Good yarn; I like it. Needs to be tightened up though, less repetition, more correct use of ACCURACY/PRECISION. Part 2 of this Post; the Human Commander znd the legion of War Beasts with Grax as their leader rethrn to what is left of the enemy city-fortification. Sweeping all before them, their enemy surrenders. Ptidoons are opened, their occupants freed. The Commander's crew is hlad to see him alive but gasps at the sight of the enmassed War Beasts. The Commander's XO pipes up, "looks like you have some new friends Commander !". The enemy airfields and scrap yards yield what is needed yo build a fleet that becomes a new force for freedom, and justice in the Galaxy.
Grax is not Thorn and James is not Lilly. Bring back Lilly and Thorn!!!
Good yarn; I like it. Needs to be tightened up though, less repetition, more correct use of ACCURACY/PRECISION. Part 2 of this Post; the Human Commander znd the legion of War Beasts with Grax as their leader rethrn to what is left of the enemy city-fortification. Sweeping all before them, their enemy surrenders. Ptidoons are opened, their occupants freed. The Commander's crew is hlad to see him alive but gasps at the sight of the enmassed War Beasts. The Commander's XO pipes up, "looks like you have some new friends Commander !". The enemy airfields and scrap yards yield what is needed yo build a fleet that becomes a new force for freedom, and justice in the Galaxy.
another great tale linking man and beast. i would gladly recommend this tale to another lover of great stories. keep up the great work sir