I doubt if your essay is C2! The C2 is: *The intake of pollution-free air is the fundamental right of any human being, wishing to enjoy a healthy life, around the world, with ever-increasing pollution in the most advanced cities and towns. This raises a burning question: how to get rid of it for good!* Thank you for reading. I might be amiss; I am open to other notions.
final version: Isn't It Time We Cleared The Air? In our towns and cities, clean air is paramount, if residents are to lead healthy lifestyles. In which case, how do we accomplish this and make poor-quality, polluted air a thing of the past? First and foremost, the exhaust fumes from petrol and diesel-powered vehicles pollute cities, which causes health problems such as asthma. There are several solutions to this problem. One is prohibiting, or limiting, such vehicles in parts of city centres. In addition, the public could be encouraged to purchase electric cars or use public transport more frequently. Secondly, factories also contribute significantly to air pollution, in addition to poisoning our waterways. We can combat this by restricting where factories are built and enacting laws about how they make products. Together, this would help reduce air pollution. Thirdly, a wonderful way to improve air quality is by planting more trees in city centres. For example, these could be in parks, streets and even in rooftop gardens. This would not only enhance air quality but also benefit wildlife. In summary, there are numerous ways in which we can reduce pollution and improve quality. By working together and remembering that clean air is a human right, we can positively impact the daily lives of city dwellers.
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I see that you often use question as a thesis statement in introduction, which is contradictory to what my ielts teachers have tought me. Is that really ok, and effective?
In general, essay titles can be questions. However, follow what your IELTS teachers say. Maybe because you’re answering an IELTS question, the title shouldn’t be a question - I imagine that’s why they say that. I’d love to hear their explanation, if you ask them 😀
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@@englishlearningexpert3595 I will get the explaintation then tell you immediately.^^
You’d have to ask your IELTS teacher - in a normal essay, like at university, you NEED a title. Your teacher is the expert for IELTS - I have been a school and TEFL teacher for 20 years so I can teach good writing skills but each exam has its own special requirements.
Thanks Sir. Your series of videos are making my writing improve.
Thank you!
As always, this is an impressive enhancement of a B2 essay. 👍🙌
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Very helpful the way you demonstrated, Sir...
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Thanks so much - I’m editing the next one and it’ll be out Friday! 😀
I doubt if your essay is C2! The C2 is:
*The intake of pollution-free air is the fundamental right of any human being, wishing to enjoy a healthy life, around the world, with ever-increasing pollution in the most advanced cities and towns. This raises a burning question: how to get rid of it for good!*
Thank you for reading.
I might be amiss; I am open to other notions.
I think it's C2. It's written at an educated native speaker level. I may be wrong but I think it would get C2. Thanks for commenting though.
Thanks, it is quite useful and clearly explained. I will keep you watching. 👍👍👍
You are very welcome - did you mean ‘I will keep watching you’?
Another day which i am gonna improve my vocabulary and writing skills
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it is a perfect transforming and an explanation, thank you for the video!
My pleasure - thank you 🤩
Just amazing how you make me feel the transition from B2 to C1...the best way to improve significantly in english...Thanks so much
Thank you so much - it’s very kind of you to take the time to comment and I’m so pleased my videos are helping.😀
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I appreciate your input. really good samples to improve our level
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i find your videos really helpful for me, thanks!
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Thank you, I learn numerous things from you.
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final version:
Isn't It Time We Cleared The Air?
In our towns and cities, clean air is paramount, if residents are to lead healthy lifestyles. In which case, how do we accomplish this and make poor-quality, polluted air a thing of the past?
First and foremost, the exhaust fumes from petrol and diesel-powered vehicles pollute cities, which causes health problems such as asthma. There are several solutions to this problem. One is prohibiting, or limiting, such vehicles in parts of city centres. In addition, the public could be encouraged to purchase electric cars or use public transport more frequently.
Secondly, factories also contribute significantly to air pollution, in addition to poisoning our waterways. We can combat this by restricting where factories are built and enacting laws about how they make products. Together, this would help reduce air pollution.
Thirdly, a wonderful way to improve air quality is by planting more trees in city centres. For example, these could be in parks, streets and even in rooftop gardens. This would not only enhance air quality but also benefit wildlife.
In summary, there are numerous ways in which we can reduce pollution and improve quality. By working together and remembering that clean air is a human right, we can positively impact the daily lives of city dwellers.
I write down every term that I find interesting to use in my following essays.
That’s awesome my friend - I’m very proud to help you! 😀
I see that you often use question as a thesis statement in introduction, which is contradictory to what my ielts teachers have tought me. Is that really ok, and effective?
In general, essay titles can be questions. However, follow what your IELTS teachers say. Maybe because you’re answering an IELTS question, the title shouldn’t be a question - I imagine that’s why they say that. I’d love to hear their explanation, if you ask them 😀
@@englishlearningexpert3595 I will get the explaintation then tell you immediately.^^
Is it okay to include titles in IELTS essays because I've seen most essays don't have any titles? Thanks so much for your videos.🥰
You’d have to ask your IELTS teacher - in a normal essay, like at university, you NEED a title. Your teacher is the expert for IELTS - I have been a school and TEFL teacher for 20 years so I can teach good writing skills but each exam has its own special requirements.