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The main thing I took away from this video was to be extremely specific and avoid vague language. I've definitely been working on that more than anything with my own essay but hearing it again (along with an example of what not to do) was a good reminder to read everything line by line again. Quick question though, have you ever read a true 10/10, or is that more of a "unicorn tier"?
Great to see an example of an essay where an overarching metaphor/motif works well! This is so hard to pull off, but I thought the first student did so really nicely.
The first student's essay reminded me of fun times I had debating with a friend about whether to say "8 minutes" or "10 minutes" in a piece of writing-goes to show that the meticulousness of editing really pays off and elevates a story!
Another helpful tip: avoid cliches especially "hardworking" and "work ethic!" Kevin's totally right, instead of outright claiming these qualities, demonstrate how they manifest in your life. Also, GOLD NUGGET: "write about you making things happen rather than about things happening to you!"
Hey Kevin, I absolutely love your work, brother. You've given me hope for my application. God bless you!! Btw, when will you offer the free reviews that you promised if we like and comment on your pinned comments?
Love how ElevatEd supports scholarship students and provides raffles/giveaways! Plus, the free feedback via UA-cam makes us all better writers (and editors)! 😄
I have a question. I have seen all these essays you've read and noticed that alot of them have a part where they make a point about some organization or something they've done the recent years. My essay doesn't have that, is it like super important to talk about an accomplishment that probably will already be in my activities section or maybe in a supplemental essay?
from what i have noticed, these accomplishments arent based on some organization or something, these are "self-accomplishments" - what they learnt, what they became and using such organisations they are describing or illustrating " how they accomplished certain values ". So yeah my take from this is that, present a moment from your life, point out what happened, how it happened, and what impact it had on u followed by how that event shaped you. Like mentioned in the video, using non--cliche words for values will be better than typical ones -"determination, work ethic, and etc" .
Probably because he was reviewing the essays that have been previously sent ..i appreciate that he is helping people ☺️ surely wouldn't be able to review all ..but still helping many through these vids
Hi everyone! It's been 4 years since we started this UA-cam channel + launched this agency to help kids get into colleges. So far, we've helped students gain more than 500+ acceptances to top U.S. colleges, including every Ivy League School, Stanford, MIT and more! If you'd like your essay reviewed by us, just visit our website! www.elevated.school/editmyessay
Dear virtual little siblings, for the next month (until Nov. 15th), we're handing out five FREE licenses to our 7.5 hr essay writing master class (originally $200)! We spent dozens of hours developing this course and I promise that if you think this content is helpful, that content will *absolutely* blow your mind! All you have to do participate in this lovely raffle is reply to this pinned comment with what you took away from this video! Wishing you the best of luck with college admissions and school beyond!
I learned that you should try to avoid being vague and be more specific! :)
specificity == authenticity
The main thing I took away from this video was to be extremely specific and avoid vague language. I've definitely been working on that more than anything with my own essay but hearing it again (along with an example of what not to do) was a good reminder to read everything line by line again. Quick question though, have you ever read a true 10/10, or is that more of a "unicorn tier"?
I have to write about what only I can come up with! (and to subscribe)
Essays need to be unique; They need to be personal and include tangible details.
It’s really nice to see, as a viewer, that you’re still liking comments more than a year later. Doesn’t go unnoticed!
Yes I am :)
Great to see an example of an essay where an overarching metaphor/motif works well! This is so hard to pull off, but I thought the first student did so really nicely.
The first student's essay reminded me of fun times I had debating with a friend about whether to say "8 minutes" or "10 minutes" in a piece of writing-goes to show that the meticulousness of editing really pays off and elevates a story!
Really cool to see how you emphasized even more action/solution in an already pretty solution--based essay!
So much VSPICE in that first essay! Great examples of how specificity of details and word choice can elevate an essay.
Love that you all are providing scholarships! Another great video!
I agree that the pirate essay was very unique! It’s cool to see an essay where a symbol/motif actually works!
adding details that are unique where only you can come up with is important and powerful!!
Great feedback, Kevin!
Another helpful tip: avoid cliches especially "hardworking" and "work ethic!" Kevin's totally right, instead of outright claiming these qualities, demonstrate how they manifest in your life. Also, GOLD NUGGET: "write about you making things happen rather than about things happening to you!"
The legend is back!!! Yours truly!!!!!
I am also a huge fan of the opening "pirate" line! 👏🏴☠
This is awesome!
Awesome content!
Very informative!
Super helpful!
Love this!
Love from india brother
You helped me very much in essays
Love you bro 😊
Super helpful video. Big up bro.
Big up
This is super helpful man
Hey Kevin, I absolutely love your work, brother. You've given me hope for my application. God bless you!!
Btw, when will you offer the free reviews that you promised if we like and comment on your pinned comments?
Love how ElevatEd supports scholarship students and provides raffles/giveaways! Plus, the free feedback via UA-cam makes us all better writers (and editors)! 😄
Should the common app essay relate to my major?
thankyou❤
You're welcome!
Tbh second essay felt like some AI generated essay
For sure especially that unwavering passion they love that 😂
I have a question. I have seen all these essays you've read and noticed that alot of them have a part where they make a point about some organization or something they've done the recent years. My essay doesn't have that, is it like super important to talk about an accomplishment that probably will already be in my activities section or maybe in a supplemental essay?
from what i have noticed, these accomplishments arent based on some organization or something, these are "self-accomplishments" - what they learnt, what they became and using such organisations they are describing or illustrating " how they accomplished certain values ". So yeah my take from this is that, present a moment from your life, point out what happened, how it happened, and what impact it had on u followed by how that event shaped you. Like mentioned in the video, using non--cliche words for values will be better than typical ones -"determination, work ethic, and etc" .
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where can i find Eleveted rating
Here it is! docs.google.com/document/d/1OwMn1stiiTYa7mfcd8TyQelO4RvlCjpmILU0yt3Hk4c/edit#heading=h.k0us0raxnhq7
Wait this time you haven't posted for submitting the common app essays, i wanted to submit mine?
Probably because he was reviewing the essays that have been previously sent ..i appreciate that he is helping people ☺️ surely wouldn't be able to review all ..but still helping many through these vids
Am I still eligible for free giveaway?
Is submitting grad school essays also an option?
Yes!
Be specific!!! As well as, don’t fall into the trap of cliches or repetition/stating the obvious.