IELTS-Simon-Writing-Task1-Academic-part-6 Comparing Two different charts
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- Here’s the report that I wrote in the video lesson:
The bar chart compares the numbers of males and females who took four different evening classes
in 2009, and the pie chart shows the age profile of these attendees.
It is clear that significantly more women than men attended evening classes at the education
centre. We can also see that evening courses were much more popular among older adults.
According to the bar chart, drama, painting and language courses all attracted more women than
men to the education centre in 2009. Language classes had the highest number of participants
overall, with 40 female and 20 male students, while painting was a popular choice among both
genders, attracting 30 female and 25 male attendees. The only course with a higher number of
males was sculpture, but this course was taken by a mere 15 people in total.
Looking at the age profile pie chart, we can see that the majority of people attending evening
lessons were over 40 years of age. To be precise, 42% of them were aged 50 or more, and 26%
were aged between 40 and 49. Younger adults were in the minority, with only 11% of students
aged 20 to 29, and only 5% aged under 20.
(200 words, band 9)
Note: word count includes all numbers.
Analysis task:
1. Underline examples of paraphrasing in the introduction, comparing it with the question.
2. Look again at the 2 main points that I chose for the overview (paragraph 2).
3. How did I divide the information into two ‘details’ paragraphs (3 and 4)?
4. Was it necessary to compare the bar chart with the pie chart?
5. Underline the numbers that I mentioned in paragraphs 3 and 4. How many numbers did I
mention in total?
6. Underline examples of ‘comparing’ language in the report.
7. Why didn’t I use any ‘change’ language (e.g. increase, decrease)?
8. How many sentences did I write in each paragraph?
Vocabulary task:
Watch the video lesson again. Near the end of the lesson, find the list of good vocabulary.
Underline those phrases in the full report on page 1 of this worksheet.
Extra task:
Try to write your own report about the same two charts using what you remember from the lesson
(but without looking at my answer).
Compare your finished report with mine, and look for areas where you could improve.
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There was not information about the percentage of people aged between 30 and 39. Is it OK?
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So there is age profile, meaning the number of people of a particular age group with something in common. But can we say, for example, gender profile, height profile, weight profile etc.?
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Why we did not mention the Education center in introduction paragraph
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The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the number of males and females who took four different evening classes at a teaching center in 2009, and the pie chart illustrates several age groups who attended these classes.
It is clear that significantly more women than men attended evening classes at adult education centers. We can also see that adult women are more familiar with evening courses.
According to the bar chart, Drama, Painting, and Language courses all attracted more women rather than men to the education center in 2009, where language had the highest number of students, with 40 females and 20 males. Focusing on the bar, according to the data the second highest popular course was painting, where approximately 30 female students and 25 male students. The only course with a higher number of male students was sculpture, but this course was taken by only 10 male students.
Looking at the age profile pie chart, we can see that the majority of people attending evening classes were above 40 years old. To be precise, 42% of them were aged 50 or over, and 26% of them were between 40 and 49. We can also see that younger and adults were in the minority with only 5% of students under 20 ages and 11% of them between 20 and 29 ages.
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Hello Simon, should we worry about the word count while writing task I? What's the maximum word count we can have?
at least 150 word, and there is no limit, but usually aim for 170-190 word
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Can I write this way,
Overall, It is noticeable that.....
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