how to write poetry for beginners 📜🪶(my 4 step poem process) + writing tips
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" Read a thousand books and your words will flow like a river " - Virginia Woolf
Can u suggest me anything which I cn read
i aint doing allat
@@iiuxxcv lol same
If you are worried about words , when poem is about expressing , it is probably not for you , don’t worry about words , express what you’re feeling, it will turn into art itself
Thx
Ooooooh, you should publish a book with your poems!
This is my first poem and my english is not as good as be able to write, because I speak English as a foreign language. This is it :
I used to be a thing
Now I'm just a remain
I pretended being an ocean
And denied the little stain
I hated being that man
I wish I didn't complain
I thought my soul was worthless
So I threw it in the drain
My life had past so fast
Faster than a train
I would to start over
And have a chance again
Unhappily life is not a tree
And I am not a grain
I call it a letter from a dead man. Tell me what do you think about it '
I didn't understand what the poem is all about
i think it was really good! i loved it! if ur comfortable i would love to read more of your poems!!
@@shiya7 it's a message for those people who want to give up on their souls
@@Nidal___ aka it's a poem for me
I wrote my first poem and i used some words from the comments kudos to them
It was a new day
When i saw her first,
Realised that
It was pure love
not lust.
Her beauty unhazed
Her eyes were so beautiful
that it got me amazed.
It seemed that
Beautiful was definition of her
That it got me in a daze.
Now im just a remain
I pretended being an ocean
And denied the little stain
I hated being that notion
A love lost in the ocean.
I’m using ‘was’ because she isn’t with me,
A memory of what love used to be.
This is so helpful! I have been wanting to start writing poetry for a while now. Originally its bc i really
Like to sketchbook and i think poems would be a great addition to my sketchbook❤️ and also i think its a good way to get words or feelings down on a paper without it being to detailed like a diary, if that makes sense❤️❤️ so thank you!
You are so talented! I love the second poem you read. I want to write poems for songs and as a begginer poet this is very helpful thanks so much, ana!
Just started writing officially. Wrote tons of poems for my ex but I never did it for myself so now I am! This is one of the ones I posted on my new IG
Pretty chains
All over my body
They hold me even if it hurts
I cant remember who put them on me to begin with
I can’t imagine them off
So I leave them as they are
I guess that’s why they’re pretty
Knowing I can’t be hurt more than I already am
Just a small contribution about Oneness!
IF I HAD JUST ONE WISH!.......
If I Had One Wish....
It Would Be To Build A Temple
To Celebrate Oneness,
Friendship, Unity & Peace.
We Would Have No Differences,
Or Arguements, With Shared Values.
It Would Be Centrally Located
In The Middle Of Everywhere.
If I Had Just One Wish!.......
😭🫶🏻🫶🏻🫶🏻🫶🏻🫶🏻🫶🏻
@@rosieeyyyy thank you so much!
Want to be nice if this poem will come true!!!!
🙏☮️🦖
@@theprehistoricpoet someday it will!
First poem I’ve ever written 👉👈
_“Shadows chase her_
_Her beauty unhazed_
_Does dark retract_
_When she lets the sun beam her rays?_
_Or does she follow_
_behind trees, clouds and lamps_
_Hiding in the hollow_
_Waiting for the day_
_The day the sun rewinds_
_The moment she goes no further_
_When she smiles at the darkness_
_And no longer tries to disperse her”_
It’s about hope and unrequited love in the personification of the sun and the shadows.
It’s really nice and creative!
@@ChocolateIsMyRevenge thank you!!
What does unhazed means?
@@GinaVolkov Unhazed: Not hazed, not visually obscured.
Haze: traditionally an atmospheric phenomenon in which dust, smoke and other dry particulates suspended in air obscures visibility and clarity of the sky.
It's hella beautiful.. your first try is nice keep doing it ..
- be in the mood
- write in book & practice
- maybe try to use random word and go off of ur thoughts on it
- rhymezone for song writing for poetry
- read poem aloud or sing
- title poem
Rhymezone you have to pay for
Idk about rhymezone but rhymers block suggests rhymes and I’ve found it really helpful❤️❤️(and it’s great even if u don’t get the membership or whatever)
@@avijames57 thank you
I fell in love with him everyday,
A little more than yesterday
Until the day I realised
My love for him knew has
No boundaries, No limits
It was Infinite!
Gosh ❤ superb 👏 love it 😀
@@singhd2336 woww
the poem i wrote immediately after watching this video:
I try to stay motivated,
but they keep me in the chains.
I attempt not to get deflated,
but I end up using a cane.
What should I do?
Find and answer on my own?
All those who’ve come before me
have always forfeit the throne.
It could use some work, but anyway, thanks ana!
I love it so much
Aw thanks :)
Wtf, that’s awesome! You just wrote this!😮😊❤
Whoa I loved the ending it just struck me yk
@@alisa0459 thank you
I wrote a small piece:
Strength of the moon, alignment of the stars
Makes the nights look pretty, hiding all the scars.
Glowing softly in the dark Whispers of the night
A canvas of dreams unfold Painting stories in moonlight
Beneath the cosmic canvas Where dreams and Stardust blend,
The moon guards our secrets
A celestial timeless friend
Im literally in love with it 😭⭐️
@@_snow_- omg! thank you! ilysm!
@@rosieeyyyy ilyt 😍 and I love the way you also continued it! It’s like so nice!
@@_snow_- thank you!💘
@@rosieeyyyy As a poet myself I think this is beautifully written!
Congratulations!
David 🦖
"don't say the cat sat
on the mat
because...
it doesn't work
like that"
- ana neu 2023 8:05
I was kinda sad today so I just wrote a poem about loneliness lol
I wish to be alone and enjoy things one day,
But then realise how lonely I get the other day.
I wish to express my feelings with someone I can trust,
But I have to search for that someone with whom I can trust.
These thoughts keep me awake at night,
Forcing me to deal with the overthinking and anxiety tonight.
I wish I had someone whom I could rely on,
But then I think to myself, "is this how I will be moving on?"
An interesting poem about loneliness!
Sometimes it is good to write about the subject or the emotion that you are currently feeling! I too, write about sadness when I'm sad, and loneliness, when I'm feeling lonely! I try not to write poetry for the sake of writing it!
I prefer to feel it , then write down my feelings!
I currently narrate all of my poetry on my yt channel, including several on loneliness!!
David 🦖
my friend this is so cool
Loved it✨💕
@@PriyaKumaridutta agreed!
I absolutely love this so much!!❤
BEST POEM IN THE WORLD
--------------------------------------------
In the realm of words, where verses dance,
I shall endeavor to take a chance,
To craft a poem, a masterpiece divine,
A tapestry of words, where meanings intertwine.
Behold, the canvas, blank and pure,
Where dreams and musings shall endure,
With ink as my brush, and thoughts as my ink,
I shall paint a portrait that makes hearts sink.
I'll weave a tale of love's sweet embrace,
Of whispered promises and tender grace,
Where souls entwine in eternal flame,
Bound by the echoes of a lover's name.
I'll wander through nature, the poet's muse,
Where melodies of birdsong softly infuse,
The rustling leaves and babbling streams,
A symphony of life, where beauty gleams.
I'll venture to realms of sorrow and pain,
Where tears fall freely like droplets of rain,
To paint the resilience of the human soul,
Amidst adversity, it finds its role.
I'll soar through the cosmos, to stars untold,
Where mysteries lie, waiting to unfold,
In celestial tapestries, a story untamed,
Of wonder and awe, forever unnamed.
I'll delve into history's intricate lore,
Unearth forgotten tales, forevermore,
From ancient civilizations, rise and fall,
Legends and heroes, captivating all.
I'll celebrate laughter, joy, and delight,
The moments that make our spirits take flight,
In the tender embrace of friendship's embrace,
In shared laughter, we find solace and grace.
And as I conclude this grand design,
This poem, the best in the world, I opine,
I offer it humbly, with love and with art,
A piece of my soul, a gift from the heart.
For poetry knows no bounds or borders,
It connects us all, believers and non-believers,
So cherish its power, let your spirit unfurl,
In the beauty and wonder of the best poem in the world.
Writer
Ryan K Pendley
I absolutely love it! You are incredibly talented, would buy a book full of these poems, no joke.
This is amazing
I know it’s chatgpt 😂but don’t worry!!!!
I am so amused of how pretentious this poem is.
The comment section has become a collection of beautiful poems❤
Agreed, I can't believe the high standard of writing!
Thank you to everyone for sharing!❤
Hey i tried writing one too
I miss him..
His stupid smile
And his mesmerizing eyes
I love him
Those silly late night calls
During the late autumn fall
I despise him
For faking everything in our relationship
For not truly loving me
But what can I say?
My heart still beats for that man
I once called mine
Very good. Got any other poems?
@@huntercoleman460 this was the first ever poem I wrote so sorry no 😭
@@Ayzalse I’ve written quite a few poems myself. This is my favorite one called Letters of Love. What do you think?
He had to leave me to fight in this cruel war.
He gave me a kiss and his hat to remember him by.
He wrote to me every week with words of hope and promises.
He sent letters of love talking about our future family and house together.
He talked about how he misses my smile and laugh.
He then stopped writing and came home in a wooden box.
He and I won’t have our future family together and house.
He stopped sending me letters of love.
so good!! relating this w my friendship!
Cause you never really care if I was there,
or crying somewhere.
You turned away didn't see the pain I bear,
I was just a shadow fading into thin air
This is my first stanza
Damn!❤
dayummmm😭😭😭❤️❤️❤️
Wow 🥹
From the first line the melody that formed in my mind for the whole stanza sounded like devil town but tv girl version. That's kool.
-"Birds in my area ,
Nowdays don't fly.
I'm seeing only the thoughts,
Floating in the sky.
The thoughts, that why?
The moon is praised,
When he has scars all over his face.
I too have scars but I'm not couraged,
To hang on the sky with scarful face."
Well written!!
Regards
David 🦖🙏
@human3025 I agree
I post my poetry on my UA-cam channel and they're also many good poets that don't get recognition on UA-cam
If you use the search of poetry or spoken word
You will then see many poets including myself who narrates their own poetry
Do you write poetry yourself I would love to read it
Regards
David 🦖🦋
Ahhh so aesthetically pleasing! I also do poems 😂 but I'm more of a narrative descriptive writer
... nearly self publishing!!!! I'm so happy yay❤🎉
I hope you self publish one day!!!
This is my first ever poetry:
Thought this was a normal connection with you,
Until I shared my deepest and darkest secrets with you,
Thought you were a wall that couldn't speak much,
But you were the one who listened to me the most,
Though distance can separate us apart,
An intertwined connection that cannot.
I wrote this for a person who lives in a different country but they are the closest to my heart.
Very good first poem, it is clearly written so the reader can also understand and share the emotions you were feeling when you wrote it!
Regards
David 🦖
*I wrote this poem after watching this video!*
In between the unpredictions, a meeting unfolds,
Refills fragrance to the garden of life.
Unscripted,unplanned,yet perfectly timed,
Drives life to a graceful ride.
Enters our orbit like a shooting star
Leaving the trail that brightens our path
Like a firefly they give hope in the dark
Leaving an undelible mark
The stars illumiante the sky
But these fireflies ornament our life on earth.
The kaleidoscope of moments with colors so bright
They paint our life with hues of delight.
THATS SO MAGICAL OH MY GOD
@@lluv_kuroThanksssss❤
Behold, I stand, a monument of grace,
In realms where excellence finds its space.
My brilliance, a beacon, unmatched, supreme,
A testament to greatness in every dream.
This is THE video I've been waiting for!!!
aww bestiee! can’t wait for you to see it!!🤍🌸
I think my problem is not knowing which words to chose and in what order, where to pause, etc.
I'm writing my first poem and I don't know how to make it good 😅 it kind of looks more like a story and not a poem, even tho it's not that long.
I do hope you won't mind me answering your question?
I also remember writing my first poem, yes it's a frightening experience! If you were writing for an exam, then obviously there are strict rules to follow, I believe that there are in excess of over 70 different styles of poetry? But I'm guessing, that like me, you are writing for pleasure? So you have already written something? And no doubt have written it from your heart ❤! Therefore, it's now your poem!! I would be excited to read it, if you are happy to share it!
Becoming to clinical and over editing, take the heart out of a poem!
You have done well to get this far!
Regards
David 🦖
@@theprehistoricpoet Hi, of course I don't mind it! Yeah I write for pleasure and I guess I can share with you one of my first poems I made recently.
Here it is:
A Void
I see pure nothingness,
Hear a silent whispering,
Feel the promise of eternal sleep,
An easy escape from reality.
The void attracts me,
But I repel from it,
Saying no,
I've been warned.
A void I'm avoiding,
Is avoiding me back.
Enough to not want it,
It will cause you to elapse.
I have no idea what style it is, but I guess you could say that every poet has their own style, so yeah. Thanks for your comment!
@@indy2l
Thank you for sharing your first poem with me! If you hadn't have mentioned that it was your first attempt, I would have guessed that you are a seasoned poet!
Much of your style and layout, is similar to what I have used in the number of my poems ! Both you and I write I for fun and enjoyment, and to share with others! My style varies from poem to poem! I write on different subjects , love, loneliness, heartbreak, depression & social issues!
I cannot just sit down and write, I need to be inspired by my own feelings, or something that is happening around me!
I try not to overthink! Poems will write themselves! Layout and structure will come to you naturally and will change from poem to poem!
I posted all my poems on a poetry writing site, I also store them on yt in the comments section in one of my shorts! Never seen anyone else do this on😂
I have also started to narrate my poems on my channel.
The best test of seeing if a poem is structured correctly is to read it out in front of a mirror !, if it flows ok, then it is ok!!
Take care
David 🦖
@@theprehistoricpoet Thanks for these kind words :)
I wish you good luck, and I'll also check out your work if you don't mind!
@@indy2l
It was my pleasure!
My narrated poems are obvious, my written poems,, my part written poems,
My thoughts, are actually on a short that has a picture of Buddha's and fairy lights, the poems are hidden in the comments!!!
Would love to see more of your work, when you have written some!
David 🦖
Funny story for yous if your bored -
When i was in kindergarten up in till year 4 everyone was sayng ‘the more books you read the more words you will know’, and i would NEVER read books, even though the school would give us awards for reading i would pretend i had read books when i hadnt because i hated reading, ended up being a poet and i still am better than that kid who told me i would go no where without reading in 3rd grade. Also my mum was a poet too so maybe i got it from her? Anyways x
Agreed, I left school a 16 without any qualifications, 50 years later I started writing and posting poetry! It is what is in your heart❤ not what is in your head!
Regards
David 🦖🦋
Hey here's mine:
You said you loved me like the sun loves the moon,
You said you wanted me on the days you couldn't bloom;
Oh darling, my dreams are filled with the thought of me and you,
I wake up and smile for my dreams have come true;
Each thought of you fills me with sweet emotion,
I forever give to you my sweetest devotion;
When I'm down, you lift me up,
When I'm hurting, you make me well;
Your love is over the top,
And I'm forever under your spell;
You gave light to my soul,
You helped me to be whole;
I love you darling, with all my heart,
Together forever and never to part.
Try to get to the point straight
@Joj3901 How about you get to the point straight that you're jealous of this queen 😝 (Like 🤨👈?).
I loved this vid ❤ but you gotta admit it took a while to get to the content we were here for
For real
You are my motivation for writing
Sometimes I challenge myself to write when I’m not in the mood to write. For example, maybe I would try to write a poem about not being in the mood to write poetry lol or a poem about silence, blank space, etc. doesn’t have to be a poem or song though, it can just be a journal entry and doing that sometimes helps.
Like a deep thought
So who else here to try to make poems for there gf or bf
i’m representing my class in spoken poetry in english fest next month, were going to write it on the spot. wish me luck 😭
Omg I could never 😭 best of luck lol
I WON CHAMPION 😭😭
Which of your poetry did you use?
LATE CONGRATZ :D
I went into this video expecting a really tedious step-by-step process that would generalise the art of writing poems, but finished it completely agreeing with everything you said-
The advice you give really hones in with what I think poetry should be about: emotion. Telling people to write poetry within their comfort and leasure is how the best poetry is created, because it directly leads to genuine poetry, in which genuine emotions are established and communicated.
When I write poetry, I make myself go through a really specific structure of finding out how the poem will be formatted, how many syllables per line, whether it's iambic (although, I never stick with that idea-) and how I can subvert it to create meaning. However, this is *always* after I have an idea that makes me want to write. I think that over anything, the emotion that goes into poetry is far more important than the quanity or images or language it has, for emotions in poetry (or any artistic form) eatablish quality.
Personally, I think your poetry guide really promotes this idea about people's interests being put over the idea that 'good' and 'bad' poetry exists, which encourages everyone to be included within writing poetry. Whether it is something that a child wrote in ten minutes or Percy Shelly's 'Ozymandias,' they cannot be compared due to how human emotions are the priority of poetry. That's why I love this guide- it doesnt make people feel like there is one way to learn poetry or forges them into sonnets or odes, it simply encourages them to *do* poetry. That is what poetry is all about, after all.
I NEED THIS VIDEO (also thumbnail is stunning)🤍
Hi, I follow you, I hope you have a blessed day.
awww hehe 🤍📖tysm veee😭
I personally make poems that teach you lessons and they’re manly about doves
I would love to read one?
I love this video! This is my first poem (It's a really specific topic)
When I told you I didn't place at the competition,
you laughed and said it was okay.
That it didn't matter too much.
Obviously you laughed...I was laughing too.
I was laughing not because it was funny,
but because I could not allow myself to cry.
My thoughts were running around with needles,
and I knew that if a tear slipped, the waterfall would never end.
One breath in, one breath out.
Words created a blockage in my throat.
Two breaths in, two breaths out.
I gulped on my saliva to repress the words.
It wasn't even the stupid competition.
Twice before I didn't place, so what does that mean?
Am I not improving? Am I not growing?
Am I stuck in the same, lost place I was two years ago?
I keep trying to blame everything and everyone.
Maybe my judge was biased.
Maybe my partner screwed up.
Maybe the entire competition was just rigged.
I guess I'll never know.
I'm done with this rat race.
Let others fight till the end for a title of a string of letters.
I'm paving my own path.
Can someone please give me tips?
I love this ❣️
Your first attempt is too good
I understand and somehow relate to the specific topic you wrote of
This is amazing!! I somehow relate to this, which is the amazing thing about poetry. If you’re looking for tips, I can try my best, though I won’t
act like i’m an expert because i’m really not, haha. Metaphors and personification are my best friend, if you know what they are. They make poetry come to life, if you know what I mean, but I don’t use them in all of my poems, as proof they can still be written without!
@@muskantomar2004 Thank you!
@@realjoyy Oooh thanks for the tips, I'll try using them!
@@musictherapy961 of course!!
Somebody be a doll and help me out here please 😀.
I lingered in the beauty of a flower not long ago,
It's stem, as strong as a hunter, but otherwise
A daze of uncontrolled mirth weighted down on the flower's eyes
Petals, with the hue of ink and the grace of prideful words
Blanched in colour of this tragic battlefield, speared in colour were golden swords
Of honey and mellowed sunlight, loved and adored
Trees around, would be glad of this sight
Spending their lives, wishing for their branches to brush the painted light
Smudges of colour, mixed with dandelion delight can do nothing to suffice
The love that was laced in the sallowed waters beside
Gardens of joy could never contain the curve of life, in the flower's smile
And a cloud's reflection could not cover anything of its disdainful rile
Given to the roots of its vanity, but no glow present to its halo
A prophecy would rise and take this earthly tragedy and sow
It's placid hamartia, forever embraced by the breeze
But often lost and forgotten, by those who trample over the leaves
Old threads may still be frayed, in the winds that carry,
A rebounding echo, that never seems to wish to tarry
Repeating a murmur of you, you and you
Of love, or for hate only the sweet daffodil could know
As it's fellow leers in the riverbed, not even daring to say a bitter hello.
Not my best poem as you can see. I wrote it a looong time ago. I would be over the moon if some kind soul would give me their verdict and tell me why it sounds off or how I could improve it. Thank you.
I lingered in the beauty of a flower not long ago,
It's stem, as strong as a hunter, but otherwise
A daze of uncontrolled mirth weighted down on the flower's eyes
Petals, with the hue of ink and the grace of prideful words
Blanched in colour of this tragic battlefield, speared in colour were golden swords
Of honey and mellowed sunlight, loved and adored
Trees around, would be glad of this sight
Spending their lives, wishing for their branches to brush the painted light
Smudges of colour, mixed with dandelion delight can do nothing to suffice
The love that was laced in the sallowed waters beside
Gardens of joy could never contain the curve of life, in the flower's smile
And a cloud's reflection could not cover anything of its disdainful rile
Given to the roots of its vanity, but no glow present to its halo
A prophecy would rise and take this earthly tragedy and sow
It's placid hamartia, forever embraced by the breeze
But often lost and forgotten, by those who trample over the leaves
Old threads may still be frayed, in the winds that carry,
A rebounding echo, that never seems to wish to tarry
Repeating a murmur of you, you and you
Of love, or for hate only the sweet daffodil could know
As it's fellow leers in the riverbed, not even daring to say a bitter hello.
I appreciate this. I want to learn to write better songs but I struggle with expressing myself.
I cannot write songs but I write emotional poetry!
If I sit down with a pen and paper my mind goes blank!
If I have a thought during the day or feel an emotion, I quickly jot it down on a piece of paper, in a week's time I gather the paper scraps together, it becomes a poem!
Regards
David 🦖🦋
Poem or Notebooks never worked for me. I like to use poetizer or google docs to write on. I agree, yes rhymezone is great resource, as well as synonymns. You had a great note on rhymes, near rhymes are much more enjoyable to read than exact rhymes which can feel forced. I totally get the whole not knowing what something means. The poem is kind of a way to understand how you're feeling, but also a poem is not a puzzle.
She took my soul to a new dimension away from reality!
How is this not a delusion?
So I wrote this, it’s not the best but :) here goes nothing:
You were so protected once - it almost
made you ungrateful
Look what safety does to bodies
reliant on it.
I could have been something else,
A cobalt sparrow on a withering tree,
A pearl woven on a cashmere coat,
An unnamed star adjacent to Moon.
But I was given this life to torment,
too many desires stitched inside
this blood house.
We met in this timeline
you were thorn disguised as flower
I couldn’t touch you without
letting my hand bleed.
Damn this is gooodddd
Hey just a passerby. As someone who writes already, I clicked this video wanting to go back to the fundamentals of poetry (to strengthen my writing). There is a lot of reliance on “my writing style.” And thus we saw how the creator of this video writes. That is a very laid back almost spoken style. A sole reliance on rhyme and feel, as opposed to juxtaposed ideas or conflicts. I’d recommend adding allusions, alliterations, and conflict. No tamed or controlled body of water can even compete with the beautiful chaos of the ocean
one moreee
looking at him, i realized
that this was the end.
again he's asking me,
"weren't we just friends?"
i tell him we were.
he tells me we are.
but i don't feel it that way.
he didn't ask about it anyway.
now we are just friends,
and he has a 'she'.
this breaks my heart into pieces,
because that was what i wanted to be.
now i try to let it go,
while they're watching movies.
i sleep at night,
crying and hugging my plushies.
Just saw your poems and girl it's amazing
@@Anushka00_27 omg thank you so much dear!! ig you're from indiaaa
Jesus loves u guys
Why
Amen , John 3:16 ✝️💗
Thank you for that belief. I personally don't believe in Jesus, I'm a pagan. But thank you.
The most important thing for good poetry is to have a message and convey that message clearly with passion.
Just started writing officially. Wrote tons of poems for my ex but I never did it for myself so now I am! This is one of the ones I posted on my new IG
Pretty chains
All over my body
They hold me even if it hurts
I cant remember who put them on me to begin with
I can’t imagine them off
So I leave them as they are
I guess that’s why they’re pretty
Knowing I can’t be hurt more than I already am
I love the idea of "Pretty chains", it sounds so visceral and yet stunning at the same time. Truly brilliant!
Wait thus was written by me in some other video I was watchingg
The coast.
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Every now and then I drown.
I drown into my thoughts.
my thoughts invade my brain.
my brain makes me scream.
I scream.
…
It‘s similar to the unexpected tidal waves crashing into your skin.
Well - I wish they did, it would explain the never-ending bruises on my arms, legs and back.
…
The bruises are from people.
people that step on me - they seem to be having fun!
fun that makes the time goes by.
…
You know what happens when enough time goes by right?
I rise just like the sea-levels.
Because I am the beach… I am the sea and I am the people and I am accountable for the death of myself: The coast
I loved that first verse!
What follows shows you have a great imagination for writing poetry!
Thanks for sharing!
Would love to see more especially with an nautical theme 🌊
I intertwine the ocean in some of my favourite poems!
David 🦖 🦋n
There are too many secrets under this cover
Thank God things can't speak
Otherwise it would tell my mother
That I am weak
That I am a freak
That I am a creep...
There are too mamy secrets under this cover
Thank God things can't hear
Otherwise I would be in great fear
Of being discovered
There are too many secrets under this cover
Thank God things cant see
Otherwise I would have to pay a fee
For all my crimes and deeds
Dear God, please set me free
I tried 😅
My heart,
Deep within me
Beating
Giving me life
My heart,
Overworked and tired
Sick of always giving
Never getting
My heart,
Hurt but not broken
Willingly
Giving me life.
i find it easier writing poems about love/heartbreak but its my goal to be able to write about things outside of romance but its so hard for me idk why😭
What do you think of this poem I wrote? It’s called The Man and the Girl.
The man gives me roses to love.
The man gives me gifts to have.
The man gives me to money to spend.
Then he met the girl and left me.
The man gives her roses to love.
The man gives her gifts to have.
The man gives her to money to spend.
Then the man and the girl got married and not me.
@@huntercoleman460 love it🤍a sad twist!
wrote my first poem!!💫
LET ME LIVE
with all the sorrows I dwell in my mind,
let me live in a world of mine.
where no one asks about my grades
and no one cares about how much I make
let me live in a world of mine
where I can be divine
let me live....let me live my life
let me live in a world where everyone understands ..me,
as well as my state of mind.
All the thoughts stacking up in my mind,
building up a hill that I can never climb
let me live...let me live my life
I feel an enormous burden on my chest,
killing me from inside every time I rest
let me die for mistakes of my own,
every night I cry...I cry on bed of my own.
dumping my face into sheets so deep,
and crying my heart to sleep.
no one can knw the pain of me you,
even if they tell they understand you.
all the pressure that you give,
its not you!
its the life that you live
I know the pain that you suffer through,
for it is the same for me and you,
let me live my life,
I plea to you all,
for it is not the same for me and for you all
Very beautiful!!
@@Rabia5868f thank u 😊
Written straight from the heart ❤
Really enjoyed it!
David 🦖
@theprehistoricpoet Fr🙃❤✨
@@jaskiran8988 I have total admiration for this style of writing!
In every poem that I write, a piece of heart remains on the page!
Would love to see more of your writing!
David 🦖
I wrote one poem
The lamp of light or The light of human
In light of charming
Where baby can born
A light of wonders
They grow like a thunder
In light of emission
They get admission
A light of reflection
They throw their fear for deflection
They shine like a moon in a darker sky
They bright like a sun to fly and fly
They sleep as a dusk
To work like a musk
They silent like a deep water
To become a master
They never feel lethargic
To turn their dreams as magic ✨
Poet Aarya kumari Mishra....
Can u choose which topic suits on it... the first or the second?.
Title: Hide away
I want him to look at me
I want him to see me
the real me
But I'm scared
I wanna hide away
I'm shy
I'm afraid he will see and won't like me
I'm afraid he will point out my greatest insecurities
I try to be brave
I try to be confident
But it's safer here behind my hair
Where he cannot see me
But it's safer here behind my hair........
Where he cannot see me!
Two great & original Power Lines!!!
Don't tell me your name, no not yet
I'm lost in your eyes, look at you, ethereal sight
Don't tell me your name, no I know it's Mr. I should stay away
Don't tell me your name, no, not before hindsight
Don't tell me your name, no, even though I'm sure it'll serve me more gratification still what about the aftermath's medication
Don't tell me your name, even though I want to know it so bad, Mr. All that I want
But what if
You're like the others, the one who breaks my heart.
Here’s my poem:
Poem name: Midnight Blue
[Stanza]
I don’t wanna die, but I don’t wanna live, but I do
I don’t wanna fly, but I don’t wanna land either, but I do too
I don’t know what it is whether it be the raging at nothing from Coke or whether it be the crying in my room for another chance to fly with the eagles and touch heaven again.
I just don’t know and I’m afraid that someday I won’t even know myself anymore
I’m afraid that one day every Bible verse I read like psalms, Corinthians, or Romans will one day fly my mind and escape out the door where all of the bygones may lay.
I’m afraid that one day I will forget you and forget myself too
[Stanza 2]
There’s a wall with a man inside
Aiden, Valentino, Acilia, Alice, Divine and I, all try to break the wall to figure out who this strange ethereal man is.
The fireflies are crying as they’re trying harder and harder to forget it all
Los Angeles is crying as he’s dying
Meanwhile Aiden, Valentino, Acilia, Divine and I break the wall
Only to realize that that man is me
[Stanza 3]
Everything that my rage sees is red
Like the red wine, red Mercedes, and cherry lime that I cherish with all my heart
Deep down I’m still that little boy that I used to be; sweet to the core but dull on the surface
It’s just that now, the sun rises and covers it with a heavier blue that mankind has not ever put their hands on yet
[Verse 4]
Valentino, please, stand me on my tippy toes as the night covers up the woes
Seal the sealed bruises even more and cherish them with pink bows
Because as time and time goes on I realize I can’t do everything with one fist and will eventually have to use more fists
To the crows, please don’t add me to your list of darkness
Let the doves shine me so bright, ethereally, and angelically
Let me be free, let me be a passion
As I am a brother of two, a son of two, and a friend to who
As I travel back to the heavens, I say farewell to my woes and breathe in the midnight blue
Here is the first poem I ever wrote.
Silly words
Your silly words
cut my cheeks.
A flock of birds
with razor beaks.
I resist
it lurks...
To myself
it smirks...
🤘✍️
His charismatic character and charm
blinded me from the alarm
All i saw was his allure, that i failed to see his flaws
In the end i got hurt by his claws
Dreaming
It's funny how much your life is filled with such a beautiful word, with so many meanings, and you most of the time don't even realize.
Dreaming while you sleep.
Daydreaming.
Dreaming. Wishing for something to happen.
Things you do daily.
But after I met you..
It's like every way the word dreaming can be used, it was about you.
My dreams where flooded by you.
Daydreaming of what it would be like if you and I where a thing.
Dreaming. Wishing you'd like me like I like you.
But they where just dreams.
Sometimes, dreams can be a good things.
magical.
But sometimes it can leave you shattered.
(I watched a video that said make a story with one word and the word was dream. This is my first poem 😁, and I'm considering making more and not even two days later I found out you made a video on poetry! So thank you for this amazing video 😁. You've been a very big inspiration for my writing ❤.)
That was your first? THAT IS LITERALLY SO GOOD IN MY OPINIONNNN!
For two seconds, eyes meet .
Words would take a whole life ,
But in those two seconds, eyes could speak.
~Naina
This one is for my muslim girlies
need and want
want and need
i dont really need him and its not much of a want either
i just want to be seen and heard and looked after
but a person cant give you that, that can only come from within
and from the permission of allah, he alone can lift any burden
in your heart and in your limbs things feel so complicated and sight becomes so blurry
life has you suffocating
but trust that allah has everything youll even need or want
want or need
and everything in between
They stare through the window
Time goes on the grass grows
I can't get with the flow
Going down the river as i row
Today is just another day but their rays
Beam into my head then i feel red
Im led to tears as all of my fears
Creep in i end up sleeping they're reaping
I know they're going slow down
The progress i cant stress i must rest
she loved sunsets
and he was the sun
waking up to his warm embrace
she would be sunny
but then the moon came in
darkened and made everything foggy
the sun rised again
let out his fictitious shadow
but she had started to love the moon
held it in her tender heart and
bloomed like a moonflower ✨️
It's about toxic relationships and self love ❤
Loved this!
This is my first poem can you guys rate it out if 10 please 🙏
I wish that I had
Somebody whom I, could share,
All the secrets, my heart has to bare
But truthfully I must confess,
That that person has already left.
And even though it hurts to see, that
special person go on and leave
I know deep down that that is best for me
(I wrote this just today)
@@-kizyaha-6411 well done!
You certainly write from the heart ❤️
Look forward to reading more from you!
If you look at some of my earlier ones you will see the variety of topics and the different structures I have used, some rhyming some not, some shaped,
Some sad, some humorous! The more recent ones, are not really poetry,
Just me sharing my thoughts! But the only ones should prove more of interest! You will also note that I have narrated them
There is another site where you can actually write your poems on which I did to begin with but felt they would have more emotion by narrating them!
I haven't written a poem, until about 3 years ago I have no training I just write from the heart ❤️, happy to talk if you wish.
Regards
David 🦖🦋
I love your channel!
You offer both motivation & inspiration to new & aspiring poets!
The topics you cover, are most helpful! And with the exception of your rhyming scheme, your methods mirror mine exactly!
Thank you!
David 🦖
A poem I wrote on the birth of my niece, as her christening present!
MIYA.... WELCOME TO YOUR WORLD!
Twixt Sunrise And Sunset
A New Day Has Dawned
Mother Earth Spinning On Its Axis
Driving The Eternal Cycle Of Night & Day
Each Day Unfolding The Latest Episode
In The Unceasing Reality Show Of Existence
The Perpetual Ebb & Flow Of The Oceans
Propelling It's Life Force Across The Globe
The Night Sky Awash With Twinkling Lights
A New Star Just Born - Shines Brightly 🌟
Celebrating the birth of my great niece Miya
© The Poetic Dinosaur🦖
why dont you publish this❤️
PROMISE
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I promise to love you, it's my favorite duty of life
to cherish you
I love your silliness
Your googly eye pictures makes me laugh
You know we're some dorks
Please dont get me on your smile it's my
Kryptonite that warms the soul
The duty of me being your man is to make us
happy
I may not be good at spilling my guts
But this is who I am letting you know that there
is nobody else in this world that compares to
you
It's crazy you're the only person that's 24/7 on
my mind, and that's a sincere thought no lie,
You consume me
I love your nakedness
That's my everything and
Being naked is pretty funny
And funny is what I want to be
So to my better half
Let's laugh
Take this rib, ouch
It's okay if I'm in pain
I love you
Maybe I try to hard
I just want to be myself with you.
Maybe I don't think you accept me
Butchya do
I hear the rhythm of our heart beating as one
Take my hand let go and let God
Speaking of the Angels
Hallelujah
Love has won
Writer
Ryan K Pendley
I love this comment section, I haven’t even watched the video yet 🥹❤️❤️ Thank you everyone for sharing your poetry.
I love writing poems, as they help share my feelings and emotions.
But i manly write short poems, I would like to be able to write larger poems
my first poem, i didn't feel like rhyming as it was a quick one. I tried reading it, but i ended up almost crying.
An Angel For A Mother
Her arms, a sweet sense of comfort,
A warm place to call home,
A place to burry my sorrows
Unconditional love that will forever flourish
Whether she is by my side or in my heart
She will always be home
No need for rhyming on this beautiful poem!
The emotion that you put into this poem says it's all!
Regards
David🦖
New poem i just wrote:
"You had just died, and you hear a knock at your door. You think you know who it is, as you had just encountered: a small crying boy who has to kill you. But instead, your met with a young girl, she runs around your yard, singing and dancing.
She pulls you outside, making both you and her disappear and reapper in a big grassy flowery field. She smiles at you, your still covered in sympathy for the little boy you had met before.
She waves her hand for you to bend down, and in doing so, she kisses your cheek. Then, you open your eyes to see your new mothers face, all memorys of your past life and the boy and girl fading away...."
Its about a person who dies and is reborn, the girl and boy represent life and death. Inspired by a poem made by @MOCKERYMOLLY and a video made by @dovesandwich called "death stands by your door". (BEWARE PEOPLE, ITS ABOUT OUR FAVE PERSON DAZAI, not the poem, just the video.)
Nice to see ppl who love to write poetry. It's true that you have to be in the mood some of my best poems I'd say were written during very dark times
Yess so true i thinks its because when you feel strong emotions its easy to find a lot to say about it
1st poem
In the light of the shining moon,
You sought a rose too soon,
.
...
.....
Leaving the moon that glows,
I sprint into the darkened woods,
Discover a radiant rose,
Return to you,
with blood upon my hand,
I find the moon is hiding,
at your command,
The wind inquired,
"Why is there blood upon your hand?"
I replied softly,
"Pain in love, thorns in the Rose, I understand."
The aura of your presence
Vanishes from this space,
Can you also fade from the heart?
I plead for grace.
......
In the end,
the moon emerged laughing,
I shouted, "Cease it!"
......
......
......
Then I questioned,
The reason for your laughter and glee,
Moon replied,
"And where is the person
you used to compare with me?"
.....
...
.
Nice poem!
Title: Tost feelings
I find myself saying ''I feel" a lot
My whole life I had these big feelings inside of me that I couldn't express
So I locked them up
Deep inside of me
People told me ''be quiet be well- behaved''
So I was
I let people walk over me and learned to be submissive
But here I am
Grown and lost
My feelings tost across
Who am I?
I no longer have to deny
All my feelings
Need healings
So I try
To live my life
No longer held by the knive
I love this video 💕 would be great if you made some more poetry videos !
Everyday - an unceasing performance,
rehearsing lines that echo from within.
Just like a black hole, I am empty space,
absorbing roles until they feel like "me".
The girl I once knew fades into the void.
From deep desire just to be accepted,
an insistent voice begins to take its hold,
ringing loudly through my fatigued soul,
like a virus - it invades every thought,
until I realize My mind has turned blank,
until I lose My voice to a new "me".
Unfamiliar is the voice that speaks out,
just a stranger sharing space in My soul
I love how I can relate to this❤
My poem :
Name : True journey
Young organs playing and trolling here and there,
Searching for happiness without any care.
They even found it, but where?
Oh yes! In everything which you can dare.
When they grew, upto teenage,they start questioning, "Is happiness really there?"
Yet knowing the fact that, they do what they want.
But don't shout on them, you can't.
Make them feel, that's the only chance.
In the mid 20s, they cared for their future,
If they won't, you won't accept they're mature.
Finally, when they grew, with their fellow crew,
They gets to the work, in a lurk.
They won't accept they're sad,
Saying they're situation a bed.
Accepting the fake, they gets bake.
Living alone on a bed, they became sad.
Realising how happy they were, when they were bare.
So, please live life with care,
Don't give sadness any share.
If you do, then you would enjoy your last layer,
And would be ready to go into your next fair.
- Divyansh Rajput
(Luckey's departure )
How I was used to be with it ?
It was just a bit
Like a swift wind
It has left , yes he did .
How I was used to feel ?
It was just a deal .
Like a hell wounds
It has break all our bounds
Was it too heavy ?
No , it was very .
To be hold on that memory
Which I still wanna be carry .
Was it too dread ?
No , i t was like dead
To be hold on that stead
Which I still wanna be have on my head
Well constructed!
David 🦖🙏
My dearest Holly
Those wistfulness filled gaze,
her iridescent teal mirrored eyes;
Fields of blue hyacinths;
above, glamorous sheets of cerulean skies;
The familiar scent of apples,
where columba once soared and freely flies.
My unrequited love,
lingers like the roots of a dandelion,
or a wild fig tree;
Heartfelt lies brimmed with euphony,
incapable to divulge with mere plea.
adhering oneself to the heart,
allowing pending tragedy to unfold;
Severed roots of crimson polyanthus,
limerence of lovers, befallen.
In my cozy little latibule,
in which I whelve my emotions untold;
albeit an arduous ordeal,
eventually, my irenic passion runs cold.
To wear your heart on your sleeves,
requires to be foolishly bold.
ephemeral joys in new things,
brief tender morning calls;
Howbeit, my flowers of laurestine.
If ever neglected, I fall.
An ineffable plethora of flora to speak,
uttered elated just for two;
These abundance of peonies,
blooms in a beguiling pink hue;
A bouquet of daisies with glee,
I am head over heels for you, my dearest holly.
My first (actual) poem, I am trying to write a second one, actually. All of the flowers mentioned has a deeper meaning, and blends in with the poem. (Also some of the lines hold different meanings and can be interpreted in a different way.)
Beautifully written with some wonderful metaphors, I also enjoy writing about nature and the ocean 🌊 on my channel to breathe more life into a poem I have started to narrate them.
Regards
David 🦖🦋
So in my English class, we get to choose something to improve ourselves, something that shows progress. I decided to start writing poetry, this was one of my first poems and I would love to know how you think I can improve. Of course kind words are always appreciated, but I would love to know how I can diversify my poem structures and word usages! Thank you for taking the time to read this, here is my poem:
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I bled out in the palm of your hand
Something so visceral that I couldn't comprehend
The merciful way you love, it's lust
and the disillusion of this relation, it rusts
Like a folk forsaken prophecy
Like the past prerequisites were lost on me
Watch my feelings ebb and flow
onto your hand and onto the floor
So i decide to rewatch again because I too immerse with chat and your beauty 😍😍😍
Btw, I see your hand writing and it's so pretty. Definitely far more better than mine 😂😂😂
By the way Ana, I hope you put a little "watermark" to your poem post at Instagram. Because you know, stealing content, repost and boom, the stealer get all the love and attention for something doesn't belong to that person. From what you give us a glimpse of your poetry, I dunno why I sense someone will do steal it 😭😭😭
I hope you have a great day. Don't skip eating and keep hydrated, Ana 🥰🥰🥰
Envy, oh so green
Of a witch's sizzling cauldron
that ought not to be seen;
And yet tears drive down my face
For too stagnant was my very pace
And i am quite a withered flower
Crept inside my utmost vase.
😭..its awful
This video helped me a lot!! Tysm! Also new subscriber
‘make me cry like the water in the ocean’ - THIS IS BEAUTIFUL
@@ananeu thank you smm!😭😁
My first poem😅
lying on my death bed;
staring at the fan.
entangled in my own thoughts.
feeling so embarrassed.
i wish it doesn't happen
lying on my death bed
feeling so embarassed
Relis my own company
in the darkness
gazing outside the window
nothing seems weird
then why my thoughts
death-dealing inside of me
i wish something to happen
that walk me out of this
listening to the music
amused my loneliness
the melody of the music
healing my soul
The grief of my life
Leads me no-where
Thoughts are shattering me but;
I don't want Breakage
so cool
@@rosieeyyyy thanks🙏
@@Aniket12200 welcome
I love all the poetry in these comments!
I’m working on getting my poetry book published right now, I have one of my poems on my channel if anyone wants to check it out, I’ll be posting more of them soon 😊
Just read your poem!
I loved it!
Your presentation was so confident!
Regards
David 🦖
My poem-
I sat down and wondered,
Wondered about Sun and stars.
Behold the beauty of misty landscapes.
And admire you from afar.
You looked like a dream, a mesmerizing one.
You Remind me of calmness of an ethereal evening sun..
Your smile reminds of sky, a sky in lighter shade.
I love you so much and now im no longer afraid.
I was afraid of unknowns, afraid of heartbreaks.
But if its about you my heart now no longer aches.
In your eyes, i find peace, a gentle embrace
A love so pure, that it transcends time and space.
Your eyes, like galaxies, mysterious and deep.
Captivating you in my eyes, i always go to sleep.
With hope that my love goves you strength, i end my lines.
May these cool breeze carry my love to you, so does these warm sunshines.
I wrote this poem for my first love...❤😅
I enjoyed this!
A wonderful choice of metaphors!
David 🦖🦋
@@theprehistoricpoet Thank you>>>
@@Roaring_Universe
It's my pleasure!
There are a number of poetry writing sites!
I do hope when your studies permit, don't you find a suitable site and post your poetry!
In the meantime have a look at how others write their poetry,
Stay individual!!
Regards
David 🦖
Regards
David
@@theprehistoricpoet Thank you so much for motivation! 🌸
This is the first poem I've ever written (I've just written it)
Can someone rate it for me and give me feedback on it please?
"They said I should forget you
But I won't
They said I have to get rid of my feeling
But I couldn't
They said it like I want to keep it
But I don't"
I fw it
@@jetuwu8960 This makes me so happy:)) thank you!!
Yh, that's true (paraphrased): poetry has a way of expressing something you know but can't explain. I get that feeling all the time. I think pretty much every one too
Thanks for the ❤ @ana nue
So I wrote a poem last night, inspired by (and co written by) my friend, about struggling mentally, depression and recovery (of several things). This is it.
*The Swing Set*
Every year, winter comes and all the plants die, but their roots stay in the ground and they grow back in the spring.
There will always be a winter, but that means spring will always be coming.
You just need to make it through the winter so your plants can grow again.
Some years, permafrost infects the ground, only thawing a couple times and then freezing back up again.
But the grass always grows back again even if it takes longer.
Sometimes, it feels like the grass won’t grow. And it doesn’t for a long time.
But it does eventually.
No matter how long it takes, it always grows back.
And while you’re waiting, you can put down some wood chips and set up a swing set to help cope without the presence of the grass.
“I don’t have the materials or tools to build the swing set. There aren’t any stores I know of close by.”
I have a few pieces you can have, the swing might be rickety or kinda rusty but it’ll be a swing.
Or, you could borrow mine for a bit it’s kinda messed up, but it swings sometimes.
“I don’t wanna take away from your swing set though.”
I can manage for a while i’m quite good at being without a swing because mine falls apart a lot because I don’t know much about building swing sets.
Though my swing is rusted, and it’s ropes frayed, a knotted on a good day where it’s not falling from the tree as a result of a squirrel chewing the rope, or maybe shoddy craftsmanship, I will let you have a go and swing as high as you can, and if the rope breaks, I’ll catch you and simply put it back together again.
Here is a small snapshot of my poem:
In Twisted ribbons I'm tied to their whims,
A puppet on strings my bones within.
An alcoholic father and bible obsessed mother,
Twin demons from hell who smother.
I'm trapped in a place where love is a noose,
A constant struggle trapped in a cruse.
My bones snapping with each bend,
A sacrifice to their expectations end.
Im impressed!
Regards
David 🦖🦋
How the fuck do you know my name!!?? Are you stalking me?! Who are you?!
@@KatsiYori-zk5gm
Sorry my name is David I'm a poet is your comment address to me? I was complimenting you on your poem?
I'm so sorry, My name is also David, and I was surprised you knew my name. Thanks for the compliment.
@@KatsiYori-zk5gm David! Great name😊!!
Let's you and I start over! I'm an old dinosaur so I always sign off that way with my name 🦖!!
Now about your poem! Yes it's different but I like originality!! I hope you don't mind me saying this but you write with a mature mind? But I am guessing that you are younger?
Have you written many? You will see from my link, certainly back at the beginning, I write poetry about depression loneliness romance nature and LGBT!
More recently I have been writing diatribes about social issues!
Your poem impress me I'm happy to talk more but only if you are?
Regards
David 🦖
You search for the lost times Of things that shattered from heart Into pieces you shall find the mist memories
But still you hope yet again For the memories which reminds you The gain and the lost Making you falling into tears
Frozen air making my blood turn into cold like moon freezing my tears
Feeling empty in the darkest moments of my soul
Trying to light the light But the tears drown from your eyes doesn't allows;
Still searching for a light like searching for a diamond in the sea The darkest memories ante deeper than anything else;hoping for light
My first love poem (written this at 4am and used tools to make it better..)
Relationship is like a rollercoaster, the thrill grows calm.
I wonder why we seek more when the charm is gone.
Do the tracks become milder, made for children's delight?
Lost in thought, I yearned for the old days, wild and bright.
Amidst the twists and turns, I looked around to see,
The tracks remained the same, a familiar journey for me.
Then it struck me, the wildest rides I've known,
Are the ones I'm on now, not too wild, not too prone.
Nestled in my seat, hand and handle, gently entwined,
I find comfort and security, a love that feels kind.
No need for extremes, this ride feels just right,
Safe and content, as we hold each other tight.
I slowly opened my mouth and said, I love this ride.
Damn ! Girl this doesn't look like first poem at all ! It's a
✨ masterpiece✨
Omg this is sooooo good! Hit me up when you publish your first poetry collection because I am gonna need it!!!
WoAh
My poem : (Please dont judge) Its about a failed person winning in life because of motivation and hardwork.
In the depths of despair, where shadows linger long,
A soul once lost found solace in a new song.
Through the darkest night, where hope seemed to flee,
A spark ignited, whispering, "You can still be."
For though the world may scorn and fate may frown,
The heart that beats within shall not be weighed down.
With each new dawn, a chance to start anew,
To rise above the past, to dreams once more be true.
For though the road is long, and the journey rough,
The spirit within shall never say "enough."
So let the failures of the past be but a guide,
To steer the course, with faith and pride.
For in the heart of the one who dares to dream,
Lies the strength to rise, to conquer, to redeem.
For in the end, it's not the fall that defines,
But the courage to rise, and the will to shine.
i love this omg!!
Once we were like two peas in a pod.
Her voice, an enchanting Nightingale's song,
Compelled me to nod.
Her laughter and cheerful, vivid memory were so strong,
They eroded life's pains and discord.
But in a moment, everything was gone,
And I'm still waiting like a moron.
Without you, nothing feels like home.
The joyfulness from her presence has gone.
But I'm still waiting like a moron
I would like to share the first part of a trilogy I wrote about the love in my life......The Majestic Ocean 🌊
1) THE SEA & ITS FAMILY
Surging Undulating Seas
Majestic Tempestuous Ocean
Nature's Very Own Perpetual Motion.
The Seven Seas, The Seven Siblings
Of Father & Mother Ocean,
Brothers Artic, North & Caspian
Vying For Right Of Succession
Relentlessly Pushing & Pulling Their Briny Load
Across Global Expanse & Way Beyond
Competing, Quibbling As Only Brothers Can
The First To Deposit Their Spume Topped Swell.
Whispering Waves, A Task To Complete
Loudly Rushing In, A Noiseless Retreat
Teasingly, Caressing The Shoreline
Like A Thirsty Cat Lapping Milk!
Thank you for reading 🙏🦖
so good sirr🔥
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Thank you!!
I live near the sea! And I enjoy writing about the ocean!
This poem came from a dream, it was written as a trilogy
But it was too long for people to appreciate?
So I split into three, this was part 1!
David 🦖🌊
2:34 Video starts
First time I am writing my own poem,
Thank u sou much ananeu
"Through the rays of the sun , I see u
and under the light of the moon, I dream of u
Though u live miles of miles far from me, I can still feel the presense of u in the reflection of sea
but u will never know how much I love u .
"Yes, u will be there in my dream
singing across the stream
make me imagine the wattpad scenes
Yeah, it feels like living in fantasy
but it will not gonna happen in this reality
To dear me, don't worry one day u will find your dream soulmate
who will save u from this reality as a protective shade. "
I am just 11 yrs old , so if there is any kinds of mistake , pls comment.
And can anybody help me to give a title of this poem ?
it's so beautiful, I'm quite surprised actually, Lemme tell you it's absolutely captivating and amazing. title could be "when i think of you"
thank you! this really helps I'm trying to make a poem abt this girl.. yeahhahdh:)
As a poet, i have also written poetry inferring Suicide!
I was extremely impressed with your poem!!
I do hope, that studies permitting, we can talk further about our poetry!
Regards
David 🦖🦋
Happy to discuss poetry!
Regards
David 🦖🦋
lovee this !!! as an over thinker and perfectionist this has helped ease my mentality about writing poetry !!! THANK YOU
I agree I also find my poetry helps with my mental health!
David 🦖
I just write something I call a poem and uh- maybe yall can rate or judge it?😭
Attractive and tall,
Confident and never fall,
Messy and curly locks,
Sometimes had our eyes locked,
Both are rich brown orbs,
Having one trusted friend.
Looks gorgeous anytime,
Which seems to stop the time,
A surprisingly attractive voice,
Which is absolutely my choice,
Having such a graceful walk,
But doesn't really talk.
Seems to shine like the sun,
Tho are usually calm like the moon,
Have a sharp jaw and nose,
Makes my heart skips when close,
Always in my sight,
But always dissapear in a blink of an eye.
Tho I know he will never fall,
For a girl like me first of all,
Different religion also age,
Which makes my teen uncles enrage,
But I know that it's all up to my settled fate.
I made this poem for a special someone that I admire from afar- anyways, what do you think?^^'