Yale Grad Edits YOUR Common App Essays!!!
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- Опубліковано 26 лип 2024
- In this video, I'll be editing and rating two more of your common app essays (again)!!! Be sure to watch all the way through because the second essay is has tons of common mistakes that we can all learn from! Thanks so much for trusting me with your work! If you're curious to know when we'll be doing something like this again, be sure to SUBSCRIBE and keep an eye out on our community posts where we announce when we'll be doing free edits again!
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0:00 Intro
1:52 Common App #11
10:24 Common App #12
17:54 Rating Your Essays!
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Hi! We're Kevin and Jeffrey, two Yalies who want to help you get into your dream school!
About Kevin Zhen: Exeter '16, Yale '20 (East Asian Studies)
Since 2016, Kevin has personally helped more than 50+ students gain acceptances into every Ivy League University, as well as top tech schools such as Stanford and Georgia Tech. He also loves teaching creative nonfiction, flash fiction and poetry. In total, his students have won more than 120+ Scholastic Writing awards.
About Jeffrey Yu: Yale '23 (Computer Science and East Asian Studies)
Jeff is a senior at Yale double majoring in Computer Science and East Asian Studies with a concentration on China. His college admissions essay was featured in the New York Times, and he specializes in essay writing, college admissions strategy, and life coaching. He has served as a Student Ambassador to the Yale Admissions Office, written extensively about college admissions on Quora and has taught courses on motivation, passion, and leadership while sponsored by the US Embassy in Tokyo.
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I learned that you should try to avoid being vague and be more specific! :)
specificity == authenticity
The main thing I took away from this video was to be extremely specific and avoid vague language. I've definitely been working on that more than anything with my own essay but hearing it again (along with an example of what not to do) was a good reminder to read everything line by line again. Quick question though, have you ever read a true 10/10, or is that more of a "unicorn tier"?
I have to write about what only I can come up with! (and to subscribe)
Essays need to be unique; They need to be personal and include tangible details.
The legend is back!!! Yours truly!!!!!
adding details that are unique where only you can come up with is important and powerful!!
This is super helpful man
Love from india brother
You helped me very much in essays
Love you bro 😊
Hey Kevin, I absolutely love your work, brother. You've given me hope for my application. God bless you!!
Btw, when will you offer the free reviews that you promised if we like and comment on your pinned comments?
Super helpful video. Big up bro.
Big up
Tbh second essay felt like some AI generated essay
For sure especially that unwavering passion they love that 😂
Should the common app essay relate to my major?
I have a question. I have seen all these essays you've read and noticed that alot of them have a part where they make a point about some organization or something they've done the recent years. My essay doesn't have that, is it like super important to talk about an accomplishment that probably will already be in my activities section or maybe in a supplemental essay?
from what i have noticed, these accomplishments arent based on some organization or something, these are "self-accomplishments" - what they learnt, what they became and using such organisations they are describing or illustrating " how they accomplished certain values ". So yeah my take from this is that, present a moment from your life, point out what happened, how it happened, and what impact it had on u followed by how that event shaped you. Like mentioned in the video, using non--cliche words for values will be better than typical ones -"determination, work ethic, and etc" .
Wait this time you haven't posted for submitting the common app essays, i wanted to submit mine?
Probably because he was reviewing the essays that have been previously sent ..i appreciate that he is helping people ☺️ surely wouldn't be able to review all ..but still helping many through these vids
Is submitting grad school essays also an option?
Yes!
Be specific!!! As well as, don’t fall into the trap of cliches or repetition/stating the obvious.
Am I still eligible for free giveaway?