Hello brother, I just finished my Oxford AQA English examinations (both papers) and I just want to thank you for this entire year, I don't think I would have been able to do it without you! Allah bless you akhi
out of all the English tutors on here, this guy is definitely the best, straight to the point no Waffle explains everything and gives u everything u need, I hatedEnglishh before watching this guy but now i get some enjoyment out of it and i feel very confident for my exam tomorrow 😘
Seriously you made it way simpler than I had on my mind or my teachers told me. I thought you had to pick things through the text, like 10 quotes and describe the language technique, but you showed me you only have to pick 2 quotes and 4 techniques/phrases types. Thank you!
🎯 Key Takeaways for quick navigation: 00:00 📚 Introduction to the video and the importance of paper one question number two. - Paper one question number two is an eight-mark question. - Understanding the focus on words, phrases, and language devices. - The goal is to write two well-structured paragraphs. 03:36 📖 How to plan and structure your response for paper one question number two. - Use the "Pretzel" method for structuring your paragraphs: Point, Reference, Technique, Effect, Zoom in, Effect, and Link. - Select two quotes and choose a language device for each. - Focus on analyzing language devices and their effects in detail. - Use subject-specific terminology (e.g., similes, metaphors) correctly. 06:49 🧾 Understanding the marking scheme for paper one question number two. - You are marked on your choice of quotes, subject terminology, and the effect of the chosen techniques. - The quality of the effect and the uniqueness of your analysis are crucial. - Points and links are necessary but not as critical as the analysis of language devices. 11:24 📄 Example of a model answer for paper one question number two. - An example of a seven out of eight model answer. - Demonstrates the application of the Pretzel method in crafting paragraphs. - Emphasizes the importance of in-depth analysis for each language device. 16:20 🖋️ How to write a response for paper one question number two in the exam. - Step-by-step guidance on constructing a response, including points, references, techniques, effects, zooming in, and links. - Prioritize detailed analysis of language devices and their effects. - Manage your time effectively to ensure you can complete both paragraphs. Made with HARPA AI
Mr fisher views on books and stories of the past by using a different language devices such as simile, personification, alliteration, siblings. This is evident in the line ''which ran like gazelle's and pounced like Tigers and exploded like rockets '' the writer used simile here to convey on how fast things in order to show the readers how exciting Mr fisher finds them. Futhermore the quote '' Mr fisher, we dreamed in colour, through films were in black and while , and good always triumphed in the end '' the writer used colour imagery and a conjunction here to describe through Mr fisher , who had once dreamed so fiercely and excited of writing stories of his own. Similarly, the quote '' illumating minds and hearts '' Mr fisher is looking at the past stories is good to have a look at it and Mr fisher has a belief of good stories had an all- encompassing impacts on the readers . Furthermore the quote '' there were heroes; there were dragons and dinosaurs'' the writer has used alliteration here to describe how Mr fisher has dreamed in colour through films were in black and white colour and triumphed is the end card for the Mr fisher dreams. On the other hand the quote '' there were space adventure and soldiers of fortune and giant apes '' this quote is referring to how Mr fisher is prefer to novel of the past because this is implying that imagation of Mr fisher. And the quote '' he had seen it happen ; had seen whole clauses swept away in the fever . In those days, '' this is evident that almost personifies to books , giving it the ability to control and take over the children and this has emphasis the powerful potential effects of stories showing the strength of Mr fisher belief in them . On the other hand the quote '' Mr fisher not so long ago - when books were golden, when imagination soared, when the world was filled with stories it symbolic of inspire someone to think more creatively or to make a bold move on the extract . Hi Mr everything English could you please check this answers which typed it for you and give a feedback for me Thanks
@@EarthsbeautyofficialI got you habibi. Tigers are 'predators 'and they 'pounce'. Gazelles are prey and they "run" These 2 juxtaposing (contrasting) animals could be a metaphor about how books are for everyone. Both prey and predators. Bully's and the bullied. I hope this helps brother also are you resitting? May Allah grant us victory. Ameen A
why cant teachers be like this, they tell you how to do the question and run through it with the class instead of letting them off without knowing what a good one looks like.
hello there! i’m resitting my eng lang and i don’t have anyone that could mark my papers so i was wondering if anyone could read my paragraph and give me appropriate advice and mark? The writer uses language to convey that Mr Fisher viewed stories and books of the past as inclusive, that in every story there was something which would interest everyone. This can be seen when Mr Fisher describes worlds which are filled with “stories which ran like gazelles and pounce like tigers”. Here the writer uses similes to showcase that books have a wide variety of genres to pick from that there will always be a book that a lines with one’s interests. This is shown through the use of “gazelles” and “tigers”, as gazelles are largely associated with romance and tigers, which are typically connote action. Furthermore, the verb, “ran” and “pounce” could suggest how fast paced and wild the imaginations of the school children are once the story is able to capture the diverse spectrum of interests within that classroom. Therefore it is clear that books are inclusive and hold particular aspects which are able to peak the interest of many different kinds of people.
@@kyliegates3157 focus on making question 4 a grade 9 response. cos its 20 marks. question 2 is only 8 marks and its essentially just like literature question 4 and 5 are big marks
you are by far the best English tutor I have ever been taught by using prtezel really helps and you don't rush your explanations I would really recommend you to all my classmates and ill continue to watch your videos
Is this ok? 😬 Firstly, Harris has used sentence forms and language techniques within the first extremely long declarative sentence to help the reader vividly imagine how passionate Mr Fisher is about books. Similes like “ran like gazelles”, “pounced like tigers”, and “exploded like rockets.” create the sense of something at its fullest potential, thus metaphorizing how powerful Mr Fisher sees books. While using these three similes, the writer also includes The Power of Three, which further elevates the protagonist’s depiction of how powerful books were. The conjunction of these three powerful language techniques; similes, metaphor and The Power of Three greatly elaborate just how special books are to Mr Fisher. Although some may see the use of these three language techniques in once sentence as too much, the author has done this to show the extreme passion Mr Fisher feels about them. Furthermore, the writer employs juxtaposition in their writing to describe Mr Fisher's wistful thoughts. Specifically, they use the phrases "dreamed in colour" and "films were in black and white" to create a contrast that conveys negative connotations for the first time in the paragraph. Mr Fisher's mind goes from imagining vivid and fantastical things to being jolted back to reality, where films are only in black and white. This sharp contrast immediately helps readers identify with the protagonist, forging a symbolic bond between them and Mr Fisher that allows us to share in his nostalgia. This effective use of juxtaposition in the author's writing allows readers to better understand Mr Fisher's character and emotions, ultimately enhancing the overall reading experience and our connection to the story.
Could someone please mark this: The writer uses personification, simile, and listing to convey Mr Fisher's positive views of books and stories of the past. In the first sentence, the writer describes people who read books as having their "Imaginations soared." This personification conveys to readers the creativity and joy books brought to people by giving imagination a humanlike quality. Describing the imagination to "soar" conveys how it was heightened during that time and brought about new ideas that were not present before. It also conveys how readers could almost be transported to a different realm through these books and "soar" into a world of imagination, and readers feel a sense of joy and excitement, which Mr Fisher must have felt. Then, the use of the simile "When the world was filled with stories which ran like gazelles," conveys how quickly these books and stories were able to be shared and spread throughout the community, and readers feel a sense of love and connection between people through books, emphasising Mr Fisher's positive view on stories. Just like gazelles are thought to be beautiful and majestic creatures, it is clear that to Mr Fisher, stories are wonderful things that provide joy and beauty in people's lives. Finally, Mr Fisher's positive view on books is conveyed through the technique listing. In the third sentence, it is described that "there were heroes, there were dragons and dinosaurs, there were space adventurers and soldiers of fortune of giant apes" in books. The use of listing effectively conveys and emphasises how there was so much variety and imagined characters in stories. This is reinforced through the contrast between heroes, associated with good, and dinosaurs, associated with slightly scarier and stronger views, showing us how there was a story for everyone. Anything you could dream of would be contained in these stories and this repetition seeks to overwhelm readers with the experiences and wonder that could be read. Through the use of personification, simile, and listing, Mr Fisher's positive views on stories and the wonder, creativity, and joy that they brought to him.
Hello : ) could you please mark this question 2 that i did as practice for the paper done in the video. (my current grade is a 7). Mr Fisher views books and stories of the past as more adventurous and exciting. The use of the simile 'stories ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers and exploded like rockets'. Here, the writer paints an image of the stories of the past from Mr fisher's point of view, the stories of the past are portrayed to be full of colour and joyfulness. The use of the verbs 'ran' , 'pounced' and 'exploded' highlight the action taking place in these stories. Furthermore, this could perhaps bring back memories from Mr Fisher's childhood and could emphasise Mr Fisher's love towards books. Therefore, This highlights Mr Fisher's preferance of books and stories of the past. The writer highlights Mr Fisher's love towards books of the past as he used to 'dream' about them in his sleep. The use of the juxtaposition between 'Colour' and the adjectives 'black and 'white' could perhaps be used by the writer to contrast between the different ideas that Mr Fisher has towards books and stories of the past and books and stories of the present. Additionally, this highlights how Mr Fisher admires the books of the past rather than books of the present time.
Based on the quality of the response you provided, I would say that your answer would receive a mark of 6 or 7 out of 8. Your response demonstrates a clear understanding of the language used by the writer and its effect on the reader, and you have used a range of language techniques to explain how the writer portrays Mr Fisher's love for books of the past. However, to achieve full marks, you could have provided a more detailed analysis of the language used in the quotation and how it creates meaning.
this is a good answer but i think you can be clearer at the start where it says The use of the simile 'stories ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers and exploded like rockets'. Here, the writer paints... because the first sentence doesnt really make sense on it's own. You could say Through the use of the simile such as 'stories ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers and exploded like rockets', the writer paints... but really good answer overall
its too long to do that remember that you have to spend around 10 min on this question so thats why prtezel method is much morr efficient in terms of time wise and his method goes according to his mark scheme
he didn't say that you needed 8 quotes - just 8 'explanations' for whatever you're talking about. the effects in this video's model answer are essentially the 8 explanations from mr. salles' video.
Actually, examiners dont care about structure in this question. You are marked according to how many explanantions and how valuable ur explanantions are
Can someone please mark my 2 paragraphs for Q2 on the Ugwu text and give me feedback, thanks! The writer uses a verb to present Ugwu's impression of the city, the quote 'he was too choked with expectation' suggests that he had soaring expectations of the city, specifically the verb 'choked' helps us to understand that he was excited for his new life abroad in the city, furthermore this creates a sense of curiosity as this is his first time experiencing something new away from the village. The writer builds on Ugwu's impression by the use of adjectives, 'streets so smooth and tarred that he itched to lay his cheek down on them' particularly the adjectives 'smooth' and 'tarred' suggest that the roads are clean and well made, this also suggests that he had never witnessed anything like it before as he lived in a deprived village. Furthermore the verb 'itched' describes uguw's eagerness to feel the road, reinforcing the idea of curiosity. This makes the reader feel happy for Ugwu and want to read on.
Go to his previous video (last years one). Sir does a priest story and explains it very well and tells you how to gain marks. Just type up language paper 1 question 5 and it should come up.
Do you have to write two seperate paragraphs or can you link both points together and write them in one long paragraph and therefore i would've wrote about two quotes but linked together.
If there are few moments in life that come as clear and as pure as ice, when the mountain breathed back at her, Zoe knew that she had trapped one such moment and that it could never be taken away. Everywhere was snow and silence. Snow and silence; the complete arrest of life; a rehearsal and a pre-echo of death. She pointed her skis down the hill. They looked like weird talons of brilliant red and gold in the powder snow as she waited, ready to swoop. I am alive. I am an eagle. for this text, is this good enough for a 1st paragraph? The writer uses language in this extract to enable the reader's comprehension of the character's setting, the character seems to be alone in a cold wintery setting. The quote ‘when the mountain breathed back at her’ is an example of how cold the setting truly was. The use of personification enables the reader to articulate the character's perception of the cold as indeed one of harmony and peace; the frigid air whirling around the setting can be seen as a symbol of the character’s view of the weather. Furthermore, the use of the verb ‘breathed’ downplays the strength of the wind as breathing is often warmer and weaker than cold air.
for Q2 can i use the same point for 2/3 PETE paragraphs with diff quotes & language devices?? for example, if the question asked ‘how does the writer use language to describe the view?’ can i say: The writer uses a metaphor to describe the view as majestic & breathtaking, describing it as “….” (analyse). The writer further describes the view as majestic & breathtaking by using the simile “…..” (analyse).
Hi I was wondering if anybody could help when it comes to the effect I can only give vague ideas for example I’ll just put unwelcoming/ happy / sad. Do u guys know any tips for writing better effect😢
Sir can i ask u a question U said that we had to plan two prtezel paragraphs. Also u planned two quotes and u only wrote one paragraph for only 1st quote..what about the 2nd one.. should i write the second paragraph or the one u wrote enough for me to get 7-8 marks???
Hi. I just watched ur video and i am a bit confused as to what effect means in pret paragraph. Arent u not describing what the quote shows? I dont understand what u mean by effect. Can anybody explain pls.
If u write the second para with the same quality ull probably get 8/8 Not sure about the marking tho ig it would be 4/8 if u wrote only 1 para.💀👌🏻 Not me here dying 1 day before the paper☠️☠️😭😭😭🥲 ( Edit, going to go listen to "life could be dream" on a 10hr loop)
It is describing the stories available in the world, if there are some that “explode like rockets” and some that “run like gazelles” it’s implying that there is a different story anyone could enjoy, ie something for everyone, and “illuminating minds and hearts”.
i think that the "gazelles" and the "tigers" is a simile for the stories so it is saying that it is almost as if the stories went everywhere as they "ran" and "pounced" thus spreading the stories throughout the population. if u imagine a gazelle running u would think it goes very far - just like the story
Gazzeles and tigers are different animals which mimics the variety of the stories. The difference is further accentuated by the verbs “ran” and “pounced”. Here the verb “ran” suggests a level of exhilaration than one reader may feel which is juxtaposed by the tiger having “pounced” which implies a book that was much more slow paced action that was quickly sped up. Both of these actions are intrinsic in nature to the survival of the animals which reflects the importants books hold and how one style of book is better suited to a person.
Can you please mark this for me and give me feedback? Q5 Story about a holiday It was a glamorous day where the place was so peaceful that you could only hear the humming, whirring and clapping wings of the birds; which was mellisonant and the sand was smooth like cotton, the sky was blanketed with clouds:there was a thin silver line shining out of the white clouds. My sister and I were enjoying the unforgettable moments there and making the best memories together. the only things i was thinking about was: the happiness; euphoric feeling and the joy that i was feeling. I prayed in tears that this happiness never ends as I was bursting out of joy! But it didn't last long . We sat there mediating about the beautiful different type of birds around and hearing the calm sound of the water until my sister asked” why don't we try to surf together” i was astonished as she have never tried to surf in a ocean.However, i didn't want to turn her down so i replied “are you sure?”, without hesitation with an exciting voice she said “yes im sure”. Then we put on our swimming suit and we got ready to surf. To my surprise she stuck her feet into the surfing board for the first time. When we started surfing, I quickly noticed that the day had become gloomy and the sky had been blanketed in dark black clouds; I knew disaster was going to happen.I tried to warn my sister that we should stop surfing as we couldn't see anything except from a heinous and rogue wave coming towards us. We were terrified and apprehensive. But it did crash us. I tried to swim in hopes I could find my sister when I didn't know if she could be alive.
I would say that your answer would receive a mark of 12 or 13 out of 40. The response lacks a clear focus on the question and does not use language techniques effectively to create a sense of atmosphere or to convey the emotions of the narrator. The response also lacks a clear structure and does not use paragraphs to separate different ideas. To achieve higher marks, you should focus on the question and use a range of language techniques to create a sense of atmosphere and convey the emotions of the narrator. You should also ensure that your response has a clear structure and uses paragraphs to separate different ideas.
In addition to this The writer Presents books to also be powerful , fulfilling students imagination with Stories . This is seen when we learn now stories "ran like gazelles andl Pounced like tigers" @) Here the writer uses the similefto convey now the Stories were spread rapidly around the word. It is as if they were a disease everyone started to (atch. They were Uncontrolable and seen as a new craze that hadn't emerged before - Furthermore, the simile hingnts how powerfur stories were as soon as a book had been read '' peopie fought to express their feelings and ideas on what it had Said-€) furthermore the verb ran èpillustrates how everyone spread these Stories So far and wide , it was almost impossible 70 escape thente)Ithe verhesePounced|2) further empnasises now "fories were rejected within peoples minds ang an 8 very powerfur, and that everyone IB/G/Jun18/8700/1 had been sucked into the craze implying it cat be defeated
Hello brother, I just finished my Oxford AQA English examinations (both papers) and I just want to thank you for this entire year, I don't think I would have been able to do it without you! Allah bless you akhi
How come you did earlier then us we have on 5th June first paper.
Also what's the question for paper 1 question 5 please lol
Ameen
What? You did it early???? Give questions please 😂
@@wahidasafi7643 think hes on about literature
out of all the English tutors on here,
this guy is definitely the best, straight to the point no Waffle explains everything and gives u everything u need, I hatedEnglishh before watching this guy but now i get some enjoyment out of it and i feel very confident for my exam tomorrow 😘
sammme i had no idea how to even start the question but he explained it soo well
I agree and good luck mine tomorrow too
Good Luck to everyone, you got this😁
@@Milan.T71 thanks you too
you absolutly have saved my language GCSE i went up from a 6 to an 8 thanks to you :) thank you
im on a grade 4/5 do you think i can get a seven
@@pi-ku-cw6ku depends, if you lost most of your marks in section A then def yes but if you lost most of them in section B then its harder.
@@pi-ku-cw6ku ur dun out
@@moneymakinn0 huh
@@DanielTaylor-sw7oh okk thank u
Seriously you made it way simpler than I had on my mind or my teachers told me. I thought you had to pick things through the text, like 10 quotes and describe the language technique, but you showed me you only have to pick 2 quotes and 4 techniques/phrases types. Thank you!
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🎯 Key Takeaways for quick navigation:
00:00 📚 Introduction to the video and the importance of paper one question number two.
- Paper one question number two is an eight-mark question.
- Understanding the focus on words, phrases, and language devices.
- The goal is to write two well-structured paragraphs.
03:36 📖 How to plan and structure your response for paper one question number two.
- Use the "Pretzel" method for structuring your paragraphs: Point, Reference, Technique, Effect, Zoom in, Effect, and Link.
- Select two quotes and choose a language device for each.
- Focus on analyzing language devices and their effects in detail.
- Use subject-specific terminology (e.g., similes, metaphors) correctly.
06:49 🧾 Understanding the marking scheme for paper one question number two.
- You are marked on your choice of quotes, subject terminology, and the effect of the chosen techniques.
- The quality of the effect and the uniqueness of your analysis are crucial.
- Points and links are necessary but not as critical as the analysis of language devices.
11:24 📄 Example of a model answer for paper one question number two.
- An example of a seven out of eight model answer.
- Demonstrates the application of the Pretzel method in crafting paragraphs.
- Emphasizes the importance of in-depth analysis for each language device.
16:20 🖋️ How to write a response for paper one question number two in the exam.
- Step-by-step guidance on constructing a response, including points, references, techniques, effects, zooming in, and links.
- Prioritize detailed analysis of language devices and their effects.
- Manage your time effectively to ensure you can complete both paragraphs.
Made with HARPA AI
this should be pinned
Mr fisher views on books and stories of the past by using a different language devices such as simile, personification, alliteration, siblings. This is evident in the line ''which ran like gazelle's and pounced like Tigers and exploded like rockets '' the writer used simile here to convey on how fast things in order to show the readers how exciting Mr fisher finds them. Futhermore the quote '' Mr fisher, we dreamed in colour, through films were in black and while , and good always triumphed in the end '' the writer used colour imagery and a conjunction here to describe through Mr fisher , who had once dreamed so fiercely and excited of writing stories of his own.
Similarly, the quote '' illumating minds and hearts '' Mr fisher is looking at the past stories is good to have a look at it and Mr fisher has a belief of good stories had an all- encompassing impacts on the readers . Furthermore the quote '' there were heroes; there were dragons and dinosaurs'' the writer has used alliteration here to describe how Mr fisher has dreamed in colour through films were in black and white colour and triumphed is the end card for the Mr fisher dreams. On the other hand the quote '' there were space adventure and soldiers of fortune and giant apes '' this quote is referring to how Mr fisher is prefer to novel of the past because this is implying that imagation of Mr fisher. And the quote '' he had seen it happen ; had seen whole clauses swept away in the fever . In those days, '' this is evident that almost personifies to books , giving it the ability to control and take over the children and this has emphasis the powerful potential effects of stories showing the strength of Mr fisher belief in them . On the other hand the quote '' Mr fisher not so long ago - when books were golden, when imagination soared, when the world was filled with stories it symbolic of inspire someone to think more creatively or to make a bold move on the extract .
Hi Mr everything English could you please check this answers which typed it for you and give a feedback for me
Thanks
Great job....waiting impatiently for Q3.
Tuesday 6pm
@@UK_1487 are u a teacher?
@MrEverythingEnglish I don't understand how the books were for everyone on the second quote when u created that Point there's no correlation
@@EarthsbeautyofficialI got you habibi. Tigers are 'predators 'and they 'pounce'.
Gazelles are prey and they "run"
These 2 juxtaposing (contrasting) animals could be a metaphor about how books are for everyone. Both prey and predators. Bully's and the bullied. I hope this helps brother also are you resitting? May Allah grant us victory. Ameen
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@@Faris_Ibn_Hafizameen
why cant teachers be like this, they tell you how to do the question and run through it with the class instead of letting them off without knowing what a good one looks like.
hello there! i’m resitting my eng lang and i don’t have anyone that could mark my papers so i was wondering if anyone could read my paragraph and give me appropriate advice and mark?
The writer uses language to convey that Mr Fisher viewed stories and books of the past as inclusive, that in every story there was something which would interest everyone. This can be seen when Mr Fisher describes worlds which are filled with “stories which ran like gazelles and pounce like tigers”. Here the writer uses similes to showcase that books have a wide variety of genres to pick from that there will always be a book that a lines with one’s interests. This is shown through the use of “gazelles” and “tigers”, as gazelles are largely associated with romance and tigers, which are typically connote action. Furthermore, the verb, “ran” and “pounce” could suggest how fast paced and wild the imaginations of the school children are once the story is able to capture the diverse spectrum of interests within that classroom. Therefore it is clear that books are inclusive and hold particular aspects which are able to peak the interest of many different kinds of people.
thats really gd icl
A few spelling and grammatical errors but all in all, it's good :).
Very good first paragraph. If ur second one is of the same quality ur definitely looking at a 7-8/8
@@inferno9334 is there anything i could do to make it grade 9 level?
@@kyliegates3157 focus on making question 4 a grade 9 response. cos its 20 marks.
question 2 is only 8 marks and its essentially just like literature
question 4 and 5 are big marks
My little brother will make great use of this video sir thank you jazakallah ghairan
you are by far the best English tutor I have ever been taught by using prtezel really helps and you don't rush your explanations I would really recommend you to all my classmates and ill continue to watch your videos
Another useful video. thanks for carrying my grade
Is this ok? 😬
Firstly, Harris has used sentence forms and language techniques within the first extremely long declarative sentence to help the reader vividly imagine how passionate Mr Fisher is about books. Similes like “ran like gazelles”, “pounced like tigers”, and “exploded like rockets.” create the sense of something at its fullest potential, thus metaphorizing how powerful Mr Fisher sees books. While using these three similes, the writer also includes The Power of Three, which further elevates the protagonist’s depiction of how powerful books were. The conjunction of these three powerful language techniques; similes, metaphor and The Power of Three greatly elaborate just how special books are to Mr Fisher. Although some may see the use of these three language techniques in once sentence as too much, the author has done this to show the extreme passion Mr Fisher feels about them.
Furthermore, the writer employs juxtaposition in their writing to describe Mr Fisher's wistful thoughts. Specifically, they use the phrases "dreamed in colour" and "films were in black and white" to create a contrast that conveys negative connotations for the first time in the paragraph. Mr Fisher's mind goes from imagining vivid and fantastical things to being jolted back to reality, where films are only in black and white. This sharp contrast immediately helps readers identify with the protagonist, forging a symbolic bond between them and Mr Fisher that allows us to share in his nostalgia. This effective use of juxtaposition in the author's writing allows readers to better understand Mr Fisher's character and emotions, ultimately enhancing the overall reading experience and our connection to the story.
Could someone please mark this:
The writer uses personification, simile, and listing to convey Mr Fisher's positive views of books and stories of the past. In the first sentence, the writer describes people who read books as having their "Imaginations soared." This personification conveys to readers the creativity and joy books brought to people by giving imagination a humanlike quality. Describing the imagination to "soar" conveys how it was heightened during that time and brought about new ideas that were not present before. It also conveys how readers could almost be transported to a different realm through these books and "soar" into a world of imagination, and readers feel a sense of joy and excitement, which Mr Fisher must have felt.
Then, the use of the simile "When the world was filled with stories which ran like gazelles," conveys how quickly these books and stories were able to be shared and spread throughout the community, and readers feel a sense of love and connection between people through books, emphasising Mr Fisher's positive view on stories. Just like gazelles are thought to be beautiful and majestic creatures, it is clear that to Mr Fisher, stories are wonderful things that provide joy and beauty in people's lives.
Finally, Mr Fisher's positive view on books is conveyed through the technique listing. In the third sentence, it is described that "there were heroes, there were dragons and dinosaurs, there were space adventurers and soldiers of fortune of giant apes" in books. The use of listing effectively conveys and emphasises how there was so much variety and imagined characters in stories. This is reinforced through the contrast between heroes, associated with good, and dinosaurs, associated with slightly scarier and stronger views, showing us how there was a story for everyone. Anything you could dream of would be contained in these stories and this repetition seeks to overwhelm readers with the experiences and wonder that could be read.
Through the use of personification, simile, and listing, Mr Fisher's positive views on stories and the wonder, creativity, and joy that they brought to him.
1/8
@@haseebahmad3173 could u tell me why it’s 1/8 so i can do better
@@charlotte6427imo you dont really have a point in your paragraphs. Your just explaining its effects without a point
4/8
@@hh-ms3ub why? (so i can improve)
Hello : ) could you please mark this question 2 that i did as practice for the paper done in the video. (my current grade is a 7). Mr Fisher views books and stories of the past as more adventurous and exciting. The use of the simile 'stories ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers and exploded like rockets'. Here, the writer paints an image of the stories of the past from Mr fisher's point of view, the stories of the past are portrayed to be full of colour and joyfulness. The use of the verbs 'ran' , 'pounced' and 'exploded' highlight the action taking place in these stories. Furthermore, this could perhaps bring back memories from Mr Fisher's childhood and could emphasise Mr Fisher's love towards books. Therefore, This highlights Mr Fisher's preferance of books and stories of the past. The writer highlights Mr Fisher's love towards books of the past as he used to 'dream' about them in his sleep. The use of the juxtaposition between 'Colour' and the adjectives 'black and 'white' could perhaps be used by the writer to contrast between the different ideas that Mr Fisher has towards books and stories of the past and books and stories of the present. Additionally, this highlights how Mr Fisher admires the books of the past rather than books of the present time.
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Based on the quality of the response you provided, I would say that your answer would receive a mark of 6 or 7 out of 8. Your response demonstrates a clear understanding of the language used by the writer and its effect on the reader, and you have used a range of language techniques to explain how the writer portrays Mr Fisher's love for books of the past. However, to achieve full marks, you could have provided a more detailed analysis of the language used in the quotation and how it creates meaning.
@@directmagicyt9054 thank you
this is a good answer but i think you can be clearer at the start where it says The use of the simile 'stories ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers and exploded like rockets'. Here, the writer paints... because the first sentence doesnt really make sense on it's own. You could say Through the use of the simile such as 'stories ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers and exploded like rockets', the writer paints... but really good answer overall
bro you helped me so much you absolute legend and handsome guy i got 68/80 on my paper 1 top man
my english teacher would give you a grade 3-5 max, she just doesnt like this type of writing for some reason
I like your teaching, it really help me understand answering as I am going to do mine next year as an adult student . Thanks 😊
May allah reward you
Thanks again for your help with this year exams 🙌
Thx you you made me get get max marks on q2 and q3 for my mock
Awww mashallah 🥰
Mr Salles says to provide 8 quotes and 8 explanations for each of them because the question is 8 marks, what's your take on that method?
That's not right, that is not how the question is meant to be answered.
its too long to do that remember that you have to spend around 10 min on this question so thats why prtezel method is much morr efficient in terms of time wise and his method goes according to his mark scheme
he didn't say that you needed 8 quotes - just 8 'explanations' for whatever you're talking about. the effects in this video's model answer are essentially the 8 explanations from mr. salles' video.
hes fully a clown
Actually, examiners dont care about structure in this question. You are marked according to how many explanantions and how valuable ur explanantions are
Can someone please mark my 2 paragraphs for Q2 on the Ugwu text and give me feedback, thanks!
The writer uses a verb to present Ugwu's impression of the city, the quote 'he was too choked with expectation' suggests that he had soaring expectations of the city, specifically the verb 'choked' helps us to understand that he was excited for his new life abroad in the city, furthermore this creates a sense of curiosity as this is his first time experiencing something new away from the village.
The writer builds on Ugwu's impression by the use of adjectives, 'streets so smooth and tarred that he itched to lay his cheek down on them' particularly the adjectives 'smooth' and 'tarred' suggest that the roads are clean and well made, this also suggests that he had never witnessed anything like it before as he lived in a deprived village. Furthermore the verb 'itched' describes uguw's eagerness to feel the road, reinforcing the idea of curiosity. This makes the reader feel happy for Ugwu and want to read on.
Seems good I done the same quote for your second paragraph and it was similar
@@TRGhazi_ Thanks bro
I Don't Understand. For the q2 answer, why couldn't i not find the references they have used in the text.
couldnt find it too, even in the insert
Its definitely a different question
waiting for question 3
i wish we could get it now
Tuesday 6pm it’ll be out
Tysm you helped me pass maths resit
I would love help on the description/story part of this paper. I always loose a ton of marks on that part and I feel like it’s bc of my structure
Go to his previous video (last years one). Sir does a priest story and explains it very well and tells you how to gain marks. Just type up language paper 1 question 5 and it should come up.
please do question 5 tomorrow it will be better as its most of the marks, and we have more time to practise it before our exams
hold your horses we still have a week
@@chickenliver66660 it's gonna go quick
@@gkay.24 it did ..
@@jamsi1066 yes it did...
@@Impuritex these holidays went like nothing i thought it started yesterday but our exam is tomorrow aha
i have a english lang paper mock tmr. Ill lyk how it goes p.s im revising thr day before
You made it look so easy
I am really helpless when it comes to Effect's I find it hard to explain do you have any advice please.
When do you guys think Q4 and Q5 will be posted?
Q3: Tuesday 6pm
Q4: Wednesday 6pm
Q5: Thursday 6pm
why does this classroom look 10 timse better than all the ones at the school I went for secondary
I still love you mr english
stay out my territory
@@simonghost2101 My guy you have no territory. Little man thinks he's him.
amazing nobody has taught to tackle qs like this. Q2 is simple 2 PRTEZEL paragraphs
14:00 truly said with passion
Do you have to write two seperate paragraphs or can you link both points together and write them in one long paragraph and therefore i would've wrote about two quotes but linked together.
You can do one, it’s not about how much u write is about the quality of your writing mate
@@lucasmarks8008 yeah true
Thanks
thank you akhi
this guy gonna save my eng lang paper 1 gcse tomorrow. what a goat
If there are few moments in life that come as clear and as pure as ice, when the
mountain breathed back at her, Zoe knew that she had trapped one such moment
and that it could never be taken away. Everywhere was snow and silence. Snow
and silence; the complete arrest of life; a rehearsal and a pre-echo of death. She
pointed her skis down the hill. They looked like weird talons of brilliant red and gold
in the powder snow as she waited, ready to swoop. I am alive. I am an eagle.
for this text, is this good enough for a 1st paragraph?
The writer uses language in this extract to enable the reader's comprehension of the character's setting, the character seems to be alone in a cold wintery setting.
The quote ‘when the mountain breathed back at her’ is an example of how cold the setting truly was. The use of personification enables the reader to articulate the character's perception of the cold as indeed one of harmony and peace; the frigid air whirling around the setting can be seen as a symbol of the character’s view of the weather. Furthermore, the use of the verb ‘breathed’ downplays the strength of the wind as breathing is often warmer and weaker than cold air.
wheres the link bud, also you need a clearer and better point. the effects and reference was good
@@Abdd17 Thanks for the feedback!
Does the writing and picking out quotes need to be correct or is it just how we zoom in with our opinions? Pls respond
for Q2 can i use the same point for 2/3 PETE paragraphs with diff quotes & language devices??
for example, if the question asked ‘how does the writer use language to describe the view?’
can i say:
The writer uses a metaphor to describe the view as majestic & breathtaking, describing it as “….” (analyse). The writer further describes the view as majestic & breathtaking by using the simile “…..” (analyse).
I guess so. You probably can do that
You could maybe but I’d say PRETZEL gets you more marks
When zooming in can you state a different effect or develop your current idea
Thank you sir u make it so straightforward and clear!
I came from to get a 1 in mocks to a 5 in gcse language
do u have to use the same point for both paragraphs
Hi I was wondering if anybody could help when it comes to the effect I can only give vague ideas for example I’ll just put unwelcoming/ happy / sad. Do u guys know any tips for writing better effect😢
Sir in my mocks i got a 4 (82 marks) im aiminhg to get a 7 any last minute tips
charge it, be happy for the 4 bud
@@yaz689 stop pulling people down let them ascend
@@dapo7930 Waffler i'm not stopping him from acending
thank you so much
He should be an actual school teacher
Still tryna find the link to the language techniques vid.
theres smth called google
@@zahra25x ye ik but I like his vids as they are very helpful
@@axdul9996 igu dw
could the word fever be personification as once you read one you want to read more, like a fever spreading in your body
what the hell max
@@anamzakir-gi3zc what🙃
Personification is when you give human attributes to something that is non-human for example 'the wind howled'
Wow you made this sound d so easy
mera jaan everything english
are you allowed to highlight the extract with a highlighter?
Yes, in all exams you can highlight any part of question or extract but never the answer or your working out if that makes sense
@@squareeyes5942 k thx. good luck on monday
@Mr Everything English thank you
very helpful😀
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Sir can i ask u a question
U said that we had to plan two prtezel paragraphs. Also u planned two quotes and u only wrote one paragraph for only 1st quote..what about the 2nd one.. should i write the second paragraph or the one u wrote enough for me to get 7-8 marks???
you need to write the second one
Cheers
Hi. I just watched ur video and i am a bit confused as to what effect means in pret paragraph. Arent u not describing what the quote shows? I dont understand what u mean by effect. Can anybody explain pls.
The effect is what it makes the reader think and feel or what it suggests about the certain character and their behaviour
how much marks would u get if u wrote a similar second para, and how many marks was this para that he wrote.
If u write the second para with the same quality ull probably get 8/8
Not sure about the marking tho ig it would be 4/8 if u wrote only 1 para.💀👌🏻
Not me here dying 1 day before the paper☠️☠️😭😭😭🥲 ( Edit, going to go listen to "life could be dream" on a 10hr loop)
@@ToxicMadladyou needa revise more bro spelt dying wrong
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Amazing videos
16:03 im confused, how does that point relate to the quote?
It is describing the stories available in the world, if there are some that “explode like rockets” and some that “run like gazelles” it’s implying that there is a different story anyone could enjoy, ie something for everyone, and “illuminating minds and hearts”.
at 11:14 how can i submit my own paragraph online so they can automatically level and grade your paragraph?
i dont think it works like that the use an actual question in exam
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8:07
what grade would that model answer get the one that you wrote out
16:05. How have you just came up with the effect "They were for everyone" from the quote "which ran like gazelles and pounced like tigers"
i think that the "gazelles" and the "tigers" is a simile for the stories so it is saying that it is almost as if the stories went everywhere as they "ran" and "pounced" thus spreading the stories throughout the population. if u imagine a gazelle running u would think it goes very far - just like the story
Gazzeles and tigers are different animals which mimics the variety of the stories. The difference is further accentuated by the verbs “ran” and “pounced”. Here the verb “ran” suggests a level of exhilaration than one reader may feel which is juxtaposed by the tiger having “pounced” which implies a book that was much more slow paced action that was quickly sped up. Both of these actions are intrinsic in nature to the
survival of the animals which reflects the importants books hold and how one style of book is better suited to a person.
@@or4cl363 I was partly practising for p2 q3
@@toxic_gg867 good luck m8
Do you not have to write about the effect on the reader?
Depends on the specific question, this one only asked for how it conveys views not the effect on the reader.
Has anyone joined his courses? How did you find it?
big up
Is tis for year 10s as well
Yes
no
15:00
How many paragraphs are you expected to do
He literally said: 2
@@luke_c4rpenter907bro i was watching the whole thing thats why i asked
i love you boss
Legend
11:19
Can you please mark this for me and give me feedback?
Q5
Story about a holiday
It was a glamorous day where the place was so peaceful that you could only hear the
humming, whirring and clapping wings of the birds; which was mellisonant and the sand was
smooth like cotton, the sky was blanketed with clouds:there was a thin silver line shining out
of the white clouds. My sister and I were enjoying the unforgettable moments there and
making the best memories together. the only things i was thinking about was: the happiness;
euphoric feeling and the joy that i was feeling. I prayed in tears that this happiness never
ends as I was bursting out of joy!
But it didn't last long
.
We sat there mediating about the beautiful different type of birds around and hearing the
calm sound of the water until my sister asked” why don't we try to surf together” i was
astonished as she have never tried to surf in a ocean.However, i didn't want to turn her down
so i replied “are you sure?”, without hesitation with an exciting voice she said “yes im sure”.
Then we put on our swimming suit and we got ready to surf. To my surprise she stuck her
feet into the surfing board for the first time.
When we started surfing, I quickly noticed that the day had become gloomy and the sky had
been blanketed in dark black clouds; I knew disaster was going to happen.I tried to warn my
sister that we should stop surfing as we couldn't see anything except from a heinous and
rogue wave coming towards us. We were terrified and apprehensive. But it did crash us. I
tried to swim in hopes I could find my sister when I didn't know if she could be alive.
no
I would say that your answer would receive a mark of 12 or 13 out of 40. The response lacks a clear focus on the question and does not use language techniques effectively to create a sense of atmosphere or to convey the emotions of the narrator. The response also lacks a clear structure and does not use paragraphs to separate different ideas. To achieve higher marks, you should focus on the question and use a range of language techniques to create a sense of atmosphere and convey the emotions of the narrator. You should also ensure that your response has a clear structure and uses paragraphs to separate different ideas.
@@directmagicyt9054 thank for the feedback but I did use pragraph but I didn't make it clear as I just paste it from Google doc
@@directmagicyt9054 So a rule of 3 consisting of verbs is not a language technique? alright 🤣
When does this start?
05/06/2023
Warra sick man
Does it have to be prtezel
na just do which ever you get loads of marks with
Hi is this AQA or Edexcel
AQA
can you please do question 5 paper 1 and 2 aqa paper please
Yep, Thursday 6pm
i have failed lit
just saying it took u 8 minutes to write 1 paragraph
because he was explaining it to us in detail, whereas if he didnt, it wouldve tooken him approx 3-4 mins
Yo
Get this to 1k likes
Sush 😂
Ask your subs to do it 😂
@@echobits1 at least I have subs unlike u
@@JustAyz11 begging for likes is crazy
i did this for my mocks and got 4/8 and i wrote 2parg idk
please improve your handwriting sir 🤗
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Thank you so much, really helpful.🫶🏼🫶🏼
In addition to this
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I can't lie, the spelling is not it, you'll probably lose marks
I think the spelling is a bit off mate
@@e.1544 oh I didn’t realise, it’s changed as I scanned it from the paper onto my phone
@@randomacc77777 oh I didn’t realise, it’s changed as I scanned it from the paper onto my phone
Think u need to learn how to spell mate
i swr rhetorical question is structure