This is a beautiful story with a lot of potential and I genuinely enjoyed it. I have a few suggestions that might help further enhance your story-writing based on my knowledge of story-writing. The story opens with an epistolary format( engaging) but then shifts somewhat drastically into a non-linear narrative. Blending these styles can be powerful, nevertheless it is essential to ensure a seamless transition to maintain clarity for the audience. It feels like you’re exploring multiple themes and emotions here-there’s tragedy, other nuanced emotions, and a blend of reality with imagination. That gives the story a rich, hybrid feel, but it can be challenging to balance effectively. To help the audience fully immerse in the story, focusing more on one central theme might help guide them through the experience without them feeling the need to question or analyze too much. The multiple backgrounds you’ve used add depth, but a bit more cohesion between them could strengthen the narrative arc. One way to accomplish this might be to add multiple points of view, which would allow you to present different perspectives without losing focus. This can add depth while keeping the storytelling balanced and less subjective. Overall, you have a lot of great elements here! A bit of refining will only help your creative talent shine even more. Ps. The narration couldn't be more perfect.
Sema mero Baba Ra दाईलाई जस्तै फसायाछ लगडाउन मेरो बाबा र दाई पनि कर्गरमा हुनु हुन्थे मेरो बाबा र दाई जेल बस्त2 वर्ष आमा बाई बहिनी परिवारले धेरै दुःख पाए यो जमन् खराब छ सोजो मान्छेलाई आफ्नो खसीले बाँच्न दिँदैन😢😢😢
बिनिसा जि अनि उहाँ लाई बाचन गर्नको लागि जस्ले सहायता गर्नु हुन्छ उहाँ हरुलाइ मन देखि नै नमन्🙏हामिले मात्र एक लाइक एक कमेन्ट गरौन है मित्रहरू जस्ले उहाँ हरुलाइ निकै हौसला मिलोस❤😊
Dharai ramro xa story. Sadai sabai socheko jsto kaha hunxa ra hai. Kati sajaya aafule galti nagare pne bhognu prne hunxa. Life is full of suspense hoina tw😊. Be strong sab thik hunxa
Sundai hunuhuncha ni hamilai? 😊
Dherai Maya cha hai ❤
Finally 4days paxi ❤❤❤😊
Sundaixu maya❤❤
हजुरलाई धेरै धेरै माया र हजुरको टिमलाई पनि है दिदी हजुर।
कथामा बाहाव छ। सललल वगेको छ। सामान्य कथा छ । नौलोपना कम छ। तर मीठो छ। वाचिकाको मीठो ध्वनी छ। ।।
यो कथा सुन्नुहुने सम्पूर्णले कुनै सुझाव सल्लाह अनि केहि गल्ति कमीकमजोरी भए भनिदिनुहोला ताकि त्यो कुरालाई सुधार्न सकूँ ।❤
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This is a beautiful story with a lot of potential and I genuinely enjoyed it. I have a few suggestions that might help further enhance your story-writing based on my knowledge of story-writing.
The story opens with an epistolary format( engaging) but then shifts somewhat drastically into a non-linear narrative. Blending these styles can be powerful, nevertheless it is essential to ensure a seamless transition to maintain clarity for the audience.
It feels like you’re exploring multiple themes and emotions here-there’s tragedy, other nuanced emotions, and a blend of reality with imagination. That gives the story a rich, hybrid feel, but it can be challenging to balance effectively. To help the audience fully immerse in the story, focusing more on one central theme might help guide them through the experience without them feeling the need to question or analyze too much.
The multiple backgrounds you’ve used add depth, but a bit more cohesion between them could strengthen the narrative arc. One way to accomplish this might be to add multiple points of view, which would allow you to present different perspectives without losing focus. This can add depth while keeping the storytelling balanced and less subjective.
Overall, you have a lot of great elements here! A bit of refining will only help your creative talent shine even more.
Ps. The narration couldn't be more perfect.
Waiting next part ❤
Lots of love
Finally Waiting is over sister ❤❤❤
Oho kasto ramro katha ❤
Finally ayo❤️🥺
Sema mero Baba Ra दाईलाई जस्तै फसायाछ लगडाउन मेरो बाबा र दाई पनि कर्गरमा हुनु हुन्थे मेरो बाबा र दाई जेल बस्त2 वर्ष आमा बाई बहिनी परिवारले धेरै दुःख पाए यो जमन् खराब छ सोजो मान्छेलाई आफ्नो खसीले बाँच्न दिँदैन😢😢😢
Aaja voli kina dherai Aauna hjrko story maile sabai sunera vyaisake😢😊
thank you sis ma waiting ma thiye second part ko
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@@Voiceofbinisha1 sundai xu sis hjr ko voice ani kata bachan garne tarika sarai man parxa
बिनिसा जि अनि उहाँ लाई बाचन गर्नको लागि जस्ले सहायता गर्नु हुन्छ उहाँ हरुलाइ मन देखि नै नमन्🙏हामिले मात्र एक लाइक एक कमेन्ट गरौन है मित्रहरू जस्ले उहाँ हरुलाइ निकै हौसला मिलोस❤😊
Like done👍
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यो कलियुगमा सोजो भएर जिउन पनि गारो छ😢😢😢😢😢😢 सफलताको शुभकामना❤❤❤❤❤🙏🙏🙏
Aaja voli hjrko story teti aauna ni😢
यो कथा सुन्नुहुने सम्पूर्णले कुनै सुझाव सल्लाह अनि केहि गल्ति कमीकमजोरी भए भनिदिनुहोला ताकि त्यो कुरालाई सुधार्न सकूँ ।
Dharai ramro xa story. Sadai sabai socheko jsto kaha hunxa ra hai. Kati sajaya aafule galti nagare pne bhognu prne hunxa. Life is full of suspense hoina tw😊. Be strong sab thik hunxa
@@animakhadka8266Thank you 🙏
@@basantabohara22 omg reply dinu vayeko raixa 😳😳😳 thank you
De hajur mero ma kin khulen ne😢
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