While i cant say i hate the og one since it was one of the things thst got me into mlp horror i appreciate how you rewrote it to remove the more sexual parts that didnt really need to be there
I am so unbelievably happy you didn't make Sweetie a s.a. target like the og artist is known for sadly. Plus yours fits so well, especially because Discord really only cares for Fluttershy, nobody else.
@Guysitskrisfromdeltarune Oh yeah, the og artist made art of Rarity in the shower with Sweetie Belle and I heard so much worse, but it was all meant to be appealing. Like think Lily Orchard's Stockholm and Doomsday Ascending-levels of bad. Actually now that I remember, I saw the og artist's fetish art on the Doomsday Ascending video from EssenceofThought covering them!!
@@anglepsycho I also remember that the artist has a strange fixation with making the cutie mark crusaders go out of their way to be sexually active??? Like I barely remember the og comic, but the fact that Applebloom and Scootaloo are implied “bed partners” will forever be burned onto my miserable memory.
This rewrite version makes so much sense and falls in place as it was supposed to initially. Thank you For rewriting this fanfiction! Now it truly is something that can be both understood and enjoyed.
i doubt anyone could "enjoy" anything like this, except for maybe the art skills of this artist and the wonderful writing, aswell as nice portrayal of mental instability
Hate to say it, but life with schizophrenia can be like this sometimes, I feel for you Rarity, sorry you had to turn out like this instead of getting treatment. That aside, you wrote and executed this story PERFECTLY, i admire your work, in your animations too! From what I've seen so far your stuff is always so beautifully crafted and well organized 💞
I'm only 16 minutes into the video but so far I'm really enjoying this more then the original, I like how you still managed to keep her sexual desires in without sexualising her and it's nice how the plot started immediately and you could see how she feels about everything. It's nice.
That was just great. This Rarity design is my favourite. The story is exciting and creepy at the same time. Although leaving some questions behind. Like where did Pinkie go after attacking Rainbow? And why wasn't Apple Jack shown at all? Is she even alive? The bigger question concerns the flashbacks to Fluttershy. In one flashback, the yellow pegasus runs away from the spa in terror and doesn't speak to Rarity afterwards. In another flashback, Rarity and Fluttershy talk normally after the spa and it seems that in this version of events, Fluttershy didn't run away at all and the dialogue between the friends is quite important. So which version of events is true? I'm also not quite sure why Rarity went so crazy. Having extreme fetishes and cockroaches in your head doesn't automatically make you a maniac. She switched from "I want to share the joy of pain" to "I'll kill you" very abruptly.
The scene where flutters and rarity are speaking wasn't real, rarity is a very unreliable narrator in the beginning. as fpr her snapping, i dont think she just enjpyed being hurt, she did it as a way to deal with her self hatred. i think after everything shes gone through a part of herslef just broke
Well, there was a moment, then Tway says that half of harmony elements it gone. At that moment Fluttershy was already dead, soo two more should be Pinky and Rarity. I guess Applejack jast isn't shown
I feel like the first loop didn't go quite like this. I think the loops have been edited to max our Rarity's suffering as Discord get to enjoy watching her break, and making her mind snap further into believing she enjoys the suffering because her soul is repenting for her actions. If i think to edit this to get worded better i will, it is almost 4am here lmao
A small note for those who got here late. The creator of the original Lil Miss Rarity, Jay Van Esbroek/Lil Miss Jay is a an awful person who not only has some odd kinks, but has consistently treated their friends horribly. Am I saying this rewrite shouldn't exist? No. The guy who created Sonic.EXE turned out to be a bad guy and people still do stuff with that. Just stay away from the original artist.
@@sober_katz Last time I saw anything regarding him, he was still making ince$t and explicit art with the minor/child characters. So I don't think he's changed. EDIT: Just found out he openly endorses and supports AI, and apparently was feeding his vegan friend eggs and dairy for 10 years, knowing his friend HAD HEALTH ISSUES REGARDING THOSE ITEMS. Even more of a reason to dislike him.
@@ILikeCoconutJelly u may be onto something there champ 🤔🤔 thanks! some of the editing is a bit distracting and some of the cropping is a little weird. still holding out for an online zine or something ^_^
@@mellow7861I have it on my website! :) sites.google.com/view/sinclairdugorecomics/lil-miss-rarity?fbclid=PAZXh0bgNhZW0CMTEAAaa5tawCwHZ9aRB1gSnw6Tgo635kyaolD4htaOYxY_S-ZokXILQVvRmzCas_aem_k9cF1unEX1PR4bMJPSraIw
At this point this isn't scary or creppy, is just directly sad. Ofc, i dont agree entirely with this, im not entirely convinced, but some things are a good touch like Discord revelation and his revenge.
I'm pretty sure that was an accident. Due to the culmination of stress, sleep depravity and everything else. Keep in mind Opal slashed Rares in the face leaving a wicked scar. Something in her must've snapped a d as a result, she lashed out in anger, unintentionally killing Opal in the process. She didn't do it on purpose. Just look at her reaction upon realizing what she did. Her mind completely shattered and thus began the tale of this great tragedy.
@@wingadept8793 dude I grew up on this shit, I’m aware. She still kills the fucking cat stress or not. I appreciate what you’re trying to do but I am an OG “grew up on the internet and scared by the OG brony fandom” kind of Mlp fan. So thanks but no thanks I’m pretty sure my 13+ years with Mlp fim as my fav show and fandom has it covered more than your mansplaining paragraph about a story I knew before you even understood the internet you pleb
@@CatsN-Honey You know, you saying you disagree was enough. It's pretty immature of you to use words like "mansplaining" and "pleb" over someone merely explaining the story in a non-hostile way. But I get it, seeing a cat harmed might've emotionally charged you and ya felt like this person was "defending" that aspect. So hopefully you're doin fine now.
Greatly appreciated this rewrite. Your art style greatly compliments the story. Though, is there a reason this video is only available in 480p? The individual parts were in 1080p.
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So much better then the og, less glorifying. Really showing Rarity's sins as sin.
While i cant say i hate the og one since it was one of the things thst got me into mlp horror i appreciate how you rewrote it to remove the more sexual parts that didnt really need to be there
I am so unbelievably happy you didn't make Sweetie a s.a. target like the og artist is known for sadly. Plus yours fits so well, especially because Discord really only cares for Fluttershy, nobody else.
Wait the original artist did that? What was their name?? Also did the original story get finished? If not,why?
@Guysitskrisfromdeltarune Oh yeah, the og artist made art of Rarity in the shower with Sweetie Belle and I heard so much worse, but it was all meant to be appealing. Like think Lily Orchard's Stockholm and Doomsday Ascending-levels of bad.
Actually now that I remember, I saw the og artist's fetish art on the Doomsday Ascending video from EssenceofThought covering them!!
@@anglepsycho I also remember that the artist has a strange fixation with making the cutie mark crusaders go out of their way to be sexually active??? Like I barely remember the og comic, but the fact that Applebloom and Scootaloo are implied “bed partners” will forever be burned onto my miserable memory.
@@klavierjustice4911 She was friends with Lily Orchard from what I remember.
I haven't seen the og one, but is Sweetie Belle an S.A. target by her sister? That is something other than horror.
This rewrite version makes so much sense and falls in place as it was supposed to initially. Thank you For rewriting this fanfiction! Now it truly is something that can be both understood and enjoyed.
i doubt anyone could "enjoy" anything like this, except for maybe the art skills of this artist and the wonderful writing, aswell as nice portrayal of mental instability
34:08
Fluttershy saying it’s a prank while Sweetie Belle’s there bleeding, without a piece of fur and skin and with all the flesh exposed
Wow
Hate to say it, but life with schizophrenia can be like this sometimes, I feel for you Rarity, sorry you had to turn out like this instead of getting treatment.
That aside, you wrote and executed this story PERFECTLY, i admire your work, in your animations too! From what I've seen so far your stuff is always so beautifully crafted and well organized 💞
You were COOKING with this comic. The moment I saw the different art styles being used I knew I stumbled onto a goldmine
And that's why you should be away from Discord's Fluttershy
reallll
woowee the thought of rainbow dash really doing such harm to rarity even if it was her... kink chilling
wow...a time loop is such a creative twist. such a great rewrite, amazing work :)
I'm only 16 minutes into the video but so far I'm really enjoying this more then the original, I like how you still managed to keep her sexual desires in without sexualising her and it's nice how the plot started immediately and you could see how she feels about everything. It's nice.
I think the art style of this comic fits very well for Lil miss Rarity.
Headcannon: Every time someone watches this, it's another loop added to the count plus the 3 Discord mentioned. Im at 3551.
Currently at 5196. Rarity’s really going through it.
15k....
Going for the 18k baby
20088, LETS GO!
imagine rarity being rolled for the 80k(th) time, i sorta feel bad xd
My god Rarity Here is utterly tragic, and im left wishing she vould at some point manage to actually break of this Loop somehow...
this gave me goosebumps....... in a good way.
really puts the horror in horror story, alright. then again, revisiting classic stories can do that.
I like the idea that the original comic was just another loop
“Mama’s still pretty…right?”
Roses are red violets are blue, holy sh!t that escalated quickly
💀
I uh... I think you said it wrong there, buddy..
at 29:08 the 𝓯𝓻𝓮𝓪𝓴𝔂 font should've been used but it wasn't 💔
That was just great. This Rarity design is my favourite. The story is exciting and creepy at the same time. Although leaving some questions behind. Like where did Pinkie go after attacking Rainbow? And why wasn't Apple Jack shown at all? Is she even alive? The bigger question concerns the flashbacks to Fluttershy. In one flashback, the yellow pegasus runs away from the spa in terror and doesn't speak to Rarity afterwards. In another flashback, Rarity and Fluttershy talk normally after the spa and it seems that in this version of events, Fluttershy didn't run away at all and the dialogue between the friends is quite important. So which version of events is true?
I'm also not quite sure why Rarity went so crazy. Having extreme fetishes and cockroaches in your head doesn't automatically make you a maniac. She switched from "I want to share the joy of pain" to "I'll kill you" very abruptly.
The scene where flutters and rarity are speaking wasn't real, rarity is a very unreliable narrator in the beginning. as fpr her snapping, i dont think she just enjpyed being hurt, she did it as a way to deal with her self hatred. i think after everything shes gone through a part of herslef just broke
Well, there was a moment, then Tway says that half of harmony elements it gone. At that moment Fluttershy was already dead, soo two more should be Pinky and Rarity. I guess Applejack jast isn't shown
This is a masterpiece, holy. Not only a S-Tier rewrite for a goofy creepypasta, but you integrated such an amazing and compelling storyline
I feel like the first loop didn't go quite like this. I think the loops have been edited to max our Rarity's suffering as Discord get to enjoy watching her break, and making her mind snap further into believing she enjoys the suffering because her soul is repenting for her actions. If i think to edit this to get worded better i will, it is almost 4am here lmao
Remember when I first saw this on Instagram. Still blows me away with how much better it is from the original 👌🔥
Hippy hoppity rarity is SCARY AS FU-
Man coming back to these is nice. The Big Mac one was probably the one that disturbed me the most.
I've never read this version of rarity, but I saw what a lot of People reactions where and I like more this version than the original 🤩🤩🤩
Not gonna lie, I'm extremely happy this is my only exposure to this fanfic, because the comments make the original sound ... Well, ya know.
Thank god Dash survives.
A small note for those who got here late. The creator of the original Lil Miss Rarity, Jay Van Esbroek/Lil Miss Jay is a an awful person who not only has some odd kinks, but has consistently treated their friends horribly. Am I saying this rewrite shouldn't exist? No. The guy who created Sonic.EXE turned out to be a bad guy and people still do stuff with that. Just stay away from the original artist.
He has now created an RPG game called Melody, and I would like to know more about it, could you share if you know something about it?
i think he's trying to improve as a person, at least i HOPE he is. from what i heard he had a horrible life but i kinda hope he's doing better.
@@sober_katz Last time I saw anything regarding him, he was still making ince$t and explicit art with the minor/child characters. So I don't think he's changed.
EDIT: Just found out he openly endorses and supports AI, and apparently was feeding his vegan friend eggs and dairy for 10 years, knowing his friend HAD HEALTH ISSUES REGARDING THOSE ITEMS. Even more of a reason to dislike him.
@@ReesesBeesain’t no way
This is the best comic dub I've ever seen
I love this, amazing art style. Keep up your good work.
I love this.
The MLP fandom is so dark lol
is there a place i can read the whole thing without the edits? i'm a bit of a slow reader and pausing all the time isnt the move
Just put it on 0.2 it’s easier
@@ILikeCoconutJelly u may be onto something there champ 🤔🤔 thanks! some of the editing is a bit distracting and some of the cropping is a little weird. still holding out for an online zine or something ^_^
@@mellow7861I have it on my website! :) sites.google.com/view/sinclairdugorecomics/lil-miss-rarity?fbclid=PAZXh0bgNhZW0CMTEAAaa5tawCwHZ9aRB1gSnw6Tgo635kyaolD4htaOYxY_S-ZokXILQVvRmzCas_aem_k9cF1unEX1PR4bMJPSraIw
At this point this isn't scary or creppy, is just directly sad.
Ofc, i dont agree entirely with this, im not entirely convinced, but some things are a good touch like Discord revelation and his revenge.
This..this is it. This is my Roman Empire.
I love your art style❤
Is the background music around 14:56 a backwards version of Daisy Belle?
Fuckng despise rarity as a cat killer that’s why I changed it in my personal au that she surrenders her because who tf kills their cat
I'm pretty sure that was an accident. Due to the culmination of stress, sleep depravity and everything else. Keep in mind Opal slashed Rares in the face leaving a wicked scar. Something in her must've snapped a d as a result, she lashed out in anger, unintentionally killing Opal in the process. She didn't do it on purpose. Just look at her reaction upon realizing what she did. Her mind completely shattered and thus began the tale of this great tragedy.
@@wingadept8793 dude I grew up on this shit, I’m aware. She still kills the fucking cat stress or not. I appreciate what you’re trying to do but I am an OG “grew up on the internet and scared by the OG brony fandom” kind of Mlp fan. So thanks but no thanks I’m pretty sure my 13+ years with Mlp fim as my fav show and fandom has it covered more than your mansplaining paragraph about a story I knew before you even understood the internet you pleb
@@CatsN-Honey You know, you saying you disagree was enough. It's pretty immature of you to use words like "mansplaining" and "pleb" over someone merely explaining the story in a non-hostile way.
But I get it, seeing a cat harmed might've emotionally charged you and ya felt like this person was "defending" that aspect. So hopefully you're doin fine now.
Love this! Would you ever be interested in folks dubbing over your work?
Can you release the official soundtrack for this please? I really like the soundtrack.
Whats the song at 1:28 ?? I really like it
Greatly appreciated this rewrite. Your art style greatly compliments the story. Though, is there a reason this video is only available in 480p? The individual parts were in 1080p.
..dayum.
Jesus Fortnite Christ
Beautiful ❤
What is this about?
A rewrite of the creepypasta Lil' Miss Rarity.
you cooked
real
Haven't finished yet but WHAT IN THE 50 SHADES OF HAY AM I READING!😳
That's actually really smart ' 50 shades of hay '
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