning to avoid to be verbs? Yes! Is it making my writing stronger? Absolutely! Are my sentences feeling more alive? Totally! Was my prose stale before? Perhaps. Were my descriptions flat? They sure were! Being free of to be verbs has been a game-changer!
The warehouse was entered by several cars travelling at speed. The first car was narrowly avoided by Jackie: a nearby cross beam was noticed and swung on by him. Time had Jackie do this in the nick of it.
Is passive (grammatical or otherwise) always so terrible? Horatio got kicked. (Passive without to be.) Horatio ended up kicked. (Passive without to be.) Horatio died from the kick. (Passive (after a fashion) without to be.) The donkey had Horatio kicked. (Passive (grammar's weird) without to be.) Horatio's leg was bruised (Could be passive. Could just be a description. Schrödinger's passive?) EDIT: English Passive Voice is a bit of a bugbear of mine.
Hard disagree. I keep seeing UA-camrs saying this exact thing, so I've been going back and rereading well-known, regarded works out of curiosity. Everyone uses them. They don't ruin anything when used properly and in moderation. If those are the only verbs you're using? Sure. That needs improvement. But I hardly think going so far as to say they ruin a novel is sound advice. My opinion is they are tonal verbs, that add simplicity and prevent over saturation of purple verbs.
"They don't ruin anything when used in moderation"- That's the problem. Some people have "to be" words as their crutch words. And it's painful to read. Published books don't have them in excess because books loaded with them wouldn't get a literary agent to begin with.
No serum injected here 😂. My tv broke in 2020. Also is your cat sitting on a big book or laptop? ...Ohh The book was squashed by the kitty. The cat squashed the book The cat squashed the book as he settled into a relaxed loaf position to quietly observe his favourite person. 🖤🤍
Your cat is an exceptional student. I can't wait to read his novel.
A+ to you for not being distracted by Mr. or Ms. Cat.
I, myself, got a C+.
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Passive voice. Ugh! That was the bane of my existence as a beginning writer and I didn't even realize it until someone edited some of my things.
I like your videos. Other videos would just make a list of the _don't do these_ type verbs. Your explaining why in a way which teaches more about the reasons behind it all than those other videos.
But when I am writing about a donkey I usually write from donkeys perspective. Donkey kicked a human, donkey was shot by a different human.
Sore donkey from all those pins stuck all over its body by people looking for its tail!
I tend to write about donkeys with internal monologue as the narration. For example: Woah, those donkeys look super pissed! I bet it's Horacio's fault.
Latin drops "to be" rather frequently, creating verbless sentences, which are surprisingly clear in context. The best education I've received in the English language, concise writing, and logic in general is Latin. I highly recommend it.
An example, "visa necatura" can mean "having seen the woman who was about to kill cruelly." 2 words definitely > 10.
It is a truth universally acknowledged that a man must be in need of a wife.
If the Mind Control Serum helps me write better, and faster, I'll consider it.
Kitty 😂. Making a repeat appearance. I've been writing lately so haven't wstched most of your videos in whole lately but will go back and watch them.
Ahhh...thank you for explaining "to be" verbs.
I never understood it when mentioned in how to write/ craft books.
Welcome back!
I love your outros. They always make me giggle. 😂
Thanks!
Am I grateful for learning to avoid to be verbs? Yes! Is it making my writing stronger? Absolutely! Are my sentences feeling more alive? Totally! Was my prose stale before? Perhaps. Were my descriptions flat? They sure were! Being free of to be verbs has been a game-changer!
Hey kitty cat!
Appreciate the Cat Regnant
So is the cat worshiping Carl or controlling him?
Nice bookshelf.
Thanks!
Your videos are helpful
Thanks!
Passive voices are sins in action scenes.
The warehouse was entered by several cars travelling at speed. The first car was narrowly avoided by Jackie: a nearby cross beam was noticed and swung on by him. Time had Jackie do this in the nick of it.
Agreed!
Question though, what about not-to-be verbs?
Or perhaps we could show Horatio winning a tennis match while being kicked by donkeys.
Can we talk about various supporting cast. I’m hearing a lot of “nigh impossible” lately, and it’s like fingernails on a chalk board
The donkey could’ve worked if you said you’ve reached the ass end of your video.
Awesome info!
Thanks!
Is passive (grammatical or otherwise) always so terrible?
Horatio got kicked. (Passive without to be.)
Horatio ended up kicked. (Passive without to be.)
Horatio died from the kick. (Passive (after a fashion) without to be.)
The donkey had Horatio kicked. (Passive (grammar's weird) without to be.)
Horatio's leg was bruised (Could be passive. Could just be a description. Schrödinger's passive?)
EDIT: English Passive Voice is a bit of a bugbear of mine.
Imo these are all generally worse than the active voice
Poor donkeys =(
Thanks for the information!
You're Welcome!
Hard disagree. I keep seeing UA-camrs saying this exact thing, so I've been going back and rereading well-known, regarded works out of curiosity. Everyone uses them. They don't ruin anything when used properly and in moderation. If those are the only verbs you're using? Sure. That needs improvement. But I hardly think going so far as to say they ruin a novel is sound advice. My opinion is they are tonal verbs, that add simplicity and prevent over saturation of purple verbs.
"To be, or not to be, THAT is the question." 😬
"They don't ruin anything when used in moderation"- That's the problem. Some people have "to be" words as their crutch words. And it's painful to read. Published books don't have them in excess because books loaded with them wouldn't get a literary agent to begin with.
No serum injected here 😂. My tv broke in 2020.
Also is your cat sitting on a big book or laptop?
...Ohh
The book was squashed by the kitty.
The cat squashed the book
The cat squashed the book as he settled into a relaxed loaf position to quietly observe his favourite person. 🖤🤍
Its a book, though he will sit on laptops... Or push them off a desk to access the warm spot underneath