The Elder Race - ALL PARTS - Sci-Fi Story with Illustrations

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  • Опубліковано 21 лис 2024

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  • @HumanSupremacyStories
    @HumanSupremacyStories  8 місяців тому +13

    If you enjoyed the style of this video, whether or not the story hit the mark for you, consider checking the new series, 'Corridors.' With today's episode, it surpasses 'The Elder Race' in length, now totaling 4 hours and 15 minutes, with much more to come.
    First episode of Corridors: ua-cam.com/video/IB85ZSzxpak/v-deo.html
    Playlist link: ua-cam.com/video/IB85ZSzxpak/v-deo.html
    Corridors by u/Nanoprober:
    After humanity received the gift of interstellar travel technology from a species of bird-like aliens called the Onathins, we did with it what we do best. Obviously, this means that we accidentally turned it into a weapon. Good thing we did, though, because as Humanity explored the stars, we found a horrifying enemy, hell-bent on destroying all life on its path towards the galactic center. Corridors is a story of how one small tweak to a gifted technology can alter the entire course of history for Humanity and all the destines of the nearby interstellar civilizations.

  • @kingcaragious
    @kingcaragious 6 місяців тому +4

    This is probably the best combination of story and artwork of this type. The artwork added a bit of emphasis and using different voices add depth to the narration.
    I won't nitpick the story apart because I believe people have a way of letting perfect be the enemy of good, and this is good work.

    • @nikkotan2840
      @nikkotan2840 2 місяці тому

      yeah combination, HFY, hell noh!!

  • @johnsmith6266
    @johnsmith6266 8 місяців тому +10

    this is one of the higher quality videos ive seen the art work is a huge plus and really adds to the story and makes it much better to watch thanks for the hard work

    • @HumanSupremacyStories
      @HumanSupremacyStories  8 місяців тому +1

      Thank you for the kind words.

    • @johnsmith6266
      @johnsmith6266 8 місяців тому +1

      @@HumanSupremacyStories thanks for bringing me the good story

    • @Madsklb
      @Madsklb 7 місяців тому +2

      100% agree with john, great work borther, and the diffriend voice is a big plus for me

    • @johnsmith6266
      @johnsmith6266 7 місяців тому

      @@Madsklb i’m glad to see there are other connoisseurs of AI work

  • @harristablizo6848
    @harristablizo6848 8 місяців тому +7

    ❤❤
    More please!!
    Need to know what happens next

  • @patrickmcabee123
    @patrickmcabee123 6 місяців тому +1

    Wowee..! Great show, thanks for sharing …. 👍🏼😎👍🏼

  • @AlaricAchos
    @AlaricAchos 7 місяців тому +5

    ENJOYED A LOT

  • @IGWTS
    @IGWTS 8 місяців тому +9

    TV series potential I think

  • @IceFiction404
    @IceFiction404 8 місяців тому +8

    Bravo 👋Good Stuff Good stuff 😘

  • @lkuhhdsfgasdgvdadfg
    @lkuhhdsfgasdgvdadfg 8 місяців тому +4

    No idea what it does. No idea what it was for no idea what it was made of, full of power... were shooting at it... >_>

  • @GreenMachine1365
    @GreenMachine1365 8 місяців тому +10

    I see that this was an abandoned story never completed, so probably a good thing I had to give up early on. The AI is something I can get past, but the author very badly needed to get together with a decent editor. The story concept is great and there was clearly a lot put into planning it out, but the actual writing is at about a high school level. It's very rough, far too many things needed reworking to be worth a read or listen. It honestly sounds like a rough draft that never got even a first pass edit. Shame too, the bones of a great story are there.

    • @georgemichel2576
      @georgemichel2576 8 місяців тому

      First part is a little rough, but read on. Truly a great , well written story; though in need of editing. Great project for workshoping.

    • @munjerkucci
      @munjerkucci 8 місяців тому +3

      Writers tell stories editors fix grammars and spellings.

    • @AndrooUK
      @AndrooUK 7 місяців тому +2

      ​@@munjerkucciEditors also censor and make sure things are advertiser friendly, rather than audience friendly. 😅

    • @robertrobertson3322
      @robertrobertson3322 6 місяців тому

      Actually good to listen to pretty funny. Half listening and working so didn’t pay attention to imperfections

    • @Kayessee
      @Kayessee 6 місяців тому

      You just saved me 4 hours. Thank you.

  • @Roberto-zn5lw
    @Roberto-zn5lw 8 місяців тому

    There's a book series called The Wanderer by Simon Goodson. I think this is in the same "universe". The taint and the physical characteristics are the same

  • @nikkotan2840
    @nikkotan2840 2 місяці тому +1

    This story begins with an epic HFY to a slow death heading to oblivion full of woke politics, and stupid and incompetent Humans, with all of their technology unable to beat inferior Aliens who were depicted as weak in the first chapter, but Humans became incompetent fools as the chapter progress. Not worth my time. So much for the so-called Elder Race, an actual Elder Race would not need population to conquer their enemies when technologies can do all the heavy work, like the Forerunners in Halo.
    In Halo 1 Forerunner commander can make the whole galaxy bend with the help of automation and AI. This story could have been better and it really feels HFY in the first part even though
    there's a hint that it is AI-GENERATED Text, but the preceding Chapters are just a slow death with politics and what, too bad.

    • @elquistidore
      @elquistidore 7 днів тому

      Thanks for the run down! Saved me time

  • @MetalicONE
    @MetalicONE 8 місяців тому +1

    AI audiobook, not too bad.

  • @Jani-wr1dn
    @Jani-wr1dn 6 місяців тому

    Blue... yeah Guess vikings left a mark

  • @theangrypickle9892
    @theangrypickle9892 8 місяців тому +2

    Who wrote "The Kill Switch" it's like a toddler wrote it.

  • @elisantiago9961
    @elisantiago9961 8 місяців тому +1

    Is a great story but it's unfinished

  • @jackdbur
    @jackdbur 8 місяців тому +2

    Core was offered a contract by Tesla but wanted above what Tesla was willing to pay hopping for someone else to contract their production as the legacy car makers have drastically cutEV production their SO,

  • @markletts2000
    @markletts2000 6 місяців тому

    Simple, type in sci fi ,

  • @zahierabaloch8118
    @zahierabaloch8118 8 місяців тому +1

    Where's the rest?

  • @joseenriquemendeznunez4255
    @joseenriquemendeznunez4255 6 місяців тому

    Awoken? Or awakened?

  • @chadrowin2956
    @chadrowin2956 8 місяців тому

    . . . . better written then many others, but this is more like book 1.

  • @nycplayboy78
    @nycplayboy78 8 місяців тому +1

    Why not send a drone and/or probe out first??!!

    • @karlsmith2570
      @karlsmith2570 6 місяців тому

      Agreed, that would've been the sensible thing to do

  • @TheKonkaman
    @TheKonkaman 8 місяців тому +6

    This doesn’t feel finished? Or am i just dumb

    • @HumanSupremacyStories
      @HumanSupremacyStories  8 місяців тому +4

      Nope, you are right. The last chapter from u/brownoniongravy1 was posted 8 years ago. This is all we have for now. If he starts writing again, I would love to continue the rest as well.

    • @TheKonkaman
      @TheKonkaman 8 місяців тому +4

      @@HumanSupremacyStories aww gutted was really enjoying this 😣

    • @georgemichel2576
      @georgemichel2576 8 місяців тому

      Well, who are the authors??

    • @sewercotr3243
      @sewercotr3243 8 місяців тому

      ​@@georgemichel2576there are other tubers hav much much more hyf stories search there all similar to this nd repeated stories under different but go thru em there are prominent person has em

    • @GreenKC
      @GreenKC 8 місяців тому

      @@georgemichel2576They told you a Reddit user

  • @zargonfuture4046
    @zargonfuture4046 8 місяців тому

    Ooohgh nope.. It's like AI decided it's not necessary to even try make it sound convincing.

  • @dankuchar6821
    @dankuchar6821 7 місяців тому

    Not complete?

  • @georgemichel2576
    @georgemichel2576 8 місяців тому

    Who are the authors??😊

  • @TheSanien
    @TheSanien 8 місяців тому +4

    Crap, hate uncompleted works 😢

  • @DarthFetid
    @DarthFetid 7 місяців тому

    i know starship troopers when i hear it.

  • @AncientRylanor69
    @AncientRylanor69 7 місяців тому

    kjh

  • @DOZZER62
    @DOZZER62 4 місяці тому

    Gen Z bullsit

  • @MC-wg3fm
    @MC-wg3fm 8 місяців тому

    Was this written by a 13 yo?
    English might not be their first language to be fair.

  • @jayfenwenzel6531
    @jayfenwenzel6531 21 годину тому

    Why is it as I listened to the story the writing has gotten worse it's almost as if every part had a different writer and they were all slapped together at the end without a reread or rewrite

  • @prestonirvin1209
    @prestonirvin1209 8 місяців тому

    Part 3 is killing me! This sing song crap is awful. I'm hopeful this doesn't continue. It is not futuristic or alien or cool or whatever you went for by saying sing song, chilly cold, or any of that nonstop annoying double description, it's just bad writing and it literally happened every sentence.