This is one of the few creepypastas that actually get to me, lingering in the back of my mind and surfacing once in a while. However, your voice is beautiful in this one, and gives me some comfort!
ok, we're now playing the drinking game, listen to a marathon of all the creepypastas on this channel, take a shot every time you heard "oh how wrong i was", you will get drunk.
Celephinn well if you know what youre refering to, the devil, or satan, tried to overthrow god, so god cast him down, and he became satan, the very essence of evil and satan is female....sooo it kind of contradicts itself. being a christian myself, and being very interested in that kind study ive learned that its very contradictory
Celephinn GageAlexanderDrums Satan is often confused with Lucifer. Lucifer was an angel. His only sin was loving God too much. And when God asked the angels to love man as they loved him, Lucifer refused. Therefore, as punishment for his defiance, he was cast into hell. At least, that's the story I've heard.
This is one of the best-written atmospheric horror stories I've ever heard. Every word sprinkles an amount of fear so small you won't notice until it builds up into full horror and you feel the chills up your spine. I remember I listened to this particular creepypasta on this channel 8 years ago while I was having a winter night walk on the coast, it was dark, cold, devoid of people and this narration hit me very hard I didn't even realize I had started walking waaay faster than usual. xd Damn, the nostalgia. Glad to hear this one again.
Thanks... But c'mon, one can find dozens of geographic and scientific errors in Jules Vern's novels... Yet I wonder - when bronze gets rusty (green patina covered bronze statues) - what is it? Can be scrape it and restore bronze from it?
@@nicholassudov2299 Not a geologist or have any credibility here but I THINK patina is like tarnish, as in a separate kind of substance that grows over in a thin layer. Not like rust where it changes or penetrates the metal.
+Daniel Gadomski for whatever reason lovecraft stuff doesnt click with me at all. its just annoying. but i was kinda spoiled on it after it became trendy...
To each his own. I like this classical horror style, but I understand why some people would find it boring for example. For me this growing suspense, paranoid atmosphere, madness slowly developing in the characters faced with inconceivable terrors, that's SO MUCH BETTER writting than ubiquitous "he's behind you!" cliché. Truly shows writer's ability to create such piece as above. And as of late popularity of lovecraftian style - never really cared about this. If I like something - I just like it, and can actually explain why I like it. Don't give a crap about the others collectively praising/hating something cause it's just another display of herd mentality.
oh I agree completely. thing is, I WANT to like it. I just ended up burnt out before I even started. But I agree that modern horror is a bit trash. I don't really care about the popularity of something. stuff just gets old so terribly fast. I adore more subtle intelligent writing and i think i'd get into it, though. I think I'll get over it and just try it.. any recommendations on where to start?
This is undoubtably my favorite creepypasta of your narrations. I have no idea why people are complaining, this is one of the best creepypastas out there.
pep inyostep If you don't know who Lovecraft was then I suggest you look it up, in case you liked this story that is. The most similar story that comes to mind is "The Shadow Out of Time"
It's funny how these little stories people write mostly for fun are often more well written than the majority of the movies that are released.. At the very least, the horror movies.
"I have little to no professional knowledge of any ancient civilization or how to read hyroglyphs. But I do know that this metal is older than anything man made and I can read the inscriptions on the sphere, even though there are no similar languages to base their inscriptions to. I will also pick up the sphere because it's shiny."
The beast won with his decision to commit suicide. Not once did the explorer turned for religious help from a priest especially since he knew it was something supernatural that haunted his very soul. His fate is what the scriptures of the Bible that said a foolish man who builds his house on sand will soon find it all wash away when the rain comes. (rain being life's trouble or hardships) That is why he blew his brains something that if you told him earlier that he would end his life that he would laugh and said not in a million years. The story is a good lesson of what it means to be fully prepared for the worse and that is to be ever watchful and guarded in deep rooted faith.
So....whoever imprisoned it thought, "Hey, let's use this large enticing ball to lock the world devourer away. No one will ever want to touch it." Really, ancient people? No archaic enchantments required? No impossible to solve puzzle? Or, how about this: no way to open the prison at all? I mean, why did they leave a means to open it, and an incredibly easy one, at that? I never got that about stories with demons locked away accidentally being set free. Did the ancient guys think, "We'll leave a way to open it just in case we discover we left our car keys in there"?
I liked that one, it was descriptive, didn't slouch on length, and had that intellectual commentary in the beginning that not only foreshadowed the story but gave meaning to it as well (even if it was a little heavy on the "Indians had their land taken from them" thing) my opinion on the precursor from the beginning is that there is more to life than taking those set paths... because life is about finding meaning and some people spend their whole life on the path, searching, and never reaching their destination.
Alexander Legener How not? Someone filled with curiosity goes into a deep dark place no one has ever been to sate their desire for knowledge and finds evidence of something far beyond human experience. He encounters something so terrifying and mind blowing that he never recovers from the experience. That's like 80% of Lovecraft.
Did you miss the screaming christian overtones? It's painful. Besides, it's too obvious, and too specific. Lovecraft's horror comes from a lack of description, so that your mind fills in the blanks. Lovecraft was writing tabula rasa; blank slates upon which you made up the monster just as much as he did. And this was far FAR to grounded. Basically he sees Satan and freaks. Lovecraft wrote things like Yog-Sothoth, a creature we can't understand because it does not abide by our physical properties. It's rooted in a dimension above ours, and does not fall into our understood constraints. While yes, many were described, his writing was so much more vague.
@@bigsquish6036 lmao dude what? You getting defensive over a common misconception? Bronze is a man made alloy that cant be found naturally, that's just how it be.
Ah, the title reminds me of the Silversun Pickups song "The Pit" 'When your eyes can adjust and you see what's in view. Discolored and distempered smiles that seen you'
Man goes wandering to abandoned place to discover ancient relic? (CHECK!) Ancient evil not of this world? (CHECK!) Narrator cannot explain strange geometries and indefinable evil? (CHECK!) Narrator plans to kill himself? (Check again!) Someone has ready up on their Lovecraft.
I love long creepy pastas, I play them in the background while I play League of legends and the longer they are, the less I have to find a new one, haha.
"Concerning what met my eyes in that horrific moment ...what greeted me was unfathomably horrific in every aspect imaginable." The spirit of Lovecraft is alive, well, and coming for humanity. All hail - while you still have time.
Tracks by name. 0:00 I don't know, if anyone can help me with the name of the track, please do. 1:40 Disintergrating 6:14 Countdown 8:15 House of Marionettes 11:10 I don't know. 19:42 I don't know, but help would be really appreciated. 26:25 I don't know. 28:48 Return of Lazarus 33:10 On The Passing Of Time
Because he uses the same voice for each creepypasta my imagination is telling me that it's the same person in each story and all his life he went though this crap. Ps. This story would make a good Cthulhu Mythos.
So it was either a minotaur or a satyr I'm too optimistic to think that would be our last day. Judging by the cavern and the description I'd go with minotaur. Of course theres also something called a Krampus that's similar in detail... but that's more like a modern bogyman around Christmas. ... either way, nope not gonna be the end, not by one creature anyway. ^.^ Love your readings btw. ^.^
The end of the world will happen 4.5 billion years from now when the earth gets burnt to a crisp when the sun dies... And then Half Life 3 will be released the next day...
I really like Creepypastas like this, 1999, Psychosis, and The Cave (The Cave I don't think was made as a video yet, and I don't think Psychosis was either). I like to find Creepypastas like these but they never come easy. They take a lot of searching to find.
Some good descriptions, but not the most intriguing Creepy Pasta, I would give it a 4 out of 10. My favorite so far is the Russian Sleep Experiment which I would rate a 10/10.
I know I am going to sound like an ass but I do not intend to. This story is so painfully badly written, it takes away from the events in the creppypasta. Cramming your story and overloading it with descriptive words and metaphors extends it and makes it very evident that the writer has little skill. When you fill it up with this much description, it disinterests readers and makes the actual story vague. You might as well make it a comic or picture. Using descriptive language is good and important, but too much of it is just excessive and ruins the feel of it, and when using a first person perspective, this amount of description seems unrealistic and trying too hard. If the story was in 3rd person, it would be much better. Overall the story is neat, and it does improve towards the end, but the sheer amount of waffle in the middle is poor. Just my opinion.
![“The Masterson Chronicles” [COMPLETE] | Creepypasta Compilation](http://i.ytimg.com/vi/A5OEqVnTtGQ/mqdefault.jpg)
4:18 - It was then that...
4:32 - It was then that...
5:35 - It was then that...
15:53 - It was then that...
And lastly 24:49 - It was then that...
Bruh the first two were it was IN
This is one of the few creepypastas that actually get to me, lingering in the back of my mind and surfacing once in a while. However, your voice is beautiful in this one, and gives me some comfort!
I love his narration so much. there's just something about his voice that makes you believe everything he is telling you.
Mate, if I was stuck in an underground goo tank for a few thousands of years, I'd be pissed as well.
ok, we're now playing the drinking game, listen to a marathon of all the creepypastas on this channel, take a shot every time you heard "oh how wrong i was", you will get drunk.
TheJojoNetwork or "Thats when things got weird"
MrMichaelbhsdoles yep.
TheJojoNetwork ill find my self handcuffed to a hamburger
death will ensue
Or "My blood ran cold"
When he discovered the broze, I kinda thought he had stumbled upon a dwemer ruin
I too have an unhealthy skyrim addiction
@@lilithdoyle5703 unhealthy? Blasphemy! By the nine, go to the closest shrine of Talos and cleanse thyself
Yes!
@@lilithdoyle5703
That's also my favorite Elder Scrolls game.
One of the first, if not the first creepypasta I ever listened to. Thank you Creepsmcpasta, you've changed my UA-cam habits forever.
Go on an adventure. Wake Satan. Doom The World.. Never Go On An Adventure Again!
Celephinn well if you know what youre refering to, the devil, or satan, tried to overthrow god, so god cast him down, and he became satan, the very essence of evil and satan is female....sooo it kind of contradicts itself. being a christian myself, and being very interested in that kind study ive learned that its very contradictory
I used to be an adventurer like you, until I woke Satan and doomed the world.
The Barkspawn memes
he tried to take gods throne...
Celephinn GageAlexanderDrums
Satan is often confused with Lucifer. Lucifer was an angel. His only sin was loving God too much. And when God asked the angels to love man as they loved him, Lucifer refused. Therefore, as punishment for his defiance, he was cast into hell.
At least, that's the story I've heard.
This is one of the best-written atmospheric horror stories I've ever heard. Every word sprinkles an amount of fear so small you won't notice until it builds up into full horror and you feel the chills up your spine. I remember I listened to this particular creepypasta on this channel 8 years ago while I was having a winter night walk on the coast, it was dark, cold, devoid of people and this narration hit me very hard I didn't even realize I had started walking waaay faster than usual. xd Damn, the nostalgia. Glad to hear this one again.
I will never play Minecraft the same way anymore
+Aurora Dont worry! Theres no bronze in vanilla Minecraft. If there was one, just play on peaceful.
actually i wish minecraft had a more grim mature version
I was thinking about that too
Can You imagine each 7th night is a night of anomalies, for example, monster that haunts you
+Aurora
Minecraft is whatever you want it to be.
1. there is no 't' in 'miscellaneous'
2. there is no such thing as bronze ore.
that's scary.
_TIN AND COPPER_ !
Well. On the topic of bronze, he didn't write it.
Thanks... But c'mon, one can find dozens of geographic and scientific errors in Jules Vern's novels... Yet I wonder - when bronze gets rusty (green patina covered bronze statues) - what is it? Can be scrape it and restore bronze from it?
Oh come on it was an easy mistake to make. He correctly calls it an alloy later.
@@nicholassudov2299 Not a geologist or have any credibility here but I THINK patina is like tarnish, as in a separate kind of substance that grows over in a thin layer. Not like rust where it changes or penetrates the metal.
Oh come on! There's no such thing as "bronze ore". Bronze is a fucking alloy metal!
Maybe this is meant: bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Bronzor_%28Pok%C3%A9mon%29
XD
Asemafilmi hahaha ikr there is no bronze ore but still a god story
That is the scariest thing about this.
Asemafilmi Immersion fkn broken
Asemafilmi he said *it was in fact a thick layer of metalled aloy* never said it was bronze ore :/
Evil deity that is destined to end all life on earth, trapped by a little rock and metal
possibly a magically imbued metal
Metal conquers all. *Get it? Lol the Music?*
Name is Ted Cruse.
Lol the Devils only weakness
+Jasper Bacon kill it with fire
In Soviet Russia we us AK to scare off red human
i blast my kalashnikov my friend
@@crashtheatre3073 The fuck do you mean you "blast it"?
@@crashtheatre3073 why did u destroy such good weapon comrade?
Still, one of my favs. It has this amazing Lovecraft vibe.
+Daniel Gadomski for whatever reason lovecraft stuff doesnt click with me at all. its just annoying. but i was kinda spoiled on it after it became trendy...
To each his own. I like this classical horror style, but I understand why some people would find it boring for example. For me this growing suspense, paranoid atmosphere, madness slowly developing in the characters faced with inconceivable terrors, that's SO MUCH BETTER writting than ubiquitous "he's behind you!" cliché. Truly shows writer's ability to create such piece as above.
And as of late popularity of lovecraftian style - never really cared about this. If I like something - I just like it, and can actually explain why I like it. Don't give a crap about the others collectively praising/hating something cause it's just another display of herd mentality.
oh I agree completely. thing is, I WANT to like it. I just ended up burnt out before I even started. But I agree that modern horror is a bit trash. I don't really care about the popularity of something. stuff just gets old so terribly fast. I adore more subtle intelligent writing and i think i'd get into it, though.
I think I'll get over it and just try it.. any recommendations on where to start?
+Daniel Gadomski Just curious, what is lovecraft?
+Arin Aiello I've never read it, but lovecraft refers to H.P. Lovecraft, the person who wrote about things like Cthulu and stuff.
"This weapon, so calmly associated with sadness and war, is to be my salvation-"
Alright already Mr. Thesaurus, just do it!
Gandalf could've stopped Carnate, The Tormenter. YOU SHALL NOT PASS!
LMFAO . You just made me laugh so hard!
This is undoubtably my favorite creepypasta of your narrations. I have no idea why people are complaining, this is one of the best creepypastas out there.
I didn't know H.P. Lovecraft wrote creepypastas.
I just looked it up and yep. This is very H.P. Lovecraft style.
HA!!!
WHO DAT?
pep inyostep
If you don't know who Lovecraft was then I suggest you look it up, in case you liked this story that is.
The most similar story that comes to mind is "The Shadow Out of Time"
"Devourer of worlds"
The first Creepy Pasta I've ever listend to and still one of the best!
This was probably the first, and definitely one of the first creepypastas I’ve ever listened to.
It's funny how these little stories people write mostly for fun are often more well written than the majority of the movies that are released.. At the very least, the horror movies.
"I have little to no professional knowledge of any ancient civilization or how to read hyroglyphs. But I do know that this metal is older than anything man made and I can read the inscriptions on the sphere, even though there are no similar languages to base their inscriptions to. I will also pick up the sphere because it's shiny."
Next Creepypasta- "The Pill" Creepypasta
Aha molly
Nen Arista Pre medicinal ambrosia
The beast won with his decision to commit suicide.
Not once did the explorer turned for religious help from a priest especially since he knew it was something supernatural that haunted his very soul. His fate is what the scriptures of the Bible that said a foolish man who builds his house on sand will soon find it all wash away when the rain comes. (rain being life's trouble or hardships) That is why he blew his brains something that if you told him earlier that he would end his life that he would laugh and said not in a million years. The story is a good lesson of what it means to be fully prepared for the worse and that is to be ever watchful and guarded in deep rooted faith.
iN 2021 THE WORLD MIGHT END
BJM Graphics bro youre fucking crazy.
it puts the lotion on its skin or it gets the hose again
Silence of the lambs
joe dirt
That's what I thought lmao
@@christopherrobin3763
I used to be an Adventurer like you then I took a fall in the pit.
Quinn Hill
I used to be an Adventurer like you then I took a fall in the pit.
love it
when the creepy pasta contains mythology you just know it's gonna be awsome
This CreepyPasta should either be a movie or short film.
See Dr Who:The Satan Pit
I'm 15 minutes into the story and shit just started to get good, can't wait
This story needs to be published in the form of a childrens book. Or a TV special. I was thoroughly immersed.
Thank you for your work I really really like your narrations especially the long ones like these they give me chills thanks against :)
Again*
So....whoever imprisoned it thought, "Hey, let's use this large enticing ball to lock the world devourer away. No one will ever want to touch it." Really, ancient people? No archaic enchantments required? No impossible to solve puzzle? Or, how about this: no way to open the prison at all? I mean, why did they leave a means to open it, and an incredibly easy one, at that? I never got that about stories with demons locked away accidentally being set free. Did the ancient guys think, "We'll leave a way to open it just in case we discover we left our car keys in there"?
Lmao true
Am I the only one who taught of Aliens then Indiana Jones and the Crystal Skull? (love this story :) )
No I did for awhile
+Maya Driessen I thought the bronze circle was a giant coin.
+Maya Driessen i did
I did in the exact same order
Maya Driessen I did
this is one of my favorites because of how absorbing the story is.
The person in this story truely is a pit-iful human being B)
YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH
*slow clapping*
Slower clapping
Super fast and loud clapping with confetti
Seriously, please no moar puns. ;_;
This creepypasta is def in my top 5. And ive heard well over 1000 i think over the past 5.5 years
"What time is it?!" Me: "the end of time. Good luck with that "
God damn it now I have to go out of full screen :(
thats not a time
Dragon Noodle Soup well yeah since I didn't even remember making this comment
That was incredible! Favorite creepypasta right there.
How long until the end of the world?
28 days. 6 hours. 42 minutes. 12 seconds.
Is that true or not?
Nurul Natalia Completely. Nobody lies on the internet.
Nope the end of the world is when i achieve the means to actually use Alchemy and burn the world to ashes.
Wheeki . So... Never since alchemy is impossible? Okay.
***** YES! Someone got the reference!
I liked that one, it was descriptive, didn't slouch on length, and had that intellectual commentary in the beginning that not only foreshadowed the story but gave meaning to it as well (even if it was a little heavy on the "Indians had their land taken from them" thing) my opinion on the precursor from the beginning is that there is more to life than taking those set paths... because life is about finding meaning and some people spend their whole life on the path, searching, and never reaching their destination.
Reminds me of a Lovecraft story.
me too.
This reminded me nothing of Lovecraft. It's told in a very similar fashion, but is nothing like Lovecraft.
Alexander Legener
How not? Someone filled with curiosity goes into a deep dark place no one has ever been to sate their desire for knowledge and finds evidence of something far beyond human experience. He encounters something so terrifying and mind blowing that he never recovers from the experience.
That's like 80% of Lovecraft.
Did you miss the screaming christian overtones? It's painful. Besides, it's too obvious, and too specific. Lovecraft's horror comes from a lack of description, so that your mind fills in the blanks. Lovecraft was writing tabula rasa; blank slates upon which you made up the monster just as much as he did. And this was far FAR to grounded. Basically he sees Satan and freaks. Lovecraft wrote things like Yog-Sothoth, a creature we can't understand because it does not abide by our physical properties. It's rooted in a dimension above ours, and does not fall into our understood constraints. While yes, many were described, his writing was so much more vague.
antonio D uh oh someones using their big mature words
This is the perfect length for a perfect story. Loved it! More please!
Bronze is an alloy, of copper and tin. bronze ore does not exist naturally and bronze ore does not exist.
Rodas Tadeu you’re trying to sound smart but you said the same thing twice. Good job you weirdo. Anime profile picture🤮🤮🤮
@@bigsquish6036 XD
@@bigsquish6036 lmao dude what? You getting defensive over a common misconception? Bronze is a man made alloy that cant be found naturally, that's just how it be.
Ah, the title reminds me of the Silversun Pickups song "The Pit"
'When your eyes can adjust and you see what's in view. Discolored and distempered smiles that seen you'
>He goes on for 20 paragraphs describing a rock
>nothing really happens
Man goes wandering to abandoned place to discover ancient relic? (CHECK!)
Ancient evil not of this world? (CHECK!)
Narrator cannot explain strange geometries and indefinable evil? (CHECK!)
Narrator plans to kill himself? (Check again!)
Someone has ready up on their Lovecraft.
I love long creepy pastas, I play them in the background while I play League of legends and the longer they are, the less I have to find a new one, haha.
turn that shit off and focus on your game son
I use Creepy pastas instead of music.....
I do too. :D
"Concerning what met my eyes in that horrific moment ...what greeted me was unfathomably horrific in every aspect imaginable."
The spirit of Lovecraft is alive, well, and coming for humanity. All hail - while you still have time.
How long until the end of the world? 30 seconds if the device works.
Sounds like the same guy who designed the lock designed the perfectly straight exhaust port on the Deathstar
an ember alert just came up on my phone and scared the shit outa me
That's a really cool Pit I bet Stilt Walkers are down inside it.
man some creepypastas act like they written in 1800's with that dramatic talk
Tracks by name.
0:00 I don't know, if anyone can help me with the name of the track, please do.
1:40 Disintergrating
6:14 Countdown
8:15 House of Marionettes
11:10 I don't know.
19:42 I don't know, but help would be really appreciated.
26:25 I don't know.
28:48 Return of Lazarus
33:10 On The Passing Of Time
Will you people stop unleashing random evil upon the world.
This is very well written and narrated with just expertise.
Too bad the narrator wasn't Gandalf.
This is one of my new favorite stories of all time
I was expecting to hear a gunshot at the end tbh
What if the evil thing stopped him before he could, and he and the evil thing became one?•_•
Because he uses the same voice for each creepypasta my imagination is telling me that it's the same person in each story and all his life he went though this crap.
Ps. This story would make a good Cthulhu Mythos.
seems like something you would see in bloodborne.
True
Yeah... Bloodborne would have something like this, probably as an early-game boss
I'm 2 minutes in and its already my favorite pasta.
I usually love his stories but this one i couldn't get into
I like how they say how "indescribable" something is, then they describe it.
So it was either a minotaur or a satyr I'm too optimistic to think that would be our last day. Judging by the cavern and the description I'd go with minotaur. Of course theres also something called a Krampus that's similar in detail... but that's more like a modern bogyman around Christmas. ... either way, nope not gonna be the end, not by one creature anyway. ^.^ Love your readings btw. ^.^
even when a creepypasta is bad mr creepypasta can make it scary
Actually very Lovecraftian.
that's why I liked it, I'm a huge Lovecraft fan
+Gavlick Apthesycerski - Lovecraft & Poe are fantastic :-)
+Raven De Bonaire yeah Lovecraft is my favorite writer, I play a lot of Call of Cthulhu role playing too. IA IA
Really good pasta I like how it starts. It show emotion
11:00 *cough* that's what he said *cough*
I think "gloops" might be the least menacing word in the world.
The end of the world will happen 4.5 billion years from now when the earth gets burnt to a crisp when the sun dies... And then Half Life 3 will be released the next day...
This reminds me of H.P Lovecraft’s story ‘The nameless city’ or maybe that Doctor Who episode where they find satan.
Someone call Doomguy and get a BFG 9000 and problem solved.
Remember, if you ever think you've made the worst mistake of your life,
just remember what the guy in this story did and you'll feel fine.
Maybe it was said already but it bothers me. There is no such thing as bronze ore. Bronze is alloy.
So I have now listened to about 2 1/2 hours worth of creepy pastas. I didn't need sleep tonight anyways. But very good story.
Khorne's just like "Oh hey, thanks for finding that daemon prince I forgot to back on Holy Terra!"
I really liked "Pit" but I like "On A Hill" before I watched this one. I personally like all the gore, and all. Keep up the good work!
There is no such thing as bronze ore...Bronze is an alloy.
LoneDragon sssshshhhhhhhhhhhhh
Plot twist: It was the word "or" made out of bronze.
I love your voice uts like i transport in the story i can feel how your character feels its just perfect for scary stories
I find this very Lovecraftian ^^
I really like Creepypastas like this, 1999, Psychosis, and The Cave (The Cave I don't think was made as a video yet, and I don't think Psychosis was either). I like to find Creepypastas like these but they never come easy. They take a lot of searching to find.
"Bronze ore" lol
This is better than any horror movie.
He saw lucifer
one of the most briliant creepypasta out there.
The person that wrote this knows nothing about turn of the century mining techniques!
Loool! That's a odd bit of critique
this was released a day before my 12th birthday two years ago
CreepsMcPasta have my babies!
ummmmm......I'm just going to act like i never read this.
If you were truly going to do so, you would not have commented. Commenting signifies having read this.
I'll have your babies... (0_o)
Golly gee wizz I sure do enjoy sexual intercourse with strangers for the purpose of procreation.
I'm hoping that's a yes.
Dude your voice is perfect for creepypastas
As above so below? .3.
Oh yes, plz, by all means, hide the one object that seemed the most effective at sealing the beast. Because that makes total sence.
Some good descriptions, but not the most intriguing Creepy Pasta, I would give it a 4 out of 10. My favorite so far is the Russian Sleep Experiment which I would rate a 10/10.
Oh god that...I'm still scared at the thought.
*You are next, THE RUSSIANS ARE AFTER US ALL!*
Upon the pit opening a big red hand emerged and a loud roar let out saying "I AM COMPLETE"
Meow
Hiissss
aylamaiia woof
Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
arooooooooooo
Shnarcklllllllllllllll
These stories are amazing and he reads them so well. Not to mention his accent UGGHH 😍❤️.
Meet me in the pit m8
Sorry I couldn't make it
is it the meeting yet?
Ash kinkaid you missed it
U wot m8 ill rek u dis is my pit m80
Bill Wilson oh no! I'm sorry fine sir,
I will leave at once.
so there is no deb8.
17:33 that noise actually scared me
I know I am going to sound like an ass but I do not intend to. This story is so painfully badly written, it takes away from the events in the creppypasta. Cramming your story and overloading it with descriptive words and metaphors extends it and makes it very evident that the writer has little skill. When you fill it up with this much description, it disinterests readers and makes the actual story vague. You might as well make it a comic or picture. Using descriptive language is good and important, but too much of it is just excessive and ruins the feel of it, and when using a first person perspective, this amount of description seems unrealistic and trying too hard. If the story was in 3rd person, it would be much better. Overall the story is neat, and it does improve towards the end, but the sheer amount of waffle in the middle is poor. Just my opinion.
Good job mate you found one of the great old ones
Hey creeps r we ever going to see your face?
He said he will never show his face
Jayden Fassett Choice, or because he doesn't want fans that now know what his face is to stalk him?
If he gets $50,000 dollars a month on patreon he will
"Death." Oh, I was thinking astronaut. I mean, it also fits into all those categories... *the crickets of awkwardness begin to chirp* right? Guys?