Yes....Even the Gods fell from grace...how can they expect humans to adhere to their visionary words...well.... May we grow in spirit together....there will always be bad apples coming in the barrel....cracks in the safeguards of a wisdom care...all the more necessity for infallibility in a Wisdom Code of understanding.
LOL The descriptions are so much like the old E.E. Doc. Smith writings in such series as the "Lensman" books... "coruscant scintillating deluges of vibrant energies inundating the target with overwhelming torrents of destruction"... or my version "the running dog lackeys of the industrial military complex arraigned against the peace-loving peoples of collective destiny..."
Bears a small shade of similarity to the universe of David Brin's "uplift series". With a huge major difference of the more ancient races existence and the left behind tech they created bestowing knowledge onto a human representative. In the Brin universe the progenitors were viewed as a race who uplifted countless species to true sentience and established a multigalaxy organization of those sentience species. Then they inexplicably disappeared. I'd bet the author of this story read the uplift series. Then shuffled Brin's ideas and his until he came up with something he could rightly call his own. This was a very enjoyable story.
Whoe to the enemies of Earth & friends, for I will rewrite you. Oh wait, umm, Im not supposed to say the dark parts again...umm, forget I said that...oh hey, look over there!
Good voice, that is, your voice bot. But please teach it that XO is not pronounced zoh. It is pronounced like two letters; X, O. Ecks Oh. Or better yet, please use a human. So he stands and dusts off his uniform? A cloth uniform I presume. Where did his hardened space suit disappear to?
Why would a ships Captain send a boarding crew over to a ships with failing systems? Send crafts to evacuate the personal or "transport" their personal off the failing vessel. Sounds like the author just want a reason to introduce the human crew to the "anomaly". Bad craftsmanship.
I suspect part 2 starts with Delphic saying, " Sorry about your crew, dude".
XO is not pronounced ZO. It is “X O” military speak for Executive Officer, second in command.
❤ this. Do ANY research at all before reading.
That's the problem with computer voice programs without a full understanding of the English language.
Nailed it@@johnruckman2320
@@johnruckman2320 It's a real guy reading it. You can hear him take breaths, which voice programs don't do.
@@InsomniacXIII, my phone doesn't pick up breathing so I didn't hear it.
The reader should have at least looked up military jargon at the very least.
Most extensive vocabulary I've heard recently from these stories. Keep it up.
I find it a little too much. Sometimes simpler and less flowery is better.
@@vanguard9067 And some vocabulary is better suited to horror stories eg. eldritch, tendrils
@@TheGchiu definitely.
More please.
Yes more please!!!
Nice…. Vaguely Lovecraftian and with a touch of old science fiction. A good but wordy mesh. More please…
Great story! I look forward to more "chapters"!
Outstanding
I have really enjoyed this book. Please, read more stories like this!
And Ensign is pronounced, “En-sin”.
I would suggest putting a period between the X and O, then it may be pronounced as X.O instead of zo.
Or a space maybe?
Water the soup, scramble the eggs, put another place at the table Q, for humanity is coming home.
Great story hope you continue this story
Need to know how this turns out...where is part 2?
That sound like we all are on the path to enlightenment. Not just the commander.
Hmm…”a roiling sphere of roiling energy”, could be phrased differently.
A rolling sphere of rotating energy
Yes, or simply remove one, “roiling”.
@@robchapin3317 yeah but we all have to practice to become good, so I hope he has learned from his mistakes in writing
I like this male voice. It sounds cleaner than others.
Yes....Even the Gods fell from grace...how can they expect humans to adhere to their visionary words...well....
May we grow in spirit together....there will always be bad apples coming in the barrel....cracks in the safeguards of a wisdom care...all the more necessity for infallibility in a Wisdom Code of understanding.
I subed for part 2 of this story
Way less errors than normal. I'll have to watch this channel
Nice🤔
Man I wish this was a much longer story
LOL The descriptions are so much like the old E.E. Doc. Smith writings in such series as the "Lensman" books... "coruscant scintillating deluges of vibrant energies inundating the target with overwhelming torrents of destruction"... or my version "the running dog lackeys of the industrial military complex arraigned against the peace-loving peoples of collective destiny..."
I love those books!!! Also great was “Skylark of Valeron”. Smith is one of my favorite authors.
That was great definitely more please
Decent
Part #2 ???
If I never hear the word “thrumming” again…
More please!
Bears a small shade of similarity to the universe of David Brin's "uplift series". With a huge major difference of the more ancient races existence and the left behind tech they created bestowing knowledge onto a human representative. In the Brin universe the progenitors were viewed as a race who uplifted countless species to true sentience and established a multigalaxy organization of those sentience species. Then they inexplicably disappeared. I'd bet the author of this story read the uplift series. Then shuffled Brin's ideas and his until he came up with something he could rightly call his own. This was a very enjoyable story.
More more!
Whoe to the enemies of Earth & friends, for I will rewrite you. Oh wait, umm, Im not supposed to say the dark parts again...umm, forget I said that...oh hey, look over there!
I wish there is humanity first no alien allow HFY
There are sci-fi stories in which humans were the only observably sapient species. Most notably, Asimov's "Foundation " novels.
Why is the English sentence structure so poor. And why is he shouting "bart" instead of "shouting". Was chatgpt told to be a dog 😅
9:29 hubris gets you.
This story is just a thesaurus, one with decent expressions but plot holes and shoddy building
Why do so many of these stories just stop dead halfway-through?
Err. What about the crew? Kinda forgotten about them after the explosion
Is there a part 2?
Good voice, that is, your voice bot. But please teach it that XO is not pronounced zoh. It is pronounced like two letters; X, O. Ecks Oh. Or better yet, please use a human.
So he stands and dusts off his uniform? A cloth uniform I presume. Where did his hardened space suit disappear to?
Where’s chapter two?
Are there txt versions?
Source?
Why would a ships Captain send a boarding crew over to a ships with failing systems? Send crafts to evacuate the personal or "transport" their personal off the failing vessel. Sounds like the author just want a reason to introduce the human crew to the "anomaly". Bad craftsmanship.
Another Z named character......
Sounds like there just giving us a taste of the story, they'll put out as a scify book.