Band 9 IELTS Writing Task 2 SAMPLE ANSWER | Discuss both views
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Thanks for sharing this! Watched it a few days to my exam and got a 7 in the writing.
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There is a heated debate about whether States should provide subsidies for fruits and vegetables making everyone afford to eat healthily or it is better to impose taxes on Junk food to reduce demand for these types of food. I personally think that the first approach would be a more effective way.
On the one hand, I agree that to make unhealthy foods like pizza and French fries less appealing, taxing such dishes might play a key role to change eating habits of individuals. In other words, when the prices of such items increase, the purchasing power of buyers will decrease, thus they naturally tend to move towards much healthier diets. For instance, after Iranian government started to raise the costs of fast foods, tendency of those craving for hamburgers and processed food significantly reduced as a result. It, however, should be mentioned that this policy has forced a huge number of fast food chains out of business. Therefore, I reckon that a better solution can do less harm.
On the other hand, helping farmers and gardeners through mobilizing them financially to produce organic food, is thought to have a positive impact on consumers’ eating habits, since this policy enables them to purchase more quality produces less expensive. For example, intake of fresh vegetables and fruits has been rising among Americans since the official authorities scrambled to offer generous subsidies to agricultural land owners and sell their products more reasonably. Therefore, I am of this opinion that by implementing this plan, it is highly likely to observe people tending to change their diet to have more nutritious foods.
In conclusion, despite the fact that it is commonly believed that affordability of healthy food is possible through taxation, I strongly agree that the more suitable alternative to do so is to give subsidies to fruits and vegetables.
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I read another teacher guide band 9 essays and his structure was for the discuss both sides + opinion was to give your opinion in the conclusion and to avoid 'i agree' and instead use impersonal pronouns such as 'it's logical to conclude' or 'it seems to me that'. And for the 'to what extent you agree question' he said to write your opinion in the introduction and in the conclusion, in addition to add a concession paragraph as well
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Hi, can you provide some strategies for the writing section? Or any other videos to help. I am stuck at it.😥
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I have followed your videos for speaking and writing modules and acquired my required band 7 overall .
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Dear Asiya, thank you for your lessons! I still struggle with writing essays, but I will continue to watch your videos and practise.
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Just wanted to say thank you. Due to overload from work, I could only manage 3 days to prepare for my test, however, I was able to get 7. Not much though but it's enough.
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thank you Asiya.. Thanks to your videos are scored a band 7 on my first attempt. You examples help build my confidence in writing. I really appreciate you
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Thank you Asiya. Your video was the last a watched before entering the exam hall and luckily for me I got an essay with this same format in task 2
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Thanks Mam, for your descriptive writing with rational explanations at each and every step. Your essay is closely related to contemporary circumstances in my country. The autocratic as well as authoritarian ruler in my country has imposed taxation (GST) on healthy dairy products like milk,curd,flour etc. instead of imposing taxation on unhealthy soft drinks that can impair our bones surreptitiously and subtly. Mam, I belong to a poor family so that I am unable to buy your paid courses. Please mam, making more such kind of well informative essays with easy explications would not only help me a lot in learning English but also help millions of aspiring candidates to outreach and promulgate English language throughout the globe.
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The type of food we consume is one of the most important determinants of our health. Eating healthy foods, as opposed to unhealthy foods, is advantageous for our well being. There is however a debate regarding the kind of action the government should take. Should they subsidise fruits and vegetables to enable a large section of people to afford healthy food, or should there be a tax imposed on unhealthy food instead? In my opinion, both these actions should be pursued simultaneously.
Fruits and vegetables are some of the best known foods that people eat to maintain their health. However it has been observed in several places, for example, in India, that these are often too expensive for a part of society to purchase. As a result not many people eat these foods as frequently as they ought to for a healthy life. The government must subsidise these food items to make them more accessible to people. They can do so by providing agricultural material to the farmers at a lower cost. Another option could be to provide cheap transportation by rail directly from the farms to the cities, hence eliminating the enormous middlemen costs.
With regards to the view that the government shall tax unhealthy food, this is necessary in order to discourage people from consuming such items frequently. This can be an effective practice. For example, the government of India has keeps placing higher taxes on cigarettes, making them increasingly difficult to acquire regularly. Additionally, when someone views the government taxing an item, it could psychologically make them believe that the item in question is not ideal for their health, as the government deemed it appropriate to intervene.
To conclude, i believe that both the courses of action should take place at the same time. Subsidising fruits and vegetables and taxing unhealthy food will have a compounding effect of encouraging people to consume the healthier alternative on account of increased affordability of the former and the lack thereof of the latter.
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Hey Asiya, thanks a lot for the tips, got an overall score of 8.5 with an eight in writing.
Dang I should have watched your vid earlier, since today I encountered the 'to what extent do you agree" question on writing task. Of course it really different but your lecture is quite catchy.
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Hello. When writing agree and disagree question, should I write my essay acknowledging the other view? Or just write my essay giving my points without acknowledging the other side of the argument?
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Thanks a lot Asiya. I was really surprised when you concluded. What a nice suggestion, tax the toxic and subsidies good food. I have been watching your classes for last few weeks , these classes helped me very much . Very soon I am going to take IELTS .
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Some people believe that the government should reduce the taxation on the healthy foods while others believe that the government should tax the unhealthy foods. By reducing the taxation on the healthy foods govt. will make them available for the people to consume and by increasing taxation on unhealthy foods the government with make it difficult for the people to buy unhealthy foods and thus the consumption of unhealthy foods will be reduced.
I strongly believe that the government should reduce the taxation on the healthy foods because if the government reduces tax on the healthy foods it will be easy for the poor people to afford the healthy foods. There are people who hardly afford the basic necessities of the life and after the covid-19 the inflation has increased worldwide so it would be such a blessing for the poor people if the government reduces taxation on healthy foods and thus everyone will be able to buy fruits, vegetables and meat etc.
I personally believe that the taxation of unhealthy foods is a good idea because if the govt. taxes the unhealthy foods the demand of the unhealthy foods like carbonated drinks, sweets etc. and thus people will limit the consumption of unhealthy foods which is better for their health.
In conclusion, both views are good in their own way. Government should definitely reduce the tax on the healthy foods because it will be really helpful to the poor people who can hardly afford basic necessities and if the govt. increases taxation on unhealthy foods then it will result reduction of the consumption of the unhealthy foods which is an excellent step towards the formation of a healthy society.
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What about in a case where you don't understand the topic?
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Thank you for the video.. particularly this one as I used this as a reference to complete my writing task.. overall 8.5 and writing 8.. I’m glad I stumbled upon this video and your channel.. I’d recommend your videos to anyone who wants help with their writing.. thank you again.❤
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Some people believe that the government needs to make healthy foods less expensive, whereas other people believe that increasing the prices of unhealthy foods is a better option. However, I would argue that healthy foods are necessary for a good standard of living and increase the life expectancy of the masses.
First of all, those people, who agree with subsidising healthy products, could state that it would assist in curbing the number of diseases such as obesity and diabetes, which are major health challenges across the globe. In addition to the aforementioned food-related illnesses, some people might have a strong desire to be fit and active, however, due to the high prices of healthy food, they settle for the cost-effective and unhealthy alternative. For instance, an obese person may lose faith due to the high cost of maintaining a healthy lifestyle and buy fast food, which is high in trans fats and contains little to no vitamins. In my opinion, I would agree with this mindset as seems like the logical choice.
On the other hand, if the government places a tax on unhealthy food, it would reduce the number of consumers for these products and therefore help to keep citizens on the healthier side. Furthermore, lower-class citizens will be forced to opt for healthy foods due to financial reasons.
I believe that even though increasing the price of bad products might assist in reducing people from purchasing them, it might not stop people from purchasing these items and in turn cause most economic damage.
To conclude, the government should consider the high number of diseases related to fast food but putting a high price on them would not stop people from buying these products which would affect the average life-span of the citizens in the long run.
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Hi I have a question! When writing my opinion, do I need to agree with both views? Or can I write like this? In body1, write why I disagree with view 1 and in body2, write why I agree with view2 and in conclusion write that I agree with view 2and disagree with view1
Mam make video on comma rules
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There is a view by a percentage of people that fruits and vegetables should be made cheaper by government through tax as opposed to this view they advocate that unhealthy foods should be penalized by the administration. In my view a harmonious combination of both should be done.
On one side, we can point out, when we encourage healthy agricultural food the fitness level of individuals will be higher and their life expectancy might rise and it will also reduce hospital visitations with a decreased pressure on the health care system and they will be more focused on terminal health cases, while this may look like an optimal solution it is far from it as it will put burden on the budget which could be used in development projects which are critical to increasing overall living standards of citizens.
On the other hand, increasing the cost on unhealthy food will ease in making it seems less attractive to potential buyers and direct them to healthier alternatives, which looks like a win-win situation in contrast to this, it could discourage food industry all while increase in perception that the sought offer basics are becoming unaffordable to the common folks.
In conclusion, i strongly agree a bit of both should be done by collecting higher margin on unhealthy food then using that same amount to lower the healthy food products which neither puts pressure on funds and it is inversely is proportional which makes it work as per supply and demand of the market.
I have a question. I have talked about the second view too but have provided reason for why this option isn't wise. will that be okay or I have to talk in favor for both of them?
Hi, thanks for the video. Just a quick question - would it be alright to structure this type of task using 3 body paragraphs. Discussing the different views in paragraphs one and two and my opinion in a third paragraph?
Same question here
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Hello Asiya! I have a question. In the introduction part can we mention that the essay will talk about both views? Is it okay to mention only your opinion in the introduction? I feel like only mentioning your view and not mentioning that you will talk about both those views does not fully cover the essay topic.
there is a sentence in body pragraph 1 = "...... consumer LEAST ABLE TO seek better alternatives ..". could someone explain 'least able to '?
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Hi Asiya, I watched this video completely. It was a wonderful explanation as always. I have a question if you could explain it. Is the Body paragraph 1 and 2 are misplaced or you intentionally did this? If we go according to task, body paragraph 1 should be at 2nd place rather at first place. Please share your thoughts.
How many words in body paragraphs need in body paragraphs 1&2 ?
Hi Asiya! I have my IELTS exam in 2 weeks from now. Can you review one of my essays and give your comments on it? Please do let me know where can I send it to you. Thanks!
Do I have to choose between two options? What if I have another opinion like : In spite of the price, people tend to put appetite on the first line in deciding what meal to consume. What is paramount is to feed the citizen with knowledge both about damages the unhealthy food leave on them and the benefit they are going to receive by having a good food.
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Indeed, in many cases, what we really think is more complex. However, in IELTS Writing, you should only discuss the two given options. And it's much easier to justify a simple point of view too ;)
Sir in writing what will happen if we left one part or we have not able to complete on time like obviously we will do task 2 first and task 1 second, while doing task 2 we have taken lot of time for that only and there’s no much time left to complete task 1 at this time we should first complete the task 2 or leave and move on to task 1.
Hello Asiya, my speaking test was yesterday 19th July and I will be back to give a recap.
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Pls what was clue card?
I had my speaking test on the same date too, Hoping for the best
My cue question was "Tell me how you helped a child in the past"
@@joygana-tsado4473 A positive comment someone made about your work?
Who made the comment
What the person said
How it made you feel
Mam , can I start conclusion with, Having concluded ??
Don't we write counter argument in argumentative essay?
What happens if we failed to complete the conclusion after stating one point??
Hello mam
Can i use these structure in this topic?
Introduction
Body paragraph 1(1st view)
Body paragraph 2 (2nd view)
My opinion (writter's opinion)
Conclusion .
Please reply
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I would say that as a person who's going to take IELTS and is not a native speaker at all writing part seems almost impossible to achieve high score in. Although i know language good and wrote essays in English before, the way Writing is structured in this exam is extremely confused for me. Hope i'll get lucky with my writing topic 🤞
Please can you use furthermore without beginning a new paragraph?
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My Answer , Can you give some feedback
Health is a major concern when it comes to the well being of an individual. Thereby, an individual’s dietary components are a strong indicator of that person’s health. The government plays a significant role in the availability of healthy food items as its economic policies play an important role in the pricing of such food items. There are various views regarding the efforts that a government can make to influence the availability of healthy food items and thereby, these views should be scrutinized to ensure the availability of healthy foods to significant proportion of the masses.
One such view is that the government should subsidize fruits and vegetables to make healthy foods more affordable. The view is based on the premise that if healthy foods become more affordable then their consumption would increase among the masses. It is a basic assumption which will hold true if majority of people consume fruits and vegetables and would buy them more if those fruits and vegetables become affordable. However, in my opinion if majority of the people don’t consume fruits and vegetables then subsidizing those items will not have much of an effect.
The second view is that the government should tax unhealthy food items. By adopting such a measure, both the accessibility and availability of the unhealthy food items will affect their demands in the long run and consequently more people will shift in the direction of consuming healthy food items, serving the purpose intended. Thus , according to me heavy taxation of unhealthy food items would prove to be useful.
Thus, I believe that both the views have their intended effects of the purpose of promoting healthy foods but the second view of taxation of unhealthy food items by the government would be more useful in increasing the availability and demand of healthy foods , thereby promoting consumption of a healthy diet.
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I like your videos but if possible mention if theyre applicable for academic/general. This feels like its for general written.
but thankyou for these. Very helpful
Hi asiya . I got really good marks in Ielts coz of your videos .
Do you do pte teaching online also ? If yes , could you send me link or advise me which one is best in your opinion .
Thanks . Waiting for your response .
Or if it is possible I can make 5 paragraphs like
1)Introduction
2)Bp 1
3)Bp 2
4)My opinion
5)Conclusion
50 words each
Thanks for your great videos on the writing skills - I was able to follow the format and get a 7.5 in W ❣
R-9, L-9, S-8, W-7.5
no wayy. reading gets me all the time. cant even score more than 6.5.
Hi Asiya,in ukvi exam there is no option for paperbased exam . Where I am going to give.i think it is beneficial for writing as well as reading module but I'm worried about listening could you explain..about this and where I can practice. And please suggest something free because I m homemaker I don't have any job.it's reality. I would highly appreciate you if you answer me. Waiting for ur response. I achieve 6 overall band in general ielts that was paper based on 25 June. 5.5 ,5.5,6.5,6.5 respectively.
Recently I published a video about the computer-based test. Check it out. It has a link to the free online practice test too
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If imposing tax on unhealthy food & drinks can discourage people from buying them, how will the money be raised from the same.