IELTS TOEFL Writing Full essay (high score)

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  • @finefunke
    @finefunke 3 роки тому +61

    I saw this video 30 mins to my exam, adopted the approach and got 7.0. Thanks 🙏🏾

  • @MrHamood021
    @MrHamood021 7 років тому +180

    As I'm preparing for IELTS exam, I've watched too many videos about the writing section. Your way of teaching how to write is indeed the best! Thank you.

    • @oresmaa6656
      @oresmaa6656 7 років тому +3

      what is IETLS exam

    • @xcalcovarze6000
      @xcalcovarze6000 7 років тому +2

      is this a joke?

    • @Quran_eee
      @Quran_eee 6 років тому +1

      laila H اختبار يحدد مستواك باللغة الانجليزية
      Exam that test your English skills such as listening, speaking, reading and writing.

    • @marcinprzewocki3313
      @marcinprzewocki3313 5 років тому

      Let us know how that goes :)

    • @Gerard_2024
      @Gerard_2024 4 роки тому

      @@@oresmaa6656... If you google IELTS you will get the answer. I have done it for you...International English Language Testing System .

  • @Ligmaments
    @Ligmaments 8 років тому +725

    You are simply the best English teacher on UA-cam with a focus on writing.

  • @ameliaa9554
    @ameliaa9554 7 років тому +21

    This is the perfect IELTS lesson I have ever seen ,I swear ,I really really really help me a lot ,before this,I was totally frustrated .You are the best teacher!!!

  • @nadrah294
    @nadrah294 8 років тому +121

    I stumbled across this video after following your EngVid. As a self-learner I wanted to say thank you for creating all of these helpful IELTS videos!

    • @inesmartinez2119
      @inesmartinez2119 7 років тому +4

      Adam, I'm taking the CPE Cambridge at the end of the year and there's a compulsory essay which is a nightmare at times!! It's an essay of evaluation and opinion of two texts which present similar or opposing views. I found your paragraph video very useful. Could you explain this kind of essay in another video? Thanks a lot.

    • @mariacassel9402
      @mariacassel9402 7 років тому

      is that a video on transitions? you are so good at them.

    • @mabubakartalal7563
      @mabubakartalal7563 7 років тому

      hahah i think you writing skills are already outstanding, so i think there is no need of other video for you ines Martinez

    • @POPULARTKO
      @POPULARTKO 7 років тому +1

      Your explanation is simple to understand and put to practice. I am sure my score will improve when I seat for the exam.

    • @inesmartinez2119
      @inesmartinez2119 7 років тому +1

      M Abubakar Talal haha thanks but believe me writing a good essay for CPE takes a lot of practice and involves different skills. For example, paraphrasing is quite challenging in some cases and adding examples when you don't know a lot about the topic haha.

  • @obioraonyedili892
    @obioraonyedili892 4 роки тому +1

    I want to express my gratitude to you for the guide provided through your UA-cam video especially on Essay writing. I just sat for a TOEFL(iBT) test on October 31,2020. I followed your guidelines and I did very well in TOEFL. Infact in the Writing part I got 25 out of 30marks,& a total score of 82marks out of 120. This was just 3days preparatory with your video.. Thank you so much. I’ll recommend your video to my friends & family who wish to sit for TOEFL or IELTS.

  • @laithhaddadin8318
    @laithhaddadin8318 7 років тому +21

    I have done three exercises at the same time in one video; Listening to you as a native speaker, reading that well-structured essay, and of course all writing tips you have mentioned especially the planning part.
    Simply Amazing! Best Teacher.

  • @matildaiilonga6002
    @matildaiilonga6002 5 років тому +8

    I look at this essay and ask myself what on earth I have been writing my whole life! I mean, just look at this essay, so much planning and all that. From now on I'll start planning my work like you do. Thank you so much for the tutorial.

    • @anthonyjoshua6694
      @anthonyjoshua6694 5 років тому

      Trash

    • @mariekargbo4830
      @mariekargbo4830 3 роки тому

      Thanks u sir for helping us 🙏 because as for me I never understood nothing in essay writing.but with the help of u and God ar understood a little bit, thank u sir for the support 🙏🙏🙏

  • @josecontreras7153
    @josecontreras7153 7 років тому +530

    You're the man! Best English teacher ever!

  • @robinjoy123
    @robinjoy123 6 років тому +15

    Adam, your level of English in the video is beyond words.. if this essay was written in the actual exam, you might have got some award from IELTS.. keep going..

  • @elsapiuux
    @elsapiuux 8 років тому +93

    Let me congratulate you Adam. Your videos are great tools to try to conquer our fears writing essays in English. You made it easier for me.

  • @robelhaile2170
    @robelhaile2170 6 років тому +7

    "they're testing ur english they're not testing ur intellegence" that put my worries at ease THANK YOU!

    • @matheus89555
      @matheus89555 4 роки тому +1

      And you really believe on that?

  • @giorgitvaltavdze5525
    @giorgitvaltavdze5525 7 років тому +11

    actually, this is the most complete explanation of writing part I have ever seen

  • @liam12ful
    @liam12ful 6 років тому +14

    I'm a self-learner and your IELTS videos are just perfect, they makes me improve my writting. Thank you for that! :)

  • @ramtha2978
    @ramtha2978 7 років тому +32

    Adam , you and Liz are the best in IELTS teaching.Great teacher..

  • @jjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjj0
    @jjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjj0 3 роки тому

    As someone that grew up very unfocused and uncommitted to all academia, this has been a life saver. Thank you

  • @josealbornoz2008
    @josealbornoz2008 4 роки тому +7

    I don’t know why when this teacher speaks, I feel he’s speaking in my own language.

  • @sepidehnikfarjam4359
    @sepidehnikfarjam4359 5 років тому +4

    Hello Adam! I have recently taken a TOEFL test (score: 105) and I got a lot of help from your videos about writing essays. Thank you! :)

  • @celtsking9447
    @celtsking9447 6 років тому +42

    You're really my role modal of recognising IELTS exam. I feel so lucky to notice your teaching videos and get inspirations from yours before my real exam.

  • @sheenashah1054
    @sheenashah1054 7 років тому +7

    Very clear, comprehensive, and objective for non-natives. Great volunteering!!!
    Best Rewards

  • @andrescanseco4949
    @andrescanseco4949 4 роки тому +5

    It really looks so complicated. However with this kind of teacher that he have everything is easy possible. You always explain everything in details. I love the way you teach specially because you always give examples and states the meaning of these vocabulary' s words. Thank you so much for you lessons.

  • @nguyenkim2137
    @nguyenkim2137 7 років тому

    I don't know why some stupid peoples still click the thumb down for this best teacher!!!!

  • @TheBrowniemusic
    @TheBrowniemusic 7 років тому +5

    Badass. I've been following you for almost a year, you got very strong teaching skills

  • @ayechannmaung53
    @ayechannmaung53 6 років тому +1

    It's very sincere of you to give such kind of information free of charge! I'm preparing TOEFL on my very own and this gets my writing ability really improved.

  • @abdurrashad4395
    @abdurrashad4395 6 років тому +3

    The same way we expect more lengthy essays from ur highness... Great teacher

  • @essoumbapaola8765
    @essoumbapaola8765 7 років тому +2

    this guy's video is exactly what i was looking for. he literrally gives all in detail. great

  • @satyaakshayp975
    @satyaakshayp975 5 років тому +8

    I highly appreciate your work. You're really making it easy for the students to actually understand what this test is all about, and yeah you're an awesome teacher. The way you explain, you're killing it.

  • @josecarlosmartin20
    @josecarlosmartin20 4 роки тому

    Just subscribed to your channel. I'm taking the TOEFL this month and have been practicing for it. I think you have provided me the best practice tips I have watched so far. In this video, when you presented the question, I decided to takle it in thirty minutes, as the test does. Just managed to end the writing with 305 words with no time to spare. Then I proceeded to watch the rest of your video and was glad to find that I come with the same themes and topics as you did. Just with poorer execution and only that amount of words. I keep practicing to improve my essay lenght with time to spare for the test day. Thank you so much for your tips!

  • @GanijonRahimov
    @GanijonRahimov 5 років тому +3

    Adam, you are top ESL teacher ever! The way you explain the writing is easy to follow and it gives us an idea that writing is "a piece of cake"

  • @jacobtourey9509
    @jacobtourey9509 7 років тому

    you are very focused and organized in terms of your teaching plan, i thinks evevry body can ezily tune in and understand your videos.

  • @SumedhaManabaranaKandy
    @SumedhaManabaranaKandy 4 роки тому +18

    Adam, I've watched your lessons many times, you're brilliant!

  • @cohallel.7
    @cohallel.7 7 років тому +2

    Adam, you are the best English teacher I ever saw, I love your focus and concentration!
    You just start from scratch and help us to draw the right picture on the right moment!
    attention and atitude are the best qualities that save us from pseudo- selective-learning!

  • @falcons9659
    @falcons9659 4 роки тому +5

    Such a passionate teacher, you speak clearly and eloquently with great notes. God bless you for your efforts and passions

  • @HereAndHereafter
    @HereAndHereafter 2 роки тому

    Thank you very much Adam.
    I've watched this video, among others, and I am happy to get a 7.5 in IELTS in 2020, and 28 in Toefl last weekend.
    Thanks to Adam and to Rebecca in another video. You guys are the best, especially in the writing tasks.

  • @andrewshatnyy
    @andrewshatnyy 7 років тому +3

    This is the most easy delivered essay writing tutorial by far

  • @rosminazuchri9090
    @rosminazuchri9090 3 роки тому +1

    I am Rosmina Zuchri from Indonesia. yes, I will watch and listen to your explanation. Thanks, Mr. Adam

  • @KorayCakir
    @KorayCakir 3 роки тому +9

    "Learning how to scetch an essay is one of the common video topics in mediums, such as UA-cam, and Adam is one of the best among many contributor according to a large database of user researchs. Even though, his lack of fashion sense that can be observed by merely looking at shirts that he wears in many videos may proves opposite to some, I strongly agree with mainstream opinion, as his skills in compartmentalization of essay is out of ordinary, so does his natural tendency regarding conveying a message."
    How was it, sensei?

  • @chibuzoukegbu2968
    @chibuzoukegbu2968 4 роки тому

    You're a good teacher in essay writing. The way you dissect the various parts of the essay makes it even more useful for an essay writing but also for understanding a comprehension; by knowing the themes, topic sentences, linking words etc. Those would help one to fish out the author's tone, purpose and main point of the essay. I hope to follow up your tutorials henceforth. What brought my score down the last time I sat for a TOEFL exam was the reading section. I got 22 in writing, which I hope to improve upon,a 23 in speaking and a 22 in listening. I hope to see a spike in my scores when next I'll redo the test. Thank you! Thank you!

  • @mr.zakariaabdulhameed7636
    @mr.zakariaabdulhameed7636 8 років тому +40

    Appreciate ur efforts to help us improve our English skills.

  • @danbisengo319
    @danbisengo319 7 років тому +1

    The best English teacher ever seen with incomparable skills of teaching essay writing!

  • @relaxing_sensual_erotic
    @relaxing_sensual_erotic 7 років тому +22

    Thanks Adam for these suggestions and recommendations!!!
    Each video made by yourself is so useful.

  • @bikashpandey6510
    @bikashpandey6510 4 роки тому

    I have watched at least thousands of videos for IELTS writing though none of them were as helpful as yours . Thanks a lot .

  • @maramalsakkaf5332
    @maramalsakkaf5332 2 роки тому

    I have been studying English my whole life and this was the best lesson I have ever taken. Thanks a million.

  • @Bassoomamor
    @Bassoomamor 7 років тому +5

    This is the best lesson i have ever found on writing essaies.
    I'm your fan now.

  • @asadileila3648
    @asadileila3648 2 роки тому

    Mr. Adam you are amazing and fabulous English Teacher. I appreciate your hard work. I just learned how to write essay. I took writing course in English school and I paid for it and haven't learned how to write. Now I know how to. Thanks a lot.

  • @quranwithishfaqnasreen2145
    @quranwithishfaqnasreen2145 7 років тому +4

    You,Liz,Ryan ,Chris Pell all are extremely extraordinary to deliver the outstanding explanation for the students .Thanks a lot Adam 😍

  • @muhammadasimramzan5613
    @muhammadasimramzan5613 7 років тому

    this is the most clear and easily understandable English lecture i ever watched online. job well done man

  • @sidharth-singh
    @sidharth-singh 4 роки тому +3

    This video really helped me to become able to use the tools in my arsenal. Thank you so much.

  • @meganiminimi8776
    @meganiminimi8776 7 років тому

    Thank you so much for your videos and great advices. I have the TOEFL test the 29th of this month and am going through all your vids. Clear explanations, good examples : the best English courses I ever had. If you have any other tips before the exams, I take it. I am sure you are helping a lot of student to get through application processes in order to study in the University of their choice. A high TOEFL score is one of the steps for me. With your help and a bit of work, I'll do my best. Thanks again !!!

  • @ameliakovalenko5556
    @ameliakovalenko5556 5 років тому +3

    The best walk/through the writing section so far.

  • @pascallaw5909
    @pascallaw5909 2 роки тому

    That analysis at 11:30 is right on point! I have had this doubt about the length of the paragraphs for such a long time. My essay reviewers have always instructed me to limit the introduction and conclusion parts to 35-50 words each, but I didn't know which way to go.

  • @Petrosani-b3d
    @Petrosani-b3d 4 роки тому +8

    You are 100 % a highest level teacher! Thank you so much for all your brilliant explanations!!!

  • @all_sushhhka
    @all_sushhhka 3 роки тому +1

    Thank you, Adam! I’m not preparing for english exams but your lessons helps me to write about the things i care in a proper and understandable way. Thank you for your work!!

  • @kajalpawar1159
    @kajalpawar1159 4 роки тому +3

    Very well taught after going through so many videos I finally found the perfect video.

  • @sandeshkey3814
    @sandeshkey3814 5 років тому +1

    Really Helpful !
    Got overall 7 band in my IELTS examination.
    Thank You 👏

  • @camisand324
    @camisand324 4 роки тому +5

    Thank you Adam!!!, I got my TOEFL high score. It helped me a lot to improve my essays.I am so happy with my TOEFL score.

  • @shojintam4206
    @shojintam4206 5 років тому +1

    1.Plan (Write both side, see which have
    more points)
    2.Intro (topic, question, my opinion, why)
    3.Have connection between paragraphs

  • @sofiacornejo1056
    @sofiacornejo1056 7 років тому +10

    Adam , you're very easy on the eye. Thank you for this teaching video. I had a very hard time with essays...this is helpful!

  • @Vaidoteful
    @Vaidoteful 4 роки тому +2

    The phrase " they are testing your English, not your intelligence" called my attention and made me smile... I thought just the opposite while preparing for CAE... It felt that they were testing my intelligence (apart from English), literally...

  • @subraman9259
    @subraman9259 5 років тому +3

    ADAM, you are one of the great teacher. keep it up buddy.

  • @arbelokhan3485
    @arbelokhan3485 Рік тому +1

    On of the best instructors on UA-cam.

  • @ephraimprof799
    @ephraimprof799 7 років тому +3

    Thank you very much, it's great to be part of this English class.

  • @ParthivDesaii
    @ParthivDesaii 4 роки тому

    This is the best video for essay writing on youtube. There are many videos on same topic but no one was as precise as him. Thankyou :)

  • @biatamujuntu
    @biatamujuntu 8 років тому +9

    TNX a million, regards from Brazil!

  • @amiraalsaghir5195
    @amiraalsaghir5195 7 місяців тому

    I’m speechless .. you are the best teacher I’ve seen online ever .. chapeau ❤

  • @nourah8442
    @nourah8442 8 років тому +4

    This is really helpful. Thank u Adam.

  • @raissafrancisco7566
    @raissafrancisco7566 7 років тому

    Thank you so much. I took the first exam without preparing enough the writing section and was a disaster, the stress and time were overwhelming. I scheduled a new exam for 2 weeks after my first attempt, watched all your videos and bought your books. I passed! I couldn't thank you enough.

  • @felipeantoniovaldiviaaedo1150
    @felipeantoniovaldiviaaedo1150 7 років тому +6

    So nice Adam.! I want to take Toefl test in April, I`ve been practicing with your videos and I feel more confidence thanks to your classes.

    • @akintoladebbie2587
      @akintoladebbie2587 4 роки тому

      Thanks for this great video, please can you analyse task one as well?Thank you.

  • @panteasalehizadeh7697
    @panteasalehizadeh7697 7 років тому

    Adam, you are the best, well-informed, kindest and most patient English professor that I have seen.I always follow your programs, which all are perfect.
    I hope to be always healthy and happy.

  • @sallyred4347
    @sallyred4347 4 роки тому +4

    i am aware of most of the words used in the essay. However, these rarely ever come to mind while writing the essay :(

  • @LinkaParka
    @LinkaParka 7 років тому

    Adam, i have never seen such great teacher as you. You were born to be a teacher...

  • @margiedaitol2349
    @margiedaitol2349 7 років тому +4

    You're the best!!I've learned a lot from this video. This will also help my students to improve their writing skills. Maraming Salamat! (Thank You!)

  • @devikapillay2746
    @devikapillay2746 2 роки тому +1

    Thanks. You are one of the best English language Teacher. Also, it's easy to understand your teaching

  • @sukhdhaliwal00
    @sukhdhaliwal00 8 років тому +32

    Superb..... Thanks 😍....i m so nervous ....my exam date is 21 jan.

    • @mansurjonturobov8215
      @mansurjonturobov8215 8 років тому +1

      SUKH DHALIWAL assalam alaikum the same here

    • @mansurjonturobov8215
      @mansurjonturobov8215 8 років тому

      SUKH DHALIWAL may i ask you how to comminucate with you?

    • @bouz44
      @bouz44 8 років тому

      hope that you did well

    • @Tammisettysaivenkat
      @Tammisettysaivenkat 8 років тому +1

      how did the test go?

    • @henoksol
      @henoksol 7 років тому

      hello I'm gonna take IELTS tomorrow can I communicate with you

  • @rasikakumaragedona7543
    @rasikakumaragedona7543 3 роки тому +1

    Now I understand how to write an essay. The best explanation. Thank you.

  • @hectorruiz8456
    @hectorruiz8456 7 років тому +16

    I WISH I HAD THE CHANCE TO MEET YOU BEFORE I DIE. YOU ARE THE KIND OF PERSON THAT ENYONE NEEDS AS FRIEND. TO HUNG OUT WITH YOU MIGHT BE AN ANGELICAL EXPERIENCE. THANK YOU FOR EXISTING AND GIVING SO MUCH TO THE WORLD.

  • @claudiacameras
    @claudiacameras 3 роки тому +1

    I have never seen a video like this. The way you explained it was so easy to understand. I really appreciate your effort. Greetings from Mexico.

  • @lizeth5210
    @lizeth5210 7 років тому +13

    Violence is a common issue these days. We can see them in the news, in the streets, but as well in the media, as in televition, internet, video games and movies, easily accesable to our youth and children. How much does this impact in our lives? is the media the main reason? should this stop?. In my view what we see and hear is personal decision and we are able to decide wether if we pick this up or we take a step back In addition, violence can work in some sports, consequenly, we do not need the control of the goverment.
    First, it is going to restrain our freedom as well as the freedom of the creators of these expression ways. We know that relative to expressions, there is a lot of variety and we are not able to judge and discriminate one type. On the other hand, we are not able to ignore the people who watch and see this material and have a completely different reaction, such as pacificms or completely away of the violence because of the consequences their practicants get. For instance, my cousin, who is father of three little children, loves action movies and video games, but he has always been a pacific citizen and preacher. Furthermore, we everybody have our agency and parents in families are able to decide what they are going to allow their children to watch and see. According to this, parents are able to control instead the laws.
    Lastly, violence is able to be something good sometimes. We know that many respectful sports are inspired in violence, such as martial arts, rackling and free. These sports are very important worldwide, giving a lot of recognision to nations and the sportists as well. Without of at least a little of violence incentive, these sport will not be the same. There are a lot of children and youth who do not see themselves playing with a ball or swimming in a pool, but these violent sport incetivate them, being, of course, a better option than a sedentary life. For example I met a missionary in my church who practiced rackling and competed in international games. He was once robbed in my country and his reaction was pacific.
    We conclude that as we have freedom, agency and a little violence sometimes can be good, there is no need in restrinction of the violence in the media.

    • @annoyingnick26
      @annoyingnick26 6 років тому +1

      Lyzeth its good but avoid using words such as we, i , me, etc.

  • @worldcitizen9102
    @worldcitizen9102 7 років тому +1

    If only my teacher could have explained like this. Excellent, Brilliant!

  • @ahmedyaseen2966
    @ahmedyaseen2966 8 років тому +20

    Thanks a lot for your big efforts

  • @anouluckphengvongsa2806
    @anouluckphengvongsa2806 3 роки тому

    This is the best explanation video about writing essay I’ve ever seen before. So thankful to see this video on youtube.

  • @saraeftekharazam8000
    @saraeftekharazam8000 7 років тому +10

    Thanks for your sharing useful videos🌺🌺🌺🌺

  • @zoya9199
    @zoya9199 4 роки тому +1

    My favorite teacher ever ❤ God bless you
    Thanks to you I used to have the best mark in my university 😍

  • @bojanaboskovic8841
    @bojanaboskovic8841 8 років тому +4

    Thank you sooo much :) Your ideas are so logical and smart, they have really helped me in the reading part, I think you`re gonna save my writing task, too :)

  • @dotman7791
    @dotman7791 6 років тому +2

    Really, it's​ the best video for writing an essay on youtube.

  • @febasaju2587
    @febasaju2587 8 років тому +12

    Thank you sir...

  • @chanbunnara8854
    @chanbunnara8854 7 років тому

    Thank you so much for all. I have followed your previous and current presentations and realize that you are helping my English and career.

  • @MuhammadUmar-jo4qj
    @MuhammadUmar-jo4qj 5 років тому +3

    Could u make a short video on "synthesis " i have to prepare it for my final exam which is imminent.

  • @chanpreetkaur9675
    @chanpreetkaur9675 5 років тому

    Superb video...nicely explained everything...even the so called centres are not doing this task for their students. Hats off to you sir.

  • @wyllianottz4382
    @wyllianottz4382 7 років тому +3

    thanks! good job!

  • @frednelnazaire5770
    @frednelnazaire5770 6 років тому

    You are too explicit to me, Proud of how you teach, all your videos I take time to understand and appreciate them
    Thank you for your help

  • @vasudhakota972
    @vasudhakota972 4 роки тому +4

    Youth violence is a shared social problem. Many people thus propose that governments need to tackle this issue by controlling the media, whom people see as responsible for inciting this violence through films and television. While youth are undoubtedly swayed by external influences, I disagree that it is a government's obligation to censor the entertainment industry; rather, it is up to the society itself to handle the matter.
    Today's young people may be influenced by many things from films to websites to their peers. It is unreasonable, then, to single out films and sitcoms as a main influencer of violence. In other words, kids may see violence and kindness, greed and generosity and all other human behaviours in pretty equal measures everywhere. They can witness all these things in one news broadcast or viral UA-cam clip just as easily as they can in an action flick. Therefore, blaming the entertainment industry is not only unfair, it is also wrong in that it ignores the root causes of certain social behaviours. To suggest that the government can control this is to avoid taking responsibility for ourselves.
    Indeed, a government's control is not to act as parents to its citizens, but to maintain order and provide the tools for society to thrive; it should not tell people what they can and cannot do. On the other hand, parents can and must oversee what children are exposed to, be it online, in a movie, a book or any other source. Consequently parents must decide whether they want their children to watch a horror film. It is not for governments to ban studios from making it. Furthermore, once we allow the government to engage in censorship in one area, it will be free to act in all spheres of people's lives because negative influences are everywhere and have always been so. Restricting people's access to media will not stop violence; in fact it, it may increase it as citizens begin to fight for their freedoms.
    In conclusion, social behaviour patterns are impacted by many things, including, but not limited to media products, and society should take care/control of this. Governments should not be allowed to restrict what film or TV companies produce because they will then have to spread their control to all areas of society.

  • @lauraportillo8193
    @lauraportillo8193 7 років тому

    I saw like 15 videos before this and man, this is the only helpful at all, thank you!

  • @analauragonzalezaguililla2260
    @analauragonzalezaguililla2260 7 років тому +5

    Wow!!! I passed one week writing 500 words paper and was a total mess. Thank you!!!

  • @same822003
    @same822003 7 років тому

    dear teacher i cannot thanks you enough i have written every word you said and it was of great help... i will be watching all your videos for improvement

  • @filiptrajchevski8682
    @filiptrajchevski8682 6 років тому +5

    Hello everyone! Would you mind giving me an evaluation on my essay on the topic in the video.
    With the advancement of technology in both, a convenient and easy to acquire sense of the word, it has become harder to supervise what children and the adolescent age group are watching today. The measures that have been taken to prevent access by underage people to restricted websites and channels are not very successful. Parents as well, more often than not, fail to keep track of the TV and Internet content their children are exposed to.
    It is next to impossible for parents to hover over their kids constantly, due to the fact that they have other responsibilities to them. For example, preventing them from going hungry or taking care of the house, even getting some rest during the day is of the utmost importance because it is crucial to the health of the parent.
    However, should the government interfere in the lives of its people or simply put a ban or censorship on certain content and not air these categories at all?
    I strongly disagree. In my opinion this type of move against the media contradicts the freedom of the people to express itself. It is a precedent that will not have been seen since the time of the authoritarian existing states. Countries that were ran by dictators. Government controlled media can easily be abused to reach political goals and turned to spread propaganda.
    To sum up, I believe that the most influential a government should be on this issue is to educate parents on how accessible this type of content is to young people these days and what can be done to prevent it from raising them in such a manner that they will not be able to become functioning members of society. In fact, we should do the opposite and educate them to use the media to their advantage and positively develop their mentality and help improve their community.

  • @zty3529
    @zty3529 6 років тому +1

    There are only 4 paragraphs each in the TOEFL and IELTS essay examples. The question is whether the 5-paragraph rule is still required as it has (or had?) been a standard for quite some time, pretty much mandatory.

  • @yuliiahavrylova7041
    @yuliiahavrylova7041 7 років тому +5

    thank you sooo much!!!

  • @blackstar6118
    @blackstar6118 2 роки тому +1

    Thank you so much Adam. Your videos are extremely useful for every learners. Never give up your actions. Right now, I am preparing for IELTS exam. My the biggest problem which is writing section. Your videos so useful for me too. Thanks a lot. I hope I can take high band score. Inshaallah. I am from Uzbekistan

  • @iratusz678
    @iratusz678 7 років тому +3

    I'm indeed going to fail the exam tomorrow