How would y'all feel if I did a remaster of part 1 after I finish part 4? That means rewriting some sections(not that much), extending scenes, and redoing the voice over. It will probably be in the format of part 2 of the sake of time and editing. Thoughts?
You know they should have done something different which would make since for Cybertron. What I mean is Cybertron should look like how it was back in Dark of the Moon but which a mix of Medieval, Knights, Futuristic, Cybertronian, and ancient kind of planet
Definitely, I don’t know what is with the constant changes of Cybertron’s appearance throughout the Bayverse. Just know that you can imagine the characters and setting however you want! I explain the location and you can imagine the details. That’s one of the benefits of novels and writing in general
Man I wish this was the movie we got . I really wanted to love the movie because of how great TF4 was I had high hopes for the 5th movie but I was left disappointed . This rewrite of yours is awesome and you have the potential to be a great writer!
This is an amazing rewrite. a billion times better than what we got. I could literally imagine the scenes you were saying in my own head, and it looked awesome. Although the voice acting was a bit cringe In certain places, it's Still an amazing rewrite.
Thank you, I totally agree with the voice acting though, I can barely watch this video now. But ill be completely ditching the voice acting for the third part. All I need to do in these rewrites is tell a better story than we got. Also, thank you for subscribing.
Man I am watching this in preparation for the final part of the series and I can firmly say this is now “cringy” to me. My editing, voice over, voice acting, and some story decisions are...odd to say the least. Thank you for giving this video the amount of love and constructive criticism it has gotten in this past year. I greatly appreciate it and all of you. And most importantly, Thank you for sticking by me in this series. Act 3 is coming at the end of January or early February.
Well, I was actually pleasantly surprised by your voicing of Optimus! (-: I'm also very much looking forward to seeing the payoff for "Timber." It's an unexpected choice, but undeniably catchy. I also enjoy the contrast, because it's not necessarily the soundtrack you'd expect for a middle-aged mechanic/inventor dude hanging out in a junkyard, and a rock track would probably be the more traditional choice for a movie scene like this, yet it somehow works and isn't some crazy stretch to believe. (Especially knowing how military guys in real life can have some varied and entertaining taste in songs, lol.) I also really like that you're trying to return Megatron's legitimacy as a villain. It's actually odd for me to hear about his not being that, though the idea itself could be interesting. But it doesn't seem like it was really handled well if the filmmakers wanted to go in that direction. Seems like they perhaps just lazily ripped off Star Wars, and of course didn't do an equal job. The Solus Prime bit was unexpected and sort of jarring for me…but intriguing nevertheless. (-: Well, think I'll leave my notes at that. Oh, regarding that question you asked…haven't see Part 2 yet, so I can't comment on whether I think its format would be preferable. But I think the general idea of doing a reshoot, especially if you're bothered by the current version of Part 1, is a good idea. I'd caution against removing the original version, though. At the very least, I recommend looking that topic up to see whether such a move would be advisable. Just a couple of concerns I can think right off the bat are that folks may not have subscribed or may not remember your channel name, but can find it again through searching the video up in their watch history. And then there are playlists. The public ones in particular help both the curator and new potential viewers for you. And just having a missing entry, which wouldn't even reveal the channel name, would seriously suck, and it's really annoying from multiple angles, ha. I say that as both consumer and curator. So definitely go for the reshoot, but give careful consideration to what you'll do with the original video once the new one is up. It may be best to simply have a pinned comment plus note in the description both recommending that folks watch the updated version instead. (And believe me: as a writer and perfectionist, I completely sympathize with looking back at older material and being bothered about it-especially stuff that's out there publicly for folks to see and examine. XD)
Thank you for such kind words! I’m taking a bit of a break from this project at the moment but I definitely considered doing a revamped version with some more scenes and extended versions of the existing ones. I’m not going to delete this video since it is one of the main reasons why my channel has slowly been gaining traction. I’m most likely going to put these videos into a playlist once I’m finished, which won’t be until summer. School hs been cracking down on me as of late. And regarding the Optimus voice, I’ve been practicing it since I was very little, about 6 or 7. It’s a lot better now since my voice has become a lot deeper since this upload lol Once again, thank you for the kind words and input, you seem to be a new viewer. Welcome!
When are you following up on this, this is good. And following your rewrite is helpful for my fanfic. A fanfic that I've flip-flopped with for a while, but you breaking things down helps. Anyways, Happy Easter!
Zoe Brugg possibly in the end of May. I want to finish online school before I devote any of my attention to personal projects. I’m glad I am able to help out! Happy Easter!
Transformers _ Quotes Thank you! The third one is not out yet. It’ll be out in the coming weeks. I need to get comfortable with school first. Then I will resume writing act 3.
@@nathanhills336 awesome! make sure to take all the time you need. :) If I can make a story suggestion, it would be to give the Autobots some info that leads them to form a plan to stop or at least stall Cybertron. When I was watching the TLK trailers, my theory was that the Forge of Solus Prime was the key to activating the Omega Lock, the ship that Bee and Prime fight on. I speculated that Bee would manage to get on the ship and remove the Forge, temporarily stopping Cybertron from draining Unicron. Nemesis would find out and the two would fight, with Bee using the Forge as a weapon. I think adding a plan like this may give a little hope to the Autobots, which could add to more suspense, similar to how while watching Infinity War, we are wondering if the Avengers will be able to destroy the Mind Stone, build Storm Breaker, steal the gauntlet, or if Thanos will win. Maybe this is a little similar to what we have seen in past movies, but it's just a theory that was going around a while back. Just watched part 2, and I love what you have done so far!
@@transformers_quotes5738 hello my friend! Sorry for the late reply. I am currently writing act 3 and I might just have to take you up on that story suggestion, it’s pretty good. I’ll give you credit as I explain it in the rewrite of course.
It was also suppose to show the secret well technically not a secret but the History of Transformers on Earth like during WW1, WW2, The Dark Ages, the Roman Ages, The Spartan/Greek Mythology/ Samurai/Mongolian/ and many other pastimes aswell.
I never liked that idea to be honest with you. Trust me, I’m a sucker for conspiracies in films (that’s why I love dark of the moon so much among other things) It just felt so forced in TLK so I decided to drop the idea entirely. I do touch upon an ancient connection between the Transformers and Earth but to the extent of Revenge of the Fallen, DOTM, and Age of Extinction. Nothing too extreme as what I was in TLK though
@@nathanhills336 They also wanted to try doing Crossovers aswell like with G.I Joe, Power Rangers, and even Mask. But they also were gonna take a different take on the Beast Wars concept aswell
@@CRUELLANDER I really hope we don’t get to the point of crossovers. I don’t see the point besides it being a last ditch effort to save the franchise. Excited for Rise of the Beasts though
@@nathanhills336 Yeah like Honestly they create their own Cinematic Universes first and then they could do like sort of a Multiverse kind of thing then they could do a few crossovers maybe it depends really.
Is this version of Transformers: The Last Knight rated R? Because I’m doing a Transformers: The Last Knight rewrite too! And mine will be rated R for language and violence and definitely earn it with tons of blood and Cade, Sqweeks, Cogman, and Viviane saying “F***” - Cade is the only character who will say it twice, but Viviane, Sqweeks, and Cogman will only say it once.
If you have seen the other parts, it will definitely be rated R. I’m in highschool and living with my family so I’m very tame when it comes to voice overs. But there’s parts were you can easily slip in some f bombs lol The darker atmosphere of the film has something to do with it as well as the graphic action. Please send me a link for that rewrite once its out. Sounds cool!
@@nathanhills336 No worries dude! Take as much time as you need. Otherwise, the final product won't be as polished as you'd like, I'm sure you know that 😉 Anyway good luck and just write how you'd want the movie to have been written, not aiming to be perfect cinema, because at the end of the day, the most important part In a movie is that it's entertaining and makes you feel. That's what art is supposed to do.
@@nathanhills336 i see. So it’s basically a Winter Solider kind of case. Broken down and turned. Then sent to kill who is needed to be taken care of. Interesting take on Nemesis. I like it.
Looking back on it now, they really should’ve. If I was writing part 1 today, that’s what I would’ve done. But I probably would go all the way back to AOE to rewrite that as well
@@nathanhills336 they never showed galvatron becoming megatron. It’s almost like they were afraid to commit to the idea of galvatron instead of megatron for some reason. Either that or continuity really doesn’t matter to the writers of these movies.
Continuity never really mattered in the Bay films, that much is true. At least we have this new universe to start chewing on and by the looks of it, it’s being made by pretty competent people.
@@nathanhills336 they made a big mistake with wheeljack and I’m not a big fan of how mirage looks along with Blitzwing looking like starscream but other than that things have been a lot better with the new writers and directors
How would y'all feel if I did a remaster of part 1 after I finish part 4? That means rewriting some sections(not that much), extending scenes, and redoing the voice over. It will probably be in the format of part 2 of the sake of time and editing. Thoughts?
Maybe a starscream resurrection could top this off?
A remaster of part 1 would have to continue the same story. I unfortunately can’t do that.
@@nathanhills336 oh
@@barricadethedecepticon1350 I’m most likely not going to make a remaster as I want to move on from this project once I post part 4
Yes but please a part 4
TLK Megatron is By far still my favorite Megatron design to this day!
You know they should have done something different which would make since for Cybertron. What I mean is Cybertron should look like how it was back in Dark of the Moon but which a mix of Medieval, Knights, Futuristic, Cybertronian, and ancient kind of planet
Definitely, I don’t know what is with the constant changes of Cybertron’s appearance throughout the Bayverse. Just know that you can imagine the characters and setting however you want! I explain the location and you can imagine the details. That’s one of the benefits of novels and writing in general
Man I wish this was the movie we got . I really wanted to love the movie because of how great TF4 was I had high hopes for the 5th movie but I was left disappointed . This rewrite of yours is awesome and you have the potential to be a great writer!
This is an amazing rewrite. a billion times better than what we got. I could literally imagine the scenes you were saying in my own head, and it looked awesome. Although the voice acting was a bit cringe In certain places, it's Still an amazing rewrite.
Thank you, I totally agree with the voice acting though, I can barely watch this video now. But ill be completely ditching the voice acting for the third part. All I need to do in these rewrites is tell a better story than we got. Also, thank you for subscribing.
Nathan Hills you're welcome.
Man I am watching this in preparation for the final part of the series and I can firmly say this is now “cringy” to me. My editing, voice over, voice acting, and some story decisions are...odd to say the least. Thank you for giving this video the amount of love and constructive criticism it has gotten in this past year. I greatly appreciate it and all of you. And most importantly, Thank you for sticking by me in this series. Act 3 is coming at the end of January or early February.
Well, I was actually pleasantly surprised by your voicing of Optimus! (-:
I'm also very much looking forward to seeing the payoff for "Timber." It's an unexpected choice, but undeniably catchy. I also enjoy the contrast, because it's not necessarily the soundtrack you'd expect for a middle-aged mechanic/inventor dude hanging out in a junkyard, and a rock track would probably be the more traditional choice for a movie scene like this, yet it somehow works and isn't some crazy stretch to believe. (Especially knowing how military guys in real life can have some varied and entertaining taste in songs, lol.)
I also really like that you're trying to return Megatron's legitimacy as a villain. It's actually odd for me to hear about his not being that, though the idea itself could be interesting. But it doesn't seem like it was really handled well if the filmmakers wanted to go in that direction. Seems like they perhaps just lazily ripped off Star Wars, and of course didn't do an equal job.
The Solus Prime bit was unexpected and sort of jarring for me…but intriguing nevertheless. (-:
Well, think I'll leave my notes at that.
Oh, regarding that question you asked…haven't see Part 2 yet, so I can't comment on whether I think its format would be preferable. But I think the general idea of doing a reshoot, especially if you're bothered by the current version of Part 1, is a good idea. I'd caution against removing the original version, though. At the very least, I recommend looking that topic up to see whether such a move would be advisable. Just a couple of concerns I can think right off the bat are that folks may not have subscribed or may not remember your channel name, but can find it again through searching the video up in their watch history.
And then there are playlists. The public ones in particular help both the curator and new potential viewers for you. And just having a missing entry, which wouldn't even reveal the channel name, would seriously suck, and it's really annoying from multiple angles, ha. I say that as both consumer and curator.
So definitely go for the reshoot, but give careful consideration to what you'll do with the original video once the new one is up. It may be best to simply have a pinned comment plus note in the description both recommending that folks watch the updated version instead.
(And believe me: as a writer and perfectionist, I completely sympathize with looking back at older material and being bothered about it-especially stuff that's out there publicly for folks to see and examine. XD)
Thank you for such kind words! I’m taking a bit of a break from this project at the moment but I definitely considered doing a revamped version with some more scenes and extended versions of the existing ones. I’m not going to delete this video since it is one of the main reasons why my channel has slowly been gaining traction. I’m most likely going to put these videos into a playlist once I’m finished, which won’t be until summer. School hs been cracking down on me as of late. And regarding the Optimus voice, I’ve been practicing it since I was very little, about 6 or 7. It’s a lot better now since my voice has become a lot deeper since this upload lol
Once again, thank you for the kind words and input, you seem to be a new viewer. Welcome!
My favorite part is the last knight meeting his creator
Optimus Prime is responsible for War of Cybertron
Your rewrite version of Transformers 5 was completely different from the real movie and it had a proper nostaglia
Keep going bud!!
When are you following up on this, this is good. And following your rewrite is helpful for my fanfic. A fanfic that I've flip-flopped with for a while, but you breaking things down helps. Anyways, Happy Easter!
Zoe Brugg possibly in the end of May. I want to finish online school before I devote any of my attention to personal projects. I’m glad I am able to help out! Happy Easter!
12:41 Roll credits.
Good job hope you make another one
Logan prime P1 27 thank you! And yes, I will be coming out with part 2 in just under a few weeks, the writing process takes awhile
Whoop voice crack 17:21
11:22 - 11:27 nice TFP reference.
Nice Mando reference
absolutely LOVE this so far! gonna check out the others!
Transformers _ Quotes Thank you! The third one is not out yet. It’ll be out in the coming weeks. I need to get comfortable with school first. Then I will resume writing act 3.
@@nathanhills336 awesome! make sure to take all the time you need. :) If I can make a story suggestion, it would be to give the Autobots some info that leads them to form a plan to stop or at least stall Cybertron. When I was watching the TLK trailers, my theory was that the Forge of Solus Prime was the key to activating the Omega Lock, the ship that Bee and Prime fight on. I speculated that Bee would manage to get on the ship and remove the Forge, temporarily stopping Cybertron from draining Unicron. Nemesis would find out and the two would fight, with Bee using the Forge as a weapon. I think adding a plan like this may give a little hope to the Autobots, which could add to more suspense, similar to how while watching Infinity War, we are wondering if the Avengers will be able to destroy the Mind Stone, build Storm Breaker, steal the gauntlet, or if Thanos will win. Maybe this is a little similar to what we have seen in past movies, but it's just a theory that was going around a while back. Just watched part 2, and I love what you have done so far!
@@transformers_quotes5738 hello my friend! Sorry for the late reply. I am currently writing act 3 and I might just have to take you up on that story suggestion, it’s pretty good. I’ll give you credit as I explain it in the rewrite of course.
It was also suppose to show the secret well technically not a secret but the History of Transformers on Earth like during WW1, WW2, The Dark Ages, the Roman Ages, The Spartan/Greek Mythology/ Samurai/Mongolian/ and many other pastimes aswell.
I never liked that idea to be honest with you. Trust me, I’m a sucker for conspiracies in films (that’s why I love dark of the moon so much among other things) It just felt so forced in TLK so I decided to drop the idea entirely. I do touch upon an ancient connection between the Transformers and Earth but to the extent of Revenge of the Fallen, DOTM, and Age of Extinction. Nothing too extreme as what I was in TLK though
@@nathanhills336 They also wanted to try doing Crossovers aswell like with G.I Joe, Power Rangers, and even Mask. But they also were gonna take a different take on the Beast Wars concept aswell
@@CRUELLANDER I really hope we don’t get to the point of crossovers. I don’t see the point besides it being a last ditch effort to save the franchise. Excited for Rise of the Beasts though
@@nathanhills336 Yeah like Honestly they create their own Cinematic Universes first and then they could do like sort of a Multiverse kind of thing then they could do a few crossovers maybe it depends really.
@@CRUELLANDER Leaks for Rise of the Beasts actually entail that either multiverse and/or time travel is involved 👀
Barricade: Lord Galvatron (instead of Megatron)
You quoted doctor strange lmao awesome 21:16
After Optimus floating in the space, the title movie card sequences was way too short in the theartical version
How should a title card sequences be?
Oscar Valle I’m not quite sure what you are asking. But, if you are asking how long a title card should be, it should be around 5 to 10 seconds
@@nathanhills336 I am not good with words and I grew up with Transformers
Oscar Valle it’s okay man! I was just making sure I answered the right questions
@@nathanhills336 I will keep rewatch the video to analyse the writing process
The screenplay is not an easy task
@@linepenciloffice4007 I agree. I am trying to do a rewrite of TLK myself.
Is this version of Transformers: The Last Knight rated R? Because I’m doing a Transformers: The Last Knight rewrite too! And mine will be rated R for language and violence and definitely earn it with tons of blood and Cade, Sqweeks, Cogman, and Viviane saying “F***” - Cade is the only character who will say it twice, but Viviane, Sqweeks, and Cogman will only say it once.
If you have seen the other parts, it will definitely be rated R. I’m in highschool and living with my family so I’m very tame when it comes to voice overs. But there’s parts were you can easily slip in some f bombs lol
The darker atmosphere of the film has something to do with it as well as the graphic action. Please send me a link for that rewrite once its out. Sounds cool!
Nathan you ever thought about posting this on wattpad ever
No, I feel as if youtube is enough. Plus I enjoy reading it for people
Hey!
Did you give up on the rewrite?
I hope not, because I'd like to see a continuation. Part 1 was really good.
Mario Butoto Nope! I’ve been really busy lately and I’m trying to make part 2 great! It is coming in a few weeks time. Thank you for the feedback
@@nathanhills336 No worries dude! Take as much time as you need. Otherwise, the final product won't be as polished as you'd like, I'm sure you know that 😉
Anyway good luck and just write how you'd want the movie to have been written, not aiming to be perfect cinema, because at the end of the day, the most important part In a movie is that it's entertaining and makes you feel. That's what art is supposed to do.
Mario Butoto my friend that is absolutely correct, you have officially earned my respect👊🏻
Would this interpretation of the 13 primes have anything to do with The Fallen or the Dynasty of Primes from TF: ROTF or not?
In a way, yes
@@nathanhills336 you make the story feel a bit more consistent than what we have.
Not a bad take, but how does this reconcile with the multiple, organic creators from AOE? Were those aliens in the employ of Quintessa?
Honesty I’m trying not to touch other convoluted parts of the series, I’m just trying to fix this... mess of a film
@@nathanhills336 I don't blame you, things were already messed up haha
J.T. Dennis yep I’m trying to fix them as best as I can
While I would have preferred the quintesons, I like the idea of quintessa being solus prime.
15:55 is confusing me a tad bit, does optimus willingly join Quintessa or is just brainwashed similarly to the original film?
The main idea was that Optimus is broken by Quintessa to the point of submission. He either joins her or dies.
@@nathanhills336 i see. So it’s basically a Winter Solider kind of case. Broken down and turned. Then sent to kill who is needed to be taken care of. Interesting take on Nemesis. I like it.
TLK could've been epic. Biggest wasted potential ive seen.
They should have kept galvatron in the movies tbh
Looking back on it now, they really should’ve. If I was writing part 1 today, that’s what I would’ve done. But I probably would go all the way back to AOE to rewrite that as well
@@nathanhills336 they never showed galvatron becoming megatron. It’s almost like they were afraid to commit to the idea of galvatron instead of megatron for some reason. Either that or continuity really doesn’t matter to the writers of these movies.
Continuity never really mattered in the Bay films, that much is true.
At least we have this new universe to start chewing on and by the looks of it, it’s being made by pretty competent people.
@@nathanhills336 they made a big mistake with wheeljack and I’m not a big fan of how mirage looks along with Blitzwing looking like starscream but other than that things have been a lot better with the new writers and directors