You're a very talented and budding musician. This song is surreal, and for me brings to mind the time of astonishment that occurs after a life-changing event has occurred. You capture the theme of saudade well, as if experienced first hand. As to the lyrics, after hearing 'daunted', and especially after 'taunted', I was greatly anticipating 'haunted'... Well done, and I have sympathy for your loss.
Thank you so much for your compliment! I must admit to being hypersensitive...lol...and I do tend to just vent my emotions in my lyrics. I'm trying to do better, though. And isn't rhyming great when it works out well? I love that. And thank you for your sympathy. ♥
You're welcome. I understand being hypersensitive, and venting emotions. Life is beautiful and tragic, and expressing the way we feel is one of the ways we deal with it. If you're looking to refine that expression, the thing I usually do is pause, set everything aside, and pray as to whether I'm using the right words or if I'm putting my point across in the best possible manner. I meditate over the words until I feel at peace with them. Rhyming, word play, and meticulously selecting the right words to use is difficult for me to resist. Yeah, it's special when it feels like the very words are on your side.
@@TarkynSharples2 Thank you for your advice...I pray constantly and ask for help to do my best. I rewrite over and over LOL That's what happened with me with "Without You" (admitting I was a tad frustrated :P). I was finally fine with the lyrics on Tuesday and got the mix and video done. Meticulous is my personality...lol (hence Miss Meticulous! lol) I'm learning not to worry about being perfect or what others' opinions are...just doing what feels right and being a bit simpler than I tend to be. 😁 I'm sure you write really well...feel free to share your endeavors! And isn't Peace such a great feeling? Even better than chocolate! 😆
HI Toasty! Yeah, took me a bit too long to get the lyrics right on this one...sorry it too so long! 🤪 I have a new chord progression figured out so hopefully, the next song won't take as long. And I will probably try to fix the last 2 as well...hope all is well with you! Thank you for you compliment. The song is actually about losing my mom but writing this helps...although now it's not actually about losing her...just losing someone that's loved. Hope you have a great weekend!
LOL Thanks! I haven't had cookies is a LONG time...that's a great suggestion! I'm thinking of trying to make pumpkin chocolate chip cookies...I love autumn! And you do something you love for yourself, too!
@@watchingthissippingtea Autumn is my favorite time of year...but in California, hardly any actual season...I miss New York...it has the most beautiful autumn...especially in Rochester.
Betheny, you added the background vocals as was suggested in one of the commentry re "Sing a song Just for me". Hoping that one day you can make a four bar video on the entire process. Do I like the song and arrangement = Love the song and arrangement. Keep on improving.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your compIiment! I decided to keep the arrangement simple...and I chickened out about harmonizing (I think I did it for 2 notes lol). I can try to make a four bar video...if I knew what that was... lol... Thankfully, there are so many UA-cam videos that I can learn how to do things from so maybe I can find one for that too 😁 Hope you have a great weekend!
You're a very talented and budding musician. This song is surreal, and for me brings to mind the time of astonishment that occurs after a life-changing event has occurred. You capture the theme of saudade well, as if experienced first hand. As to the lyrics, after hearing 'daunted', and especially after 'taunted', I was greatly anticipating 'haunted'... Well done, and I have sympathy for your loss.
Thank you so much for your compliment! I must admit to being hypersensitive...lol...and I do tend to just vent my emotions in my lyrics. I'm trying to do better, though. And isn't rhyming great when it works out well? I love that. And thank you for your sympathy. ♥
You're welcome.
I understand being hypersensitive, and venting emotions. Life is beautiful and tragic, and expressing the way we feel is one of the ways we deal with it. If you're looking to refine that expression, the thing I usually do is pause, set everything aside, and pray as to whether I'm using the right words or if I'm putting my point across in the best possible manner. I meditate over the words until I feel at peace with them.
Rhyming, word play, and meticulously selecting the right words to use is difficult for me to resist. Yeah, it's special when it feels like the very words are on your side.
@@TarkynSharples2 Thank you for your advice...I pray constantly and ask for help to do my best. I rewrite over and over LOL That's what happened with me with "Without You" (admitting I was a tad frustrated :P). I was finally fine with the lyrics on Tuesday and got the mix and video done. Meticulous is my personality...lol (hence Miss Meticulous! lol) I'm learning not to worry about being perfect or what others' opinions are...just doing what feels right and being a bit simpler than I tend to be. 😁 I'm sure you write really well...feel free to share your endeavors! And isn't Peace such a great feeling? Even better than chocolate! 😆
Hugs....
Thank you Karen!
@@bethenyruefsongs 🤗
Youre back! This is such a beautifully sad song. Hope youre okay❤.
HI Toasty! Yeah, took me a bit too long to get the lyrics right on this one...sorry it too so long! 🤪 I have a new chord progression figured out so hopefully, the next song won't take as long. And I will probably try to fix the last 2 as well...hope all is well with you! Thank you for you compliment. The song is actually about losing my mom but writing this helps...although now it's not actually about losing her...just losing someone that's loved. Hope you have a great weekend!
@@bethenyruefsongs hope you have a great weeekend as well. Take some time for yourself and maybe enjoy some cookies. You deserve it!❤️
LOL Thanks! I haven't had cookies is a LONG time...that's a great suggestion! I'm thinking of trying to make pumpkin chocolate chip cookies...I love autumn! And you do something you love for yourself, too!
@@bethenyruefsongs Autumn is my favourite season! Cant wait for the leaves to change 💞🍂
@@watchingthissippingtea Autumn is my favorite time of year...but in California, hardly any actual season...I miss New York...it has the most beautiful autumn...especially in Rochester.
Betheny, you added the background vocals as was suggested in one of the commentry re "Sing a song Just for me". Hoping that one day you can make a four bar video on the entire process. Do I like the song and arrangement = Love the song and arrangement. Keep on improving.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your compIiment! I decided to keep the arrangement simple...and I chickened out about harmonizing (I think I did it for 2 notes lol). I can try to make a four bar video...if I knew what that was... lol... Thankfully, there are so many UA-cam videos that I can learn how to do things from so maybe I can find one for that too 😁 Hope you have a great weekend!