Your videos and website is helping me a lot. I will be ordering your book from Amazon. I'm going to post a version of my fictitious police report below. Please tell me what to rectify and what I need to work on. Thank You On Feb 10, 2016, at approximately 1523, I, officer Divine, was dispatched to Target on 1150 El Camino Real for petty theft. I met the store manager, Jim Quest and store LP Bobby Singh. The suspect, Mike G, DOB 10-25-82, was handcuffed and sitting on a chair. I reviewed the store surveillance footage and saw G, putting a CD player, bar code:152582, in his black gym bag. I requested Singh, to remove the handcuff off G. I talked to G and he said "I made a mistake please forgive me." I gave G, a misdemeanor ticket and walked him out of the store at 1619.
+Ishan Sharma Thank you for the feedback, Ishan! Your report is excellent. I would remove the commas after "I requested Singh" and "I gave G." Use commas with a name only when it's followed by an interrupter, like this: Wilson, the store manager, told me that shoplifting is a serious problem in his store. You can download a free comma handout at this link: bit.ly/CJCommas.
Your videos and website is helping me a lot. I will be ordering your book from Amazon. I'm going to post a version of my fictitious police report below. Please tell me what to rectify and what I need to work on. Thank You
On Feb 10, 2016, at approximately 1523, I, officer Divine, was dispatched to Target on 1150 El Camino Real for petty theft. I met the store manager, Jim Quest and store LP Bobby Singh. The suspect, Mike G, DOB 10-25-82, was handcuffed and sitting on a chair. I reviewed the store surveillance footage and saw G, putting a CD player, bar code:152582, in his black gym bag. I requested Singh, to remove the handcuff off G. I talked to G and he said "I made a mistake please forgive me." I gave G, a misdemeanor ticket and walked him out of the store at 1619.
+Ishan Sharma Thank you for the feedback, Ishan! Your report is excellent. I would remove the commas after "I requested Singh" and "I gave G." Use commas with a name only when it's followed by an interrupter, like this: Wilson, the store manager, told me that shoplifting is a serious problem in his store. You can download a free comma handout at this link: bit.ly/CJCommas.
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