@@pampoone623 sure try see if you can get ideas, vocabulary, language and structural devices from the section A extract and use those in your story. Most of the time the extract will be something similar to the story suggestion given for question 5.
If anyone thinks they might need this: 25 Language Devices: Defined & Explained! 1. Pathetic Fallacy Is when the weather or the atmosphere describes the mood. For example, when the weather is rainy people are sad and depressed 2nd example, the dark night could symbolise something supernatural like 3AM Satan etc… 2. Personification Is when a non-human is given human qualities. For example, the tree is waving to John as drives away. 3. Simile When you are comparing two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’ For example, his facial vision looked like a falcon’s eye 4. Metaphor Is when you are comparing two things with is or are Example He is an orc 5. Extended Metaphor Pick a metaphor and explain how --- > turn in to an extended metaphor Metaphor --- > Life is a rollercoaster. Now turning into extended metaphor add explanation so, Life is a rollercoaster you don’t know when you will be at the top or at the bottom, it will all happen in an instance, at the greatest heights you will be at the greatest heights and at times it will crash, but every day is never the same, just like in a turn in a Rolle coaster is never the same. 6. Oxymoron 2 opposite words side-by-side Example, the small giant 7. Juxtaposition You explain an oxymoron. The small giant tip-toing trying to reach the top shelf, however, his small arms and puny fingers prevented him from grabbing the bar of jam. 8. Symbolism Is when objects represent a meaning. For example, moon and the star represent Islam. 2nd Example, if you get a priest you will think someone died. In Macbeth the dagger links to death. 9. Semantic field Is where words are linked to an idea. For example, PPE, 2m and Hand Sanitiser, Head of Year link to COVID. 10. Irony Is when events in the text surprises the characters. Something not expected! Mr Birling offering a 1000. Scrooge changing his nature. 11. Rhetorical Question Question does not require an answer 12. Hyperbole Is when you hype, when over-exaggerating. I am going to eat the whole restaurant. 13. Assonance Is the repetition of the vowel sound. I am too cool for school. Oooooo 14. Alliteration Words in a row begin with the same letter. 15. Sibilance Is when words in a row have the s letter or the s sound Example: the snake was slowly hissing 16. Euphemism Is when you say something in an indirect manner. He is not with us anymore. 17. Emotive Language Is when the writer makes the reader feel emotional. By making them angry. 18. Onomatopoeia Words describe the sound Boom bang skirr pop 19. Ruel of 3 / Power of 3 / Triplets Words or phrases in a row describe something (3) The table is black, hard and wide 20. Facts/ Stats Uses evidence to support their facts. 50 % of the students prefer using email rather than social media . 21. Plosive Reptation of harsh sound Words such as 'P' 'D' 'B' 22. Zoomorphism Is when you give a person animal features. Example John barked at me / John shouted at me. 23. Opinion 24. Repetition Language Device and Structure. Is when the writer uses the words repletely to create an effect. Where is being repeated and why is that important 25. Noun, Verbs, Adjectives, Adverbs Structure Flashback - when you go back in time ,3 days ago etc.. Foreshadowing - when the writer gives clue about future ‘my heart was beating fast’ Zoom in - focus on one thing for example ‘pen’ , ‘specific character ‘ Zoom out - normally used to talk about setting Dialogue - when the character speak ‘hey there !’ New character New setting Change in tone Short sentence - to build up tense Long sentence - add details and slow down the narrative Short /long sentence - may show importance in both Shift in focus - talks about object then talks about another object for example ‘pen’ to ‘table’ Cyclical structure - similar stuff happening with beginning and ending Juxtaposition Extended metaphor Pace List Pov Overall tone Chronogical order Climax Repetition Links Mood , pathetic fallacy 1. Abhorrent/Heinous (means bad) 2. Euphoric/Jubilant (means happy) 3. Melancholy/Morose (means sad) 4. Indignant (means angry) 5. Swift/Rapid (means fast) 6. Colossal/Gargantuan (means big) 7. Minuscule/Microscopic (means small) 8. Bemused/Befuddled (means confused) 9. Astute/Shrewd (means smart) 10. Feeble/Decrepit (means weak) 11. Dash (means run) 12. Plunge (means jump - may not always fit so be careful how you use it) 13. Cordial (means nice) 14. Lackadaisical (means lazy) 15. Paradoxical/Outlandish (means strange)
Wallahi these videos are so helpful. I don't usually comment on videos but I feel like there was well deserved praise right here. Thank you so much for your hard work. You have helped a new generation of english GCSE students and also future English GCSE Students. I'm gonna be watching all of your videos throughout all the english examinations that I have coming up.
i wrote a story that is similar in structure to your priest story, it is about a park but it is in the daytime contrasted with night time. ive had it marked and i got 35/40, id like to add a few more manipulated sentences to create a better structure these videos are so good, i feel so much more confident for tomorrow, in sha Allah it will go great for everyone:)
I am completely feeling befuddled because Wednesday is my paper 1 exame. I have exam phobia and I do NOT know how to keep calm or how I even do better. Thank you for teaching us beautifully.
currently 12:18 wednesday the 18th of may. sleep then exam. Thank you so much for all the help. Genuinly helped me so much, learnt in 20 mins what no teacher could teach me in hours. Thank you and good luck to everyone else.
I’m writing this on Wednesday the 18th i’ve just finished my English language paper one GCSE and just wanted to say thanks to you Sir and a reminder to anyone watching these videos that if you do what this dude says I can assure you you will do well!! Good luck
I was on a grade 5 and then i watched you for my mocks and i got an 8 in all papers language and literature thank you so much sir inshallah i will get a 9 ❤️
He explains how to answer the question but doesn’t really at the same time. I strugggle worry the explanation bit like what do you write about when going into detail?
I am jubiliant that I found this video; I am indignant to not have seen it before. Theis heinous exam's mark scheme befuddled me for a long time. This video keeps my mind serene from all doubts and morose feelings. Gargantuan thanks to you ! (the use of gargantuan feels inappropriate tho)
you my friend are a life - saver, I did a practice Unseen Poetry in class and used your Structure (PRTEZEL) and I got a Grade 6, I am so grateful for you helping me and wish everybody luck for their GCSE exams
I'm a home tutor, and I absolutely LOVE these videos - you cut through to the chase every time, and make things memorable and easy to retain. I've been teaching for years, but you've taught me new things with every video :o)
Beginning of year 10, I was working at a grade 1 and predicted a 3, I put my head down, studied and worked hard, im now year 11 working at a grade 5 with a predicted 7. Hard Work Pays Off!!
This guy is amazing, i got 4s in my last mocks for literature and language and with watching this video i've realized how many marks i wasted on this question. Feeling a lot more confident going into this set of mocks. Thank you
Used your story and a bit of your technique on paper 1, I’ll work more on vocabulary and language devices for paper 2, you’ve been really helpful. Life saver
I’m on a grade 8 right now for language in my mocks you needed 66 marks for a 9, I got 65, at first I was trying to grovel for marks, then I realised that on this question I only got 29, which left a three mark margin for error for questions 1-4. Albeit I only dropped 4 marks on questions 1-4 the point still stands that my creative writing needs to improve, so o thank you for this video it will hopefully be the difference between a grade 8 and a 9
@@user-le4tt4oq7i my English teacher is a great woman, she helped a lot, one major tip is always short introduction, 4 main paragraphs consisting of: tone (it will always be there, even the absence of tone is a type of tone), then one more structural device as tone counts for one already, this can be anything between: repetition, tense changes, 1st 2nd or 3rd person, rhetorical question, anaphora and that’s just naming a notable few. She understands structural devices are difficult to pick out and there are fewer than language so always do tone then one of the aforementioned structural devices, as for two language avoid doing similes and very obviously handpicked devices go for if possible: metaphors, personification, pathetic fallacy, sibilance, plosives, idioms, euphemisms, irony, hyperboles and many more, the examiner will always pick out a text rich full of both structural and language devices, identifying them is a matter of practice so get on those past papers. As for layout it will usually be an “what extent do you agree with the statement” always agree the question is set up to be easier to agree with, then start with tone, then a structural device, followed by two language devices and a summary of the 4 main paragraphs, remember to reinstate the focus of the question with every paragraph, if you’d like an example of two opening paragraphs from my 19/20 question feel free to ask
:0 same situation here, I was 1 off an 8 last time and in my mock on Wednesday I don't know if I can ever get better or even the same ( I'm predicted like a 5 too )
Duuuuuuuuude, my whole year group did this priest story ffs. I’m the only one who changed it up a little bit. Instead of a priest I did someone else and made a similar story.
This video is cordial, I feel anxious and slightly petrified but the positive comments are helping to raise my levels of euphoria making me feel more jubilant!
I am so thankful teachers on youtube like this are a thing because right now if i didnt watch all the paper 1 videos i would be finished for my mock tomorrow
I've got my first mock for English tomorrow, just want to say thank for saving me with this plot! Took my own twist on the plot but still similar. Finally I feel ready.
@@Class380 so the question 5 that I got was *"either make a story suggested by the picture or write a story where there's a rescue mission"* 1) I used the priest plot where the he wakes up in his grave and in an arrogant way he feels he is going to make it to heaven easily. 2) he acends and sees his gravestone along with 2 signs saying Hell/Heaven. I describe the walk to heaven and its tantalising and alluring. (Lots of compelling adjectives) 3) the priest ends up at the gate where he's asked for his fingerprint to enter Paradise by an unnerving black figure. 4) He's denied access and the floor and atmosphere became alive and fell apart into a sickening humid setting. 5) He begs and cries for mercy and God appears to him. 6) God promises to rescue the priest with the one condition that he stops being arrogant. 7) the priest is grateful and happy he's saved. The end. Of course I used lots of sophisticated language techniques and words and adverbs to open my sentences. I made sure it was detailed and was relevant. I'd say to leave 30 minutes to write it to the best level. Especially to make the most out of the 40 marks. Good luck!
@@tahiya450 thank you :) My teacher is saying that if we use the priest plot we will be at account of plagiarism so, I don’t know how to switch it around a bit.
@@Class380 my teacher said the opposite! He said that if we alter it to not fit the question but also use our own structural and language techniques then we wont get flagged for plagiarism. But I used this for my mocks and proof read it with my teacher before the exam he said it should be fine. For the real exam I'm definitely going to use my own plot just in case, but this was perfect for a quick story for my exam.
@@mooodlemip4779 Lmaoo I don't was to do the test eitherrr but the video was a great help - I'd be lost without it. Good luck tommorow for your exams, DW all will go well!
Today I’ve used the same plan for q5 November re sit. This plan helped me so much in my exam I really appreciate it and illl comment on January the grade that I’ll get. Thank you sir
Don't worry about it too much, i don't think they will be too hard because they are kinda going easy on us with the whole lockdown thing. You'll get what you get and that's all you can do.
I would just like to thankyou sir for all the videos as they have all been very helpful.Tbh ive learnt more from you then what ive learnt in class in the last 2 yrs.Good luck everyone may waheguru ji bless us all
CAN I JUST SAY I FLIPPIN APPRECIATE YOU RUBBING OUT EVEN THE SMALL TRACES OF BOARD MARKER I HATE WHEN TEACHERS LEAVE HALF THE STUFF THERE AND LEGIT START SCRIBBLIN OVER IT 😫😫😫 my rant for today
I have not revised at all for my English mock exam which is tommorow, I will be using this video (using the same story) along with all of the language devices provided by this teacher, i will be commenting again on this video and ill show all of you guys the grade that i have gotten when i have gotten my results. i have loads of faith in this englishh teacher for him to help me get me a good grade, a nice short video and he summarised EVERYTHING which makes everything so much more easier, thank you and ill be commenting again on results day !!!
walah you amazing i just want to say from a college student that you are amazing and we all appreciate all the hard work and information you share with us
For the creative writing, if you already have a story planned and memorised, do you have to match it to the description/story that’s in Q5? Or would you be able to just write out the story without having to follow the picture or story? PS. We students miss you Sir 😭 love from CHSG
@@josephhalliday2534 my story’s about a girl at an excavation site who’s entered a cursed tomb…imagine if the question is ‘write a story around friendship’ that’s what I’m worried about😩
@@josephhalliday2534 Do you have to link it to the question at the start of your story or can it be anywhere eg: at the middle or end. I'm doing aqa btw.
@@Rayan-vu9zl it's the same idea but inevitably different perspectives. Both work has different language, structure ect so it's still fine as long as the sentences are not the exact same.
It's perfectly adaptable. It was a life changing rescue. God rescues him from death when he finally gets sent to heaven. You just have to make it work.
I have adapted this plot to suit my interest in cars so i can write about it with a passion, so instead of hell and heaven i use a ticket. So when you get to the ticket barrier you realise you have no ticket and cant access this event and instead of describing the walk i am describing the drive there!
For the 2020 paper the question was " write about a time when YOU visited a place that was new to you" i used this plot with the priest in heaven and my tutor said that i answered the correction wrong. he said you have to do an experience which is not fantasy and you need to do more description. can someone please answer whether this story could be used for this question???
@@yorambo2857 no simply because this video has a big fanbase, this plot will be therefore embedded in lots of peoples writing and it'll cause a stereotypical view on the writing if they see this plot embedded, unless of course you meet all the requirements
salaam just wanted to ask that at 9:43 you said that paragraph 4 juxtaposes paragraph 2. would this count as one of the language devices that we would need? and btw just saying u r a big help. i used to go madrassah and it got shut down a dew months ago so doing gcse from home and u r literally saving my gcse thank u so much jazkallah
I look at the past paper. The question is asking us to describe a place or write a opening story ... Not writing story, what structure are we using on that type of question
I never dare to write any story but sounds like to get some marks I should follow this Priest and go in front of the gate of - 3-4 marks or 7-8 marks! ❤
I said 'after what felt like decades . I finally peeled my eyes open ' would that count as plagiarism? My story did not have the same concept as the priest one.
THIS IS THE TEACHER I WANT. No messing, no sugar coating, no falling for popularism. HONESTLY YOU ARE SAVING ME RN.
Aged well
@@alym4094 what did he do
@@alym4094 wdym
So nervous for Wednesday! Hope all goes well for everyone
Inshallah khairr
You to m8
@@manouranoor7924 Inshallah
Dw ive revised for nothing hope i pass tho
@@lmao3799 you got this my guy
I went from a grade 3 and throughout this year I’ve been steadily rising to a grade 4, 5, 6, 7 and 8. Hard work pays off.
would u Don't Mind to help me with my story :D?
@@pampoone623 yes
@@dayyaan12 tips?
@@pampoone623 sure try see if you can get ideas, vocabulary, language and structural devices from the section A extract and use those in your story. Most of the time the extract will be something similar to the story suggestion given for question 5.
SAME I GOT A GRADE 3 IN YEAR TEN MOCKS THIS LATES MARCH MOCKS I GOT AN 8 LES GO BROOO
If anyone thinks they might need this:
25 Language Devices: Defined & Explained!
1. Pathetic Fallacy
Is when the weather or the atmosphere describes the mood.
For example, when the weather is rainy people are sad and depressed
2nd example, the dark night could symbolise something supernatural like 3AM Satan etc…
2. Personification
Is when a non-human is given human qualities.
For example, the tree is waving to John as drives away.
3. Simile
When you are comparing two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’
For example, his facial vision looked like a falcon’s eye
4. Metaphor
Is when you are comparing two things with is or are
Example He is an orc
5. Extended Metaphor
Pick a metaphor and explain how --- > turn in to an extended metaphor
Metaphor --- > Life is a rollercoaster. Now turning into extended metaphor add explanation so, Life is a rollercoaster you don’t know when you will be at the top or at the bottom, it will all happen in an instance, at the greatest heights you will be at the greatest heights and at times it will crash, but every day is never the same, just like in a turn in a Rolle coaster is never the same.
6. Oxymoron
2 opposite words side-by-side
Example, the small giant
7. Juxtaposition
You explain an oxymoron.
The small giant tip-toing trying to reach the top shelf, however, his small arms and puny fingers prevented him from grabbing the bar of jam.
8. Symbolism
Is when objects represent a meaning.
For example, moon and the star represent Islam.
2nd Example, if you get a priest you will think someone died.
In Macbeth the dagger links to death.
9. Semantic field
Is where words are linked to an idea.
For example, PPE, 2m and Hand Sanitiser, Head of Year link to COVID.
10. Irony
Is when events in the text surprises the characters. Something not expected!
Mr Birling offering a 1000.
Scrooge changing his nature.
11. Rhetorical Question
Question does not require an answer
12. Hyperbole
Is when you hype, when over-exaggerating.
I am going to eat the whole restaurant.
13. Assonance
Is the repetition of the vowel sound.
I am too cool for school. Oooooo
14. Alliteration
Words in a row begin with the same letter.
15. Sibilance
Is when words in a row have the s letter or the s sound
Example: the snake was slowly hissing
16. Euphemism
Is when you say something in an indirect manner.
He is not with us anymore.
17. Emotive Language
Is when the writer makes the reader feel emotional. By making them angry.
18. Onomatopoeia
Words describe the sound
Boom bang skirr pop
19. Ruel of 3 / Power of 3 / Triplets
Words or phrases in a row describe something (3)
The table is black, hard and wide
20. Facts/ Stats
Uses evidence to support their facts.
50 % of the students prefer using email rather than social media .
21. Plosive
Reptation of harsh sound
Words such as 'P' 'D' 'B'
22. Zoomorphism
Is when you give a person animal features.
Example John barked at me / John shouted at me.
23. Opinion
24. Repetition
Language Device and Structure.
Is when the writer uses the words repletely to create an effect.
Where is being repeated and why is that important
25. Noun, Verbs, Adjectives, Adverbs
Structure
Flashback - when you go back in time ,3 days ago etc..
Foreshadowing - when the writer gives clue about future ‘my heart was beating fast’
Zoom in - focus on one thing for example ‘pen’ , ‘specific character ‘
Zoom out - normally used to talk about setting
Dialogue - when the character speak ‘hey there !’
New character
New setting
Change in tone
Short sentence - to build up tense
Long sentence - add details and slow down the narrative
Short /long sentence - may show importance in both
Shift in focus - talks about object then talks about another object for example ‘pen’ to ‘table’
Cyclical structure - similar stuff happening with beginning and ending
Juxtaposition
Extended metaphor
Pace
List
Pov
Overall tone
Chronogical order
Climax
Repetition
Links
Mood , pathetic fallacy 1. Abhorrent/Heinous (means bad)
2. Euphoric/Jubilant (means happy)
3. Melancholy/Morose (means sad)
4. Indignant (means angry)
5. Swift/Rapid (means fast)
6. Colossal/Gargantuan (means big)
7. Minuscule/Microscopic (means small)
8. Bemused/Befuddled (means confused)
9. Astute/Shrewd (means smart)
10. Feeble/Decrepit (means weak)
11. Dash (means run)
12. Plunge (means jump - may not always fit so be careful how you use it)
13. Cordial (means nice)
14. Lackadaisical (means lazy)
15. Paradoxical/Outlandish (means strange)
Thanks bro
Cheers dawg
👑👑👑
@@sharqzi0249 just updated it bro
@@bin8496 no worries good luck
I learned more in a couple of your vids than 4 years in set 1 English
Same man
Same bruh
wallahi brother
You have sets in English?
@@kieshabrown9274 most skls do
Man gcse's on Monday everyone has to give there best we can do this
good luck!!
Thanks if u want u can give sm tips
Good luck giys
me too re
Same here, I have Computer Science on monday
Wallahi these videos are so helpful. I don't usually comment on videos but I feel like there was well deserved praise right here. Thank you so much for your hard work. You have helped a new generation of english GCSE students and also future English GCSE Students. I'm gonna be watching all of your videos throughout all the english examinations that I have coming up.
hes a legend fr
How many pretzel paragraphs for this question?
@@Countdown420 You don't use pretzel paragraph on this question, you're writing a story
@@Countdown420 7
“2 language devices 1 punctuation 2 vocabulary each paragraph”- THANK YOU 🙏
i wrote a story that is similar in structure to your priest story, it is about a park but it is in the daytime contrasted with night time. ive had it marked and i got 35/40, id like to add a few more manipulated sentences to create a better structure
these videos are so good, i feel so much more confident for tomorrow, in sha Allah it will go great for everyone:)
How did you start your story?
Can you give some sentence starters for the priest story please
@@hi-im9pp write about waking up in heaven, describe how you feel, your surroundings etc.
hope this helps
@@rriillaa is it best to write in first person
@@Griggsy11 yes
I am completely feeling befuddled because Wednesday is my paper 1 exame. I have exam phobia and I do NOT know how to keep calm or how I even do better. Thank you for teaching us beautifully.
Just take a deep breath and stay calm.🙂
You’re not alone, just remember that. Inshallah you’ll do good. Believe in the Qadr of Allah and you’ll be fine.
currently 12:18 wednesday the 18th of may. sleep then exam. Thank you so much for all the help. Genuinly helped me so much, learnt in 20 mins what no teacher could teach me in hours. Thank you and good luck to everyone else.
good luck
How was it?
I’m writing this on Wednesday the 18th i’ve just finished my English language paper one GCSE and just wanted to say thanks to you Sir and a reminder to anyone watching these videos that if you do what this dude says I can assure you you will do well!! Good luck
How many people in your school wrote about the priest?
I was on a grade 5 and then i watched you for my mocks and i got an 8 in all papers language and literature thank you so much sir inshallah i will get a 9 ❤️
He explains how to answer the question but doesn’t really at the same time. I strugggle worry the explanation bit like what do you write about when going into detail?
inshallah me too. remember to say bismillah before a test
Let’s see buddies hope, so will get 9 InshaAllah
In'sha'allah we all get incredible grades ya rab !!
inshallah lads
I am jubiliant that I found this video; I am indignant to not have seen it before. Theis heinous exam's mark scheme befuddled me for a long time. This video keeps my mind serene from all doubts and morose feelings. Gargantuan thanks to you ! (the use of gargantuan feels inappropriate tho)
you my friend are a life - saver, I did a practice Unseen Poetry in class and used your Structure (PRTEZEL) and I got a Grade 6, I am so grateful for you helping me and wish everybody luck for their GCSE exams
What does PRTEZEL stand for?
@@Bigbucksssz Its
Point
Reference (Quote)
Technique
Explain the Effect
Zoom
Explain the Effect ( Of the Zoom)
Link
I wish I would’ve started watching these videos last year 😂 thank you! Amazing
I'm a home tutor, and I absolutely LOVE these videos - you cut through to the chase every time, and make things memorable and easy to retain. I've been teaching for years, but you've taught me new things with every video :o)
Thank you so much for your kind words 🤝
Beginning of year 10, I was working at a grade 1 and predicted a 3, I put my head down, studied and worked hard, im now year 11 working at a grade 5 with a predicted 7. Hard Work Pays Off!!
This guy is amazing, i got 4s in my last mocks for literature and language and with watching this video i've realized how many marks i wasted on this question. Feeling a lot more confident going into this set of mocks. Thank you
Got my english in 8 hrs and I have learnt more from your videos than I have in the last 3 years, now I can go into my exam with some confidence.
same bro
how did u do
bruh im abt to cry
this guys basically explained everything to me and even being an imigrant i understood everything
this man is single handedly saving us all
💀💀💀
Used your story and a bit of your technique on paper 1, I’ll work more on vocabulary and language devices for paper 2, you’ve been really helpful. Life saver
How did your exam go
You’re gonna be disqualified by aqa unfortunately due to “plagiarism” 😭
I’m on a grade 8 right now for language in my mocks you needed 66 marks for a 9, I got 65, at first I was trying to grovel for marks, then I realised that on this question I only got 29, which left a three mark margin for error for questions 1-4. Albeit I only dropped 4 marks on questions 1-4 the point still stands that my creative writing needs to improve, so o thank you for this video it will hopefully be the difference between a grade 8 and a 9
do you got tips for question 4 im always stuck on 11/20 can you tell the structure and how many paragraphs plz
@@user-le4tt4oq7i my English teacher is a great woman, she helped a lot, one major tip is always short introduction, 4 main paragraphs consisting of: tone (it will always be there, even the absence of tone is a type of tone), then one more structural device as tone counts for one already, this can be anything between: repetition, tense changes, 1st 2nd or 3rd person, rhetorical question, anaphora and that’s just naming a notable few. She understands structural devices are difficult to pick out and there are fewer than language so always do tone then one of the aforementioned structural devices, as for two language avoid doing similes and very obviously handpicked devices go for if possible: metaphors, personification, pathetic fallacy, sibilance, plosives, idioms, euphemisms, irony, hyperboles and many more, the examiner will always pick out a text rich full of both structural and language devices, identifying them is a matter of practice so get on those past papers.
As for layout it will usually be an “what extent do you agree with the statement” always agree the question is set up to be easier to agree with, then start with tone, then a structural device, followed by two language devices and a summary of the 4 main paragraphs, remember to reinstate the focus of the question with every paragraph, if you’d like an example of two opening paragraphs from my 19/20 question feel free to ask
@@judethompson2071 thank you can you saved my life on q4 for wednesday,can u send your 19/20 exempler please
@@judethompson2071 can you please send me it?
I got 50 and got told ir was a 4😭😭
english language is the one subject where i genuinely think i’m in reach of a 9- i’m so grateful for this video!
watching this the night before my english mocks 💀 i got a 7 for my last mocks but i truly dont believe i can achieve that high for english ever again
:0 same situation here, I was 1 off an 8 last time and in my mock on Wednesday I don't know if I can ever get better or even the same ( I'm predicted like a 5 too )
This guy is amazing thank-you so much for making videos which just get straight to the point u made me jump from a 4 to a 7 in my second mock
all my fellow year 11s here right now, I FEEL YOU.
Duuuuuuuuude, my whole year group did this priest story ffs. I’m the only one who changed it up a little bit. Instead of a priest I did someone else and made a similar story.
is it true aqa is gonna disqualify people???
@@aminaaa7693 maybe, there was a tweet from AQA about this priest story. Literally everyone did this story
@@zishan5067 the tweet is fake. also description is easier than narrative idk why everyone had to copy this
This video is cordial, I feel anxious and slightly petrified but the positive comments are helping to raise my levels of euphoria making me feel more jubilant!
Euphoria might not have neen the right word 💀
@@zyncxec3658 means happiness?
@@ultimaterevision437 well yes but is has lots of connotations
@@zyncxec3658 we will stick to the literal English definition tyvm of happiness!
this video is worth more than a whole year of a school.
This has helped so much, I really like the idea of paragraph 2 and 4 juxtaposing
GL on you GCSE guys
Already did one of my tests
What test was it
You just saved me from being unprepared ,to a situation where i know i will ace paper 1. Thank you so much
Thr effort’s you’ve put on is amazing and deserve a clap. Thanks a bunch sir! We’ll smash the test In Shaa Allah and make your efforts worth 💙
I am so thankful teachers on youtube like this are a thing because right now if i didnt watch all the paper 1 videos i would be finished for my mock tomorrow
Thanks so much you’ve helped so much. Will be watching you through this week
I've got my first mock for English tomorrow, just want to say thank for saving me with this plot! Took my own twist on the plot but still similar. Finally I feel ready.
What is your plot like?
@@Class380 so the question 5 that I got was
*"either make a story suggested by the picture or write a story where there's a rescue mission"*
1) I used the priest plot where the he wakes up in his grave and in an arrogant way he feels he is going to make it to heaven easily.
2) he acends and sees his gravestone along with 2 signs saying Hell/Heaven. I describe the walk to heaven and its tantalising and alluring. (Lots of compelling adjectives)
3) the priest ends up at the gate where he's asked for his fingerprint to enter Paradise by an unnerving black figure.
4) He's denied access and the floor and atmosphere became alive and fell apart into a sickening humid setting.
5) He begs and cries for mercy and God appears to him.
6) God promises to rescue the priest with the one condition that he stops being arrogant.
7) the priest is grateful and happy he's saved.
The end.
Of course I used lots of sophisticated language techniques and words and adverbs to open my sentences. I made sure it was detailed and was relevant. I'd say to leave 30 minutes to write it to the best level. Especially to make the most out of the 40 marks. Good luck!
@@tahiya450 thank you :) My teacher is saying that if we use the priest plot we will be at account of plagiarism so, I don’t know how to switch it around a bit.
@@Class380 my teacher said the opposite! He said that if we alter it to not fit the question but also use our own structural and language techniques then we wont get flagged for plagiarism. But I used this for my mocks and proof read it with my teacher before the exam he said it should be fine. For the real exam I'm definitely going to use my own plot just in case, but this was perfect for a quick story for my exam.
@@tahiya450 ohh ok I’m definitely going to use it for the real one but not the mocks just to be safe
its my language b igcse exam tomorrow i'm so happy i found u at the correct time!
so many people have used your story idea, bit concerned how many actually
5:08
''No Cap, No lies, I can't believe I just said that''
Haha, so funny!
saved me so much i didn't know how to describe the picture or tell a story as good as this, i'm just gonna tweak this one and hope for the best
same here, in my mock i got 23/40 on this question!
@@mrquickogaming actually that's good my teacher say 10 for question 4 is a safe mark and 22 for question 5 is a safe mark
Could I plagiarise his story or would I receive a failing grade
@@Underleop if u copy his paragraphs word for word then its plagrism but his story plot isn't plagarism just make your own
@@Lilpizza27 thx
everyone saying "good luck" can we change that to "do well" we dont need luck weve got this. do well in your exams
Your the best place to go when i need to revise for english. keep it up.
if quite a lot of people use this format won't it become quite obvious to the examiners and they might grade down...?
exactly what i thought
This video's great - good luck to everyone for their exams , can't wait for Tuesday!!!
Can’t wait? CAN’T WAIT!?!? C A N ‘ T W A I T ! ? ! ? U sure about that cos atm I can’t wait to die but I most definitely can wait for Tuesday
@@mooodlemip4779 Lmaoo I don't was to do the test eitherrr but the video was a great help - I'd be lost without it. Good luck tommorow for your exams, DW all will go well!
how did it go any advice?
Sorry it's a bit late - literally follow sir's advice - got an 8 in doing so!!@@user-hn4zm3um4v
Legend ,may Allah bless you .
Today I’ve used the same plan for q5 November re sit. This plan helped me so much in my exam I really appreciate it and illl comment on January the grade that I’ll get. Thank you sir
hey so what did you get?
Thank you, you have been so helpful. I look forward to watching your live on Tuesday
how have only 74k people seen this yet the entire uk is using this story 😭😭
Word of mouth?
The stream had like 200k views too and that was taken down
Apparently it’s because he does tiktok as well😭
do you think our mocks will be similar to our results? i'm scared that i wont get a similar result but im aiming for higher
I'm scared the texts won't be anywhere near similiar so I won't be able to make infs
Don't worry about it too much, i don't think they will be too hard because they are kinda going easy on us with the whole lockdown thing. You'll get what you get and that's all you can do.
this guys videos got me a grade 6 in a mock exam and i had just 1 day of revision. bless him
can u tell me where can I find the priest story? where is that video?
Good luck to everyone doing GCSE'S over the next month🥰
I would just like to thankyou sir for all the videos as they have all been very helpful.Tbh ive learnt more from you then what ive learnt in class in the last 2 yrs.Good luck everyone may waheguru ji bless us all
Ameen
CAN I JUST SAY I FLIPPIN APPRECIATE YOU RUBBING OUT EVEN THE SMALL TRACES OF BOARD MARKER I HATE WHEN TEACHERS LEAVE HALF THE STUFF THERE AND LEGIT START SCRIBBLIN OVER IT 😫😫😫 my rant for today
First year of uni and I’m watching this
I have not revised at all for my English mock exam which is tommorow, I will be using this video (using the same story) along with all of the language devices provided by this teacher, i will be commenting again on this video and ill show all of you guys the grade that i have gotten when i have gotten my results. i have loads of faith in this englishh teacher for him to help me get me a good grade, a nice short video and he summarised EVERYTHING which makes everything so much more easier, thank you and ill be commenting again on results day !!!
does it count as plagarism?
What did u get
this guys a proper legend. one day before my November mock and I watch this vid. Got 31/40 and 52/80 grade 6/7
Your the GOAT of all teachers
May allah grant you jannah in sha allah
walah you amazing i just want to say from a college student that you are amazing and we all appreciate all the hard work and information you share with us
Can you do more than one metaphor and simile for example,would u get more marks or just stick to one in the whole story
You can do two or three remember you don't lose marks you can only gain even if you write something wrong so don't be afraid and write
i have a the mock tomorrow, thankyou:)
same man, year 10
thank you so much i feel prepeared for my exam tommorow!
For the creative writing, if you already have a story planned and memorised, do you have to match it to the description/story that’s in Q5? Or would you be able to just write out the story without having to follow the picture or story?
PS. We students miss you Sir 😭 love from CHSG
You have to do it to match one option, but if you plan out a story it should be fairly easy to link it
@@josephhalliday2534 my story’s about a girl at an excavation site who’s entered a cursed tomb…imagine if the question is ‘write a story around friendship’ that’s what I’m worried about😩
@@taz_amz I do eduqas where we get a few options. My tip if you are struggling is to think of something you could add before or after
@@markroba9657 yeah it's so annoying. I have a story that could potentially get a grade I want I just don't know if the plot is good enough
@@josephhalliday2534 Do you have to link it to the question at the start of your story or can it be anywhere eg: at the middle or end. I'm doing aqa btw.
bro i love you
Pls do make a video whether it will count as plagiarism or they will mark it normally?
It's not plagiarism. He made a video three months ago about that
@@shekinahnampuntu2575 👍👍
@@shekinahnampuntu2575 What if my classmates use the same plot and the same teacher marks our work? What will happen then?
@@Rayan-vu9zl it's the same idea but inevitably different perspectives. Both work has different language, structure ect so it's still fine as long as the sentences are not the exact same.
you are so helpful bro - keep up the videos!
the story was on a life saving experience 😭😭😭 your plot is unadaptable to that
It's perfectly adaptable. It was a life changing rescue. God rescues him from death when he finally gets sent to heaven. You just have to make it work.
@@tahakarim1901 I wrote about god saving me from hell I don’t think I will do that well haha
@@jrg2580 Dude that's good! Remember that statement they give you is just a prompt. Even if Ur story has hints of rescuing then yh it's fine.
@@tahakarim1901 really? Thanks man I’ve been worrying all day ab this😂
Will people get done plagiarism if they did this story
I have adapted this plot to suit my interest in cars so i can write about it with a passion, so instead of hell and heaven i use a ticket. So when you get to the ticket barrier you realise you have no ticket and cant access this event and instead of describing the walk i am describing the drive there!
Love it, well done
I watched him for the first time and I understand like in 5 minutes 😮
Watching this with an hour and a half till the exam lol, good luck everyone!
I thought they gave you a photo and you had to describe it. So how could you possibly do the priest story? Conffuuusionnnn help mee
For the 2020 paper the question was " write about a time when YOU visited a place that was new to you"
i used this plot with the priest in heaven and my tutor said that i answered the correction wrong. he said you have to do an experience which is not fantasy and you need to do more description. can someone please answer whether this story could be used for this question???
idk your teachers kinda clapped, it doesnt matter. like sair said, those 5 things then no reason to not get a 9
@@ゆじ-d5i oh ok are you using the same plot aswell?
@@yorambo2857 no simply because this video has a big fanbase, this plot will be therefore embedded in lots of peoples writing and it'll cause a stereotypical view on the writing if they see this plot embedded, unless of course you meet all the requirements
@@ゆじ-d5i ah ok, have you seen any other videos of story ideas or nah
salaam just wanted to ask that at 9:43 you said that paragraph 4 juxtaposes paragraph 2. would this count as one of the language devices that we would need?
and btw just saying u r a big help. i used to go madrassah and it got shut down a dew months ago so doing gcse from home and u r literally saving my gcse thank u so much
jazkallah
yes it would. he mentions it later on when he says juxtaposition and a metaphor would be his language devices for P4
watched this before 3 hours left in exam, ultra legend,,,,,,
Therse exactly 5 hours untill this exams starts and I'm up studying lmao
Absolute legend mate
I’ve gone from a u to a predicted 9 I couldn’t thank u enough
“This is no cap, I can’t believe I said that” 😂
Why am watching this now ffs 💀 good luck everyone
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You are the man I feel confident now come on good luck everyone
literally everyone used the priest story
So bad 💀
I just found out that tweet was fake as well its not even there anymore
I should’ve known it was dodgy when aqa spelt plagiarism wrong in there
not me lol
thanks so much for this, i was way more confident in my exam and i know ill pass it now bc of this :) tysm
I’m writing like a robot 🤖 today! Thanks for the advise.
I look at the past paper. The question is asking us to describe a place or write a opening story ... Not writing story, what structure are we using on that type of question
My teacher says to include a extended metaphor as well
Good Luck to everone doing their GCSE'S or A-Levels !
how would you adapt this story with the title ‘The Holiday’
It's a bit sad that the exam only tests you on how much you can write in a certain amount of time and limits your actual creativity :(
this is what i needed before my exam tomorrow THANK YOU SO MUCH
This is amazing! I feel like I’m running late!
What would we write in the one sentence paragraphs
Next week Wednesday I'm ready
How's it been 11 months 💀 anyways I feel like I could easily do GCSE again compared to A levels 😭
i need this sm i have no idea
Would you mind making a full video of how to write a story suggested by the picture? Please.🙏
My first day caring and revising started the day before I sat it so thx for the help
I never dare to write any story but sounds like to get some marks I should follow this Priest and go in front of the gate of - 3-4 marks or 7-8 marks! ❤
I said 'after what felt like decades . I finally peeled my eyes open ' would that count as plagiarism?
My story did not have the same concept as the priest one.
Would it be interesting or confusing to end paragraph 5 with him scanning his finger and access is denied?