7 FATAL MISTAKES Ruining Your DESCRIPTION

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  • @miriamccol
    @miriamccol Рік тому +103

    absolutely heartbroken he doesn't like taylor swift 💔

    • @sallychesters1881
      @sallychesters1881 Рік тому +19

      he just hasn’t listened to folklore yet

    • @presleycharman
      @presleycharman Рік тому +6

      in my inspector calls essay at the end i had an extra minute so i wrote “and the theme of patriarchy expanded to a much wider audience in the modern world and as Taylor Swift puts it “f the patriarchy!””

    • @shaunshalli
      @shaunshalli Рік тому +15

      common salles W

    • @floralsatellite
      @floralsatellite Рік тому

      @@presleycharmanso true for that

    • @annacapstick2935
      @annacapstick2935 Рік тому +4

      i manipulate so many of her lyrics into every piece of writing i do haha

  • @undercoversummer1232
    @undercoversummer1232 Рік тому +64

    I know this is a bit late but i just want to thank you for all the help in English literature especially how you respond to comments and make sure to help your students thank you for your hard work and dedication to help us get the top grades!!

  • @LeoChaseTheMythMaster
    @LeoChaseTheMythMaster Рік тому +23

    Question 5 is something I actually enjoy in exams. Thank you Mr Salles for these extra tips.

    • @vxon9613
      @vxon9613 Рік тому +1

      question 5 is hard for me, due to my lack of vocabulary

    • @LeoChaseTheMythMaster
      @LeoChaseTheMythMaster Рік тому

      @@vxon9613 well good luck anyway.

  • @GrugIsCool85
    @GrugIsCool85 Рік тому +21

    thank you mr salles genuinely your top tips/ things to avoid helped me to get grade 9s in both my language mocks.terrified for tomorrow and praying aqa is nice to us 🙏🙏

    • @MrSallesTeachesEnglish
      @MrSallesTeachesEnglish  Рік тому +7

      Teacher is usually mark the mocks harshly, in the mistaken belief that you’ll stop trying, if they give you two higher mark! You’ll do brilliantly

    • @calmingnature-whitenoise6945
      @calmingnature-whitenoise6945 Рік тому +2

      i despise when people say things like that. if you have gotten 9s then stop acting like that

    • @GrugIsCool85
      @GrugIsCool85 Рік тому +5

      @@calmingnature-whitenoise6945 im merely thanking him for helping me get those grades. there’s no need to be so snarky - how we will perform tomorrow is completely unpredictable because of the stress so there’s no definite chance i will achieve those same grades. get down from your high horse there’s no need to be pessimistic.
      im sorry if you don’t like it, i can’t change that ig

    • @rosie3639
      @rosie3639 Рік тому +4

      @@calmingnature-whitenoise6945 people can still be nervous... just because you’ve got a 9 before doesn’t necessarily mean you will in the real thing, get a grip

    • @uhno6771
      @uhno6771 Рік тому

      @@GrugIsCool85 good luck though im sure you'll do great

  • @user-sv9dn4ir8o
    @user-sv9dn4ir8o Рік тому +13

    Just bought your guide for 100% in eng lang, it’s amazing and wanted to say thank you so much for all your help :))

  • @tfe1788
    @tfe1788 Рік тому +9

    Could you write a story of someone finding the photo on the ground or something like that? So you could describe how it's crumpled and faded but then go and describe the image itself.

  • @fungusz_4292
    @fungusz_4292 Рік тому +5

    I got 35/40 with only 2 pages and 30 minutes, ready to smash it again

  • @beatadecay_4422
    @beatadecay_4422 Рік тому +3

    Random tip for people that works for me: Q1 first, easy marks, familiarise with extract. Q2/3 you have ideas about the extract, start one of the short questions to get some more marks in the bag and get ur ideas flowing (almost like a warmup). I then move to Q5, the big marks, have a break from extract and start the other part of ur english brain going. Remembering to plan and only spent like 40/45 mins on it. Recap the extract and tackle the evil Q4, now youve warmed up get the rest of the big marks in. With the time you have left you only have a short 8 marker left so its not the end of the world if u dont finish it. So thats what works for me. 13542.

    • @Ayzlxn
      @Ayzlxn Рік тому

      This is a great idea! I might switch where you do 3 for 2 as I just feel more comfortable with it but thank you!

  • @catclash8212
    @catclash8212 Рік тому +28

    Mr Salles listen to folklore and evermore you’re supposed to like creative writing

  • @atoatomic8177
    @atoatomic8177 Рік тому +3

    Thank you Mr Salles for English Literature and Language papers 1 and 2 :D

  • @user-zn5mh9pb3x
    @user-zn5mh9pb3x Рік тому +2

    Love this! Wanted to say that you’ve helped me so much especially for literature!! I have my language exam next week and I was wondering could I send you an essay to mark for a video? Thanks again!:)

  • @meestafreeski
    @meestafreeski Рік тому +2

    Bro the Messiah of Modern English Language

  • @mjgccd
    @mjgccd Рік тому +9

    can we combine the narrative and description?

  • @imogendalyy
    @imogendalyy Рік тому +15

    no way mr salles doesnt like taylor swift!!!

    • @Slobrojoe
      @Slobrojoe Рік тому +1

      Like she said.
      Haters gonna hate hate hate hate

  • @laibanadeem7811
    @laibanadeem7811 Рік тому +1

    If your picture is like in a mall but you have got a weather setting memorised how to adapt that into the picture?

  • @user-sp6hu8fw3s
    @user-sp6hu8fw3s Рік тому +2

    Hi sir, you released a book on description wherein you wrote a grade 9 bad weather description and a grade 9 good weather description , in which you simply took out words and replaced them based on the picture. Des that still apply to the paper now(a i allowed to do this), or will it be counted as plagiarism?

  • @MaddisonFrawley
    @MaddisonFrawley Рік тому +1

    Sir, when are we getting the Structural techniques video with Mr Everything English?

  • @yourhotspotbro
    @yourhotspotbro Рік тому +3

    I already know this is going to be useful by looking at the thumbnail!!

  • @quinn.j4381
    @quinn.j4381 Рік тому

    Sir i wanted to know, if the picture was grey, are we still allowed to talk about colour?

  • @jammy333
    @jammy333 Рік тому +3

    hi mr salles, i wrote a piece of creative writing based on a photo i found on the internet of some flowers in a field, and i was wondering if you could give me a rough mark/grade based on it :)
    The facade of liveliness sickens me everyday.
    The tulips do not belong in this dreary field. They stand out, fluorescent orange in the sun's haze. Crowding miserably around them stands dilapidated shards of grass, crumpled and squashed: diamonds devalued once met with human touch.
    Against my bare legs, the sharp edges cause an insufferable itchiness, like a clothing tag begging to be ripped off. They encase the dainty flowers like a glass closet - I scoff at their pathetic attempt at shielding. Whistling carelessly below me, the helpless screams of the infant petals are drowned out by the howling of the wind; yet another victim to the brutal reality of death.
    Commemoration seems only appropriate - I allow the soft, silky petals to caress my skin: their pureness likens them to a deceased child, taken from the world before they have had time to blossom. As I peeled my eyes from them, I noticed the beauty of the setting.
    The whole area is heavenly, suffused with the smell of liveliness. For a moment in time, my mind slips of the dreaded darkness in the distance: trees cowering; wildlife erased; clouds bustling, threatening with a tantrum, like a toddler gifted with an unpleasant Christmas present.
    Fear and dreadfulness fumigates my nose.
    The gloomy grey sky peers down at me - it's massiveness engulfs any worth I have. I am a mere speck in an ever expanding universe of terror. Wistfulness is all I can feel, as the clouds cry out hysterically - yearning for the comfort of the ambient temperature of my abode - the bawling is uncontainable. those sanctuary appear so close, it could not be further from me.
    The tulips mock me as I scurry through the knives surrounding them - I envy their ability to adapt. Their once comforting orange pigment begins to insult my current discomfort.
    An impending doom awaits me.
    (308 words)
    im aware that it's quite short, i am working on making it longer :)

    • @MrSallesTeachesEnglish
      @MrSallesTeachesEnglish  Рік тому +1

      Some lovely description. Get rid of the first sentence and references to death. It works much better as a story of successful struggle rather than doom

    • @jammy333
      @jammy333 Рік тому

      @@MrSallesTeachesEnglish thank you!!!

    • @calmingnature-whitenoise6945
      @calmingnature-whitenoise6945 Рік тому

      grade 6 probs

  • @musabaden5633
    @musabaden5633 Рік тому

    say u have a sunny bright description picture can you start of with a positive description can you slowly descend into a frightening / scary description

  • @odufamaduabuchi8177
    @odufamaduabuchi8177 Рік тому +2

    Mr salles we love you thank you so much

  • @ael5092
    @ael5092 Рік тому +1

    can you write the story or description in first person or is it best to speak in third?
    also thank you for all your help with English literature

  • @tacendamori
    @tacendamori Рік тому

    how much do we need to mention the picture? can it just be 1 out of say 4 paragraphs?

  • @gunveen7049
    @gunveen7049 Рік тому

    is the picture just a description or can you write a story around it?

  • @msh1380
    @msh1380 Рік тому

    Could a diary entry question come up on English Language Paper 2 as Question 5? I haven't really prepared for it. P.S. Love your videos. Keep up the amazing work👍

    • @CH-xq6if
      @CH-xq6if Рік тому +1

      I don't think that could be persuasive writing because it's not for anyone else.

  • @ewanjohns4260
    @ewanjohns4260 Рік тому

    Thank you mr salles for saving my english grades

  • @_rebekah06
    @_rebekah06 Рік тому

    Do you get marked down for not writing enough ?

  • @moelden-ford912
    @moelden-ford912 Рік тому

    so useful sir. Thank you so much!

  • @Savoureyes
    @Savoureyes Рік тому +2

    Amazing THANK YOU!!

  • @knxwn553
    @knxwn553 Рік тому

    You said that try and start each sentence with a different word but would it be fine if you repeat it for repitition/anaphora

  • @turty7323
    @turty7323 Рік тому +1

    Are we guaranteed to get a photo in the exam? Whether it be a story or a description?

    • @Slobrojoe
      @Slobrojoe Рік тому +1

      No it’s not guaranteed. However, if there is a picture, it’s most likely to be description but no guarantees again

    • @MrSallesTeachesEnglish
      @MrSallesTeachesEnglish  Рік тому +3

      Yes, 99%. If not, you can use one in your mind, which would be even better

  • @CartmanProductions681
    @CartmanProductions681 Рік тому

    can you make a video abut descriptions for charactors or themes

  • @FIFA16XD
    @FIFA16XD Рік тому

    Is is possible if you could do a video on the Eduqas specification please?

  • @msh1380
    @msh1380 Рік тому

    HI MR SALLES! I was thinking about signing up to your substack/website. I was wondering how quickly you would mark English language questions I send on the page for the exam tomorrow

  • @proudchristian9873
    @proudchristian9873 Рік тому

    Can you make a vid on creative writing for edexcel paper 1?

  • @user-pf8fz1jh2j
    @user-pf8fz1jh2j Рік тому

    Thanks again for another great video.

  • @Luver2196
    @Luver2196 Рік тому

    Thank you very much!!!

  • @Da6dul
    @Da6dul Рік тому

    Hi sir could you please give an example of a kick ass sentence

  • @bwluerry
    @bwluerry Рік тому

    very useful video thanks alot!!!!!

  • @godislove3330
    @godislove3330 9 місяців тому

    Great thank you 🙏🏾

  • @gamingwithalikeyani3798
    @gamingwithalikeyani3798 Рік тому

    Please could you mark this AQA English Language Paper Q5
    The old grandfather had seen better days. Judging by his weak and frail face. Old and wrinkled as if a piece of paper has been scrunched up and opened up again. He has lived a very merry and a jolly childhood until the age of 80. His days of running, playing with a football for hours on end, blasting water guns on soft faces and soaking clothes and people like a shower has come to an end.
    The days of the grandfather fondling, playing football and playing video games with the grandchildren have come to a complete stop. All there is now, is a spirit, slowly oozing out of this man’s face day by day. Deteriorating day by day until his final place of rest is his coffin and the graveyard.
    Hang on a second, the Grandfather hasn’t fully passed yet, his white and old frail eyes still have more things to see. The grandchildren still love their Grandfather with all of their heart! His old and frail fingers still work tirelessly when his fingers dance around on a controller with the grand children. He may not be smiling due to his immense old age but he still has some life left in his darkened, glowing face.
    He may use a wheelchair, but he still gets to take the grandchildren to the park and make them laugh and happy. Though now his face is starting to become all frail, old and wrinkly. He still has more life yet despite him being closer and closer to his grave. Depression and harsh memories from WWII has hit him harder than a canon. Along side the PTSD.
    The old Grandfather had seen better days after wartime, dark and pleasant moments. He had a jolly childhood until war. It may have took him many years to recover, but now he is getting closer to his grave. The wrinkles and the illness on his face says it all.

  • @mongooseman6707
    @mongooseman6707 Рік тому +1

    for english language paper 1 can i repeat points i made in previous questions, such as repeating a structure point from Q3 in Q4?

  • @niamh2398
    @niamh2398 Рік тому

    thank you sir!!

  • @ratratt6715
    @ratratt6715 Рік тому

    Can we do a story but still describe the picture ?

  • @user-en6cx4sd7s
    @user-en6cx4sd7s Рік тому

    Im doing 1, 4,2,5,3

  • @user-to1gy4jl2l
    @user-to1gy4jl2l Рік тому

    please do merchant of venice

  • @kashmainmohammad2832
    @kashmainmohammad2832 Рік тому

    For this year can we copy a story from internet or it will be plagiarism

    • @kashmainmohammad2832
      @kashmainmohammad2832 Рік тому

      What If someone do the same story as me , whould that be plagiarism

    • @sha4nvi
      @sha4nvi Рік тому

      @@kashmainmohammad2832 ye coz if they realise two students did the exact same story it's obviously taken from the internet and theyll find out, just copy some sentences if u like them not the entire thing

    • @MrSallesTeachesEnglish
      @MrSallesTeachesEnglish  Рік тому +1

      You can copy plots but not language

  • @UziIsh
    @UziIsh Рік тому

    Mr sallee, for Paper 1 Question 4, in one of ur previous vids u said that u think its best to give a balanced argument as it gives u the top marks, but i see a 20/20 answer online which i have realised that this student never gave the other side of the argument instead they wrote “i agree with this statement” , so this brings me to a question that is it necessary to give the other side of the argument such, please answer me and thanks

    • @Baecon_kk
      @Baecon_kk Рік тому

      Allow that it's the past according to him and Mr everything english students should strongly agree

    • @calmingnature-whitenoise6945
      @calmingnature-whitenoise6945 Рік тому

      this video is paper 1 questiom 5

    • @UziIsh
      @UziIsh Рік тому

      @@calmingnature-whitenoise6945 I was just commenting on the recent vid hoping he would reply

  • @abia321
    @abia321 Рік тому

    Can you use a flashback in descriptive writing?

  • @lighght
    @lighght Рік тому

    You are a *LEGEND*

  • @buzzgamer2601
    @buzzgamer2601 Рік тому

    what paper is this on?

  • @janattahir8410
    @janattahir8410 Рік тому

    Mr salles it it possible that 2 stories or two descriptions come up in the same exam?

  • @shafinbepary2000
    @shafinbepary2000 Рік тому

    one of the two GOATs

  • @osasuyistephanie561
    @osasuyistephanie561 Рік тому

    don’t die for hyenas😭

  • @OllieFC.
    @OllieFC. Рік тому

    3rd

  • @floralsatellite
    @floralsatellite Рік тому +1

    LISTEN TO FOLKLORE

  • @user-to1gy4jl2l
    @user-to1gy4jl2l Рік тому

    the play

  • @ragdahmed6031
    @ragdahmed6031 Рік тому +6

    I cant believe Mr salles doesnt like taylor, so disappointing🥲