I also started learning the concept and the process of haiku The white moon Fills the void of darkness In the misty night Can anyone tell me what correction or changes I can build within this haiku to make it much more representable and dazzling??
@@Madchemist002then how is mine lol You can't say it is haiku because haiku main rule is it should revolve Round nature **tongue cannon mis-aimed Words fired but over the wall Friendship castle fell**
Beautiful
Moon, Light, Water.
Amazing 🤩
I also started learning the concept and the process of haiku
The white moon
Fills the void of darkness
In the misty night
Can anyone tell me what correction or changes I can build within this haiku to make it much more representable and dazzling??
The syllables are off. It needs to be 5-7-5. The night sky's spotlight
A ray of light in darkness
In the misty night
A Beautiful sea
Glimmering with the moonbeam
Feels magical
How about this?
This is my first time
@@UFMusic369 I like it, but the last line is missing one syllable. It has 4 instead of 5.
@@Madchemist002then how is mine lol
You can't say it is haiku because haiku main rule is it should revolve Round nature
**tongue cannon mis-aimed
Words fired but over the wall
Friendship castle fell**
@infolab3900 I really like this one! It's creative and descriptive. It's so simple, but it speaks more than you'd think. Good job
I got one in romanian:
Pe malul mării
Bărcile se adună
Sub clar de lună