Twilight: We have to speak to somepony with authority! Me: Yes! Yes! Get Lun-- Twilight: Mayor Mare! Me: -* facepalms* Damit Twilight get LUNA!!!!!!!!!
+Invader Batflight "He's right behind you girl! Get out of the house!" Always a fun element of slashers. The audience knowing what to do but the victims still making bad decisions.
WHY CANT YOU WRITE A LETTER TO PRINCESS CELESTIA?! Dear Princess Celestia, EVERYTHING IS AWFUL! EVERYPONY IS GOING TO DIE!!! THE CANDY MARE IS BACK AND IS GOING TO KILL EVERYPONY NIGHTMARE MOON'S STATUE DIDNT WORK! APPLEBLOOM AND APPLEJACK IS DEAD! NUKE THE TOWN! AAAAUUUGGGGHHHH!!!! -sincerely, your faithful student Twilight Sparkle
+creepy kitty To My Faithful Student Twilight Sparkle. You know I value your diligence, and that I trust you completely! But you simply must stop smoking that chronic! Princessly Yours, Princess '420blazeit' Celestia
Mephisto Knackerman Dear Pricess '420blazeit' Celestia, BITCH YOU CRAZY. STOP GOSSIPING WITH CADENCE. AND GET PRINCESS LUNAS ASS DOWN HERE TO FIX THIS SHIT. -sincerely, your faithful student Twilight Sparkle
Nightmare night, What a fright. Give us something sweet to bite. Poison, drowning, claw or knife. So many ways to take your life. Honestly that's a catchy tune if you'd like to scare others
It was because he had dropped them off in that neighborhood. If he'd let them trick or treat in the rich neighborhood like they'd originally intended then they wouldn't have encountered the candy mare. It was a sarcastic thanks, blaming him for what was happening to her and Silver Spoon.
Dear princess celestia today I learned that you should not fuck with old candy from ancient books or all hell will break loose there here and they got spike good thing i got that minigun
After Pinkie Pie shattered the Candy Mare's skull, Twilight should've ordered everyone to collect all the pieces and put them in separate containers so that she couldn't reform her body.
@@peleanimationcomics3263yeah, it's one thing that justifies my nostalgia for this story though. It isn't outlandish to think that the actions they took here were simply corrupted by fear and yet they still did what seemed as logical as they could imagine. It just wasn't enough.
Gonna be honestly. I feel like this fic is special in the fact that, aside from the blood and death, this reads like an episode. Having the small jokes about twilights costume and explaining some of the characters movements in cartoony ways makes it visualize like an episode of the actual show. And of you replaced the murder and such with some sort of freezing of ponies it almost seems possible to have happened in the show itself as a two parter.
+I Epp Nah. Plenty of people have expressed the desire to see it animated, at the very least. While I'd be thrilled if it were to happen, I don't know anyone with the chops to do it who has expressed an interest.
@@mephistoknackerman1406 Tell me something, dear author:was this story of yours at all inspired by the 1992 _Candyman_ movie? I'd REALLY like to know. :3.
WHY DOES FRESH FOLLOW ME EVERYWHERE I GO SCROLLING THROUGH YEARS OLD COMMENTS ON AN MLP STORY AND THERE I SEE, AN UNDERFRESH PROFILE PICTURE WHYYY am I just haunted by this character
I am a firm believer that a good horror story with '80's' sensibilities shouldn't just kill off beloved characters, but hated ones as well. Which isn't to say I necessarily hate DT and SS, but I did go out of my way to make them extra abrasive in this story just to deliver this pay off. I want to please the little monster that lives in the audiences heart, even as other things in the story happen that will make them cringe. So you're not a bad pony, you just reacted the way I hoped you would.
You're not horrible pony...truth be told, mate, I think everyone who hated Diamond Tiara and Sliver Spoon would be getting real kick out that part from 10:20 to 13:20. >=3
Mephisto Knackerman I say it was good judgement on your part, mate, many fanfic writers tend to hesitate killing off fan favorite characters and just kill off the hated characters. Which kinda shows that your stories don't show any sort of favoritism or pulling your punches. I also like the fact that you pick when you're going to show a lot of blood and gore when it calls for it. =3
The Candy Mare is like my friend in real life 😂 • Literally addicted to candy • Will literally murder anyone who takes her candy (well, beat them up, not kill) • Gets extremely moody without her candy
Nightmare night What a fright Give me something sweet to bite If you don't I won't care I will show you some real fear When you run And you cry I will follow through the night Once im done You will see The deaths your friends got from me Edit: also "a snicker spread over her face".... P u n I n t E n d e d?
I remember watching this a day after it came out, and just...losing my shit at night, just getting terrified over such an odd story. The anticipation between parts was killing me, but it brought up a lot of childhood trauma at points of just a nightmare of tiny little imps dragging me away, before breaking my bones, and feasting upon me while I was still alive. Now, it puts me on edge, but doesn't keep me up at night.
Pro: This story is very detailed and has good description. Additionally, the writer did good at keeping ponies in character. Some more annoying than others. But still, I didn't like how Twilight decided on Mayor Mare. Why not Princess Luna? Twily, how could you be so incompetent? Sweet Celestia, I'm beginning to sound like Firebrand. Con: Some imagery I'd better off without.
I... will never look at candy the same way. Nor will I go Trick r' Treating without giving up some candy. Also, I will never eat candy without making the giver eat it first. And moreover, this is a great story if I am getting goosebumps and can't stop chanting the song, and can't help flinching during the gore.... Applause to both of you.
So uh, is Rarity deaf, or is she in there blasting music at full volume? I mean, those screams from Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon were loud enough to wake the dead!
Hold it, am I the only one who thinks the candy made looks like an amalgamation of pinkamina and Fluttershy? It’s like their own little bundle of horror made out of candy.
9 years later coming back into MLP horror and no one still hasnt animated this masterpiece. 😭😭 I would do it, but i dont have the supplies or time anymore.
Also probably not the best idea to go get help from Mayor Mare. I know she’s the mayor of Ponyville and all, but Celestia or Luna along with a couple of Royal Guards would’ve been better help.
oh .. my...sweet luna ! that was just Amazing ! Geez the reading, maybe a little too fast in the first part, was totally amazing ! as the voice actor's play ! and the arrangement went just perfectly too ! Really congratulation on doing this job !
Am I the only one who wants the candy mare as a pet? I don't know why though I just think she's so pretty. This story sent creeps down my spine but this was the best story I've ever heard.
Billy: MOM READ MEH A STORY!! MAKE IT SCARY! Me:you sure? Billy:YES Me: ok *later that night* Me: OoOOOooOoOOOoooOOoOo CaNdY! Billy: *takes candy. gets hammer.smashes candy. Burns it* Billy: *holds something* OUT OF THIS HOUSE! OUT OF THIS HOUSE!
Very scary, Good story.....I can feel the pain the fillies have when they die i dont know why but, i cant stop watching. PLZ, make more stories like this. I LOVE IT
As great as the story is, there are some questionable points. My main gripe is this: why didn't Twilight and Pinkie get in touch with bloody Luna?! They know she was the one who stopped the Candy Mare!
This is an absolutely amazing story, literally sends shivers down my spine. But it's quite predictable and requires some serious suspension of disbelief. I mean they eat the candy, really, at least Twilight and Pinkie should know better than that. Also I get that Pinkie was panicking, but it seemed like Twilight didn't try all that hard in her heraldings, or with the deathly seriousness such a situation would prompt.If I were forewarning unspeakable horror, you would bloody know I meant business. Additionally she went to the minor character mare who she knew would not believe her, instead of the creatures that already resolved this situation once before and with whom she shares a bond. I could buy one of these, especially with panic and magic afoot, but it does seem like these contrivances exist only to facilitate the plot. The delivery was superb and as I said despite these niggles the story was pretty bloody great. I know I've said little of the former, but the only critique I could even fathom is that at points I could not tell what the candy mare was saying. I'm not even going to read ahead on my own, I've just subbed and I eagerly wait the continuation of this haunting experience.
Going to Mayor Mare wasn't to stop the Candy Mare, but to limit the amount of victims. In an emergency situation ,you're right, you would likely call the authorities first (in this case Celestia and Luna) but Twilight thought it would be better to convince the local authorities to act before summoning help from afar. (Bare in mind, Twilight still has her doubts about this whole thing, so to her it might not be serious enough to involve the Princess's just yet.) The problem neither you nor she banked on was just how quickly the Candy Mare acted in attacking Ponyville and just how powerful she actually was. The old legends paint her up to be a deadly trickster, not a force of murderous nature. She's actually behaving in a fashion that even Pinkie Pie wouldn't have fathomed. I won't go into detail as to why that is, but it's covered in the sequel, "Something Sweet to Bite Too". As to the decision to eat the candy to get rid of it, nowhere is it stated that eating the candy is deadly in and of itself. Lemon Drops experiments were culinary in nature, but they were primarily magical. The treats the Candy Mare's 'body' is composed of may be of an ancient recipe, but there's nothing inherently magical about them. They were made by Scootaloo and Applebloom for the most part. Having said all that if you've already predicted what happens next, I'm not surprised, as it's telegraphed pretty hard in Fluttershy's scene back in part two. Glad you're enjoying the story despite its flaws.
Luna knows if Candy Mare is real, and could probably swiftly discern it's freedom, she also has the authority to impose a lockdown, this especially makes more sense if you're unsure as Luna owes her and trusts her, at least when compared to running into a crowd and yelling death. Additionally, based on the fable I think it would make more sense for everyone to stick together, then hide alone in the dark. This Princess method also works better with more time, as it's less direct and supports affirmation and an informed response (as I said her response is still believable, it just weighs a little in context with other decisions. She will have to go to the sisters either way, though there is a specious logic to working your way up I will admit). As for the candy, they know how these creatures are created, twilight knows of the recipe used and as for magic by whom it was possessed and possibly remade in it's feasting. This is not a despite situation. This is the best review I can give, my only qualms thus far have been nitpicks only one of which (the eating,) is on it's own even valid and all of which can be somewhat justified. This may not have been clear in my somewhat dissonant initial post of, I love your story, rant incoming. My natural inclination is to asses, but you did everything else to such a standard that it didn't make sense to list it all, so I umbrellad it under an I love your story and assumed you'd decipher that somehow. Though three things do jump especially to mind, the dark fairy tale old world motif, the tone and the pacing.
Oh I get that you love the story. And we always kill our darlings. You can;t help but discern the imperfections in something dearly loved, for they are glaring against the perfection of the whole. Something special that I'm afraid I never touched on in either story was that Luna was only able to silence the Candy Mare with nightmares. It was her abilities as a blossoming Nightmare Moon that allowed her to take down the Candy Mare. Her abilities and her powers are thus truncated after her purification by the Elements of Harmony. I'm not saying Twilight made the right decision, but there were many bad decisions that lead to the Candy Mares resurrection, and this isn't even the most glaring. As to 'how these creatures are created' the Candy Mare is one of a kind at this point in the story. They don't know that there are any others or that there is even a method to their creation. The Candy Mare is a freak, an accident, and in truth she remains so even after what happens next. (again a lot of this is explained further in the sequel.) Don't think I mistake your criticism for distaste, I merely seek to clarify both the thinking of the characters within the context of this story and a few items of knowledge that are readily available to the audience but lost on these poor little ponies.
Terra Smith The spirit of the Candy Mare is active due to Luna losing her dark powers as Nightmare Moon as much as to the CMC making the cursed candy. The candy just gave her a vessel to inhabit and sped up her return. So yes, even if they had burned the candy or dumped it in acid or whatever, since she was already active it is possible she could have taken another body by force. Though I will say in her initial weakened condition she wouldn't have been able to take over a living pony, probably only the recently deceased or a distant relative.
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Twilight: We have to speak to somepony with authority!
Me: Yes! Yes! Get Lun--
Twilight: Mayor Mare!
Me: -* facepalms* Damit Twilight get LUNA!!!!!!!!!
+Invader Batflight "He's right behind you girl! Get out of the house!" Always a fun element of slashers. The audience knowing what to do but the victims still making bad decisions.
I know!!!! I mean come on
Invader I agree with u. GET FREAKING LUNA!!!!!!
+xX346ClanGaming Xx or Celestica
yeah could be anyone of them
WHY CANT YOU WRITE A LETTER TO PRINCESS CELESTIA?!
Dear Princess Celestia,
EVERYTHING IS AWFUL! EVERYPONY IS GOING TO DIE!!! THE CANDY MARE IS BACK AND IS GOING TO KILL EVERYPONY NIGHTMARE MOON'S STATUE DIDNT WORK! APPLEBLOOM AND APPLEJACK IS DEAD! NUKE THE TOWN! AAAAUUUGGGGHHHH!!!!
-sincerely, your faithful student Twilight Sparkle
+creepy kitty
To My Faithful Student Twilight Sparkle.
You know I value your diligence, and that I trust you completely!
But you simply must stop smoking that chronic!
Princessly Yours,
Princess '420blazeit' Celestia
Mephisto Knackerman Dear Pricess '420blazeit' Celestia,
BITCH YOU CRAZY. STOP GOSSIPING WITH CADENCE. AND GET PRINCESS LUNAS ASS DOWN HERE TO FIX THIS SHIT.
-sincerely, your faithful student Twilight Sparkle
+creepy kitty you are crazy crash robot sent to take over UA-cam
Laura Richardson you know too much
These comments have made my day. XD
Sobbing and eating? That's not gruesome. That's my weekend.
:)
Lel
Mine Too!
I rarely laugh at a comment. This...this...this is amazing.
And it's true!
Now that's a real panic at the disco.
That pun... oh my god
The blood is on the dance floor
YES A SINNER IS HERE!
Y e s
XD
Nightmare night,
What a fright.
Give us something sweet to bite.
Poison, drowning,
claw or knife.
So many ways to take your life.
Honestly that's a catchy tune if you'd like to scare others
Ashley W I told my grandma this and it almost gave her a heart attack but I couldn't stop laughing at her reaction though! She was terrified! Lol!
@@myrtlejones28 not really funny but alright..
@Myrtle Jones That's kinda.. Ehh..
@Sarah Smith you are not nice
Someone please make a full version of this :D
So wait... You're being murdered... And your final thought is...
"Thanks, Daddy!" ?!?
Jesus, this kid has her priorities out of order! 😂
To quote Ronald Weasley "she needs to sort out her priorities"
It was because he had dropped them off in that neighborhood. If he'd let them trick or treat in the rich neighborhood like they'd originally intended then they wouldn't have encountered the candy mare. It was a sarcastic thanks, blaming him for what was happening to her and Silver Spoon.
Oh my goodness ... the sound effects on this one are particularly, magnificently GRUESOME!
Someone enjoyed hearing them. ^^
omg this is to much
Tali Prower what
Agree They are indeed AWESOME and I think that they were the scariest part about the whole thing.Awesome job. :)
+Commander Stupid WERE THE SATANIC GEMS BATTLE CRY THE SATANIC GEMS BATTLE CRY ..CHARGE
Dear Princess Celestia
sHIT IS GOING DOWN OHMYGOD
lol
\
Chihiro Fujisaki
_Dear Princess Celestia_
Today I learnt that pur town is officially *fucked*.
From your faithful student,
~Twilight Sparkle~
Dear princess celestia
today I learned that you should not fuck with old candy from ancient books or all hell will break loose
there here and they got spike good thing i got that minigun
lol
@@sonofcthulu8772
Dear Princess Celestia
Today i learned we are all fucked.
From your dear student, twilight~
Hehehe this one was great! 4:41 Dat Pinkie rage though ;)
Magpiepony I LOVE YOUR UA-cam CHANNEL SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Lmao ikr?
LMAO Hi I'm a really big fan :DD
Hi Magpiepiny ! By the way when will the next ep of “Princess Trixie sparkle” come out?
After Pinkie Pie shattered the Candy Mare's skull, Twilight should've ordered everyone to collect all the pieces and put them in separate containers so that she couldn't reform her body.
That and add the “kill it with fire” by literally just tossing it all into lava!!
@@peleanimationcomics3263yeah, it's one thing that justifies my nostalgia for this story though. It isn't outlandish to think that the actions they took here were simply corrupted by fear and yet they still did what seemed as logical as they could imagine. It just wasn't enough.
*_Am I the only one who felt bad for Pipsqueak? Jesus, his death was so detailed. ;-;_*
Tɪɴʏ Eᴇᴠᴇᴇ your not alone pipsqueak was so innocent
Tɪɴʏ Eᴇᴠᴇᴇ - mhm ;-;
R.I.P pip
+Tamara Jade whot doses lkr mean?
Tɪɴʏ Eᴇᴠᴇᴇ it explains his lack of presence on the show
I wonder how many victims thought "they should have listened" before they died.
watching this at 12am wish me luck
try watching this at 1:54 am bud
Scary stories in the middle of the night are the best!
Chillbot17 until you try to go to sleep
especially when you try to sleep
Pinkie was so boss when she said "There's only one way to get rid of candy."
And started EATING the candy! That's OP!
Gonna be honestly. I feel like this fic is special in the fact that, aside from the blood and death, this reads like an episode. Having the small jokes about twilights costume and explaining some of the characters movements in cartoony ways makes it visualize like an episode of the actual show. And of you replaced the murder and such with some sort of freezing of ponies it almost seems possible to have happened in the show itself as a two parter.
the non srs stuff like the silly jokes rlly makes the srs stuff m ore impactful
Yeah!! It would’ve been really cool to see this fic as actually episodes of the series! Minus the…gore and death, of course haha
for real!! the fanfic stays so true to the show it creates a whole different kind of unsettling altogether😭😭
I love the fact that at 17:10 DJ-Pon3 started playing Rainbow Factory. XD
XD
Really?
She also played nightmare night before that. I'm just kind of upset the person who made this video forgot to credit him
+Draxxlie She did in the ending.
+Josh Garcia ahh I see now. Still, a link in the description would be nice
"Thanks, Daddy!" XD that killed it
Ikr
Omg XD
Now you know that Diamond Tiara's dad gives no shit about her
I KNOW RIGHT 😃😂😆
No, the candymare killed it
i love how after all the death that just happened outside rarity's house rarity just comes outside like "oh sorry that took so long" XD
" In the last moment before she was ripped to pieces, she couldn’t help but think, “Thanks daddy.”"
LEL
"There's only one way to get rid of candy on nightmare night"
Pinkie. PINKIE. FACKING BURN IT! IT'S HAUNTED CANDY
I don't know Why, but as I'm listening to this, I'm imagining the candy mare saying: "WHO'S THE CANDY NOW, B!TCHES?"
SEND A FRICKING LETTER TO CELESTIA TWILIGHT! DAMN!
lol that's what I've been thinking all along.
+Sour Note Well she doesnt have spike with him at the time and besides he wont belive anyways
+Epicsyincs He believed you could explode twice..... He would send a letter -_-
that was on the mlp seris ...
Epicsyincs Which this is based off, saying he would never believe her makes no sense.
I hope someone make an animation to this. That would too cool.
Let's see the two butthead get torn to death
Yeah that would be cool
+Michaela Romuar
Yeah
Midnight Stitch I'm working on it
Cyril Smith VA Cool, m8. Put Link in this Comment Section when your Done, Plz.
This fan fic is fucked up!
But the way dimand tiara and silver spoon died was really funny 😄
Wow I'm really horrible 😢
But still funny, right? 😅
Super funny.
Yay i'm not horrible 😄
i laughed when dt's last thoughts were "thanks daddy" in that sarcastic voice XD
Every death so far was really funny
Martin Junior No it's not funny to see young ones die!
Is it bad I want this turned into a movie
+I Epp Nah. Plenty of people have expressed the desire to see it animated, at the very least. While I'd be thrilled if it were to happen, I don't know anyone with the chops to do it who has expressed an interest.
two things 1. holy shit I've never talked to an auther of my any of my favorite stories. 2. ok good, I'm glad I'm not the only one.
Candy Mare now in blue now in DVD
@@mephistoknackerman1406 Tell me something, dear author:was this story of yours at all inspired by the 1992 _Candyman_ movie? I'd REALLY like to know. :3.
Not at all, that would be pretty epic ngl 😳
10:26 looks like SOMEONE needs a snicker... let me tell you. You are not you when your hungry....
but she's always hungry.
Imaginland YEP THAT MEANS SHE WILL NEVER BE SATISFIED
What Spike Really Meant at 5:12
Spike: Hey Twilight, I'm gonna go Snort Cocaine and do Heroin. Some Pony's stole my Drugs from Me. XDXDXDXDXD
17:50 I love how you changed the music to rainbow factory, that was a nice touch and a fun nod to another popular mlp creepypasta
Do you know which remix it is? I can't find it
@@absollnk
Mush remix, likely the instrumental version used in the video
29:46 Listen very closely and you can hear a Skype noise.
I'm no brony, but this is freaking awesome!
+Jamespapi92x Never thought I'd get that reaction... Kudos!
^^; Hehe. I'm just a big fan of horror.
NO DON'T EAT THAT!!
I saw this right as I was at that point...
anyone else felt satisfied at diamond tiara and silver spoons death?
yea moi
Kentucky Wildcat me
Favorite part m8
Kentucky Wildcat yeah a little because they sorta deserved
Every death so far made me feel satisfied ^^
I just ate dinner......now its gone
Lol
In the toilet?
*gone , reduced to atoms*
Are you okay?
This is why I keep a bat under my bed on Halloween.
Better be safe than sorry.
WHY DOES FRESH FOLLOW ME EVERYWHERE I GO
SCROLLING THROUGH YEARS OLD COMMENTS ON AN MLP STORY AND THERE I SEE, AN UNDERFRESH PROFILE PICTURE
WHYYY am I just haunted by this character
I thought of the animal bat im sorry
@@wh1tevo1d90 mood
I really loved the candymare drawing at the end, it really felt like she was an actual pony not a monster.
Welp, I know what I'M going to be this Halloween!
Heheheh...
Scared... I'm going to be scared and hiding...
Move over, Fluttershy! >.
I feel so bad for them, they had to eat all that black licorice.
Hopefully the blood masked the taste a little.
L
O
L
But it doesn't taste that bad XC it taste decent
I like black licorice. 😛
@@BloodyBatter what kind of monster are you no one likes black licyrsh!
Dear god, this is what I call good horror writing
That one filly during the carnage:"Duuude that is awesome!"
am I the only one to think that Candy Mare is kinda cute?
no. i love her design!
Havokman 48 no she is scary but cute
no you're not
she's pretty cute
She's adorable!
Ｏ(≧∇≦)Ｏ
You guys are nuts
10:20-13:20 I was actually laughing out loud during this part.....
I'm a horrible person...
I am a firm believer that a good horror story with '80's' sensibilities shouldn't just kill off beloved characters, but hated ones as well. Which isn't to say I necessarily hate DT and SS, but I did go out of my way to make them extra abrasive in this story just to deliver this pay off. I want to please the little monster that lives in the audiences heart, even as other things in the story happen that will make them cringe.
So you're not a bad pony, you just reacted the way I hoped you would.
Mother of Celestia, your the Candy Mare!!!
You're not horrible pony...truth be told, mate, I think everyone who hated Diamond Tiara and Sliver Spoon would be getting real kick out that part from 10:20 to 13:20. >=3
Mephisto Knackerman I say it was good judgement on your part, mate, many fanfic writers tend to hesitate killing off fan favorite characters and just kill off the hated characters. Which kinda shows that your stories don't show any sort of favoritism or pulling your punches. I also like the fact that you pick when you're going to show a lot of blood and gore when it calls for it. =3
Luminous Brony yes you are
Dear princess celestia today I learned not to mess with anything, anyone, and not to be stupid if I live in your world. ^_^"
The deaths of Tiara and Silver were the most satisfying screams I have ever heard.
Twilight and Scootaloo sounded really good, color me impressed!
"nightmare night what a fright, give us something sweet to bite, poison, drowning, claws or knife so many ways to take your life."
When I heard the story describing the candy filly when diamond tiara and silver spoon saw it, I immediately said "THEY ARE GONNA DIE!"
Can I say...when the”burnt rubber smell” was spoken....I SMELT ACTUAL BURNT TIRE RUBBER!
love the dance party music.
its in the past so u wont last without the proper care!
with a royal farewell and an animate spell you won't have long to prepare
Noice
**beat drop**
@@trashrat7416 you just brought back so many memories omg. i forgot this video even existed 🥺🥺
The Candy Mare is like my friend in real life 😂
• Literally addicted to candy
• Will literally murder anyone who takes her candy (well, beat them up, not kill)
• Gets extremely moody without her candy
29:47 Magpie got a Skype notification XD
Nightmare night
What a fright
Give me something sweet to bite
If you don't
I won't care
I will show you some real fear
When you run
And you cry
I will follow through the night
Once im done
You will see
The deaths your friends got from me
Edit: also "a snicker spread over her face"....
P u n
I n t E n d e d?
Yum snickers
You're not you when your hungry
“She knew she was too young and rich to die”
is it wrong to be ok with dimond tiara and silver spoon death those devils deserve it
I remember watching this a day after it came out, and just...losing my shit at night, just getting terrified over such an odd story. The anticipation between parts was killing me, but it brought up a lot of childhood trauma at points of just a nightmare of tiny little imps dragging me away, before breaking my bones, and feasting upon me while I was still alive. Now, it puts me on edge, but doesn't keep me up at night.
The "thanks daddy" part got me
Pro: This story is very detailed and has good description. Additionally, the writer did good at keeping ponies in character. Some more annoying than others. But still, I didn't like how Twilight decided on Mayor Mare. Why not Princess Luna? Twily, how could you be so incompetent? Sweet Celestia, I'm beginning to sound like Firebrand.
Con: Some imagery I'd better off without.
I... will never look at candy the same way. Nor will I go Trick r' Treating without giving up some candy. Also, I will never eat candy without making the giver eat it first. And moreover, this is a great story if I am getting goosebumps and can't stop chanting the song, and can't help flinching during the gore.... Applause to both of you.
So uh, is Rarity deaf, or is she in there blasting music at full volume?
I mean, those screams from Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon were loud enough to wake the dead!
R.I.P
Pipsqueak
He was my fav lil’ colt.
R.i.p
Serves you two right Diamond Tiara and Silverspoon. You always bullied the CMC and is so selfish and act like you're better than everyone else.
I guess Twilight Sparkle has to deal with stupid ponies too.
But they became nice
yes but when you are trying to tell them that you are in danger and they dont listen to you?
You knew that the moment they entered this story they would be dead, it was just a matter of when and how.
Tsuzuki Song True but it's bitter sweet as on of the CMC (Applebloom) died :,(
diamond tiara's death satisifed me but her last thought was hilarious 😂😂 *thanks daddy!* XD
Candy mare: kills Diamond Tiara
Me: is that a typewriter sound effect?
It’s so...gory....I’m gonna throw up!
I can't wait for the sequel I wanna hear what Luna does if she beats the candy mare or if equestria ever goes back to normal
This story and the sequels, and prequel are on FIMfiction, i just learned about the prequel
Obligatory first. Glad to see this made it up!
I see some one took a personal liking to this fick nice profile pick or is that just a "sweet" coincidence
LanceTheAutobot He;s the author :3
*****:P figures I never pay that much attention to names sorry bro (cool fick )
LanceTheAutobot
No need for apologies. Glad you like the story.
I can definitely tell your skill in writing scary/gory/horror stories. Well done bro.
"Well, there's only way to get rid of candy on Nightmare Night," pulls out a vacuum
That squishing and crunching sounds!
Diamond Tiara's lost words got me burst into laughter!! XD "Thanks Daddy!" Best story ever!
I love the detail of "Nightmare night" song in the background of the disco scene
this is nothing short of stunning. this is so well written, this is just amazing, I love it!
Hold it, am I the only one who thinks the candy made looks like an amalgamation of pinkamina and Fluttershy? It’s like their own little bundle of horror made out of candy.
I wonder how the Candymare would react if someone just took a flamethrower to its sugary face
I hope Luna comes to help out. Maybe she’ll be the true hero to stop the Candymare.
9 years later coming back into MLP horror and no one still hasnt animated this masterpiece. 😭😭 I would do it, but i dont have the supplies or time anymore.
same 😭😭
My favorite parts were the flashbacks.
blood on the dance floor seems appropriate for this episode.
Yep XD
Wow Dimond tiaras last thoughts were "thanks daddy 🙄" a spoiled brat until the end.
Really coming along, Kagome. The sounds really amplified the terror and horror of the story.
Holy fuck this is dark, and it keeps getting darker. Cupcakes ain't got shit on this fanfic. Damn.
Also probably not the best idea to go get help from Mayor Mare. I know she’s the mayor of Ponyville and all, but Celestia or Luna along with a couple of Royal Guards would’ve been better help.
Great chapter c: Narration is totes perf. Excellent choice in SFX and moosics too.
Man, Nightmare Night times were SCAAAARY!
oh .. my...sweet luna ! that was just Amazing ! Geez the reading, maybe a little too fast in the first part, was totally amazing ! as the voice actor's play ! and the arrangement went just perfectly too !
Really congratulation on doing this job !
Well then... Diamond tiara and silver spoons death was the most satisfyingly wonderful thing I have heard in awhile
WELL HOLY HELL WHAT THE FUCK IS THIS IM LIKING THIS AND IT MADE ME PUKE ALL OVER MY COMPUTER
burito spider Probably the best compliment one can hope for right there for a gorefic.
Am I the only one who wants the candy mare as a pet? I don't know why though I just think she's so pretty. This story sent creeps down my spine but this was the best story I've ever heard.
WHAT WHY WTF ?
+FnafMinecraftAphmau fangirl i don't really know.... I just think she is cute plus I drool over Halloween stuff...
I want her as a pet too, just if she tried to eat me I would grab a spray bottle full of water and spray her while saying bad
+ally midnight ahaha me too!
You could do the evil chair spin while stroking a pet
Billy: MOM READ MEH A STORY!! MAKE IT SCARY!
Me:you sure?
Billy:YES
Me: ok
*later that night*
Me: OoOOOooOoOOOoooOOoOo CaNdY!
Billy: *takes candy. gets hammer.smashes candy. Burns it*
Billy: *holds something* OUT OF THIS HOUSE! OUT OF THIS HOUSE!
Lesson learned for SP and DT, never make fun of Candy Mare
The voice and tone of Diamond Tiara and Silver spoons make me want to punch them into the Moon myself
That’s cool I noticed ‘This is Halloween’ playing in the background for Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon’s moment.
Very scary, Good story.....I can feel the pain the fillies have when they die i dont know why but, i cant stop watching. PLZ, make more stories like this. I LOVE IT
guys this almost killed the candymare but she was smart enough to activate her back up plan before her main plan failing
As great as the story is, there are some questionable points.
My main gripe is this: why didn't Twilight and Pinkie get in touch with bloody Luna?! They know she was the one who stopped the Candy Mare!
Horror story, characters make dumb decisions. Also Twilight kind of underestimated the threat.
I heard that "DJ Pon3" was playing "Nightmare Night" by tlt! instant subscribe
Thank you!
Awwww they killed lil Pip ;~; He's my favorite
+Zoe The Ducat What can I say? Being sealed away for a thousand years, one gets a bit peckish.
I started smiling and laughing wheen Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon died... :)
O_O
What if the candy mere is just pinkiemena using the origin of candy meres story to do her evil doings she originally did with an excuse. 🤷🏽♀️
What if Candy Mare became the new SCP
👁️👄👁️
That burp made me laugh so hard I cried!! XD
I wish mlp would make this a movie or episode
Of course lets make a episode of this which will be shown on a kids show
This story kept me awake all night, *clapping* Bravo, magnificence, your story so amazing I keep listening to it, I love your scary story.*applauding*
+lightningstrike2419 *bows*
*bows* your story deserves this
+Mephisto Knackerman this should get a newberry award or something.
13:03 “ThAnKs DaDdY” got me rolling
This is an absolutely amazing story, literally sends shivers down my spine. But it's quite predictable and requires some serious suspension of disbelief.
I mean they eat the candy, really, at least Twilight and Pinkie should know better than that. Also I get that Pinkie was panicking, but it seemed like Twilight didn't try all that hard in her heraldings, or with the deathly seriousness such a situation would prompt.If I were forewarning unspeakable horror, you would bloody know I meant business. Additionally she went to the minor character mare who she knew would not believe her, instead of the creatures that already resolved this situation once before and with whom she shares a bond.
I could buy one of these, especially with panic and magic afoot, but it does seem like these contrivances exist only to facilitate the plot. The delivery was superb and as I said despite these niggles the story was pretty bloody great. I know I've said little of the former, but the only critique I could even fathom is that at points I could not tell what the candy mare was saying. I'm not even going to read ahead on my own, I've just subbed and I eagerly wait the continuation of this haunting experience.
Going to Mayor Mare wasn't to stop the Candy Mare, but to limit the amount of victims. In an emergency situation ,you're right, you would likely call the authorities first (in this case Celestia and Luna) but Twilight thought it would be better to convince the local authorities to act before summoning help from afar. (Bare in mind, Twilight still has her doubts about this whole thing, so to her it might not be serious enough to involve the Princess's just yet.)
The problem neither you nor she banked on was just how quickly the Candy Mare acted in attacking Ponyville and just how powerful she actually was. The old legends paint her up to be a deadly trickster, not a force of murderous nature. She's actually behaving in a fashion that even Pinkie Pie wouldn't have fathomed. I won't go into detail as to why that is, but it's covered in the sequel, "Something Sweet to Bite Too".
As to the decision to eat the candy to get rid of it, nowhere is it stated that eating the candy is deadly in and of itself. Lemon Drops experiments were culinary in nature, but they were primarily magical. The treats the Candy Mare's 'body' is composed of may be of an ancient recipe, but there's nothing inherently magical about them. They were made by Scootaloo and Applebloom for the most part.
Having said all that if you've already predicted what happens next, I'm not surprised, as it's telegraphed pretty hard in Fluttershy's scene back in part two. Glad you're enjoying the story despite its flaws.
Luna knows if Candy Mare is real, and could probably swiftly discern it's freedom, she also has the authority to impose a lockdown, this especially makes more sense if you're unsure as Luna owes her and trusts her, at least when compared to running into a crowd and yelling death.
Additionally, based on the fable I think it would make more sense for everyone to stick together, then hide alone in the dark. This Princess method also works better with more time, as it's less direct and supports affirmation and an informed response (as I said her response is still believable, it just weighs a little in context with other decisions. She will have to go to the sisters either way, though there is a specious logic to working your way up I will admit).
As for the candy, they know how these creatures are created, twilight knows of the recipe used and as for magic by whom it was possessed and possibly remade in it's feasting.
This is not a despite situation. This is the best review I can give, my only qualms thus far have been nitpicks only one of which (the eating,) is on it's own even valid and all of which can be somewhat justified. This may not have been clear in my somewhat dissonant initial post of, I love your story, rant incoming. My natural inclination is to asses, but you did everything else to such a standard that it didn't make sense to list it all, so I umbrellad it under an I love your story and assumed you'd decipher that somehow. Though three things do jump especially to mind, the dark fairy tale old world motif, the tone and the pacing.
Oh I get that you love the story. And we always kill our darlings. You can;t help but discern the imperfections in something dearly loved, for they are glaring against the perfection of the whole.
Something special that I'm afraid I never touched on in either story was that Luna was only able to silence the Candy Mare with nightmares. It was her abilities as a blossoming Nightmare Moon that allowed her to take down the Candy Mare. Her abilities and her powers are thus truncated after her purification by the Elements of Harmony. I'm not saying Twilight made the right decision, but there were many bad decisions that lead to the Candy Mares resurrection, and this isn't even the most glaring.
As to 'how these creatures are created' the Candy Mare is one of a kind at this point in the story. They don't know that there are any others or that there is even a method to their creation. The Candy Mare is a freak, an accident, and in truth she remains so even after what happens next. (again a lot of this is explained further in the sequel.)
Don't think I mistake your criticism for distaste, I merely seek to clarify both the thinking of the characters within the context of this story and a few items of knowledge that are readily available to the audience but lost on these poor little ponies.
Terra Smith The spirit of the Candy Mare is active due to Luna losing her dark powers as Nightmare Moon as much as to the CMC making the cursed candy. The candy just gave her a vessel to inhabit and sped up her return. So yes, even if they had burned the candy or dumped it in acid or whatever, since she was already active it is possible she could have taken another body by force. Though I will say in her initial weakened condition she wouldn't have been able to take over a living pony, probably only the recently deceased or a distant relative.