Learn more OR enter the Wordless World Manga Contest here!: bit.ly/3YoLtkN FAQ page: x.com/KADOKAWAdigipub/status/1866081205290205245 (P.S. sorry for how hard it is to see Emily's draft...the pencil lines ended up lighter than expected. Itll be much more visible after inking LOL)
Daidus! To indicate he's broke, have him turn out his empty pockets. Also, you can use speech bubbles but use images inside. For example Emily, when the lady tells the witch there's a monster, you can add a speech bubble with a generic monster face inside!
Idk why I always thought it was funny when the character would show their empty pockets but have the most random thing fall out like a half eaten sandwich.
@@SpilledInkyt Pretty corny suggestion, but this would make me laugh: What if you had a bit where the thief holds his hand out for a wallet, daidus shakes his head in rejection, the thief holds his hand out more threateningly, and daidus finally pulls out his wallet, opening it to find one coin, a paperclip and a shell. a tiny goldfish swims out of the wallet. It holds on that for one panel, and it cuts to the blank expression of the thief, and the blank expression of daidus. then a wide shot of the two staring at eachother in silence, with daidus still holding out his open, empty wallet. almost like a silent interaction that goes "..." "..." "damn, dude, you live like this???" "yup."
I thought the same thing. Also for the last panel when you are home with the cat it would be cute if you pulled the cat off, put him in your hat and rested him on the couch to show you accepting the cat into your home in place of your roommates doting on the cat.
Another suggestion for Emily. If you do want to keep the monster invisible, you can draw it with dotted lines to show transparency and have the characters looking everywhere except where it is. Then once it's visible, show it in high detail to show the contrast
this! and maybe the spider, sensing the magical presence of the witch, drops down and reveals itself-- which would be a great lil jumpscare to initiate the running/screaming scene 😆
To show that the two are roommates in daidus's comic, daidus should've just unlocked the door instead of ringing the door bell to indicate that he has access and lives there
i was thinking he could unlock the door, hang up his keys on a hook with two other keys next to it and a picture of him and the roomates on his way inside
This and even like the first introduction of them showing them lounging around the house and half heartedly greeting him like they knew and expected his company- before doing like a double take at the cat would probably sell it
Man, just watching you explain your stories to the editor was hard to watch. Not cringe or anything, I feel the intensity of bringing your story to a professional publishing editor. That takes a lot of balls.
that editor was really nice ! i receive critique all the time on my work for school and my professor always tears apart my projects, telling me everything that he thinks is wrong with no positive feedback 😅 its kinda discouraging tbh
For Daidus' manga, having the roomates with Daidus at the start and having him get seperated after getting his hat stolen, only for him to get back with them instead of back home might better show that they already know eachother and are friends. EDIT: Also, Daidus and Fat Guy dap up
33:54 I like how polite the editor is. She is giving really good constructive criticism but makes sure to praise them for their work too. And it’s kinda nice how she wanted to correct herself for giving advice on the two page spread part for emily but realized she might have already thought about it when she brought out her first draft.
Jesus I didn't know you were actually gonna give the Manga to the editor in real life. I thought the rest of the video would be inking, that jump scared me a bit
I would love to see Daidus's Manga as a full on series. Very Slice of life action with so much chaos through a fun world. I do like the first shot with seeing the squid floating through the air. If I could change one thing Id have a small panel showing your face showing that he relates to them, content mood face I suppose, just to convey a foreshadow of him using squid powers. It's just a really fun set up! Emily's is just that chaotic cute fun. I love the comedy especially how clumsy our heroine is. I wanna see this fully realized and know it'll have that signature clean look of yours! ALSO THAT SPIDER IS SO DAMN CUTE!
Daidus, counter suggestion. Keep the ending as is, BUT add a beginning to show yourself leaving that same home, introducing Fat Guy and Sen as characters waving goodbye as panel 1 or 2.
Maybe that can be the title page art like how One Piece tells a story in it’s. You see him leaving out, maybe he’s holding his stomach wanting to get snacks and the other two are waving/seeing him off, if it’s from indoors there can even be an Easter egg with the antagonist on the TV, maybe with a crude eye witness sketch (or funny like a chad face)
I feel like this would kill the momentum. One of the reasons he got such high praise for the 2-page spread is because it establishes the world so quick and seamlessly. The first page starts strong and builds intrigue, after which you turn a page and get this nice view of the world. Adding more panels to the first page, or worse yet, adding extra pages (you'd need two to keep the spread as is), weakens the start while adding little to no worth to the overall story.
I am not an artist, but as someone who wants to do fiction writing the conversation with the editor was FASCINATING. Rarely do you get to hear about how literary editors look at stories and I was awed by her immediate identification of things that weren't clear. As hard as it is to hear that a story isn't as punchy as you thought inside your head, this was amazing to experience.
For Emily's story I feel like maybe instead of the spider being invisible it can start out small and then grow so that maybe that's why the monster hunter has to go in and look for it. I feel like you could still use the closet idea and have it be suspenseful but a little funny when they see a tiny spider and then it suddenly gets bigger and that's when all the chaos happens. Hopefully that makes sense.
Emily, you should add spider webs around the house that the owner shows to the witch to hint that there is a monster. The webs can be very big to indicate it’s a giant spider rather than a regular one. It can also be used to show the spider is invisible by maybe showing that there is something on one of the webs/the web is bent, but we can’t see what the thing is.
That's a really cool idea. I'd add them subtlety to the backgrounds so that they hint at what's to come but ultimately don't take away from the surprise unless you really pay attention
The best test for any kind of wordless storytelling is sharing it WITHOUT explaining anything beforehand. That way you get true genuine reactions to your work that can't be tainted by any preconceived bias/context and help you observe if it's having the intended effect you want. It's the hardest part of getting useful critique, letting your work speak for itself. If it doesn't, then its back to the drawing board (figuratively and literally)! Also when presenting work to a producer/editor, KNOW WHAT YOUR INTENTION IS. Lacking confidence/vision in your own work doesn't give them any reason to have any unless they already know your caliber of work!
To do that you have to have really clear sketches though. If you're presenting roughs a bit of explanation is to be expected I'd say I agree with the second part too as long as you remember to keep an open mind so that you can learn from the critique and make your product the best possible version of the vision you have
49:40 i think what could help is, instead of ringing the doorbell, he just enters his home. That way you could probably keep the roommates. Like he enters while they're just chilling and they notice the cat-fish when he walks in. I think what makes them not seem like roommates at first sight, is that Daidus rings the doorbell and they open the door for him. Good luck to both🍀!
Other comments recommending to add the 2 roommates at the beginning so you can reintroduce them again at the ending, i think that would take away from the impact of the 2 first panels + 2page drawing. I think the beginning is amazing, probably my fav part of your comic
The bad guys goons being like pilot fish or minnows would work so well with him being a shark! The world building would be IMMACULATE EVEN IF THERE ARE NO WORDS
For Emily an idea to show case that she’s a witch for hire since you can’t write a flyer maybe you can do a few panels in the beginning of her in an ad where she looks all confident and pitching herself by waving around her magic staff or does a demonstration with a little monster dummy and blasts it with her magic/capture it making it look easy and then where she looks at the “camera” all confident and happy it cuts to where she is at the house all nervous. (I’m not sure what time period you have in mind for the manga but maybe it can be broadcasted via magic XD) Sorry if I explained it poorly
I was thinking of adding couple of panels at the beginning where the woman sees a monster in her home or hears scary noises, and then looks at the poster with the witch girl. This may help showing why she was called
@@AntonShabat It could also be one of her flyers or ads on those little papers sticking out and it looks old and noone drew any of them except for the lady or maybe her partner/husband who calls her for help.
38:03 couldn't you try to convey the house is haunted in some other way? A wide shot showing the happy, bright forest and the house just covered in a heavy cloud; inside, it would be super dark even if you light candles or have all the windows open. Then, when the witch does her magic, all the darkness congregates into the monster, and the house looks normal. You could also have the lady (and her family?) waiting for the witch outside, showing that the house is kind of unliveable
GeekXplus is the employer of spilled ink, so they employed daidus and Emily and they came to Japan then created the show. GeekXplus is owned by Kadokawa and is used as an marketing outlet for their work as well as other stuff. I might be wrong, but this is what I think is going on
Suggestion for Emily for the invisible monster: You could have a few extra/minor panels of her panning around the room or looking in different places around the living room to indicate her looking for it. or have it dim until it turns a bright color when shes close to it
Having your work graded by a pro is such a growth experience. Once someone told me when dealing with this type of situations. Instead of feeling nervous, think of all the feedback that will help you improve. Daidus's two-spread was sick!
For Emily Maybe she could hand out a business card, where her job title is displayed. Depending on how strict they are with the "no words" rule. For Daidus and Emily Please hide Ichika somewhere in your manga, as an easter egg.
based on the competition rules is better not to add ichika becuz than they wont be able to use ichika as with the rules all submissions are becoming kadokawa's ip and authors cant use it without written permission
If someone didn’t already suggest Emily what if the spider monster was like dog sized so big enough to scare the shit out of a person you could show the witch with an idea bubble showing her shrink the spider to normal size with a spell and stepping on it. But she accidentally makes it grow massive instead.
You could do this idea simpler by just having the spider be small in the beginning and the Witch try to blast it - but instead of going poof, it'll grow big because of a misspell. Or, you could have two spiders - one small, which both the characters see and she blasts, but not noticing that behind them is this a big one :)
For Emily, you could just make the outline of the spider silhouette if you wanted to keep it invisible, like dotted lines. I think it would add to the scene if the witch looked around the room for the monster and after having a panel of the spiders invisible silhouette (dotted lines) the witch is visibly confused why the monster isn’t there. It would look less like a summoning if it were more implied that there is supposed to be something there to begin with.
One suggestion for Daidus' manga would be to start with a panel showing the protagonist walking with his two friends. Suddenly, a cat catches his attention, and he gets distracted, leaving his friends behind while he goes to pet the cat. The story would follow its normal course, but in the end, instead of returning home, he finds his friends completely dirty.
For Emirichu's manga, she can keep the invisible spider/monster by having few shots showing items getting knocked over/moved and mage use magic to show the monster where one of the legs is in the place of knocked over item indicating monster was the reason for those anomalies. Good luck to both of you with you mangas!
Thanks for introducing me to the wordless world manga of kadokawa! I had no idea about that before and already started doing pages. This is a big opportunity and I'm truly grateful because I always wanted to do manga :)
Emily should go with “Witch for Hire” as the name of her manga. It kinda tells you what your story is about and that poster thing could illustrate that too
for emily's comic i could imagine th beginning going a bit like this : -close up of magical girl's face looking down nervously - over shoulder shot of her hand holding an envelope -she looks at the customers house (as in "i've arrived where i was summoned to") -then she knocks and it resumes normally until... -the magical girl sees a shadow behind the customer and looks shocked - the customer turns around but sees nothing -the magical girl (knowing only some people can see monsters) stands protectively in front of her customer - keeping the original shocked face when the shadow comes clearly into view and looks like a spider -possibly another reveal where, after some magical spells, the customer can now also see the monster and looks shocked - i think it would be fun to have the customer scurrying around and catching random items in the background (trying to keep some items in tact) for daidus' story if he plans to keep the cat as a pet, he can try to put on a collar on the cat successfully, but once he goes in to pet the cat he is bitten once again. (declaring him the new owner, but still being hated) idk if that's clear enough though...
Seeing her speak in Japanese, while you guys reply in English, just going back and forth with complete comprehension on both ends adds credence to my theory that Spilled Ink is set in the TEKKEN universe
I was about to say the same thing as@@alphakowaclips. It would be quite a slog to have the translator speaking every time, but Daidus and Emily are definitely improving
in emily's manga, i think the monster can still be invisible but maybe at the start, make the monster known ( if not visible, ghostly movements to indicate there is _something_ ), and then she casts a spell to show itself this way, the reader can understand that the monster was invisible, not summoned
the idea of the witch accidentally summoning a monster is so cool tho, or like, she's trying to get rid of an encaged monster and accidentally makes the cage disappear. if there was other chapters or one-shots I'd be a funny thing to read.
if anyone's discouraged about making a manga because of their art skills, just remember: ONE made two of the most beloved manga series of all time. if the story is good enough, people will look past the art.
17:19 Whiffing MAGIC MISSLE?! Yeah, she's a lost cause xD Jokes aside, I love both mangas! Both of you guys are amazing artists, I'd get *all* the manga you write! :D
3 weeks late, but it could be funny if at the beginning, the spider has been trapped under a trash can, weighed down by a potted plant. the trashcan twitches around a bit before the monster exterminator and homeowner nervously let it out, building a bit of suspense. kind of a visual gag playing on the normal situation of trapping bugs under drinking glasses, but in large scale
For the ending of Daidus's comic it could be him going into his room and falling onto his bed with the cat still biting his leg or something like that.
a bit of advice for Emily, to establish more clearly of what the MC is and what is she doing at the beginning, you could make a page with her doing preparations. And the next page you could kinda do what daidus did but instead of full double spread panel, you can add some panels to emphasize more on her expressions that she was nervous at the side (around 1/4 to 1/5 area of the double spread), and a big panel of her going into the house
57:24 HI EMILY! Regarding spider issue! What if you did the spider in the closet, a little panel that shows both the witch and the customer scared of it (maybe funny faces of them both grossed out) and then a big panel of just her blasting a big spell at the spider! That would show her being scared to do her job with all her clumsiness and using her spell casting in a funny way? If that makes sense! And at the end have her make a little “phew” come out of her mouth making her relieved with her work and end it with that last panel page! I am in love with this story sooooo much! I think that’s why I’m so passionate about how it turns out cause it’s so cute! I hope you see this and get a little bit of ideas! I love both of y’all’s stories and I’m super excited to see more!
Ideas for Emily's manga: instead of the monster being invisible, it could be smaller like a small-dog size and the witch makes it bigger by mistake (there you could reuse the pannels you already did where she cast the spell for make it visible). And I agree with other comments, the lady could have a speech bubble showing a tipical monster that indicate that there is a monster in her house. For making the Witch look like a novice or that it is her first show, maybe it is too complicated but you could draw her receiving her uniform and trying it on for the first time and then she is given a scroll with this mission (drawings of a monster + house + lady's face scared in a scroll) Hope this helps or gives you any ideas. This was a great video! Both stories are really cool and fun, and having a manga editor give feedback in real life is really interesting!
7:42 usually the way you convey you are broke is by pulling out your pockets instead of waving your hands 8:03 Its not clear to me that Daidus is saving himself until I see the tentacle arm at 8:26. I think you should insert a full-body shot of Daidus in the foreground before 8:45 to make it clear that humans can transform. and because he’s the protagonist and its an opportunity to look cool. seeing the shark man transform right after fits right with Daidus transform. otherwise shark man could be interpreted as another character entirely 15:19 To show a witch for hire, draw the client with mouth open and a thought bubble with the spider. Or a thought cloud[s] showing problems or multiple items the spider broke. Indicate hiring by showing money changing hands a 1/4 page panel.
Is it just me or I just really love these storyboard/draft drawings as its own masterpiece category (sometimes I prefer them more than the final product in some cases...)
Emily! The visual of a wanted poster for the spider or newspaper ad for the witch/dorky witch license would probably be enough to get the point across - you could even put a made up language in there (sorta like what you see in Hunter x Hunter) to help sell it without needing real words or even do a gag where the client is comparing her in person looking nervous to her ad where she looks real slick and confident - idk, feel like there's something in there that could work!
Ahh this is awesome! I've always wanted to do a manga, but sadly, I only have the writing skill. Not the art 🫠 Also from a writer standpoint, I'd start the next chapter introducing his friends! If he ends it with realizing that the cat followed him home
An add for a monster exterminator that looks kinda like the ghost busters logo and her doing a thumbs upp would work maybe? And one phone number tab being taken from the bottom of the add?
Daidus, for the last bit of the manga where the bad guys are all “inked up”(lol), you should have one large panel of their backs looking up at the daidus character scaling the building from a low angle and then have the panel of them all inked up and looking done Just a lil storytelling hack or frame to help convey the fact you’re climbing a building and their perspectives better! Plus it paces the conclusion of the fight out a little to make it seem more resolution-esq.
One idea i had for emily is instead of making the monster invisible, it could just be really small, and then gets bigger when it starts to fight, so you could have the monster visible from the start, but then have that moment when it transforms into its larger form and then the mc can have that "oh god!" reaction that you've already drawn.
I loved seeing this! Both of you are amazing and more than I could ever do! I have some basic ideas that probably someone else already has had, but feel free to do with them what you want. Per Daidus: One of the things that could be an indicator that its his home vs the new owners is that they use a key to get inside. I think that you could have him notice the cat is on his leg when he gets to the door, and he starts shaking his leg to get it off. Unable to get it off, he sighs and lets himself back into the apartment. The cat stays on his leg until he gets food out of the fridge, and at that, he notices the cat staring at the bowl while still staring at him. He puts some food in the bowl and puts it on the ground, and the cat lets go and starts eating. He does the "OHMAIGAWDITSSOCUTE" look, then goes to pet it and it latches back onto his hand. Per Emily: If you wanted to show she's new, you might have some sort of badge or identification to mark her as a paranormal exterminator or something like that. Something shiny on her outfit that she's super excited about at the very beginning, and have a nervous panel right as she's about to ring the doorbell.
If daidus used a key to get in the home rather than ring the doorbell, I think the idea of them being roommates comes across a lot better. Or you could have them be with him in the beginning as he looks at the squid. And then after his adventure he meets back up with them. And the first image of Daidus needs to have his head tilted up just a tad more to really make it seem like he's looking up at the squid.
For the diadus's manga ending maybe have an extra panel where the cat walks towards the roommates to smell their hands, but daidus panics. Yet instead of biting them the cats blobs into the roommates' arms, que a surpised diadus. Thus showing that they aren't aware who the cat, bcs the roomates were hesitant at the start to the reader. Extra pannel is daidus attempting to pet the cat but it bites his hand like Emirichu suggested
I have a few ideas for Emily's manga and how to make it more readable without redrawing huge portions or rethinking the whole story. For the magic spell that leads the main character to the monster, you could depict it by some sort of a smoke/magic trail leading her towards the room that the monster is in. Maybe a full page seen from the back of a hallway showing the witch with the owner following the trail that the staff is casting to another doorway closer to the camera. I also really like the idea of her holding the staff out in front of her, and that could also be explored more. When she bangs the staff on the ceiling, it could just stop glowing randomly, causing her to rattle/hit it to work again. As for the invisible monster, you could show random objects just falling off of shelves or floating around. Maybe she could feel around if she can't touch it, causing her to cast a reveal spell. The spell should also be gradual to convey the reveal rather than a sudden puff of magic. I feel like that makes it feel more like a summoning. If you read this, I hope you find some of my ideas helpful.
I loved the Q&A section! It was truly inspiring and pushed a little of the fear away when it comes to the thought of approaching a manga editor. I thought that, for Emily's manga, the witch could show a badge (like a police badge, with a specific shape and logo) to indicate she's from an association. But that would take from the bit where the customer pulls her in (which I thought could be a little more exaggerated!), so just an idea.
Emily, perhaps you could add huge spider webs, or the lady's pet swaddled in web and hanging upside-down from the ceiling to show that the spider is there and causing trouble
i cannot describe how much i needed this. I used to make comics a few years ago but i stopped because of school and this inspired me to participate in this competition and get back into drawing manga again!!
Genuinely Emily and Daidus if you guys published your mangas weather they remain one-shots or episodes, I think they’d be AMAZING! The art styles and the story lines are so captivating 😭🫶🫶 you guys did amazing !! Also the sequence in Emily’s spider appearing stage could be handled a few different ways! You could have it invisible but shown with dots/dashes, or have it shown from the start like you mentioned in the closet and once it’s opened it springs out and starts hopping around the room and chasing them! Another idea could also be keeping the theme of accidentally summoning the spider, have the woman point to an ominous/threatening or creepy object she aims her wand and BAM spider!! That way perhaps you don’t have to change too much. At the end you could show the object getting hit and like a ghost exiting it and then the pan out frame of the entire room like you have originally. Just a few ideas!! I’m super excited to see what you guys come up with 🫶🫶🫶 it’s gonna be amazing reading he final products.
For Emily's manga, instead of having the spider invisible, maybe it could at first just appear as a regular sized spider, but then have it grow giant. That way you can still have the reveal of the monster. You could even add a thing where the witch underestimates how difficult the task will be, and is maybe even relieved at first.
I loved Daidus' big scene pannel but it wasn't clear to me if the squid was swimming/flying or if it was a sign squid shaped, if it's real I think it would be nice do add a lil movement on his tentacles on either the first pannel or the big pannel. I know it's a draft but both are really cool and funny stories you guys are awesome
I havent watched the full video, but a cool idea for daidus' henchmen could be to have them be some kind of fish that stays in big schools or group together a lot, just an idea i got from seeing it, GREAT VIDEO❤
If Daidus’s manga continues with the running gag of the cat creature biting him and no one else it would be funny if the reason wasn’t because it hated him, but rather it just likes the taste of squid. But that’s not revealed until later. Or not. Anyway, this was really cool to watch. Thank you both of you.
I don’t know if this has been mentioned.. to save paper and time, you could have a small spider be present and then she makes it bigger 🤷♀️ that would still fit character and be a minor adjustment Super cool guys! Love your channel so so so much. ❤
Emily! Maybe you could have your character show a card to the owner of the house to show that she is an exterminator! Kinda like a specialty badge of some sort? Like she is part of a guild or something?
It may be a little late but I have ideas; for Daidus’ ending it could be super simple, Daidus on the roof silhouetted in the Sunset(?) fishcat still hanging on, he tries to shake it off but can’t then exhales and we’re done. The roommates adopting fishcat could be chapter 2. Emily could start with the job poster idea through icons? A crossed out monster, witches hat, thumbs up and currency sign. Also as the monster is a spider, it could just be hiding on the ceiling so you can still have that cool reveal and reaction shot that is 👌
honestly, if you are looking for manga paper, consider using smooth bristol instead...typically its used for western comics, but manga paper is flimsy if you are using screen tones, it cuts through the paper a lot (honestly, skill issue on my part), but with bristol, it gives your artwork a much more solid "canvas". However, the down side is that bristol is hard for g/maru pens and manga paper is hella smooth. All I'm saying, is that when you do your inking your manga page, consider if you like the consistency of smooth bristol :)
Hope you both get official mangas. Also, if I’m ever confident enough to make my own manga, you two are definitely inspirations for characters. You both have loveably chaotic personalities.
A good twist Emily could do is to show that the monster is trying to protect something that's why it went insane and then after the girl broke parts of the house it turns out that there are small spiders stuck in the wall ( or could be anywhere in the house) so the magic girl then help the monster free his family then it just leaves peacefully but the house was already destroyed by then so you can keep the final panel as it is
I wonder if Emily could keep the invisibility part by showing a faint outline of the spider or a really faint version? Almost like if a mist of water refracted light to somewhat show what is invisible?
Suggestions from a person whose prefered art form is story-telling (not in a professional capacity): Emily: I'm so sorry that the opening title page idea isn't possible because that was such a well thought out idea and very cool. I believe in your ability to come up with something just as good! The cardinal rule (one of em anyway) of story-telling is show don't tell and with manga you can take that very literally. You don't really need this because your character work is so well done in terms of conveying movement and emotions, but you could change her design visually to better show her flaws. A bandaid or scraped knees. Also to show her lack of magic skill maybe her wand is a little broken or chipped. A broken wand (the crystal falls out) could turn into it's own hijinks (accidentally transforming the monster into a different animal or changing it a funny color). To introduce her character maybe rather than having her be on her first commission have her be handing out flyers with her standing confidently on a dead monster to show what she is supposed to be doing and maybe a noise comes from inside and the lady takes her anyway because she's desperate, and then the panels could proceed as expected up until the monster is seen. OR and this is a bad idea because you'd have to rework more but maybe have her walking along and someone comes running out of the house and she goes in and saves the day and then she gets paid and that's how she ends up in her line of work. But again you'd have to rework most of it so it's a worse suggestion. Daidus: You're pretty good already, especially with the one-shot. You've worked on what you need to pair down. Having a clear narrative is the best thing you can do. And you already talked about visually building tension/fleshing out the story more by drawing out certain sequences (like the man approaching the butt). Best of luck to you both!
I'll definitely give it a shot, just I feel like I'll have to find a way to convey the story without words but actually it might sound hard but ngl it kinda sounds easier to not have to worry about dialogue ngl
35:09 making the character look overly serious (like heavily shaded and stuff, tense idk how to describe it) could comedic-ly convey that this is her first mission
the hire page for the witch thing, i thought itd be a cool shoot if it'd show it but obv words dont make any sense so some sort of otherworldly language? and maybe the lady sees the page and takes it , and then next page could be the witch girl attending her house and rest is up to you. Really find the ideas so cute tho, cant wait for yalls outcomes omgomg awesome job you two
I think the "finding a job posting" thing could still work, maybe use swiggly lines for the "text" but put more images in, like a picture of our witch hitting a "bad guy' with her staff in the ad.
9:10 I had to pause the video when that left page appeared. Absolutely magnificent... x3 I also hope Emily doesn't worry too much about not having the option to write in order to world build, because there's absolutely nothing wrong with more open-ended fantasy. As a D&D nerd I love worldbuilding, and it's tempting to write so much about your setting and get into all the intricacies of it's history and various cultures and whatnot, but sometimes having stuff not explicitly explained can stoke a readers/viewers imagination, and you don't have to fret as much about things "not making sense" for the world or feeling constrained by it's parameters - you can establish early on that your setting is whimsical and more than capable of throwing up unexpected surprises, and it isn't an objectively better or worse way to world build, it's just one of the many ways you can about it! :D
Please put it in a community post or something if you find out if we can use signs and labels in the manga! A friend and I are participating and we’re really worried about that😭
@@Dinopop I think that just any kind of words are not allowed? Because Emirichu clarified that it's no lettering. So you can't use any signs or indicators with words, for what you want to express or show in the manga. It should all be explained visually
Not sure if 20 days is too late but I have some suggestions! Daidus, to make clear they're roomates they could be with him in the first scene in the page spread, and when he goes to chase the cat he makes a sign like "I'll catch him, don't worry", that way the characters are already presented as friends and the readers already know what their relation to the protagonist is by the the time they reach the end! Emily, you could make her check a little one in the panels at 15:05 so she sighs like "noooo it IS the right house..." to make it clearer she's going there for work, when she's in the house the lady could use a tiny speech bubble with a dot outline of a horned head to get across the idea of invisible monster (personally I'd also add a "?" to add some mistery to if there IS any monster to take care of or not, but that's up to you lol), and lastly, maybe you could change the perspective on that one panel where she moves her wand towards the monster so that the camera faces towards the monster too, that way it shows the reader there *already is* something there, maybe also add some lines coming from there to indicate there's some evil presence (like the ones Toriyama used on Piccolo at the beginning of chapter 147, or on Goku when he's about to face Nappa on chapter 224 of dragon ball, for example) Sorry for writing for this long lol I liked both mangas, anyways good video! I just subscribed!
When I draw invisible characters, I try to bend anything behind them like when you look at something through glass. Try putting things in or behind a glass of water and see how it looks from the front. Then you can use that for a reference if you wanted to stick with your invisible beastie. Try drawing their outline to remind yourself where the light should bend. Hope this helps and isn't too long!
Learn more OR enter the Wordless World Manga Contest here!: bit.ly/3YoLtkN
FAQ page: x.com/KADOKAWAdigipub/status/1866081205290205245
(P.S. sorry for how hard it is to see Emily's draft...the pencil lines ended up lighter than expected. Itll be much more visible after inking LOL)
Do the mangas have to be one shots for the contest, I can’t find an answer on the website 😅
The link won’t open😪 it says “Safari can't open the page because it couldn't establish a secure connection to the server.”
👍🏻
Hype
@@Bi.StanderXO well considering you're submitting it for a contest, a one-shot is the goal
Daidus! To indicate he's broke, have him turn out his empty pockets.
Also, you can use speech bubbles but use images inside. For example Emily, when the lady tells the witch there's a monster, you can add a speech bubble with a generic monster face inside!
i thought about it but i thought it was a little too cartoony or cliche'. maybe i'll rethink it! -d
@@SpilledInkytwhat about the お金hand pose(it’s like the 👌 but sideways lmao) from the Shark man and Daidus going ✋🙂↔️
Idk why I always thought it was funny when the character would show their empty pockets but have the most random thing fall out like a half eaten sandwich.
@@SpilledInkyt
Pretty corny suggestion, but this would make me laugh:
What if you had a bit where the thief holds his hand out for a wallet, daidus shakes his head in rejection, the thief holds his hand out more threateningly, and daidus finally pulls out his wallet, opening it to find one coin, a paperclip and a shell. a tiny goldfish swims out of the wallet.
It holds on that for one panel, and it cuts to the blank expression of the thief, and the blank expression of daidus. then a wide shot of the two staring at eachother in silence, with daidus still holding out his open, empty wallet.
almost like a silent interaction that goes
"..."
"..."
"damn, dude, you live like this???"
"yup."
I thought the same thing. Also for the last panel when you are home with the cat it would be cute if you pulled the cat off, put him in your hat and rested him on the couch to show you accepting the cat into your home in place of your roommates doting on the cat.
Another suggestion for Emily. If you do want to keep the monster invisible, you can draw it with dotted lines to show transparency and have the characters looking everywhere except where it is. Then once it's visible, show it in high detail to show the contrast
EXACTLY! I have no idea how they didn’t think of this 🙇♀️
this is the move
this! and maybe the spider, sensing the magical presence of the witch, drops down and reveals itself-- which would be a great lil jumpscare to initiate the running/screaming scene 😆
You could have a panel of something flying across the room with no particular reason, rather than the dotted lines
THISSSS
To show that the two are roommates in daidus's comic, daidus should've just unlocked the door instead of ringing the door bell to indicate that he has access and lives there
yes! i was thinking that too
and also having a panel where he is texting them on his phone or something like that
That would be amazing bcs it will be a juxtaposition of a normal apartment to the hybrid sea city that daidus created.
i was thinking he could unlock the door, hang up his keys on a hook with two other keys next to it and a picture of him and the roomates on his way inside
This and even like the first introduction of them showing them lounging around the house and half heartedly greeting him like they knew and expected his company- before doing like a double take at the cat would probably sell it
Man, just watching you explain your stories to the editor was hard to watch. Not cringe or anything, I feel the intensity of bringing your story to a professional publishing editor. That takes a lot of balls.
Agreed. I got super anxious watching it. That says more about me than anything 😅
that editor was really nice ! i receive critique all the time on my work for school and my professor always tears apart my projects, telling me everything that he thinks is wrong with no positive feedback 😅 its kinda discouraging tbh
Always write a synopsis to a story that you will present to others!
@@st4rlo_0 Is him tearing your projects too extreme!?!?
For Daidus' manga, having the roomates with Daidus at the start and having him get seperated after getting his hat stolen, only for him to get back with them instead of back home might better show that they already know eachother and are friends.
EDIT: Also, Daidus and Fat Guy dap up
oooooo YES this is good!!
33:54 I like how polite the editor is. She is giving really good constructive criticism but makes sure to praise them for their work too. And it’s kinda nice how she wanted to correct herself for giving advice on the two page spread part for emily but realized she might have already thought about it when she brought out her first draft.
Getting praise about your artwork from a manga editor has to be the greatest feeling ever. I'm so jealous
Jesus I didn't know you were actually gonna give the Manga to the editor in real life. I thought the rest of the video would be inking, that jump scared me a bit
I would love to see Daidus's Manga as a full on series. Very Slice of life action with so much chaos through a fun world. I do like the first shot with seeing the squid floating through the air. If I could change one thing Id have a small panel showing your face showing that he relates to them, content mood face I suppose, just to convey a foreshadow of him using squid powers.
It's just a really fun set up!
Emily's is just that chaotic cute fun. I love the comedy especially how clumsy our heroine is. I wanna see this fully realized and know it'll have that signature clean look of yours!
ALSO THAT SPIDER IS SO DAMN CUTE!
I thought I was the only one who thought it was kinda cute😅
Daidus, counter suggestion. Keep the ending as is, BUT add a beginning to show yourself leaving that same home, introducing Fat Guy and Sen as characters waving goodbye as panel 1 or 2.
THIS!!!!!
Exactly my thoughts....Dammnn
THIS!!!!!!!
Maybe that can be the title page art like how One Piece tells a story in it’s. You see him leaving out, maybe he’s holding his stomach wanting to get snacks and the other two are waving/seeing him off, if it’s from indoors there can even be an Easter egg with the antagonist on the TV, maybe with a crude eye witness sketch (or funny like a chad face)
or maybe have him look at his phone in the beginning, which shows the roommates on the lock screen
I feel like this would kill the momentum. One of the reasons he got such high praise for the 2-page spread is because it establishes the world so quick and seamlessly. The first page starts strong and builds intrigue, after which you turn a page and get this nice view of the world. Adding more panels to the first page, or worse yet, adding extra pages (you'd need two to keep the spread as is), weakens the start while adding little to no worth to the overall story.
I am not an artist, but as someone who wants to do fiction writing the conversation with the editor was FASCINATING. Rarely do you get to hear about how literary editors look at stories and I was awed by her immediate identification of things that weren't clear. As hard as it is to hear that a story isn't as punchy as you thought inside your head, this was amazing to experience.
For Emily's story I feel like maybe instead of the spider being invisible it can start out small and then grow so that maybe that's why the monster hunter has to go in and look for it. I feel like you could still use the closet idea and have it be suspenseful but a little funny when they see a tiny spider and then it suddenly gets bigger and that's when all the chaos happens. Hopefully that makes sense.
put some webs in the corners
@@brionnabennett2421 or maybe have the witch make the spider grow accidentally. Showing how clumsy she is at her job
Emily, you should add spider webs around the house that the owner shows to the witch to hint that there is a monster. The webs can be very big to indicate it’s a giant spider rather than a regular one. It can also be used to show the spider is invisible by maybe showing that there is something on one of the webs/the web is bent, but we can’t see what the thing is.
That's a really cool idea. I'd add them subtlety to the backgrounds so that they hint at what's to come but ultimately don't take away from the surprise unless you really pay attention
The best test for any kind of wordless storytelling is sharing it WITHOUT explaining anything beforehand. That way you get true genuine reactions to your work that can't be tainted by any preconceived bias/context and help you observe if it's having the intended effect you want. It's the hardest part of getting useful critique, letting your work speak for itself. If it doesn't, then its back to the drawing board (figuratively and literally)!
Also when presenting work to a producer/editor, KNOW WHAT YOUR INTENTION IS. Lacking confidence/vision in your own work doesn't give them any reason to have any unless they already know your caliber of work!
To do that you have to have really clear sketches though. If you're presenting roughs a bit of explanation is to be expected I'd say
I agree with the second part too as long as you remember to keep an open mind so that you can learn from the critique and make your product the best possible version of the vision you have
49:40 i think what could help is, instead of ringing the doorbell, he just enters his home. That way you could probably keep the roommates. Like he enters while they're just chilling and they notice the cat-fish when he walks in. I think what makes them not seem like roommates at first sight, is that Daidus rings the doorbell and they open the door for him. Good luck to both🍀!
Other comments recommending to add the 2 roommates at the beginning so you can reintroduce them again at the ending, i think that would take away from the impact of the 2 first panels + 2page drawing. I think the beginning is amazing, probably my fav part of your comic
Maybe something like he pulls out a key from his pocket and unlocks the door or something could also work.
AWE THE CHRISTMAS INTRO IS SO CUTEE
I have an idea for my own manga, but I feel like my drawing skills are still not good enough. Just gotta keep practicing!
Me too but I don’t know how to drew that good but I hope you have a great manga
dont worry you most likely aren't far away from being able to make one.
the most important part of a manga is the story. case and point Jujutsu Kisen
Why does it say this comment was from 17h Ago when the videos only 5 mins ago
@@polskirzniwiarz5034 yeah but I have so many ideas to do with it and I don’t have the time
@ because he probably got the member thing early access for videos
The bad guys goons being like pilot fish or minnows would work so well with him being a shark! The world building would be IMMACULATE EVEN IF THERE ARE NO WORDS
For Emily an idea to show case that she’s a witch for hire since you can’t write a flyer maybe you can do a few panels in the beginning of her in an ad where she looks all confident and pitching herself by waving around her magic staff or does a demonstration with a little monster dummy and blasts it with her magic/capture it making it look easy and then where she looks at the “camera” all confident and happy it cuts to where she is at the house all nervous. (I’m not sure what time period you have in mind for the manga but maybe it can be broadcasted via magic XD) Sorry if I explained it poorly
I was thinking of adding couple of panels at the beginning where the woman sees a monster in her home or hears scary noises, and then looks at the poster with the witch girl. This may help showing why she was called
Or Emily could show that the witch was in a TV ad, and the woman calls the number or something.
@@AntonShabat It could also be one of her flyers or ads on those little papers sticking out and it looks old and noone drew any of them except for the lady or maybe her partner/husband who calls her for help.
If so it'd be nice to have a panel with her standing next to the ad looking all nervous to really hammer in the contrast
38:03 couldn't you try to convey the house is haunted in some other way? A wide shot showing the happy, bright forest and the house just covered in a heavy cloud; inside, it would be super dark even if you light candles or have all the windows open. Then, when the witch does her magic, all the darkness congregates into the monster, and the house looks normal. You could also have the lady (and her family?) waiting for the witch outside, showing that the house is kind of unliveable
I really like this idea!
Wait, how am i just now hearing that Spilled Ink is part of KADOKAWA? Damn guys.
GeekXplus is the employer of spilled ink, so they employed daidus and Emily and they came to Japan then created the show.
GeekXplus is owned by Kadokawa and is used as an marketing outlet for their work as well as other stuff.
I might be wrong, but this is what I think is going on
Good blessing
@@TermDario The same way Geekxplus helped Connor and Gigguk with moving to Japan and do Trash Taste .
Suggestion for Emily for the invisible monster:
You could have a few extra/minor panels of her panning around the room or looking in different places around the living room to indicate her looking for it. or have it dim until it turns a bright color when shes close to it
Having your work graded by a pro is such a growth experience. Once someone told me when dealing with this type of situations. Instead of feeling nervous, think of all the feedback that will help you improve.
Daidus's two-spread was sick!
For Emily
Maybe she could hand out a business card, where her job title is displayed. Depending on how strict they are with the "no words" rule.
For Daidus and Emily
Please hide Ichika somewhere in your manga, as an easter egg.
based on the competition rules is better not to add ichika becuz than they wont be able to use ichika as with the rules all submissions are becoming kadokawa's ip and authors cant use it without written permission
Daidus is gonna become kadokawas IP now ahahahhaa@@yukichan177
or the homeowner could produce an advertisement that showed she called the exterminator
If someone didn’t already suggest Emily what if the spider monster was like dog sized so big enough to scare the shit out of a person you could show the witch with an idea bubble showing her shrink the spider to normal size with a spell and stepping on it. But she accidentally makes it grow massive instead.
You could do this idea simpler by just having the spider be small in the beginning and the Witch try to blast it - but instead of going poof, it'll grow big because of a misspell. Or, you could have two spiders - one small, which both the characters see and she blasts, but not noticing that behind them is this a big one :)
And just like that, my Monday is saved
really funny how in 20:23 Daidus' emote blends with the manga panel lol
For Emily, you could just make the outline of the spider silhouette if you wanted to keep it invisible, like dotted lines. I think it would add to the scene if the witch looked around the room for the monster and after having a panel of the spiders invisible silhouette (dotted lines) the witch is visibly confused why the monster isn’t there. It would look less like a summoning if it were more implied that there is supposed to be something there to begin with.
One suggestion for Daidus' manga would be to start with a panel showing the protagonist walking with his two friends. Suddenly, a cat catches his attention, and he gets distracted, leaving his friends behind while he goes to pet the cat. The story would follow its normal course, but in the end, instead of returning home, he finds his friends completely dirty.
For Emirichu's manga, she can keep the invisible spider/monster by having few shots showing items getting knocked over/moved and mage use magic to show the monster where one of the legs is in the place of knocked over item indicating monster was the reason for those anomalies. Good luck to both of you with you mangas!
Yeah that’s what I was thinking!
like a spyglass spell at the end of her staff
Exactly, I was looking if someone else commented that
Thanks for introducing me to the wordless world manga of kadokawa! I had no idea about that before and already started doing pages. This is a big opportunity and I'm truly grateful because I always wanted to do manga :)
Good luck!!
Emily should go with “Witch for Hire” as the name of her manga. It kinda tells you what your story is about and that poster thing could illustrate that too
for emily's comic i could imagine th beginning going a bit like this :
-close up of magical girl's face looking down nervously
- over shoulder shot of her hand holding an envelope
-she looks at the customers house (as in "i've arrived where i was summoned to")
-then she knocks and it resumes normally until...
-the magical girl sees a shadow behind the customer and looks shocked
- the customer turns around but sees nothing
-the magical girl (knowing only some people can see monsters) stands protectively in front of her customer
- keeping the original shocked face when the shadow comes clearly into view and looks like a spider
-possibly another reveal where, after some magical spells, the customer can now also see the monster and looks shocked
- i think it would be fun to have the customer scurrying around and catching random items in the background (trying to keep some items in tact)
for daidus' story if he plans to keep the cat as a pet, he can try to put on a collar on the cat successfully, but once he goes in to pet the cat he is bitten once again. (declaring him the new owner, but still being hated) idk if that's clear enough though...
I suspected this after seeing the manga style video on Emily’s main channel and Daidus’s comment on the last video, but not so soon!!!
Thank you guys
Seeing her speak in Japanese, while you guys reply in English, just going back and forth with complete comprehension on both ends adds credence to my theory that Spilled Ink is set in the TEKKEN universe
It's called editing 😅
I was about to say the same thing as@@alphakowaclips. It would be quite a slog to have the translator speaking every time, but Daidus and Emily are definitely improving
They got that translation gum from Doraemon.
in emily's manga, i think the monster can still be invisible
but maybe at the start, make the monster known ( if not visible, ghostly movements to indicate there is _something_ ), and then she casts a spell to show itself
this way, the reader can understand that the monster was invisible, not summoned
the idea of the witch accidentally summoning a monster is so cool tho, or like, she's trying to get rid of an encaged monster and accidentally makes the cage disappear. if there was other chapters or one-shots I'd be a funny thing to read.
if anyone's discouraged about making a manga because of their art skills, just remember: ONE made two of the most beloved manga series of all time. if the story is good enough, people will look past the art.
17:19 Whiffing MAGIC MISSLE?! Yeah, she's a lost cause xD
Jokes aside, I love both mangas! Both of you guys are amazing artists, I'd get *all* the manga you write! :D
I LOVED THIS. I used to just write mini comics for myself as a kid and this just inspired me to do it as an adult. Loved it! ❤
3 weeks late, but it could be funny if at the beginning, the spider has been trapped under a trash can, weighed down by a potted plant. the trashcan twitches around a bit before the monster exterminator and homeowner nervously let it out, building a bit of suspense. kind of a visual gag playing on the normal situation of trapping bugs under drinking glasses, but in large scale
For the ending of Daidus's comic it could be him going into his room and falling onto his bed with the cat still biting his leg or something like that.
a bit of advice for Emily, to establish more clearly of what the MC is and what is she doing at the beginning, you could make a page with her doing preparations. And the next page you could kinda do what daidus did but instead of full double spread panel, you can add some panels to emphasize more on her expressions that she was nervous at the side (around 1/4 to 1/5 area of the double spread), and a big panel of her going into the house
57:24 HI EMILY! Regarding spider issue! What if you did the spider in the closet, a little panel that shows both the witch and the customer scared of it (maybe funny faces of them both grossed out) and then a big panel of just her blasting a big spell at the spider! That would show her being scared to do her job with all her clumsiness and using her spell casting in a funny way? If that makes sense! And at the end have her make a little “phew” come out of her mouth making her relieved with her work and end it with that last panel page! I am in love with this story sooooo much! I think that’s why I’m so passionate about how it turns out cause it’s so cute! I hope you see this and get a little bit of ideas! I love both of y’all’s stories and I’m super excited to see more!
Ideas for Emily's manga:
instead of the monster being invisible, it could be smaller like a small-dog size and the witch makes it bigger by mistake (there you could reuse the pannels you already did where she cast the spell for make it visible).
And I agree with other comments, the lady could have a speech bubble showing a tipical monster that indicate that there is a monster in her house.
For making the Witch look like a novice or that it is her first show, maybe it is too complicated but you could draw her receiving her uniform and trying it on for the first time and then she is given a scroll with this mission (drawings of a monster + house + lady's face scared in a scroll)
Hope this helps or gives you any ideas. This was a great video! Both stories are really cool and fun, and having a manga editor give feedback in real life is really interesting!
My heart was racing when they got to the manga editor for review! Good luck in the contest everyone!
7:42 usually the way you convey you are broke is by pulling out your pockets instead of waving your hands
8:03 Its not clear to me that Daidus is saving himself until I see the tentacle arm at 8:26. I think you should insert a full-body shot of Daidus in the foreground before 8:45 to make it clear that humans can transform. and because he’s the protagonist and its an opportunity to look cool. seeing the shark man transform right after fits right with Daidus transform. otherwise shark man could be interpreted as another character entirely
15:19 To show a witch for hire, draw the client with mouth open and a thought bubble with the spider. Or a thought cloud[s] showing problems or multiple items the spider broke. Indicate hiring by showing money changing hands a 1/4 page panel.
Is it just me or I just really love these storyboard/draft drawings as its own masterpiece category
(sometimes I prefer them more than the final product in some cases...)
Emily! The visual of a wanted poster for the spider or newspaper ad for the witch/dorky witch license would probably be enough to get the point across - you could even put a made up language in there (sorta like what you see in Hunter x Hunter) to help sell it without needing real words
or even do a gag where the client is comparing her in person looking nervous to her ad where she looks real slick and confident - idk, feel like there's something in there that could work!
First I commend you both. I felt so anxious myself when the editor was there! You guys did great!!!
Ahh this is awesome! I've always wanted to do a manga, but sadly, I only have the writing skill. Not the art 🫠
Also from a writer standpoint, I'd start the next chapter introducing his friends! If he ends it with realizing that the cat followed him home
The complete opposite of me fr, I can draw but I feel like I'm terrible when it comes to writing
@@EsPikachu I wish I could draw 😅I could create visuals of so many characters
Learning to draw is easier than being a good writer just grind it out until you’re where you want to be
I mean, you can write books instead. If you REALLY like Manga, maybe find a 'comrade', even Oshi No Ko was written and drew by 2 different people
0:24 wait i didnt see this emote in the new emote vid ITS SO CUTE
I'm pretty sure it's an older emote, but still very cute!
An add for a monster exterminator that looks kinda like the ghost busters logo and her doing a thumbs upp would work maybe? And one phone number tab being taken from the bottom of the add?
Bro, Daidus' manga is so good. And his world and character design are so unique and on brand!
Man its always so fun to look at others mangas and like it it sooo inspiring to watch this!!
Daidus, for the last bit of the manga where the bad guys are all “inked up”(lol), you should have one large panel of their backs looking up at the daidus character scaling the building from a low angle and then have the panel of them all inked up and looking done
Just a lil storytelling hack or frame to help convey the fact you’re climbing a building and their perspectives better! Plus it paces the conclusion of the fight out a little to make it seem more resolution-esq.
One idea i had for emily is instead of making the monster invisible, it could just be really small, and then gets bigger when it starts to fight, so you could have the monster visible from the start, but then have that moment when it transforms into its larger form and then the mc can have that "oh god!" reaction that you've already drawn.
The video gave me memories back when I used to do comics 😭 Ill try to do it again! My Monday has never been better
I loved seeing this! Both of you are amazing and more than I could ever do! I have some basic ideas that probably someone else already has had, but feel free to do with them what you want.
Per Daidus: One of the things that could be an indicator that its his home vs the new owners is that they use a key to get inside. I think that you could have him notice the cat is on his leg when he gets to the door, and he starts shaking his leg to get it off. Unable to get it off, he sighs and lets himself back into the apartment. The cat stays on his leg until he gets food out of the fridge, and at that, he notices the cat staring at the bowl while still staring at him. He puts some food in the bowl and puts it on the ground, and the cat lets go and starts eating. He does the "OHMAIGAWDITSSOCUTE" look, then goes to pet it and it latches back onto his hand.
Per Emily: If you wanted to show she's new, you might have some sort of badge or identification to mark her as a paranormal exterminator or something like that. Something shiny on her outfit that she's super excited about at the very beginning, and have a nervous panel right as she's about to ring the doorbell.
In Daidus' manga, when the cat takes his hat into the alleyway if you look in the bottom left box at 5:46, his hat is still on his head 😭😭
If daidus used a key to get in the home rather than ring the doorbell, I think the idea of them being roommates comes across a lot better.
Or you could have them be with him in the beginning as he looks at the squid. And then after his adventure he meets back up with them.
And the first image of Daidus needs to have his head tilted up just a tad more to really make it seem like he's looking up at the squid.
For the diadus's manga ending maybe have an extra panel where the cat walks towards the roommates to smell their hands, but daidus panics. Yet instead of biting them the cats blobs into the roommates' arms, que a surpised diadus. Thus showing that they aren't aware who the cat, bcs the roomates were hesitant at the start to the reader. Extra pannel is daidus attempting to pet the cat but it bites his hand like Emirichu suggested
I have a few ideas for Emily's manga and how to make it more readable without redrawing huge portions or rethinking the whole story.
For the magic spell that leads the main character to the monster, you could depict it by some sort of a smoke/magic trail leading her towards the room that the monster is in. Maybe a full page seen from the back of a hallway showing the witch with the owner following the trail that the staff is casting to another doorway closer to the camera. I also really like the idea of her holding the staff out in front of her, and that could also be explored more. When she bangs the staff on the ceiling, it could just stop glowing randomly, causing her to rattle/hit it to work again.
As for the invisible monster, you could show random objects just falling off of shelves or floating around. Maybe she could feel around if she can't touch it, causing her to cast a reveal spell. The spell should also be gradual to convey the reveal rather than a sudden puff of magic. I feel like that makes it feel more like a summoning.
If you read this, I hope you find some of my ideas helpful.
I loved the Q&A section! It was truly inspiring and pushed a little of the fear away when it comes to the thought of approaching a manga editor.
I thought that, for Emily's manga, the witch could show a badge (like a police badge, with a specific shape and logo) to indicate she's from an association. But that would take from the bit where the customer pulls her in (which I thought could be a little more exaggerated!), so just an idea.
Emily, perhaps you could add huge spider webs, or the lady's pet swaddled in web and hanging upside-down from the ceiling to show that the spider is there and causing trouble
i cannot describe how much i needed this. I used to make comics a few years ago but i stopped because of school and this inspired me to participate in this competition and get back into drawing manga again!!
Genuinely Emily and Daidus if you guys published your mangas weather they remain one-shots or episodes, I think they’d be AMAZING! The art styles and the story lines are so captivating 😭🫶🫶 you guys did amazing !!
Also the sequence in Emily’s spider appearing stage could be handled a few different ways! You could have it invisible but shown with dots/dashes, or have it shown from the start like you mentioned in the closet and once it’s opened it springs out and starts hopping around the room and chasing them! Another idea could also be keeping the theme of accidentally summoning the spider, have the woman point to an ominous/threatening or creepy object she aims her wand and BAM spider!! That way perhaps you don’t have to change too much. At the end you could show the object getting hit and like a ghost exiting it and then the pan out frame of the entire room like you have originally. Just a few ideas!! I’m super excited to see what you guys come up with 🫶🫶🫶 it’s gonna be amazing reading he final products.
For Emily's manga, instead of having the spider invisible, maybe it could at first just appear as a regular sized spider, but then have it grow giant. That way you can still have the reveal of the monster.
You could even add a thing where the witch underestimates how difficult the task will be, and is maybe even relieved at first.
I actually downloaded Infinity Nikki cuz of your guy’s last vid and I’m having a lot of fun with it. I haven’t heard of it before your guy’s sponsor
I loved Daidus' big scene pannel but it wasn't clear to me if the squid was swimming/flying or if it was a sign squid shaped, if it's real I think it would be nice do add a lil movement on his tentacles on either the first pannel or the big pannel. I know it's a draft but both are really cool and funny stories you guys are awesome
I havent watched the full video, but a cool idea for daidus' henchmen could be to have them be some kind of fish that stays in big schools or group together a lot, just an idea i got from seeing it, GREAT VIDEO❤
If Daidus’s manga continues with the running gag of the cat creature biting him and no one else it would be funny if the reason wasn’t because it hated him, but rather it just likes the taste of squid. But that’s not revealed until later.
Or not. Anyway, this was really cool to watch. Thank you both of you.
I don’t know if this has been mentioned.. to save paper and time, you could have a small spider be present and then she makes it bigger 🤷♀️ that would still fit character and be a minor adjustment
Super cool guys! Love your channel so so so much. ❤
explaining your manga storyboard on a video to add sfx sure is a new way to read a story
Emily! Maybe you could have your character show a card to the owner of the house to show that she is an exterminator! Kinda like a specialty badge of some sort? Like she is part of a guild or something?
It may be a little late but I have ideas; for Daidus’ ending it could be super simple, Daidus on the roof silhouetted in the Sunset(?) fishcat still hanging on, he tries to shake it off but can’t then exhales and we’re done. The roommates adopting fishcat could be chapter 2.
Emily could start with the job poster idea through icons? A crossed out monster, witches hat, thumbs up and currency sign. Also as the monster is a spider, it could just be hiding on the ceiling so you can still have that cool reveal and reaction shot that is 👌
honestly, if you are looking for manga paper, consider using smooth bristol instead...typically its used for western comics, but manga paper is flimsy if you are using screen tones, it cuts through the paper a lot (honestly, skill issue on my part), but with bristol, it gives your artwork a much more solid "canvas". However, the down side is that bristol is hard for g/maru pens and manga paper is hella smooth. All I'm saying, is that when you do your inking your manga page, consider if you like the consistency of smooth bristol :)
Daidus, your idea is fantastic, if this ever becomes something, I'd love to see the whole thing, yours too Emily, yours reminds me of glitch tech
THANK YOU GUYS SO MUCH FOR THE MONDAY UPLOAD!! It's cold and dry outside so I needed something to get me through the morning🤣
Hope you both get official mangas. Also, if I’m ever confident enough to make my own manga, you two are definitely inspirations for characters. You both have loveably chaotic personalities.
LETS GO MANGA EPISODE!!
A good twist Emily could do is to show that the monster is trying to protect something that's why it went insane and then after the girl broke parts of the house it turns out that there are small spiders stuck in the wall ( or could be anywhere in the house) so the magic girl then help the monster free his family then it just leaves peacefully but the house was already destroyed by then so you can keep the final panel as it is
I wonder if Emily could keep the invisibility part by showing a faint outline of the spider or a really faint version? Almost like if a mist of water refracted light to somewhat show what is invisible?
I'm wondering how does the lady know her house has an invisible monster in it 🤔
Suggestions from a person whose prefered art form is story-telling (not in a professional capacity):
Emily: I'm so sorry that the opening title page idea isn't possible because that was such a well thought out idea and very cool. I believe in your ability to come up with something just as good! The cardinal rule (one of em anyway) of story-telling is show don't tell and with manga you can take that very literally. You don't really need this because your character work is so well done in terms of conveying movement and emotions, but you could change her design visually to better show her flaws. A bandaid or scraped knees. Also to show her lack of magic skill maybe her wand is a little broken or chipped. A broken wand (the crystal falls out) could turn into it's own hijinks (accidentally transforming the monster into a different animal or changing it a funny color).
To introduce her character maybe rather than having her be on her first commission have her be handing out flyers with her standing confidently on a dead monster to show what she is supposed to be doing and maybe a noise comes from inside and the lady takes her anyway because she's desperate, and then the panels could proceed as expected up until the monster is seen. OR and this is a bad idea because you'd have to rework more but maybe have her walking along and someone comes running out of the house and she goes in and saves the day and then she gets paid and that's how she ends up in her line of work. But again you'd have to rework most of it so it's a worse suggestion.
Daidus: You're pretty good already, especially with the one-shot. You've worked on what you need to pair down. Having a clear narrative is the best thing you can do. And you already talked about visually building tension/fleshing out the story more by drawing out certain sequences (like the man approaching the butt).
Best of luck to you both!
I'll definitely give it a shot, just I feel like I'll have to find a way to convey the story without words but actually it might sound hard but ngl it kinda sounds easier to not have to worry about dialogue ngl
35:09 making the character look overly serious (like heavily shaded and stuff, tense idk how to describe it) could comedic-ly convey that this is her first mission
the hire page for the witch thing, i thought itd be a cool shoot if it'd show it but obv words dont make any sense so some sort of otherworldly language? and maybe the lady sees the page and takes it , and then next page could be the witch girl attending her house and rest is up to you. Really find the ideas so cute tho, cant wait for yalls outcomes omgomg awesome job you two
I think the "finding a job posting" thing could still work, maybe use swiggly lines for the "text" but put more images in, like a picture of our witch hitting a "bad guy' with her staff in the ad.
Holy smokes this is my chance been writing a story for years but only now it’s come together 😮
I love you guys because u always make happy with my art and get me motivated with everything
9:10 I had to pause the video when that left page appeared. Absolutely magnificent... x3
I also hope Emily doesn't worry too much about not having the option to write in order to world build, because there's absolutely nothing wrong with more open-ended fantasy. As a D&D nerd I love worldbuilding, and it's tempting to write so much about your setting and get into all the intricacies of it's history and various cultures and whatnot, but sometimes having stuff not explicitly explained can stoke a readers/viewers imagination, and you don't have to fret as much about things "not making sense" for the world or feeling constrained by it's parameters - you can establish early on that your setting is whimsical and more than capable of throwing up unexpected surprises, and it isn't an objectively better or worse way to world build, it's just one of the many ways you can about it! :D
Please put it in a community post or something if you find out if we can use signs and labels in the manga! A friend and I are participating and we’re really worried about that😭
56:00 says that it's not allowed (hope that helps)
@@nelogism whats does that mean by signs and lettering?
@@Dinopop I think that just any kind of words are not allowed? Because Emirichu clarified that it's no lettering. So you can't use any signs or indicators with words, for what you want to express or show in the manga. It should all be explained visually
@@nelogism Ohhh! Got it, got it. Tysm
@ThatRandoArtist Can I ask if you’re participating what app or thing are you using Do you think ibispaint x would work
Not sure if 20 days is too late but I have some suggestions!
Daidus, to make clear they're roomates they could be with him in the first scene in the page spread, and when he goes to chase the cat he makes a sign like "I'll catch him, don't worry", that way the characters are already presented as friends and the readers already know what their relation to the protagonist is by the the time they reach the end!
Emily, you could make her check a little one in the panels at 15:05 so she sighs like "noooo it IS the right house..." to make it clearer she's going there for work, when she's in the house the lady could use a tiny speech bubble with a dot outline of a horned head to get across the idea of invisible monster (personally I'd also add a "?" to add some mistery to if there IS any monster to take care of or not, but that's up to you lol), and lastly, maybe you could change the perspective on that one panel where she moves her wand towards the monster so that the camera faces towards the monster too, that way it shows the reader there *already is* something there, maybe also add some lines coming from there to indicate there's some evil presence (like the ones Toriyama used on Piccolo at the beginning of chapter 147, or on Goku when he's about to face Nappa on chapter 224 of dragon ball, for example)
Sorry for writing for this long lol I liked both mangas, anyways good video! I just subscribed!
BACK TO BACK SPILLED INK!?
we're eating so good this week
When I draw invisible characters, I try to bend anything behind them like when you look at something through glass. Try putting things in or behind a glass of water and see how it looks from the front. Then you can use that for a reference if you wanted to stick with your invisible beastie. Try drawing their outline to remind yourself where the light should bend.
Hope this helps and isn't too long!
What if the spider was small at the begining (still gross and scary tho) and then the witch is trying to kill it but accidentally makes it giant?
uuuuugh emily's nails are so cute I love them.
No, honestly, the drawing was very clear and distinctive, making me feel as if I was really inside these comics. {Arabic follow-up,}❤
hearing about the Spanish manga artist was honestly so inspirational, as you said Emily! I learned a lot from this video and it's super motivating
WAWAWAWAAAAAAaa, Another Spilled ink episode YIPPIE!!!