THE WORST AMPHIBIA FANFICTION EVER?!│AdmiralDT8 #2

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  • Опубліковано 8 вер 2024
  • In this video, I take a dive into the first season of AdmiralDT8's Amphibia fanfiction, Loyalty Among Worlds, starring his OCs, and see if it is worthy of being called Amphibia's worst fanfiction. Hold tight, because this is gonna get cringe.
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    20/8/2024 UPDATE:
    Since AdmiralDT8 has taken down this fanfiction and replaced it with a rewritten version (that I will cover soon), it is no longer available to read on FanFiction.net. Though, the original version is available to read on Web Novel if you want to take a look at this trainwreck, I'll link the new version once I get around to covering it.
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    This video is intended for ages 13+

КОМЕНТАРІ • 281

  • @astroevada
    @astroevada  3 місяці тому +328

    UPDATE:
    AdmiralDT8 has since taken down the original fanfiction and replaced it with a rewrite that is honestly wayyy better than the original and by a long shot. This video will still be kept up for historical and archival purposes. He has also began listening to criticism, even asking me and several others for advice. I'll leave a link to the rewritten one down below and, whilst Loyalty Among Worlds 2.0 won't be the subject of my next review, it will be soon once season one is complete.
    www.fanfiction.net/s/14321819/1/Loyalty-Among-Worlds

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX 3 місяці тому +58

      Sorry, i don't really want to give the time of day to someone who has weird art of minor characters saved to his deviantart favorites along with most of his friends. sorry, not sorry. it's still the same dude. i really hope you aren't supporting this :/

    • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
      @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 3 місяці тому +19

      ​@@XxEcho_SongxXholy shit im passing through for my monthly cringe binge and THIS IS WHAT I SEE?! I gotta fact check, you understand.

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  3 місяці тому +19

      @@XxEcho_SongxX bru wtaf

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX 3 місяці тому +3

      @@astroevada oh yeah, just check out his deviant art favorites it's nasty. he also commented on a tweet aboun a ...egh....non-cholesterol (to avoid censorship) Lincoln loud comic asking about what the plot would be 🤮 if you want proof i recorded me encountering the tweet, simply provide me with a way to send it and i will.

    • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
      @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 3 місяці тому +22

      ​@@XxEcho_SongxXWTF IT'S REAL. JUST LOOKED. IT'S REAL. OH GOD THAT WAS GROSS. HOW DID NO ONE NOTICE THIS?!

  • @cartooncatlover5121
    @cartooncatlover5121 10 місяців тому +622

    POV, when you try to make yourself the main character with an unoriginal story using characters with zero flaws.

    • @nintendofanhdofficial414
      @nintendofanhdofficial414 9 місяців тому +32

      Key word being Try

    • @StinkySeaGoat
      @StinkySeaGoat 9 місяців тому +31

      Mary sue

    • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
      @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 9 місяців тому +20

      Hey, i see you on all things darrel related. Nice to know you like content like this as well. (I love bad fanfic in a "thanks i hate it" way. Unless it's so bad it's funny, such as the infamous My Immortal or Starkit's prophesy.

    • @samv.3217
      @samv.3217 Місяць тому +13

      There's nothing wrong with making a self insert in my opinion, but making them flawless is not a sign of strong writing. Like at least make one flaw for your character to overcome.

    • @ArendAlphaEagle
      @ArendAlphaEagle 29 днів тому +4

      Honestly, I think a Mary Sue-ish self-insert with zero character flaws is a _very_ common thing for amateur fanfiction authors to write.

  • @Maya-nimations.Jar_of_acid
    @Maya-nimations.Jar_of_acid Місяць тому +256

    I normally don’t like using the term Mary Sue for OCs because it’s usually done to put people down but Darrel is a Mary Sue! He is immediately good at magic and has no character flaws

    • @positivea9111
      @positivea9111 Місяць тому +38

      Not Mary Sue, Gary Stu!

    • @TexTheGuy
      @TexTheGuy Місяць тому +5

      @@positivea9111 does it matter they mean the same thing

    • @positivea9111
      @positivea9111 Місяць тому +5

      @@TexTheGuy Well you do you need to pronounce things properly.

    • @TexTheGuy
      @TexTheGuy Місяць тому +2

      @@positivea9111 how does pronouncing do with anything it literally had to do with that it really wont matter which word you use

    • @positivea9111
      @positivea9111 Місяць тому +7

      @@TexTheGuy It’s like referring to a female waiter “waitress” sure you can still called them waiter, but grammar wise it’s false and shows either how lazy in your pronunciation or lack the knowledge of it.

  • @maninanikittycat4238
    @maninanikittycat4238 Місяць тому +157

    I never watched Amphibia but this guy is old enough to be having a job yet his self insert is shipped with a 13 year old

    • @sallyparty1978
      @sallyparty1978 Місяць тому +11

      I know some older people can't get jobs but come on, at least do something else than shipping urself with a 13 yr old

  • @VicBed2022
    @VicBed2022 5 місяців тому +118

    That whole Anne X Darryl thing reminds me of that Mariah Carey Song "Obsessed"
    Darryl is obsessed with Anne but she DOESN'T do nothing to apart him from her.

  • @deerfoxthunderteam1649
    @deerfoxthunderteam1649 Місяць тому +166

    This fanfic is pretty cheesy on its own, but the fact that Daryl is a 30 year old man awkwardly inserting himself into the show and giving the insert a crush on Anne and Sasha is just weird. Edit: I remember my brother showing me this guy's Amphibia art when we were 13 and the show was brand new. I thought that the art was just really corny and moved on with life.

  • @yeaaaaaaae
    @yeaaaaaaae 5 місяців тому +239

    I love the fact he created a channel just for clowning on admiralDT8 and left

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX 5 місяців тому +19

      gotta respect it honestly.

    • @Mychannel-s9r
      @Mychannel-s9r Місяць тому +4

      Well yes but now no

    • @yeaaaaaaae
      @yeaaaaaaae Місяць тому +7

      @@Mychannel-s9r let's go and they fw murder drones🙏

  • @ArendAlphaEagle
    @ArendAlphaEagle Місяць тому +140

    Weird self-shipping shenanigans and obvious tracing and artwork reusing aside... why is the fourth gem/Darryl's color red? Shouldn't that already be covered by Sasha's pink gem color? Shouldn't orange or yellow make more sense, since we don't have such a color yet?

  • @cdarixxx
    @cdarixxx 8 місяців тому +175

    Broo the fucking replies to the cheesy lines r the best parts 😭😭😭
    'Want more cheese with that burger' I LOST MY SHIT

  • @sketchyjulia
    @sketchyjulia 10 місяців тому +91

    The bit with Anne’s mom punishing Darrel is so weird cause like, even though only season one was out at the time and Mrs Boonchuey only had one offscreen speaking appearance in a flashback, and there’s it’s only kinda implied she sorta strict with Anne, most rational people would at least blame both Darrel and Sasha, cause he told her Sasha dine and dashed on him and Anne’s mom would definitely be able to contact her and her parents so like what’s the deal? (Unless it was done so the whole “Anne tends Darrel’s knife wound by holding his hand” scene could happen😔)

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  10 місяців тому +17

      Yeah it seems like that was done specifically for that scene alone.

    • @ma.2089
      @ma.2089 27 днів тому +2

      Some ppl think Asian parents are evil.

  • @randomskykidboy
    @randomskykidboy Місяць тому +35

    I read the original and there was so much singing. Darrel was always in the right and always took Anne’s spotlight. I mean, I literally read the whole thing😭 (helped with anxiety though, but I guess cringy and goofy scenes in stories can do that lol)

  • @DaniFox10000
    @DaniFox10000 Місяць тому +47

    I love self inserts because they can be silly sometimes. Hell I do this with characters I like(That are adults because I'm a adult obviously)
    But peaple who do this shit like what this dude is doing...HORRID MAN

  • @Blitzo8390
    @Blitzo8390 10 місяців тому +111

    Wait a minute, Aurora Borealis?! At this time of year?! At this time of month?? At this part of the multiverse?! Localised entirely in Amphibia??

    • @user-te9th4gk9c
      @user-te9th4gk9c 10 місяців тому +21

      Yes!

    • @ChampionElCid
      @ChampionElCid 10 місяців тому

      ​@user-te9th4gk9c can I see it?

    • @Blitzo8390
      @Blitzo8390 10 місяців тому

      @@user-te9th4gk9c ….I didn’t see it in Amphibia

    • @Flufux
      @Flufux 9 місяців тому

      @@user-te9th4gk9c Can I see it?

    • @kvasskinggsezbooyah69
      @kvasskinggsezbooyah69 6 місяців тому

      ​@@user-te9th4gk9ccan I see it?

  • @thisendlessforrest
    @thisendlessforrest 9 місяців тому +128

    i still dont know how admiraldt8 can go on the internet without feeling utterly disgusted with himself lol

    • @Blitzo8390
      @Blitzo8390 9 місяців тому +24

      He’s like that twenty year old man who was crushing in the PowerPuff Girls

    • @danksydephil3983
      @danksydephil3983 7 місяців тому

      If I had to guess, it's a shitton of autism.

    • @johnoconnell5004
      @johnoconnell5004 5 місяців тому +8

      He could be lacking self-awareness.

    • @idcIwasAsleep
      @idcIwasAsleep 3 місяці тому +3

      me either tbh.

  • @rata2lle
    @rata2lle Місяць тому +159

    Aw, how cute, a 33 year old man shipping himself with a 13 year old girl! I also saw he made a comic where they get married, him, a 33 year old man, and Anne, a 13 year old girl!!! Awwww!!! So wholesome!!!😊😊😊
    (This has been written in sarcasm, I’m not being serious about this being wholesome)

    • @user-eu7dp3tn9m
      @user-eu7dp3tn9m Місяць тому

      💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀💀

    • @user-eu7dp3tn9m
      @user-eu7dp3tn9m Місяць тому +8

      What the actual

    • @ShiningChurro
      @ShiningChurro Місяць тому +3

      HuH?!

    • @macintoshi333
      @macintoshi333 Місяць тому +21

      ​@@ShiningChurroI think this is with sarcastic intent

    • @s.286
      @s.286 Місяць тому +9

      She is supposed to be an adult in that but still weird

  • @ChampionElCid
    @ChampionElCid 10 місяців тому +61

    As someone who stopped reading this fic after the fifth chapter, I REALLY appreciate you taking the time to do this. I assumed it was going to basically be a straight adaptation of the fic with his OCs inserted in and yeah... with a few exceptions that's basically what it is.
    For me, one of the funniest takeaways from this is that none of his chapters managed to break a 5/10 or higher. Somehow I feel this trend is going to continue for the rest of the fic, I would be very surprised if any of his chapters break that middle threshold.
    Secondly, another funny takeaway was the fact that he skipped over "Hop-popular" despite that not being a filler episode, and as you pointed out its plot was pretty important for season one of Amphibia, and the whole reason that Sasha was even doing this whole scheme.
    Finally, the "chicken beak" comment had me laughing. Oh my god I replayed that moment so many times, the kiss looks so weird and unnatural and just....uggghh!
    Great Job! Love what you have so far!
    Also, you have some great taste in Video Game music!

    • @r211Afan
      @r211Afan 10 місяців тому +7

      Oh shit I just realized you made "Owl and the Frog", I love that one! Miles better than whatever the hell this shit is lmao.

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  10 місяців тому +7

      @@r211Afan ^^^

    • @ChampionElCid
      @ChampionElCid 10 місяців тому +5

      @@r211Afan Thanks! It's funny that you say that because.... actually don't want to say more, but maybe keep an eye on this channel...

    • @PurrincessRainbow
      @PurrincessRainbow 9 місяців тому +1

      I don't know or read Loyalty Amongst Worlds but I read The Owl and The Frog. Did you write the owl and the frog?

    • @ChampionElCid
      @ChampionElCid 9 місяців тому +1

      ​@@PurrincessRainbow Yes, I did.

  • @Starr_Ball_Ron
    @Starr_Ball_Ron 9 місяців тому +50

    The Darrel & Clipper bonding chapter just sounds like the Hiccup & Toothless bonding scene in HTTYD...

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  9 місяців тому +10

      I never actually watched HTTYD so I did not catch that.

    • @Starr_Ball_Ron
      @Starr_Ball_Ron 9 місяців тому +17

      @astroevada Yeah. (Infodump Incoming) Clipper pukes up the milkweed and encourages Darrel to eat it, Toothless regurgitates part of a fish and encourages Hiccup to eat it (Both of which, I assume, they do begrudgingly and with a bit of disgust. I haven't read that fanfic, so I don't know). The drawing of Darrel holding his hand out to Clipper is very reminiscent of when Hiccup did the same, that's the confirmation of their bond. Here's where I reach a little: The first ride with Clipper, where Darrel falls into the water. Albeit with different context, Hiccup also falls into the water the first time he rides Toothless. The rides with Anne feel like a rehash of Hiccup's rides with Astrid (Hiccup's love interest), those rides with Astrid develop and progress their relationship. Those are the similarities that were obvious, I might follow-up if I remember anything else. The deliveries were the only real difference I noticed, but even then, Hiccup and Toothless also helped their village. Just thought I should chime in, since that was the chapter you complimented for being original. Sorry for the essay, bro. Much love :)

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  9 місяців тому +23

      @@Starr_Ball_Ron Now that automatically downgrades it to a 3/10

    • @VicBed2022
      @VicBed2022 29 днів тому +1

      @@Starr_Ball_Ron Did the dude just copy-pasted a scene from a Dreamworks movie into his trash?

  • @harrybechtle4333
    @harrybechtle4333 3 місяці тому +75

    Worse part is later on; darrel gets prophetic visions of canon events, but doesn’t do anything about it.

    • @Trular-kreyss
      @Trular-kreyss 2 місяці тому +22

      Yet he has audacity to yell at Marcy in True Colors chapter while he could prevent freaking everything

    • @cureidolsmile9820
      @cureidolsmile9820 Місяць тому +12

      Oh, that is my least favorite trope, especially in fanfication.

    • @zcgamerandreacts2762
      @zcgamerandreacts2762 Місяць тому +12

      He can't stop the canon event otherwise Miguel O'hara is coming for him lmao

  • @user-sk3ir1gh4j
    @user-sk3ir1gh4j Місяць тому +24

    0:14 idk what this is but IT LOOKS AMAZING

    • @NickolasAEtzel
      @NickolasAEtzel Місяць тому +2

      It's probably from a call of duty game, don't know which one it is, but i know that's from call of duty.

    • @Frankhorrigan109
      @Frankhorrigan109 23 дні тому +1

      @@NickolasAEtzelit’s from call of duty black ops 2

  • @frankadarlo
    @frankadarlo Місяць тому +35

    As an Ex-Amphibia fan and now eldritch au maker...
    What. The. F***. HAPPENED TO MY FAVORITE SHOW?!

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX Місяць тому +4

      YOOOOOO a fellow Eldritch Horror Enjoyer

    • @Subterranean_sebastian
      @Subterranean_sebastian Місяць тому +2

      PLEASE- this is a fanfic, a bad fanfic, but a fanfic, Amphibia is still great-

    • @ivoneo2806
      @ivoneo2806 Місяць тому +2

      Dude this is a fanfic calm down

    • @ma.2089
      @ma.2089 27 днів тому +1

      Ex fan? Darn, that ended quick. Why r u calling it your fav show if you’re an ex fan? Did the fan fic do it? If so, it didn’t take much to kill your love.

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX 27 днів тому +1

      @@ma.2089 yes, not like they might be embarrassed to be in a fandom that has this kind of behavior in it or anything. you don't know this person lmao, stfu.

  • @johnoconnell5004
    @johnoconnell5004 7 місяців тому +39

    I've never watched Amphibia. I just find lolcows in certain fandoms to be strange and funny.

    • @theghosttm8245
      @theghosttm8245 7 місяців тому +12

      Pretty fun show
      Season 1 is like season 1 of Gravity Falls. Fun with lore happening in the background and occasionally the main episode with a shift in tone in the finale.
      Season 2 and 3 is when things start to turn up.

    • @johnoconnell5004
      @johnoconnell5004 5 місяців тому +2

      ​@@theghosttm8245I actually watched Gravity Falls when I was kid. It was a fun show.

    • @theghosttm8245
      @theghosttm8245 5 місяців тому +4

      @@johnoconnell5004 The creator of Amphibia helped with Gravity Falls as well. His most noteworthy scene being the Golf War when what’s his name died from the gas leak.
      There’s nods to it as well. IE Bill Cipher in a book in the season 2 finale.

    • @johnoconnell5004
      @johnoconnell5004 4 місяці тому +1

      ​@@theghosttm8245Interesting. By the way have you ever heard 2003 Clone Wars? It has the best version of General Grievous in my opinion.

    • @theghosttm8245
      @theghosttm8245 4 місяці тому +3

      @@johnoconnell5004 I just finished that series last year with my little bro. So much death and dark subjects lol. Loved it.

  • @mattman15
    @mattman15 9 місяців тому +33

    The voices you made to imitate the characters were interesting. The corny voices do fit the corny dialogue well.
    A long time ago, I would’ve made a couple defense rants and say that the story was great, but now, I find the story just decent at best and the only defense I’d really make is that some of Cronaxx’s quotes weren’t that bad in my opinion.
    Last thing, if you do plan in reading his sequel, Sorcerer’s of Signal Hill, which is unlikely, just know that he fixed the whole “New Speaker, New Line” problem.

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  9 місяців тому +5

      Yep, and that's one improvement he did when I skimmed through it

    • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
      @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 8 місяців тому +9

      ​@@astroevadasignal hill is pure unfiltered cringe. I don't know how else to describe it. I just...i've seen things. What even are the names. 😭

  • @tylerourada9719
    @tylerourada9719 Місяць тому +25

    I just know him as the guy who failed at making a Loud House x Far Cry 3 crossover fanfiction. He literally just retold the exact story of Far Cry 3 beat for beat and Just changed Jason Brody's name to Bobby Santiago. Like literally he didn't do anything different than the real Jason Brody. It's like someone was just playing the game with a Bobby skin. I actually told him this and if I remember correctly he actually took it well and thanked me for the advice 🤷 so I guess he's nit such a bad guy. I really don't know much about him I just know he's kind of a bad writer.

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  Місяць тому +6

      Yeah he's actually listening to criticism and actively looks for feedback, I respect the development

    • @tylerourada9719
      @tylerourada9719 Місяць тому

      @@astroevada so when are you going to make a part 2 to this

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  Місяць тому +1

      @@tylerourada9719 Once he makes all the artwork public

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX Місяць тому +1

      @@astroevada you do recall he weird art of minor characters saved to his deviant favorites (i actually mentioned this on another thread) so...why do you respect him at all? he's even creepier now. someone even posted about it i think.

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  Місяць тому +3

      @@XxEcho_SongxX As in I respect the fact he's taking criticism properly. He's still a questionable individual due to that, I plan on confronting him on this

  • @StinkySeaGoat
    @StinkySeaGoat 9 місяців тому +36

    Y’know normally I’m all for creative liberty and right to do what with of aged characters in Said fan Fics, but……..this dude literally Pulled a Chris Chan and thinks everyone who either doesn’t agree or approve of him is a moron and he’s making the highest form of art……

    • @somethingcreative32
      @somethingcreative32 5 місяців тому +10

      Kinda sounds like lily orchard when someone doesn't agree with her, she calls them a f4c1st

  • @simunlovrovic5456
    @simunlovrovic5456 10 місяців тому +27

    Your video editig is much better then thr last time. Your voice is loud and clear and the background music is well intergrated (the volume can be a bit lower, but it is just a personal preference). The pacing of the video is great and the overwall quality is nice. I would love to see the next part, it may take time, but i am sure it will be worth the wait. Great video, keep it up!

  • @orcaboi1558
    @orcaboi1558 7 місяців тому +22

    the enternal staff is basically if deux ex machina was a weapon.

  • @Billcipher1505
    @Billcipher1505 7 місяців тому +39

    His calamity form looks like a fucking smurf!

  • @zephcosmic
    @zephcosmic 9 місяців тому +40

    One thing that’s driving me crazy is that he CONSTANTLY swaps tenses. You learn from a pretty young age to not do that in writing, even the dumb stories I wrote in elementary school didn’t do this. Also, he’s really gotta tone down the cheesy speeches oh my god. Stop giving this man fortune cookies.

  • @kyronmckinney
    @kyronmckinney Місяць тому +21

    40:10 Pause. This actually could be a good use of characterization. Having two parents who aren't home, forcing him to be a pseudo parent to his siblings, means he'll have to grow up faster to look after them, which is not a bad idea. Wonder how he will mess this up😂

  • @kaydeoreilly5670
    @kaydeoreilly5670 8 місяців тому +38

    Bro I won’t make fun of his friends…cause he Doesn’t have any friends💀

  • @RobertFranchini
    @RobertFranchini Місяць тому +6

    This whole fanfic feels like those Tom and Jerry movies were there in the wizard of oz and Willy wonka and the chocolate factory, it just the same plot but with Tom and jerry in it

  • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
    @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 7 місяців тому +60

    news for whoever wants it: Admiraldt8 has Deleted loyalty among worlds as of my writing this, and idk why but mentioned remaking old projects so...

    • @ChampionElCid
      @ChampionElCid 7 місяців тому +12

      Supposedly he's going to try and "improve the fic" but I don't see how. I suppose he can fix the spelling and grammar errors, but that will only improve the structure of the fic. Unless he's going to make a lot of writing changes I don't see the quality of the fic improving at all.

    • @marcsuraci7759
      @marcsuraci7759 7 місяців тому +1

      @@ChampionElCid I do know that he had several plot holes like Cronaxx mentioning having a sister in season 1 and then she’s not mentioned in season 2 and it’s revealed Cronaxx has a brother, someone in the comments told Darrel about this plot hole so he put Cronaxx’s sister in season 3 and he revealed that he forgot about that plot thread explaining why she wasn’t mentioned in season 2

    • @Ermington321
      @Ermington321 7 місяців тому +3

      are there any archives I know way back but idk how that would work exactly?

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX 5 місяців тому +3

      @@Ermington321 yes. check the tv tropes page his fic has for both the old and the new. neither of them are good in my opinion.

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX 5 місяців тому +6

      it's still creepy as hell tho bc name change or no, its still the same dude writing it, and the stain of the original is just that, a stain. it isn't something to be proud of, it's gross and weird. it has actively ruined the show for some people. the fact that the entire amphibia and owl house fandom can agree on, from what I've seen, is that no one likes admiraldt8 and the positive feedback he does get is because he filters comments. reading his work, honestly, left me with a sickness in my stomach. as if there was something viscerally wrong with it. maybe it was the context. maybe it was because he has drawn images of Anne pregnant, with his self insert's baby. which means he lusts for her bc he thought about that to begin with. he is 30. i could say more but I'll leave it at this: I would not recommend Admiraldt8's works for anyone unless they want something to laugh and or cringe at.

  • @OverlordIX
    @OverlordIX 9 місяців тому +23

    I highly suggest you do some volume leveling/tweaking for future videos. Your voice is rather soft and overshadowed by the background music, and every time I increase the volume, the joke scream clips and sound effects just kill my ears. Not really a big deal if this was a short format video, but for a one hour long video, it really becomes annoying after a while.
    Aside from that, thank you for reviewing the fan fic! Its something I've been told by my friends to check out for shits and giggles, but I just couldn't bring myself to do it. Really enjoy the humor in this review as well!

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  9 місяців тому +4

      I will consider that for future uploads

    • @EdgeLord-oz3vi
      @EdgeLord-oz3vi Місяць тому +1

      Agreed, I usually listen to these in the background while playing games

  • @ekaltriesodraw
    @ekaltriesodraw 10 місяців тому +40

    High guardian spice is more entertaining than this fanfiction

  • @Blitzo8390
    @Blitzo8390 10 місяців тому +23

    And about the songs he uses, why do they need to be copyrighted songs. Either you write your own or don’t use songs at all
    God, I swear this is inspiring me to write my own version of this FanFiction where I am the main character and I constantly complain how contrived the plot is. Plus, there will be no shipping between me and the teenaged characters because…I’m a twenty year old man and anyone who ships themselves with fictional characters who are underaged is just messed up. Like WTF!!
    Also, my version of Cronaxx would speak more gibberish that he thinks is wisdom but it is just inane bullshit

    • @ChampionElCid
      @ChampionElCid 9 місяців тому +5

      I think music in a fanfic can work, it just needs to be done properly. I use a few songs in mine occasionally and I try to have it be that the music enhances the mood. Other artistic mediums use music so I feel fanfics/literature can use it too. Though sometimes without the melody it doesn't feel quite right, but that's why I feel copyrighted songs can help in that regard since you can play them in the background while you read the fic.
      In Darrel's case though having "Thriller" play during the zombie sequence does nothing to enhance the mood and is just an excuse for him to have a dance number.

    • @Blitzo8390
      @Blitzo8390 9 місяців тому +3

      @@ChampionElCid It got worse. Believe me

    • @edwardna8849
      @edwardna8849 9 місяців тому +1

      Me too

  • @knightslave5101
    @knightslave5101 Місяць тому +10

    Bro deserves way more subscribers for reading this story😂. Speaking of story I’m also trying to make an Amphibia story with my characters in it but right now I’m just trying to learn how to animate to start telling the story fr but i do have my character design already on my UA-cam and my ig but that’s it. I’m thinking of having the name “Amphibia’s New Story” but idk I might change it later

  • @jaredl.8702
    @jaredl.8702 10 днів тому +1

    When I heard that clipper barfed up milkweed on the boy's lap, I immediately knew it was a toothless from how to train your dragon case

  • @StormriderVarskil1
    @StormriderVarskil1 10 місяців тому +9

    That was a very funny review. 👍 Thanks for making my day. Looking forward to the next one. 👍

  • @CouldCare_Lesslol
    @CouldCare_Lesslol Місяць тому +7

    16:27 Are we not gonna talk about how he has 3 arms/hands in this?

  • @anthonysandoval5512
    @anthonysandoval5512 3 місяці тому +5

    I've read the rewrite and it's actually pretty good and a great improvement in my opinion.

  • @user-mn8bp7uc4r
    @user-mn8bp7uc4r 28 днів тому +3

    I'm gonna say this: if you ever want to make a fourth calamity trio member it has to be a girl that is just how the dynamic works between the girls and you can't fit a boyish character in there who isn't like Sasha who enjoys feminine things

  • @Manikistired
    @Manikistired 23 дні тому +3

    I legit watched all of amphibia just to watch you read this train wreck of a fanfic

    • @mr.foxasmg
      @mr.foxasmg 23 дні тому +1

      How was it?
      Amphibia I mean
      I know the fan fic is probably shit

    • @Manikistired
      @Manikistired 22 дні тому +1

      Pretty good

    • @mr.foxasmg
      @mr.foxasmg 22 дні тому +1

      @@Manikistired glad u enjoyed 😄

    • @cartooncatlover5121
      @cartooncatlover5121 21 день тому

      I'm glad you liked the show. 😇

  • @marcsuraci7759
    @marcsuraci7759 9 місяців тому +12

    It’s weird that Cronaxx is an axolotl yet looks nothing like Loggle or any other axolotl, he should have been a mudpuppy which kind of resemble axolotls but aren’t

    • @EdgeLord-oz3vi
      @EdgeLord-oz3vi Місяць тому

      Do you even know what an axolotl looks like? The only thing off is that he should cut down on the little things that stick out to the side and give them more detail, before you reply to this please look at different axolotl types

    • @marcsuraci7759
      @marcsuraci7759 14 днів тому

      @@EdgeLord-oz3viI do. I was saying when compared to Loggle Cronaxx kinda sticks out ( he doesn’t have the frills Loggle does ) I was saying he should have been a mudpuppy so he can still have his design without it contradicting other designs, but maybe Cronaxx should have been redesigned to look more like Loggle or any Axolotl in Amphibia

  • @galaxy-ninja-omega2394
    @galaxy-ninja-omega2394 24 дні тому +1

    I like how the old wizard salamander is just instigating this teenage boy to cheat on his girlfriend

  • @supercoolmaniajon265
    @supercoolmaniajon265 Місяць тому +7

    I power fantasize about my characters viciously tearing apart the main characters of a verse, and destroying entire cities full of screaming civilians. There's more detail but you get the point.
    But at least I know that's wrong. I don't write my public stories like that because this is for everyone's enjoyment, not just mine. My taste for mindless violence will just turn people away.
    It's the same thing here. Does Admiral _really_ believe the readers want to see his character absorb attention/praise from the main trio and get the most powerful magics from the get go? Where is he gonna get his stakes or struggles after that? The ship he's duct taping together with himse- I mean DARREL and the protagonist? 😂 HA!

    • @Yami-mugoni613
      @Yami-mugoni613 Місяць тому

      You can still do that for a public story but you do have to earn it. Making you characters likable or at least readable

  • @grahamdrew3290
    @grahamdrew3290 24 дні тому +1

    Amphibia and Tf2, the crossover we now have thanks to this video. . .

  • @Subterranean_sebastian
    @Subterranean_sebastian Місяць тому +4

    Ok ok am I tripping or is chapter 9 not just a httyd rip off?? Literally down to the pictures!!!

  • @WDB2005
    @WDB2005 10 місяців тому +8

    Cooking as always (It's me WDBeldin)

  • @BusterTheMinecraftWol
    @BusterTheMinecraftWol 25 днів тому +2

    15:40 Wally my boy NOOOO WHY! Why him

  • @michaelgreagorjr477
    @michaelgreagorjr477 Місяць тому +3

    Why did my dumb self think that salamanders do a ritual to “heal” themselves at 39:45

  • @DavidWillisSLS
    @DavidWillisSLS 10 місяців тому +15

    21:27.
    I feel you Walter. I really do 😂

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  10 місяців тому +5

      DAVID WILLIS IS AN AMPHIBIA FAN?!

    • @DavidWillisSLS
      @DavidWillisSLS 10 місяців тому +3

      @@astroevada I enjoyed the show 😁

  • @Echo.comicsGlennon
    @Echo.comicsGlennon Місяць тому +4

    Finally made Amphibia just kind of feels a little too cheesy

    • @Echo.comicsGlennon
      @Echo.comicsGlennon Місяць тому +1

      Didn’t even try to make a new toad. He just used to spray pictures and then just painted them differently.

  • @crack-man4071
    @crack-man4071 7 місяців тому +9

    Hey big fella. I recognise you. I think it was like a year ago, but one day I was playing on bad water and finally met a TF2 player that likes TOH. My name tag was disgrace btw. What a fkn coincidence that i found your channel a year later about fucking Daryl. Great content btw. Why were you acting like hooty on the server 😭😭

  • @Fnaffoxsee
    @Fnaffoxsee Місяць тому +2

    "No shit Sherlock" is now my favorite line

  • @michaeldilbeck7982
    @michaeldilbeck7982 Місяць тому +4

    This is the warst fanfic I have ever seen. I need eye bleach.

  • @BlackForGold
    @BlackForGold 27 днів тому +2

    Imagine trying to date a fictional character even tho your old enough to be there dad😅

  • @shininred3000
    @shininred3000 Місяць тому +1

    I THOUGHT WE WERE DONE WITH HIM WHY AM I SEEING HIM AGAIN

  • @Space_Vulture
    @Space_Vulture 10 місяців тому +4

    I came here for the David Willis comment 😂

  • @Manikistired
    @Manikistired Місяць тому +1

    23:57 legit could’ve just said “besie is to heavy” and end it there

  • @Kittyboi.
    @Kittyboi. 19 днів тому

    I normally don’t have a problem with OCxCC ships as they’re just characters somebody made and whatnot, however when it’s a self insert then depending on your age you should pair it with a character CLOSE TO OR THE SAME AGE AS YOU! Don’t age yourself down and don’t age them up! It’s weird!!

  • @kacperkarbowiak6947
    @kacperkarbowiak6947 10 місяців тому +6

    Hey quick question why did it this review took so long to release ?
    Just asking out curiosity.

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  10 місяців тому +9

      1- Mental health
      2- Exams
      3- Motivation
      4- Redid it entirely because the original cut did not turn out right.

    • @simunlovrovic5456
      @simunlovrovic5456 10 місяців тому +3

      ​@astroevada hope you are doing all right. We will wait more for the next part of necessary

  • @AverageSpringlockedChild005
    @AverageSpringlockedChild005 9 днів тому +1

    Bro i beg of you PLEASE cover og season 2 and season 3 of loyalty among worlds 🙏

  • @somethingcreative32
    @somethingcreative32 5 місяців тому +5

    Review s2?

  • @Genderless_pawn
    @Genderless_pawn Місяць тому +5

    nah this aint acurate to the show even, sasha is highly hinted to be a lesbian

    • @cureidolsmile9820
      @cureidolsmile9820 Місяць тому +9

      She’s actually canonically bi, it got confirmed in a tweet that’s she’s bi, also she has a pride flag sticker in the last episode

    • @Genderless_pawn
      @Genderless_pawn Місяць тому +6

      @@cureidolsmile9820 my bad, still dont think the character would date a guy like this 30 YEAR OLDS MANS oc

    • @cureidolsmile9820
      @cureidolsmile9820 Місяць тому

      @@Genderless_pawn yeah, that part’s just… 🤮

    • @ShiaTheBunnyGirl
      @ShiaTheBunnyGirl Місяць тому

      She's bisexual 😭 She had a bisexual flag on her car in the ending

  • @nintendofanhdofficial414
    @nintendofanhdofficial414 10 місяців тому +8

    First! [my guy cooked]

  • @Th1nkerer
    @Th1nkerer 19 днів тому +2

    23:30
    Another medium
    🤔

  • @mariotron8718
    @mariotron8718 9 місяців тому +6

    When’s the next one coming out?

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  9 місяців тому +5

      Sometime in 2024

    • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
      @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 9 місяців тому +4

      ​​@@astroevadaok. I love content like this. Just letting you know, you do it very well. Also props for even reading it. I skipped to true colors and god it was cringe. (This fic not the show)

    • @somethingcreative32
      @somethingcreative32 5 місяців тому +1

      I hope it comes soon

  • @ThingThePest
    @ThingThePest Місяць тому +1

    This channel has made me laugh so hard

  • @sergil.3423
    @sergil.3423 29 днів тому +1

    I'D NEVER READ A FUCKING AMPHIBIA FANDOM FICTION EVER AGAIN 💀

  • @theworthams6279
    @theworthams6279 28 днів тому

    If kamen rider fans see this they owe ghost decade and zi-o a big apology heck ghost even has a similar mechanic to staff with different emotions being different colors. God help us

  • @Leegmus
    @Leegmus 20 днів тому

    Darrel looks like Young Neil from Wish 💀

  • @Marv874
    @Marv874 9 місяців тому +3

    I just found another amphibia....fan comic. Check out Kestrel Agent

  • @theobserver.7090
    @theobserver.7090 9 місяців тому +2

    Hello there! Are you answering comments by chance, I really do want to have some honorable talk with you as you seem to speak the truth.

  • @officerred903
    @officerred903 13 днів тому +2

    Please for the love of god lower the volume of your music in the videos

  • @4HioGemma4
    @4HioGemma4 5 місяців тому +3

    Made a vid about his new thing I’m to slow to read it

    • @4HioGemma4
      @4HioGemma4 5 місяців тому

      No music to pls👍🏾

  • @iamnotweak9259
    @iamnotweak9259 Місяць тому +1

    Thats ain't Amphibia. That's a reptile

  • @edwardna8849
    @edwardna8849 9 місяців тому +6

    57:03 & 1:00:56 😂🎉😂🎉😂🎉

    • @bradygliwa2662
      @bradygliwa2662 9 місяців тому +4

      57:07 Yeah, this was my favorite part of this video.

  • @thehedgehoggamer8471
    @thehedgehoggamer8471 7 місяців тому +8

    He isn't 29 HE'S 30

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  7 місяців тому +4

      He very much is

    • @thehedgehoggamer8471
      @thehedgehoggamer8471 7 місяців тому +2

      @@astroevada scratch that he's TURNING 31 this year also he deleted all videos from his channel lol

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  7 місяців тому +2

      @@thehedgehoggamer8471 He was born november 1994, making him 29

    • @thehedgehoggamer8471
      @thehedgehoggamer8471 7 місяців тому +2

      @@astroevada oh really ? I thought he was 30 at 2023:O

  • @saralily0977
    @saralily0977 2 дні тому +1

    57:03 Ok that’s just wrong!

  • @user-lr2cs6hg5o
    @user-lr2cs6hg5o 7 місяців тому +2

    Don't worry, i have seen worst things

  • @rpgenjoyermarko
    @rpgenjoyermarko 10 місяців тому +2

    no audio

  • @Summasidecat
    @Summasidecat 8 місяців тому +3

    When is chapter 3😠😤

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  8 місяців тому +4

      Mid 2024

    • @XxEmpty_EscapexX693
      @XxEmpty_EscapexX693 8 місяців тому +4

      ​@@astroevadaagain, just letting you know, you do this type of content well. (The voice and also your mix of jokes and just summarizing it). I'm here so often because there are sadly few "loyalty among worlds" readings on youtube, because i don't wanna read it myself in it's full, but still want context. I also just kinda love bad fanfic in a "thanks, i hate it" way. Unless it's funny bad, such as My Immortal or Starkit's prophecy. I feel like you deserve an award or compensation or something for wading through the cringe for our entertainment, so if you want some funny content, i recommend Mst3k, soothouse, sorrowtv, kurtis connor, danny gonzalez, drew gooden, and jarvis johnson. Nothing like comedy to drown out the cringe.

    • @Summasidecat
      @Summasidecat 8 місяців тому +2

      @@astroevada bro it is 2034

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  8 місяців тому +3

      @@SummasidecatIt's early 2024, not mid 2024

  • @kalebsenpai1411
    @kalebsenpai1411 Місяць тому

    Heya don’t know if you will see this buuuut one time he followed my twitter for a bit and I was flabbergasted when people told me abt him

  • @kobeginige1932
    @kobeginige1932 24 дні тому +1

    Admiraldt8s story was booooring, if you ask chatgpt to make a story, it would have more soul. 💀

  • @sonicpstv2
    @sonicpstv2 Місяць тому

    it would be better if he aged up the characters like in the series finale.

    • @XxEcho_SongxX
      @XxEcho_SongxX Місяць тому +1

      he has weird art of minor characters saved to his Deviantart favorites, so it would be better for him to leave the internet altogether.

  • @Doofusboyfriends
    @Doofusboyfriends 24 дні тому

    Nice TF2 game play

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  17 днів тому

      tbh this is the most braindead tf2 gameplay ever (especially when I was soldier) but ty anyway lmao

  • @nazarenorivas
    @nazarenorivas 10 місяців тому +5

    This is why
    Frank ramirez>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>darrel"TIMMERMAN".
    (Also i think your first video was taken down).

    • @astroevada
      @astroevada  10 місяців тому +2

      It's still up tho-

    • @nazarenorivas
      @nazarenorivas 10 місяців тому

      @@astroevada well then i dunno what happened but at first a message from youtube didnt let me play the video.

    • @idcIwasAsleep
      @idcIwasAsleep 3 місяці тому +1

      alchemist has weird art of minor characters in his deviantart favorites along with admiral, so....not really, sorry.

    • @Trular-kreyss
      @Trular-kreyss 2 місяці тому

      ​@@idcIwasAsleep At least it's just OCs not self insert like Admiral

  • @diegomv1468
    @diegomv1468 16 днів тому

    So you play tf2? Can I add you?

  • @gerdacababat6258
    @gerdacababat6258 Місяць тому

    h

  • @Summasidecat
    @Summasidecat 8 місяців тому +3

    His vids are inspiring but cringey at the same time 😂😂 no hate

  • @mcastilloso100
    @mcastilloso100 21 день тому

    Wtfffffff