Shakespeare was a master of storytelling not only he gives tons of weakness and moral and psychological needs to their heroes but he throws them from the top to the bottom.
in writing a premise line I am finding it difficult to keep it concise. the story has some basic things that I feel are the premise but it sounds like a run on sentence. how do I define this broader definition of what my story is about and trim the fat without losing the meat of the story/premise
Sure you will have figured it out by now since you asked this 2 years ago but it's as he says: who fights who over what? Put all three elements into one sentence. The Hero, the opponent and the goal that forces them into conflict. For example: A downtrodden factory worker finds herself at the centre of an uprising against the owners when she discovers a plan to make half the company redun. Hero: factory worker; Opponent: the owners; Conflict: the economic interests of the factory owners and the workers. Something like that.
I have a question I wish I could ask John Truby a question. Since I can't, I'm asking it here and maybe someone will answer. Truby often cites Tootsie as an exemple of a good story structure. But, what is the desire drive in the story? I would say : get a job on a soap. But once he has the job, what is the desire? I have a similar problem with my own story and I am stuck.
To mantain his job without people knowing his a man, and a secondary objective that often takes over: to successfully seduce the character of Jessica Lange
Shakespeare was a master of storytelling not only he gives tons of weakness and moral and psychological needs to their heroes but he throws them from the top to the bottom.
Mr Truby you are fabulous. Thank you for sharing this precious information.
I have his book! You won't be disappointed!
Ahhh! Love the 4:3 ratio .. because now-a-days, you don't get to see it often.
Have a great day
"Hollywood isn't interested in things that have been done before." Say WHAT?!
2007 was a weird time for Hollywood.
I just watched all the videos I could find.about Mr truby. Now I am going to buy his book!
Mr Truby, why on earth aren't you more famous by now??
tobo86 Shhhh...
I'll buy it!
Full link of this interview plz....
Great video.
in writing a premise line I am finding it difficult to keep it concise. the story has some basic things that I feel are the premise but it sounds like a run on sentence. how do I define this broader definition of what my story is about and trim the fat without losing the meat of the story/premise
Sure you will have figured it out by now since you asked this 2 years ago but it's as he says: who fights who over what? Put all three elements into one sentence. The Hero, the opponent and the goal that forces them into conflict. For example: A downtrodden factory worker finds herself at the centre of an uprising against the owners when she discovers a plan to make half the company redun. Hero: factory worker; Opponent: the owners; Conflict: the economic interests of the factory owners and the workers. Something like that.
@@dominicmorgan1983 This helped a ton thank you very much.
I have a question I wish I could ask John Truby a question. Since I can't, I'm asking it here and maybe someone will answer. Truby often cites Tootsie as an exemple of a good story structure. But, what is the desire drive in the story? I would say : get a job on a soap. But once he has the job, what is the desire? I have a similar problem with my own story and I am stuck.
To not lose his job as he worked hard for it.
To mantain his job without people knowing his a man, and a secondary objective that often takes over: to successfully seduce the character of Jessica Lange
to get the girl (Julie)
@@Michawk That's right! He desires one thing at first and then, it changes. Thank you!
And how many scripts has he sold? None. master? Really? These "gurus" make me puke.
I would normally agree, but he’s hired as a script doctor to fine tune/fix scripts that aren’t quite fulfilling the promise of the premise.
@@arthurlandon8756 I see, so a Producer buys a screenplay because it isn't good enough, then hires a guru to "fix" it. BS.