Honestly not bad, but a lot of the funniest things are sort of dampened by your delivery. It's extremely common for people not used to presenting or talking publicly. It feels like you're reading the jokes off a list, or making conscious effort to say certain things. Inbetween your written parts, throw some improv or add a funny tag you think of on the spot. Overall it's good man, I feel like if you can get over the hump of your delivery you will notice a HUGE difference in how it sounds and feels to deliver the jokes. The Tolkien part was the best cause you got into it and had some changes in your inflection, maybe it's a topic you're very passionate or confident on. Like when you held the mic closer and mentioned Gimli, some more expressive stuff like that to mix up the tone and sound. Keep it up dude I hope to see more from you!
Honestly not bad, but a lot of the funniest things are sort of dampened by your delivery. It's extremely common for people not used to presenting or talking publicly.
It feels like you're reading the jokes off a list, or making conscious effort to say certain things.
Inbetween your written parts, throw some improv or add a funny tag you think of on the spot.
Overall it's good man, I feel like if you can get over the hump of your delivery you will notice a HUGE difference in how it sounds and feels to deliver the jokes.
The Tolkien part was the best cause you got into it and had some changes in your inflection, maybe it's a topic you're very passionate or confident on. Like when you held the mic closer and mentioned Gimli, some more expressive stuff like that to mix up the tone and sound.
Keep it up dude I hope to see more from you!