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Great tips: As an English Major who went from Community college to the Univeristy of Michigan, I heavily agree with all that's said. But to add some tips 1. Structure - As a senior in college I can bend the rules for essays. In HS and early UNI we're given written out rules. Hook and Conclusion should ALWAYS be focal point no matter what, but don't be afraid to step outside the conventional essay structure. You're writing a personal story AND an essay, or a personal essay, not an argumentative one, so forget about body 1/body 2/thesis 2.Thesis - contrary to what I just said your essay should have an underlying theiss, or better named in this context, a theme or takeaway about yourself and/or the world. It does not, and usually is best, to not clearly write out your thesis statement like a traditional argumentative essay. Instead, it should rest underneath the narrative, which leads to 3. Hook - I cannot state the importance of a strong hook. If you want to stand out your hook should be as intriguing as possible. This does not have to be some deep philosophical question, but instead, it should build tension through you. Example: 'The walls had to cave in before I understood how to push them back out'. Hook/opening paragraph should make your theme apparent. which leads to 4. Conclusion - concluding an essay is just as important as your hook/first paragraph. The most satisfying stories are usually cyclical in nature. To steal a quote from some brilliant writer, non verbatim, "A great short story ends with the inevitable unforeseen until its reached" 5. Voice - Same story with HS hammering into us the classical argumentative essay structure, cold, factual, and distant in nature. A personal essay is told in 1st person and you, the person (lol) should be heard through your words. Write as if you were talking. Don't be afraid of wit and style (But also - for the love of god, don't get too flowery - I love oscar wilde and his flowery prose, but the college board does not wanna read that. I recommend being concise and adding poetic descriptions when relevant. Contemporarily, Hemingway is a great model. Personally, I enjoy writing somewhere in the middle, but for a college app, the more concise the better. I'm going on a tangent here but the sentence: "A conversation that crashed a wave into romance" is what I'd aim for IME with college essay reviewers. Short yet deep). To bridge that long(), voice will add flair and will separate you from all the thousands of essays submitted. Lastly, remember, although its called a personal essay, what you're writing is a short story. It should be compelling. Like Kevin mentioned, no one cares about your acolateds or how many club's you led. That's not compelling. YOU are compelling, so make sure you shine through your words. Great vid Kevin, and best of luck to all those applying!
Great to see you uploading again (thanks for the mention haha)! Time is the one thing I’ll make sure to cherish and use during the application process!!
Love your passion!! Great advice to elevate narratives by including ‘coming of age’, and emphasis on personal relationship building, as well as within community. Video helped a bunch 🙌🏽
Yesss! we r here listening and being truly grateful for all the help you provide us. You are the elder brother this little sister never had and always hoped to get guidance from. Thank youu
Hi everyone! It's been 3 years since we started this UA-cam channel + launched this agency to help kids get into colleges. So far, we've helped more than 70+ students from all across the world and every background imaginable get into every single Ivy League School, Stanford, MIT and more! If you'd like your essay reviewed by us, just visit our website! www.elevated.school/editmyessay
i am having a really serious issue regarding the structure and implementation. it would be very thankful for me if you could read my essay. hoping for a positive response.
Hey thank you for this information but im sort of overthinking everything cause I have low gpa but im in music from age 12 and im really passionate like I've won some competitions arranged on youtube also im taking a gap year to improve my 12th grades gpa and along with this preparing for jee advanced exam cause I can't accept these bad grades because I was rewiring and academics got their loose in managing and doing that's the reason for improving grades in gap year but can you help me with what should be the priority that should considered in this gap year along with these stats which should be in mind to secure ivies as an option for my case what should be optimistic now instead of focusing on bad performance in high and senior school graduation(past)
I personally advise that you find a way to state your excuses for the low GPA on your essay while maintaining a good essay structure. Also make sure you write a killer essay ❤
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hello , i will apply to college after month , and write essay , can u check and give personal advise plzz i realy need someone to read like u an a expert
Since 2022, we’ve edited more than 3300 college essays and helped hundreds of seniors from around the world gain more than 600+ acceptances to top 20 schools. If you’d like your essay professionally edited, we’d be honored to help!
Visit: www.elevated.school/editmyessay
Where our students got in: www.elevated.school/2024results
Your videos helped me get accepted into Yale and I’ll forever be grateful for that! Thank you 😊
Hi there! Can I reach out to you so one day maybe I will be writing you a message like you the one you wrote to Kevin?
Omg good job
Great tips: As an English Major who went from Community college to the Univeristy of Michigan, I heavily agree with all that's said. But to add some tips
1. Structure - As a senior in college I can bend the rules for essays. In HS and early UNI we're given written out rules. Hook and Conclusion should ALWAYS be focal point no matter what, but don't be afraid to step outside the conventional essay structure. You're writing a personal story AND an essay, or a personal essay, not an argumentative one, so forget about body 1/body 2/thesis
2.Thesis - contrary to what I just said your essay should have an underlying theiss, or better named in this context, a theme or takeaway about yourself and/or the world. It does not, and usually is best, to not clearly write out your thesis statement like a traditional argumentative essay. Instead, it should rest underneath the narrative, which leads to
3. Hook - I cannot state the importance of a strong hook. If you want to stand out your hook should be as intriguing as possible. This does not have to be some deep philosophical question, but instead, it should build tension through you. Example: 'The walls had to cave in before I understood how to push them back out'. Hook/opening paragraph should make your theme apparent. which leads to
4. Conclusion - concluding an essay is just as important as your hook/first paragraph. The most satisfying stories are usually cyclical in nature. To steal a quote from some brilliant writer, non verbatim, "A great short story ends with the inevitable unforeseen until its reached"
5. Voice - Same story with HS hammering into us the classical argumentative essay structure, cold, factual, and distant in nature. A personal essay is told in 1st person and you, the person (lol) should be heard through your words. Write as if you were talking. Don't be afraid of wit and style (But also - for the love of god, don't get too flowery - I love oscar wilde and his flowery prose, but the college board does not wanna read that. I recommend being concise and adding poetic descriptions when relevant. Contemporarily, Hemingway is a great model. Personally, I enjoy writing somewhere in the middle, but for a college app, the more concise the better. I'm going on a tangent here but the sentence: "A conversation that crashed a wave into romance" is what I'd aim for IME with college essay reviewers. Short yet deep). To bridge that long(), voice will add flair and will separate you from all the thousands of essays submitted.
Lastly, remember, although its called a personal essay, what you're writing is a short story. It should be compelling. Like Kevin mentioned, no one cares about your acolateds or how many club's you led. That's not compelling. YOU are compelling, so make sure you shine through your words. Great vid Kevin, and best of luck to all those applying!
Thank you for coming back to UA-cam 🙏🙏
me watching to start the essay before 3 days until deadline.
Very glad I'm not the only one
So did you get accepted?
did you get accepted?
Great to see you uploading again (thanks for the mention haha)! Time is the one thing I’ll make sure to cherish and use during the application process!!
Welcome back zhensei.
And hello Jeffrey!
tons of super insightful advice
thank u cofounder
Thank you for coming back bro we want a lot more videos
So amazing that such good quality advice is available for free
Kevin!! Solid thoughts.
Love your passion!! Great advice to elevate narratives by including ‘coming of age’, and emphasis on personal relationship building, as well as within community.
Video helped a bunch 🙌🏽
Yesss! we r here listening and being truly grateful for all the help you provide us. You are the elder brother this little sister never had and always hoped to get guidance from. Thank youu
Aww this made my day!!
This is such good quality advice, I am immensely grateful that this is literally available for free on the internet
Thanks for watching!! And for your kind comment Sky~
amazing video kev!!
Good work.
Thank you
thank you very much
Hi everyone! It's been 3 years since we started this UA-cam channel + launched this agency to help kids get into colleges. So far, we've helped more than 70+ students from all across the world and every background imaginable get into every single Ivy League School, Stanford, MIT and more! If you'd like your essay reviewed by us, just visit our website! www.elevated.school/editmyessay
i am having a really serious issue regarding the structure and implementation. it would be very thankful for me if you could read my essay. hoping for a positive response.
They have their own website you can give them your essay there.
Hey thank you for this information but im sort of overthinking everything cause I have low gpa but im in music from age 12 and im really passionate like I've won some competitions arranged on youtube also im taking a gap year to improve my 12th grades gpa and along with this preparing for jee advanced exam cause I can't accept these bad grades because I was rewiring and academics got their loose in managing and doing that's the reason for improving grades in gap year but can you help me with what should be the priority that should considered in this gap year along with these stats which should be in mind to secure ivies as an option for my case what should be optimistic now instead of focusing on bad performance in high and senior school graduation(past)
I personally advise that you find a way to state your excuses for the low GPA on your essay while maintaining a good essay structure.
Also make sure you write a killer essay ❤
From now until August 2024, I (Kevin) will offering doing FREE intro calls with students (and parents!)
Visit: linktr.ee/elevatedschool
Thank you watching our videos! Your support seriously means the world to us!!
hello , i will apply to college after month , and write essay , can u check and give personal advise plzz i realy need someone to read like u an a expert
I like your shirt
20-40% of your app!
6 drafts 😳
2 weeks brainstorming
2 weeks on 3 ideas (500-1000)
love your notetaking approach! This will take you far in life lil sib
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