The Free Story Series #3: The Amazon Package: Use This Plot For Paper 1 Q5
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- Опубліковано 21 сер 2024
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This story is amazing what an excellent teacher mr everything English ❤
hey guys if you still don’t wanna copy this exact story knowing that maybe a lot of people are familiar with this, I suggest replacing the Amazon package with a child who wants to get adopted. It’s just an idea guys
👏 I like that
smart!
I did that for my gcse !! Except I changed it to a cat that wants to get adopted and it exactly for the prompt :)
@@jamsi1066what grade did you get
@@Biggleton1 grade 8 broooo
Hello mr everything english. Thank you for your help. You have really helped me understand english language and literature and I have managed to achieve good grades. Thank you for your help.
I wonder if this is also a great story, it may be to complex for such short time
A boy who is bullied
The dad is quite questionable
(There is a flashback of where he used to be bright and happy, but the mother abandoned him)
He goes to school, meets someone opposite, the contrast, the opposite of him, a happy boy
Afterschool the boy comes to the tree to sit, think and cry
The bright boy talks to the sad boy and talks about this amazing life, and ends it off with the hardships he had, just like the sad boy
The sad boy blinks and the bright boy was gone
The sad boy wanted to change
it is. i love how the sad boy imagined someone else up to make life better. however i think it would be cool if you put the flashback after he see the happy boy saying something like: 'I used to be that happy boy, laughing etc.' and then you can put the flashback and mention his bullying and stuff. Otherwise, it's a cool story and you can get a grade 8 or 9 if you can add the right description and represent/describe the happy boy as something symbolic, or anything that sort of links with him disappearing. My opinion but I think it has good potential.
@@solo6080 ngl,I think the flashback is good where it is as it creates contrast + makes the reader see the other side of the father right after himbeing questionable but after happy moment works too i guess
Have advised my kids to use Mr EE, as our common denominator. Class act
Thank you i used this plot last minute and got 30/40 in my mock
Did u Copy it
Hey sir, could u plz apply these videos or plots to exact past paper q5 questions so we can see how u can alter your story to fit the requirements of the question beacuse thats what im struggling with the most, thanks btw this video is v helpful
He’s done that video already
Thank you so much for all your videos, I've done all my revision from you and my exams went so well! thanks :)
i used this idea for my mock today!!!!
Update: I got a grade 7
hey can you helpp mee .how did u plan your story and how did you write it. plzz help i need at least 30/40 for this plzz helpp
@@arinahsajid637 i don’t quite remember because it was a long time ago, but i planned it exactly how he says in the video , and I wrote it in first person (which I don’t recommend)
Oh okk thanksss and y do u not recommend to write in 1st person
@@arinahsajid637 it just doesn’t work for me because when i write in third person, i get higher marks but if u enjoy writing in first person you should do it
@@user-ty3tm6rz5v okk thank youu smmm🤗🤗
Thanks for the amazing videoes,im much more confident going into my mocks now,Can you please make a top quotes video for merchant of venice .
I used this plot for todays gcse
Pls see my first paragraph
As I lay there in the gloomy lighting I couldn’t help but feel a sense of despair creeping upon me.
The dust that had gathered on my surface created a sense of melancholy and abandonment. Why does no one want me?
The cobwebs that clinger onto my corners only added to my sense of isolation. I longed for the days I would be held and cherished; memories of days when gentle hands would caress my polished surface and marvel at my intricate patterns now felt like distanced echoes in a forgotten time.
But now I was nothing more than a gargantuan discarded relic gathering dust and cobwebs in the back of an abandoned store room. It was a lonely and desolate existence and I couldn’t help but wonder if anyone would want to claim me ever again?
how did u add the animal in?
@@fishboy2324 sorry for the late reply
I tried to write in first person
And I added the animal towards the end once the package was delivered and was opened and then inside it was a dog and then the owner was happy and stuff
I didn’t prep them paragraphs so I dont remember what I wrote but this one I prepped as a prompt
@@hijabiixgirllthat's good how did u do
@@frostfnbr did alr lol eng Lang got a 6 and literature got a 7
what mark did u get on q5 english language and did this video help@@hijabiixgirll
Good video will definitely use it
Thank you Mr english ,im gona write this story up as a new pet
How do you make it’s clear in the story that this is a Amazon packaging without saying it’s a Amazon packing ????
im so confused is this for creative writing?
yes
Thank you 🙏
Hi Mr Everything English, love your channel I was wondering if you could make a video series on Much ado about nothing analysis bec out of everything one English Lit GCSE I struggle with Shakespeare the most and sadly my school are doing MAAN something hard to get loads of analysis on 😭😭
I got 32/40 on question 5
any tips?
did you guys finish the English Lit paper one AQA what was the question in Macbeth and Christmas Carol 2022 paper because I have it tomorrow please someone reply please please please
What was the question ?
with all due respect can you not search it up?
@@izaanabdali6658 its not online sometimes???????????????
Thankyou so much !!!
hi mr everything english, i was wondering if you have any tips for my english language paper 1 mock which i have tomorrow to get a grade 9? 😅
Same I have it tomorrow as well
@@tvlogs9299 same i also have it tommorow
did you guys finish the English Lit paper one AQA what was the question in Macbeth and Christmas Carol 2022 paper because I have it tomorrow please someone reply
I have that tomorrow too
@@chakravarthykokila wait it's not about Macbeth and Banquo's attitudes towards the supernatural
1:12 I love planting seeds too 😊☺
This is more kiddy, would this work?
I’m going to use the story but swap the package for a pet or an orphan kid ,will that work if I use the same techniques
what could you do the package as an extended metaphor of?
No one wanting to date you?
Can you talk about kafka and how to make a LP1 Q5 kafkaesque
Hi mr everything English I have language paper 1 tomorrow need help with Q5 especially
is it for mocks?
Hi, I might be wrong, but doesnt Paper 1 Q5 ask you to describe a photo?
its 2 options, a description of a photo or a story with a prompt
@@Teratik Yes, but surely it would be more appropriate to describe the photo/the setting of a story rather than get a bit carried away with the story.
@@parthmarathe4036no
do u speak in first person as the package?
he said that at the start
hi im prabhcorn,
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Ive got one prepared but ive changed it up (wont be sharing