man such a good setup such fantastic narration then area 51 gets involved and the news is somehow allowed to show a naked, mangled corpse that of all things broke this sadly
The setup of this story is nicely done, but the reveal could have used some work. It would have been far scarier (and more realistic) to have a report that the real Chris' remains were found, with no chance of survival, and mentioning the location as being "very close" to the Area 51 base. From there, having the "Poor Wayfaring Stranger" song would have been a chilling moment of realizing what this thing is and how it's "going over home" through people.
This sounds a lot like it's just a new twist to that one story of a guy who's dog went missing from a hunting trap and something disguised as his dog came back. Both stories even have things just stare at the protagonist when offered food, the guy hiding in a room until midday because the left the gun on a rack...the other story even ends with the protagonist warning listeners to not let their dog out of their sight for too long because what comes back might not be the dog. Who's plagiarizing who here?
Ok so the concept is interesting, I’ve heard some similar stories so far. But there’s just no way that the news segment would have ever happened. Not only would Chris’ death not be reported on at all, but the entire incident would be covered up by the government. That kinda took me out of it.
Oh, come on now. When the hell has ANYTHING from Area 51 been reported on? Especially on a “breaking news” special? Those reporters would’ve never made it through the desert to an editing room.
Yeah, i noticed that too. Especially with some sentences and descriptions written verbatim. Especially with the voice imitating and "Food was untouched, but all the meat in the freezer gone" part as well as the ending was what tipped me off that this author pretty much copied that story.
Yeah, honestly as far as we know it's possible the only thing the "author" actually wrote was the classist tirade at the beginning, hell for we know maybe that plagiarised too from some right-wing ghoul.
Either this story is plagiarizing "My dog was lost for three days. What came back wasn't my dog" by author chewingskin or the dog story ripped this one off. I don't know which story is older but one of them shamelessly borrows almost completely from the other. Word for word and the plot points in many parts. I really like the dog story. The main character's actions work better in the dog story. Other things also make more sense in it. The dog story's plot doesn't mesh well with what the author of this story tried to do with it.
@@Stevies_Precog_Gym_n_Spa420 it's an entertaining UA-cam story. Many of it's stories are not original. It's just a fun, free, audible platform, not a SAT result.
@@ruth_southernstar ok, and if this person decides to put this in a collection and publish it what then. They're putting out work into the public and insisting it's theirs. Attribution maybe doesn't matter for the pig at the trough but it does to the person pouring the feed. And if the feed in question is someone else's...
So other people have pointed out problems with this story, such as suspension-of-disbelief breaking logical errors to the story being a plagiarised hack, although I did not get in far enough to notice any of these errors due to another problem with this story. Simply put the opening of the story is needlessly hostile and contemptuous for seemingly no reason, this hostility directed at the poor despite poor people having absolutely nothing to do with the plot beyond sorta, kinda, maybe being in the vicinity of the protagonist's friend when the all the spooky stuff happened; since there's no in narrative reason for the hostility, nor any characterisation of the protagonist that would justify the hostility, I can only assume the blatant classism to be the author espousing their own opinions. In fact the entire tirade at the beginning is classist all the way down, with an added side of possible implicit racism too; not only is the disparaging characterisation of homeless people classist in and of itself due to the evident hostility towards the poor, but the railing against trainhopping is also classist because historically trainhopping was engaged in by the poor during times of economic uncertainty (such as The Great Depression), furthermore contemporarily trainhopping is engaged in by undocumented immigrants from Mexico out of desperation so the railing against trainhopping is also implicitly racist. It would be one thing if the author noted very real dangers in trainhopping, when you're trying to board a freight train, especially if it is in motion, there's very real risks that you could be injured or die; however the disparaging characterisation of poor people who engage in trainhopping opens up many questions about the author's political views, none of which are flattering to the author. Given the evidence of plagiarism it can be assumed that either: the only parts the author actually wrote were the blatantly classist tirade at the beginning, or that part was plagiarised as well from an article of some right-wing ghoul; again neither are flattering to the author, although "author" is perhaps a bit too generous for a plagiarist. All that being said, I hold no ill will towards NaturesTemper for reading this story, he's just a dude who reads stuff in a nice and smooth voice - it's fine if he reads stories of questionable quality since he's got to put bread on the table somehow.
At first I thought the changes increase his demeanor we're due to him being sexually assaulted. but then turned out to be an alien. Although they did find his naked body so we can't rule out S.A.
Former trainkid/rider here....def scary shit happens and I e seen some weird shit doing this. I've lost a lot of friends to train hopping too. Anyways love the narration as always , thanks for the story and zzzz❤
I am so excited for this! i just want to say that i absolutely LOVE every video you put out. Besides the soothingness of your amazing voice-its beautifully obvious you put so much of yourself into your work and i thank you for that! Loving your craft is such a rarity nowadays on here and its beyond evident in your videos! Thank you for all your hardwork-I do so appreciate it❤
@@Stevies_Precog_Gym_n_Spa420 so? many stories on UA-cam are. they are stories not dissertations, and are simply to be enjoyed, or not (seemingly) in your case.
@@ruth_southernstar Oh, so if my opinion differs from yours, then I need to leave? Okay, if that's how we're gonna roll, with you being the self-appointed Opinion Police, and since you believe that you're the arbiter of how others should view things, you can kiss me where the Sun don't shine, Karen.😈
Narration was excellent- this story was not on the level to be read out loud. I hope the author keeps up honing their craft, as writing is a skill that sharpens as you practice & take CONSTRUCTIVE criticism
@@ruth_southernstarThey didn't insult anyone, much less the narrator. You must mean the AUTHOR. Different things. No wonder you thought the story was good if this is your reading comprehension level.
@@ruth_southernstarYou're taking every bit of criticism really personally. Are you the author or something? How fragile are you to deem every commenter who didn't like the story as a "hater"?
@@marialacambra9715 there is no reason to be so critical of the author or the narrator. There is also no need to judge me. If you don't like a channel simply move on, don't use it to criticise something you don't like. They are stories, for goidness sake.
Oh man, I can't wait to hear this! I remember sleeping in a train yard with my best friend. We were waiting for a southbound train to hop on, but it didn't show up till it was daylight. I always wondered what would've happened of that train had actually showed up in time. Maybe it was divine intervention, because it's pretty fuckin dangerous too.
What came back was a beatnick hipster looking for a place to crash. No need to fret, however. For he has food stamps and 120x Salvia he traded a railroad spike dagger for.
This is my favorite kind of story. Doppelganger/Shapeshifter entities. It's also very rare to hear new material that's well written and narrated too... Thank you Skott
you’re a great story teller, but as soon as i heard that news segment i lost all interest. very cheesy writing. other than that, the author is pretty good
Am i crazy or did he watch the news and still went home?
man such a good setup
such fantastic narration
then area 51 gets involved and the news is somehow allowed to show a naked, mangled corpse
that of all things broke this sadly
I see chatgpt hasn't gotten any better at writing horror stories.
The problem with this story is that the government would have been easily able to keep the story from the public.
I once met an ex train hopper. He had both his legs cut off on the tracks in an accident and survived. Heavy machinery doesn’t stop for limbs or life.
This sounds like it was written by a twelve-year-old with a ten-year-old's view of the world.
How you trespass on public property?
The setup of this story is nicely done, but the reveal could have used some work. It would have been far scarier (and more realistic) to have a report that the real Chris' remains were found, with no chance of survival, and mentioning the location as being "very close" to the Area 51 base. From there, having the "Poor Wayfaring Stranger" song would have been a chilling moment of realizing what this thing is and how it's "going over home" through people.
This sounds a lot like it's just a new twist to that one story of a guy who's dog went missing from a hunting trap and something disguised as his dog came back. Both stories even have things just stare at the protagonist when offered food, the guy hiding in a room until midday because the left the gun on a rack...the other story even ends with the protagonist warning listeners to not let their dog out of their sight for too long because what comes back might not be the dog. Who's plagiarizing who here?
Why didn't he tell anyone? Why would people say he's crazy if it was on the news? That made no sense.
Oooh God, I came searching for some Truth!❤
Thank you, SO much!💕
I can't believe that he reviewed this before posting it!
@@ruffadamsthegreat.2662 damn calm down
I think maybe telling anyone would make him that guy who mistook an alien for his friend. His life would never be the same. Great story, right? x
@@ruth_southernstar
Uh, no
If you have to reach that far, to make it make sense, then absolutely not.
@@ruffadamsthegreat.2662 it's called discernment
Ok so the concept is interesting, I’ve heard some similar stories so far. But there’s just no way that the news segment would have ever happened. Not only would Chris’ death not be reported on at all, but the entire incident would be covered up by the government. That kinda took me out of it.
1. You don't get bailed out of prison.
2. You can't trespass on public property.
.... Author/protagonist is pretentious and self righteous.
Oh, come on now. When the hell has ANYTHING from Area 51 been reported on? Especially on a “breaking news” special? Those reporters would’ve never made it through the desert to an editing room.
This is literally "my dog went missing for 3 days" same story. Only a person
Yeah, i noticed that too. Especially with some sentences and descriptions written verbatim. Especially with the voice imitating and "Food was untouched, but all the meat in the freezer gone" part as well as the ending was what tipped me off that this author pretty much copied that story.
Yeah I recognized it was basically a copy. I’m a sucker for imposter/mimic stories but this one is just a poor rewrite of the one with the dog.
YUP😄
Yeah, honestly as far as we know it's possible the only thing the "author" actually wrote was the classist tirade at the beginning, hell for we know maybe that plagiarised too from some right-wing ghoul.
@@orderofdusk2382 why we bringing politics into this my man
I think he means _romantisized_ instead of _romantic_ lol
Bailed out of prison eh? 🤣
I'm totally going train surfing. Just not to Area 51 lol
Wtf did he say at 14:30
The creature said his name. Micheal
@@demiyenh4406
Tyvm
Either this story is plagiarizing "My dog was lost for three days. What came back wasn't my dog" by author chewingskin or the dog story ripped this one off. I don't know which story is older but one of them shamelessly borrows almost completely from the other. Word for word and the plot points in many parts. I really like the dog story. The main character's actions work better in the dog story. Other things also make more sense in it. The dog story's plot doesn't mesh well with what the author of this story tried to do with it.
I'm sure the dog one is the original. I remember listening to it like 8 years ago
@@comraderaichu6940 right? This is plagiarism.
@@Stevies_Precog_Gym_n_Spa420 it's an entertaining UA-cam story. Many of it's stories are not original. It's just a fun, free, audible platform, not a SAT result.
@@ruth_southernstar ok, and if this person decides to put this in a collection and publish it what then. They're putting out work into the public and insisting it's theirs. Attribution maybe doesn't matter for the pig at the trough but it does to the person pouring the feed. And if the feed in question is someone else's...
@@Stevies_Precog_Gym_n_Spa420 this is not what's going on here
So other people have pointed out problems with this story, such as suspension-of-disbelief breaking logical errors to the story being a plagiarised hack, although I did not get in far enough to notice any of these errors due to another problem with this story.
Simply put the opening of the story is needlessly hostile and contemptuous for seemingly no reason, this hostility directed at the poor despite poor people having absolutely nothing to do with the plot beyond sorta, kinda, maybe being in the vicinity of the protagonist's friend when the all the spooky stuff happened; since there's no in narrative reason for the hostility, nor any characterisation of the protagonist that would justify the hostility, I can only assume the blatant classism to be the author espousing their own opinions.
In fact the entire tirade at the beginning is classist all the way down, with an added side of possible implicit racism too; not only is the disparaging characterisation of homeless people classist in and of itself due to the evident hostility towards the poor, but the railing against trainhopping is also classist because historically trainhopping was engaged in by the poor during times of economic uncertainty (such as The Great Depression), furthermore contemporarily trainhopping is engaged in by undocumented immigrants from Mexico out of desperation so the railing against trainhopping is also implicitly racist.
It would be one thing if the author noted very real dangers in trainhopping, when you're trying to board a freight train, especially if it is in motion, there's very real risks that you could be injured or die; however the disparaging characterisation of poor people who engage in trainhopping opens up many questions about the author's political views, none of which are flattering to the author.
Given the evidence of plagiarism it can be assumed that either: the only parts the author actually wrote were the blatantly classist tirade at the beginning, or that part was plagiarised as well from an article of some right-wing ghoul; again neither are flattering to the author, although "author" is perhaps a bit too generous for a plagiarist.
All that being said, I hold no ill will towards NaturesTemper for reading this story, he's just a dude who reads stuff in a nice and smooth voice - it's fine if he reads stories of questionable quality since he's got to put bread on the table somehow.
Love your videos, but I miss the longer format ones
Yeah, this was a concept of mine that could've worked, but never did.
Thanks 😊
At first I thought the changes increase his demeanor we're due to him being sexually assaulted. but then turned out to be an alien. Although they did find his naked body so we can't rule out S.A.
This one was terrible on so many levels.
Favorite narrator ever 🖤🐺🖤🐺🖤🐺 that one scared me dude. I live in Nevada closer to area one than I like 😂
@@susanhorn3952
Used to be mine as well.🙄
Yeah this is a real dog of a story . Good narration bad choice .
Hi Skott, hope you’re having a great day!!! Looks like a good story, not that I’ve ever Train Hopped but always lived near Trains 🚂!!! ♥️♥️♥️😊
Former trainkid/rider here....def scary shit happens and I e seen some weird shit doing this. I've lost a lot of friends to train hopping too.
Anyways love the narration as always , thanks for the story and zzzz❤
I lowkey resent the main character/narrator for his attitude toward the traveling community lol
This was a pretty good story. I liked the idea of train hopping. Excellent narration as always. Have a splendid weekend ❤🤗🌟
I am so excited for this! i just want to say that i absolutely LOVE every video you put out. Besides the soothingness of your amazing voice-its beautifully obvious you put so much of yourself into your work and i thank you for that! Loving your craft is such a rarity nowadays on here and its beyond evident in your videos! Thank you for all your hardwork-I do so appreciate it❤
Skotts got a groupie..lol
@@sweetpeasarah1 settle down. He's not going to date you.
My God, I didn't see that coming. How terrifying. And now for the weather...
@@ruth_southernstar
It's too silly to be believed!🙄
As if it's the work of a twelve year old.
@@ruffadamsthegreat.2662 It's a story, not a police report. If it's not for you, go elsewhere. Fast.
@@ruth_southernstar it's a plagiarised story.
@@Stevies_Precog_Gym_n_Spa420 so? many stories on UA-cam are. they are stories not dissertations, and are simply to be enjoyed, or not (seemingly) in your case.
@@ruth_southernstar
Oh, so if my opinion differs from yours, then I need to leave?
Okay, if that's how we're gonna roll, with you being the self-appointed Opinion Police, and since you believe that you're the arbiter of how others should view things, you can kiss me where the Sun don't shine, Karen.😈
Narration was excellent- this story was not on the level to be read out loud.
I hope the author keeps up honing their craft, as writing is a skill that sharpens as you practice & take CONSTRUCTIVE criticism
@@JerichotheRed it's just a story on UA-cam. Find another channel rather than insult the narrator. And don't shout.
@@ruth_southernstarThey didn't insult anyone, much less the narrator. You must mean the AUTHOR. Different things. No wonder you thought the story was good if this is your reading comprehension level.
@@marialacambra9715 and there it is, another UA-cam hater UA-cam is full of them.
I refuse to engage further.
@@ruth_southernstarYou're taking every bit of criticism really personally. Are you the author or something? How fragile are you to deem every commenter who didn't like the story as a "hater"?
@@marialacambra9715 there is no reason to be so critical of the author or the narrator. There is also no need to judge me. If you don't like a channel simply move on, don't use it to criticise something you don't like. They are stories, for goidness sake.
Oh man, I can't wait to hear this! I remember sleeping in a train yard with my best friend. We were waiting for a southbound train to hop on, but it didn't show up till it was daylight. I always wondered what would've happened of that train had actually showed up in time. Maybe it was divine intervention, because it's pretty fuckin dangerous too.
🚂🚞🚞🚞🚞🚞🚞🚞 👽 Thanks for the story Skott. ❤
What came back was a beatnick hipster looking for a place to crash.
No need to fret, however. For he has food stamps and 120x Salvia he traded a railroad spike dagger for.
This is my favorite kind of story. Doppelganger/Shapeshifter entities. It's also very rare to hear new material that's well written and narrated too... Thank you Skott
"well written"???
This is an outright Rip off of "My dog went missing for 3 days" look it up.
Awesome, as always 👍🏻
Heck yessss
shiey vibes
This one sucked
Yup. It was terrible writing.
ppl not from america always complaining about us. like yes you can’t illegally board trains without paying here sorry guys
Noice
Friends don’t let friends vote Biden
you’re a great story teller, but as soon as i heard that news segment i lost all interest. very cheesy writing. other than that, the author is pretty good
This is a rip off of yhe creepypasta "My dog went missing for three days" 🤣
Good to see creepypasta is still dogshit. Some things never change
Oh there are several damn good ones tho. Just saying
@@ThunderStruck15Can you recommend some please?