Another great example of contrast is the song "running" by ibejii. With lyrics like Hell may turn cold, like a lava stone but my heart for you will never. Absolutely gorgeous.
I wrote a song, tell me how is it? Verse 1: "Girl, I'm feeling empty, like a hollow soul Tryna find the pieces of me, that I lost control I've been trying hard to get my life back on track But it's hard to see myself, when I'm slipping back" Chorus: "Oh, I'm searching for a light, in this darkest night A guiding star, to lead me back to the light I'm trying to find my way, through the pain and the strife To get back to the person, I used to be in life" Verse 2: "Memories keep haunting me, like a ghost in my mind Reminding me of what I lost, and the love that I left behind I'm trying to move on, but it's hard to let go When the memories of you, are all that I know" Chorus: "Oh, I'm searching for a light, in this darkest night A guiding star, to lead me back to the light I'm trying to find my way, through the pain and the strife To get back to the person, I used to be in life" Bridge: "But still I hold on, to the thread of my heart The spark within me, that sets my soul apart It's the fire that fuels me, to rise above the pain And learn to love again, like I did before the shame" Chorus: "Oh, I'm searching for a light, in this darkest night A guiding star, to lead me back to the light I'm trying to find my way, through the pain and the strife To get back to the person, I used to be in life"
this channel gives so much value with such great editing/story-telling.. i'm kinda speechless. most of the times other channels just keep bsing, beating around the bush and don't provide any actual value in much longer videos then yours, but your content is full of it and you don't waste any of our viewers time. how did i not find this channel earlier? i'm so grateful that i arrived here now. incredible work, keep up the quality content! i instantly subscribed.❤🔥
I should've thanked you before, but here it is. 30+ years of writing (radio and landlines then) At least I know now that your channel proves that music transcends time. Thank you
1) metaphors 2) upgrading verbs. Example you don't need to say the dog bark loudly as loudly is implied. She walk into the room."call to action" Automatically just cross out any adjectives or adverbs.that are inside the lyrics there might be some that are needed. Underlined every verb that is used. And pick one verb for one section. 3)Use specific imagery. Find a way to paint a picture instead of just saying sunday afternoon. 4) Contrast. 2 opposite ideas. Good/bad Hot/cold. 5) Last line pivot. The surprising element at the end.
My notes: 1. metaphors & describe them further. then pick out some parts 2. upgrade verbs & cross out adverbs/ adjectives 3. imagery is important (showing>telling) 4. contrasts - opposing things are spotlighting 5. power positions - 1st and last lines of every section are most important (last line pivot - surprise!) all songs that were mentioned: 2:53 School Night - Ani Difranco 4:01 Golden - Jill Scott 4:03 Circle Games - Joni Mitchell 4:05 She burns - Foy Vance 4:07 Take me to church - Hozier 5:46 Motion Sickness - Phoebe Bridgers 6:49 Nothing - Bruno Major 8:23 The Bed Song - Amanda Palmer 12:54 River - Johnny Mitchell
Is this good? "You may ruin my life, but you will never take my heart You may run away to not to admit that deep down, You don't like the truth that you drowned me in your storm"
Nice one. I would change the verb tenses and avoid using the “may” intensifier: “You ruined my life but you won’t take my heart”, “You’ll run away from me without admitting it deep down”, “You won’t/wouldn’t face the truth that you drowned me in your storm”.
Lyrics and melody are my strong point. They come so simple for me. My trick is "don't make them too difficult, make them clever". I am always complimented on my lyrics by nonplayer friends and my , melodies by my musician friends. But I live in the Midwest. There's no-ne hearing me beyond those folks.
I'm basically the polar opposite. The music and recording side of things? No problem. The poetry side of things? Nooooooope. I've got ideas and song maps for DAYS but I'm faaaaaaaar too literal to really be good at that side of things. 🤣 We should do a little collaboration!! Sounds like we are opposite sides of the same coin, op!!
Thank you so much! I often have some anxiety around writing the lyrics to my music causing me to avoid the process but this actually motivated me to get started!
Anger is a storm - metaphor The clouds of your mind gather, darkening in your eyes. Your words are lightening, striking out at the nearest touch point - your voice swells and spills, and I harden like ice. My dark glances rumble on the horizon of our days. - extended metaphor 👏👏👏👏👏
I wrote something Can you guys rate it? California Light [DEMO] Pop | Ballad Pop | Electronic [Verse 1] Did a rain check Hoping for a thunderstorm Thought of you when I heard my album on his phone Sat beside him A different love i'm leaning on Forgot the part where i write you out on all my songs [Pre-Chorus 1] With red marks Crossing out red hearts You'll never be perfect in my eyes But you're all i see in this red light Now i'm chasin' Our pieces in pavements Leaving out signs for him to see (To see) [Chorus 1] When she thinks about you, Do you think about me? (When)you lay on your bed, Is it my scent on your sheets? You know what i want, You know you're all that i need In this California light, I never wanted you to see me leave [Verse 2] Can you take me home? Relying on the love the moment brings And when we're all alone Nobody in the lights to judge our sins Am i wrong to wonder? If i didn't let go without a kiss Would everything be better? This feeling that i wear on both my wrists [Post Verse 1] If you tear my walls Like you did before If we risked it all Then maybe i'd let you Hold me whenever (All again) Take whatever (Till the end) But give it effort Effort in me Pull you closer (This time) Hold you tighter (All night) I'll give you effort (Tonight) If you give it back to me [Pre Chorus 2] With red marks Drawing out red hearts You'll never be perfect in my eyes But you're all i see in this red light Now i'm chasin' Your colors in pavements Leaving out signs for you to see (To see)
The tap's been on a while and the water's beginning to clear. Thank you Keppie & Bennie for all the wonderful tips and exercises to help clean the pipes!
Tell me how's this I gave my all, to u, can't u see Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean I gave my soul, i gave my heart, i gave my everything in love But what i got, am all alone, cursing u for having a heart of stone Still ive been missing you, calling u with my sreams And ive been loving u, kissing you, in my dreams I gave my all, to u, can't u see Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean I gave my hours,I gave you flowers, on every Sunday with a ride to the sea I dont think u remember we wished to be together, and talk all night lying under a tree So tell me how forgetful, u wanna be, u wanna be Looks like u don't remember, even me I gave my all, to u, can't u see Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean I wish I could show you my heart full of scars and Damn pain I wish you could be mine for once, but forgot that's not part of game The game u played, was fun for you, but for me it was, all tame But you don't know how hurt i feel, coz you want understand the same I gave my all, to u, can't u see Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean You know you know how much I have loved you baby, you know you know that how much I had to pay you know you know I'll never forget you lady, But this is all i have to say I gave my all, to u, can't u see Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean
Oh wow!, I find your knowlege and ease of your expanations very engaging. Thank you. I am Afrikaans speaking - I was lost in a desert of phrase and expression, I now rest in charming pastures of appreciation.
Keppie how do you do that??? "Anger is a storm". It's magical how you conjured this extended metaphor. I get (slowly) how you arrived at this because you kindly explain, but it's so entertaining and awesome how it seems to effortlessly roll out of your creativity. It is inspiring. 1:42 into your video... cant wait to watch the rest!
Introduction and Overview - 00:00:00 Extending Metaphors - 00:00:32 Upgrading Verbs - 00:04:14 Use Specific Imagery that Works Hard - 00:07:34 Contrasts - 00:10:43 Power Positions - 00:11:56
Gteat video, I used to attend the Harriet Schock songwriting workshop in LA off and on for a few years. You brought back a lot of knowledge and added a lot as well.😊. Thank you.
Such good advice. I also get anxious with lyric writing in my music, which leads to avoidance. Everything you said reminds me of Sade's song Pearls. Thank you. New subscriber here.
You think of a theme and then all the words should thus relate. Also use alliteration and assonance to complement and emphasize your phrases. But a really important thing is to make the musical structure complement the lyric. Cole Porter could do this. For example in his song Night and Day there is a line ''In the roaring traffics boom''. For the words ''in the roaring traffic's '' he uses a minor chord but for the last word ''boom'' he goes down a half tone to a major chord - to great effect. Your advice re adjectives and adverbs is exactly the same as I think Gertrude Stein said to Ernest Hemingway.
9:34 that's funny cause my interpretation of this sentence was that she faced the truth as something she was looking for. She says that she found her glasses, i think the use of the verb "find" here is kind of specific. If it was only the scene of a couple in the bed, she could have said "i took my glasses". And then I interprete the other part of the phrase "you turn the light out", as the fact that the other one lives in denial. So, it joins your interpretation, meaning they are not on the same page, but it can be interpreted in a stronger way. Maybe she faces the fact that they are not on the same page anymore, and the other one chose to ignore it, so, not only she has to deal with this disconnection in her couple but she also has to deal with being alone confronting the problem.
How I interpreted it was that the one who finds the glasses finally sees the truth or sees what they've been looking for but the other turns the lights out to keep them in darkness
I have runaway stuck in my head was listenin' to the ocean I saw a face in the sand But when I picked it up Then it vanished away from my hands, dah I had a dream, I was seven Climbin' my way in a tree I saw a piece of Heaven Waitin' in patience for me, dah And I was runnin' far away Would I run off the world someday? Nobody knows, nobody knows And I was dancing in the rain I felt alive and I can't complain But no, take me home Take me home where I belong I can't take it anymore I was painting a picture The picture was a painting of you And for a moment I thought you were here But then again, it wasn't true, dah And all this time I have been lyin' Oh, lyin' in secret to myself I've been putting sorrow on the farthest place on my shelf La-di-da And I was runnin' far away Would I run off the world someday? Nobody knows, nobody knows And I was dancing in the rain I felt alive and I can't complain But no, take me home Take me home where I belong I got no other place to go No, take me home Take me home where I belong I got no other place to go No, take me home Take me home where I belong I can't take it anymore But I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall And I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall And I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall And I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall And I was runnin' far away Would I run off the world someday? But no, take me home Take me home where I belong I got no other place to go No, take me home Take me home where I belong I got no other place to go No, take me home, home where I belong, no, no No, take me home, home where I belong, oh, oh, oh No, take me home, home where I belong, no, no No, take me home, home where I belong I can't take it anymore
This is concrete advice, with real examples, and it’s incredibly helpful. Thank you! I’m a composer wanting to learn how to write good lyrics, instead of just the music. I can use this!
I felt i made headway on the last song i wrote (Desert) after a lesson of urs…. Now i see all of the imperfections in it after this lesson! Lol thanks for the insight!
Gord Downie had some unbelievable lyrics, "Nautical Disaster" is a good place to start! Matt Scannell from Vertical Horizon is a living masterclass as well. Check out the album Echoes from the Underground.
I know you're mostly right about adverbs and adjectives... but I wouldn't go to an extreme. Think of these classic songs: Isn't she lovely Tiny dancer Psycho killer Brown-eyed girl Beautiful Boy American Girl Purple Haze Comfortably numb Born to be wild And the most classic of all: We are never ever ever getting back together - 4 adverbs in one line! ;P
I have a question. Many songwriters write lyrics based on the phonetics, syllables and consonants first and then fit a story to it. Just making the words sound nice and using language as a phonetic instrument on the melody. Do you have any videos on how to make a story with these nonsense words that sound pleasing to the ear?
( 1st like to your comment ) Maybe I am the Walrus by The Beatles 🤷 . Then again even though I've written songs ( & gotten some of them recorded ) I'm a student here , not 1 of the teachers . ♑️✍️🇳🇴🇦🇺
You don't know how to use metaphors? This is showing you a metaphoric creation process. She is merely showing how to derive metaphors to use on your own. This is really basic stuff. Listen for metaphors in 'Suzzane', 'Merriane', 'Hallelujah'by Leonard Cohen, or 'Lungs', 'Flying Shoes' by Townes Van Zandt
If you’re looking for a case study is amazing lyric writing check out David Wilcox (American musician). His writing on the album how did you find me here is one of my all time favorites
"I get stuck in your rain." STOP! That's so beautiful!
If it inspires you, feel free to use it :) Just make sure to build on it, and make it your own!
May I know the meaning of that sentence. I didn't quite get it
@Nobddy "western" writing 😅
your love is like a storm
i get stuck in your rain
waiting on a feeling
but all you give me is pain
Riiiight😊
Another great example of contrast is the song "running" by ibejii.
With lyrics like
Hell may turn cold, like a lava stone but my heart for you will never.
Absolutely gorgeous.
An oxymoron even in that case
I wrote a song, tell me how is it?
Verse 1:
"Girl, I'm feeling empty, like a hollow soul
Tryna find the pieces of me, that I lost control
I've been trying hard to get my life back on track
But it's hard to see myself, when I'm slipping back"
Chorus:
"Oh, I'm searching for a light, in this darkest night
A guiding star, to lead me back to the light
I'm trying to find my way, through the pain and the strife
To get back to the person, I used to be in life"
Verse 2:
"Memories keep haunting me, like a ghost in my mind
Reminding me of what I lost, and the love that I left behind
I'm trying to move on, but it's hard to let go
When the memories of you, are all that I know"
Chorus:
"Oh, I'm searching for a light, in this darkest night
A guiding star, to lead me back to the light
I'm trying to find my way, through the pain and the strife
To get back to the person, I used to be in life"
Bridge:
"But still I hold on, to the thread of my heart
The spark within me, that sets my soul apart
It's the fire that fuels me, to rise above the pain
And learn to love again, like I did before the shame"
Chorus:
"Oh, I'm searching for a light, in this darkest night
A guiding star, to lead me back to the light
I'm trying to find my way, through the pain and the strife
To get back to the person, I used to be in life"
Amazing
Very good
This is amazing
ChatGPT
Yawn.
this channel gives so much value with such great editing/story-telling.. i'm kinda speechless. most of the times other channels just keep bsing, beating around the bush and don't provide any actual value in much longer videos then yours, but your content is full of it and you don't waste any of our viewers time. how did i not find this channel earlier? i'm so grateful that i arrived here now. incredible work, keep up the quality content! i instantly subscribed.❤🔥
0:39
1. EXTENDING METAPHORES
4:08
2. UPGRADING VERBS
7:37
3. USE SPECIFIC IMAGERY THAT WORKS HARD
10:48
4. CONTRAST
11:48
5. POWER POSITIONS
I should've thanked you before, but here it is.
30+ years of writing (radio and landlines then)
At least I know now that your channel proves that music transcends time.
Thank you
1) metaphors
2) upgrading verbs. Example you don't need to say the dog bark loudly as loudly is implied.
She walk into the room."call to action" Automatically just cross out any adjectives or adverbs.that are inside the lyrics there might be some that are needed. Underlined every verb that is used. And pick one verb for one section.
3)Use specific imagery. Find a way to paint a picture instead of just saying sunday afternoon.
4) Contrast. 2 opposite ideas. Good/bad Hot/cold.
5) Last line pivot. The surprising element at the end.
My notes:
1. metaphors & describe them further. then pick out some parts
2. upgrade verbs & cross out adverbs/ adjectives
3. imagery is important (showing>telling)
4. contrasts - opposing things are spotlighting
5. power positions - 1st and last lines of every section are most important (last line pivot - surprise!)
all songs that were mentioned:
2:53 School Night - Ani Difranco
4:01 Golden - Jill Scott
4:03 Circle Games - Joni Mitchell
4:05 She burns - Foy Vance
4:07 Take me to church - Hozier
5:46 Motion Sickness - Phoebe Bridgers
6:49 Nothing - Bruno Major
8:23 The Bed Song - Amanda Palmer
12:54 River - Johnny Mitchell
Is this good?
"You may ruin my life, but you will never take my heart
You may run away to not to admit that deep down,
You don't like the truth that you drowned me in your storm"
Nice one. I would change the verb tenses and avoid using the “may” intensifier: “You ruined my life but you won’t take my heart”, “You’ll run away from me without admitting it deep down”, “You won’t/wouldn’t face the truth that you drowned me in your storm”.
Lyrics and melody are my strong point. They come so simple for me. My trick is "don't make them too difficult, make them clever". I am always complimented on my lyrics by nonplayer friends and my , melodies by my musician friends. But I live in the Midwest. There's no-ne hearing me beyond those folks.
I’d listen to your music
I would like to check out some of your songs.
@@garyloss2878 I appreciate that Gary (I'm Gary too). Here is my song, Daddy, what is Peace? ua-cam.com/video/BBGSkBZVumU/v-deo.html
I'm basically the polar opposite. The music and recording side of things? No problem. The poetry side of things? Nooooooope. I've got ideas and song maps for DAYS but I'm faaaaaaaar too literal to really be good at that side of things. 🤣 We should do a little collaboration!! Sounds like we are opposite sides of the same coin, op!!
@@rmp5s 😀
many of these ideas apply to screenwriting ... so cool :)
Thanks!
Woah that song with the skyscraper and falling out the 25th floor saying her goodbye, gave me GOOSEBUMPS sooo beautiful
Thank you so much! I often have some anxiety around writing the lyrics to my music causing me to avoid the process but this actually motivated me to get started!
Just found your channel. I am starting to write and I am learning so much. Great content.
Welcome aboard!
I really appreciate you. This is really good. And straight to the point. Grateful!
Anger is a storm - metaphor
The clouds of your mind gather, darkening in your eyes. Your words are lightening, striking out at the nearest touch point - your voice swells and spills, and I harden like ice. My dark glances rumble on the horizon of our days. - extended metaphor 👏👏👏👏👏
I love your lessons!!
I wrote something
Can you guys rate it?
California Light [DEMO]
Pop | Ballad Pop | Electronic
[Verse 1]
Did a rain check
Hoping for a thunderstorm
Thought of you when
I heard my album on his phone
Sat beside him
A different love i'm leaning on
Forgot the part where
i write you out on all my songs
[Pre-Chorus 1]
With red marks
Crossing out red hearts
You'll never be perfect in my eyes
But you're all i see in this red light
Now i'm chasin'
Our pieces in pavements
Leaving out signs for him to see
(To see)
[Chorus 1]
When she thinks about you,
Do you think about me?
(When)you lay on your bed,
Is it my scent on your sheets?
You know what i want,
You know you're all that i need
In this California light,
I never wanted you to see me leave
[Verse 2]
Can you take me home?
Relying on the love the moment brings
And when we're all alone
Nobody in the lights to judge our sins
Am i wrong to wonder?
If i didn't let go without a kiss
Would everything be better?
This feeling that i wear on both my wrists
[Post Verse 1]
If you tear my walls
Like you did before
If we risked it all
Then maybe i'd let you
Hold me whenever (All again)
Take whatever (Till the end)
But give it effort
Effort in me
Pull you closer (This time)
Hold you tighter (All night)
I'll give you effort (Tonight)
If you give it back to me
[Pre Chorus 2]
With red marks
Drawing out red hearts
You'll never be perfect in my eyes
But you're all i see in this red light
Now i'm chasin'
Your colors in pavements
Leaving out signs for you to see
(To see)
The tap's been on a while and the water's beginning to clear. Thank you Keppie & Bennie for all the wonderful tips and exercises to help clean the pipes!
i absolutely LOVE this channel! thank you guys so much for the amazing tips! ❤
Thank you so much for that last puzzle piece for my lyric writing 🥰
I really found the video helpful on my journey to make good lyrics. Thanks for your help.!
brillant video. thank you!!
You are such a good teacher.Thank you. I absorb all the best teaching. Everything you say is useful.
Tell me how's this
I gave my all, to u, can't u see
Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean
I gave my soul, i gave my heart, i gave my everything in love
But what i got, am all alone, cursing u for having a heart of stone
Still ive been missing you, calling u with my sreams
And ive been loving u, kissing you, in my dreams
I gave my all, to u, can't u see
Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean
I gave my hours,I gave you flowers, on every Sunday with a ride to the sea
I dont think u remember we wished to be together, and talk all night lying under a tree
So tell me how forgetful, u wanna be, u wanna be
Looks like u don't remember, even me
I gave my all, to u, can't u see
Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean
I wish I could show you my heart full of scars and Damn pain
I wish you could be mine for once, but forgot that's not part of game
The game u played, was fun for you, but for me it was, all tame
But you don't know how hurt i feel, coz you want understand the same
I gave my all, to u, can't u see
Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean
You know you know how much I have loved you baby, you know you know that how much I had to pay
you know you know I'll never forget you lady,
But this is all i have to say
I gave my all, to u, can't u see
Couldn't believe it all, that u, were truly mean
Brilliant as always- thank you!
Oh wow!, I find your knowlege and ease of your expanations very engaging. Thank you.
I am Afrikaans speaking - I was lost in a desert of phrase and expression, I now rest in charming pastures of appreciation.
This is very helpful; thanks for sharing!
Great video, thank you so much ✨
Excellent video! This teacher knows her stuff!
Keppie how do you do that??? "Anger is a storm". It's magical how you conjured this extended metaphor. I get (slowly) how you arrived at this because you kindly explain, but it's so entertaining and awesome how it seems to effortlessly roll out of your creativity. It is inspiring. 1:42 into your video... cant wait to watch the rest!
You're gonna have a brain hemorrhage if you hear 'Lungs' or 'Flying Shoes' by Townes Van Zandt or any of Leonard Cohen well known ones 😂
hey! im in the beginning stages of writing a song. This is quite helpful. Thank you so much.
Thank you so much! Great video and helpful exercises!
this was so helpful! Thank you so much! I'm considering your course now!
Word association is something I like to do
I really love your lessons and style. So helpful!! Thank you.
These 5 lessons shine in powerful simplicity. Thank you!
Introduction and Overview - 00:00:00
Extending Metaphors - 00:00:32
Upgrading Verbs - 00:04:14
Use Specific Imagery that Works Hard - 00:07:34
Contrasts - 00:10:43
Power Positions - 00:11:56
thank you so much! very helpful!
Excellent and inspirational! You are passionate about this and it makes all the difference!
amazing advice, and I love that you've given 5 actions to take...Makes it way less conceptual and more pragmatic. now, I'm off to do these exercises!
This is one of the BEST videos I’ve ever seen on lyrics
Thanks, appreciate the tips!
Another great video Keppie, thank you 🙏
You already helped me. I've been writing for years and I read my work and hate when I can't convey my thoughts with out correct word imagery
Honestly, I’m just starting
6:26 "hardly" and "little" are one such adverb and adjective respectively, but they're easy to miss so I see your point.
Hello there, Thank you. I appreciate the time and effort put into this. Great stuff
I'm loving the information here. Wow. I'm so excited to get started! Thank you. I'm subscribing!
Very Useful Information. Thank you so much!😉
By far the greatest tutorial ever!
Excellent lesson on song writing. Thank you. Cheers from Indonesia
Anger cries a storm
Thanks so much for this extremely useful video. It helped me out a lot in the writing process! :)
My favourite lyrics is the lyrics of Serve the Servants. My favourite song that has bad lyrics is probably something like hysteria-muse
Nick Cave's O Children line
"Forgive us now for what we've done
It started out as a bit of fun" kills me every time
We are, probably unsurprisingly, massive Nick Cave fans ;)
Gteat video, I used to attend the Harriet Schock songwriting workshop in LA off and on for a few years. You brought back a lot of knowledge and added a lot as well.😊. Thank you.
You are the best !!❤
Such good advice. I also get anxious with lyric writing in my music, which leads to avoidance. Everything you said reminds me of Sade's song Pearls. Thank you. New subscriber here.
Have you done a video about how to check that you aren't copying off an old song?
If not, could you do one?
You think of a theme and then all the words should thus relate. Also use alliteration and assonance to complement and emphasize your phrases. But a really important thing is to make the musical structure complement the lyric. Cole Porter could do this. For example in his song Night and Day there is a line ''In the roaring traffics boom''. For the words ''in the roaring traffic's '' he uses a minor chord but for the last word ''boom'' he goes down a half tone to a major chord - to great effect. Your advice re adjectives and adverbs is exactly the same as I think Gertrude Stein said to Ernest Hemingway.
9:34 that's funny cause my interpretation of this sentence was that she faced the truth as something she was looking for. She says that she found her glasses, i think the use of the verb "find" here is kind of specific. If it was only the scene of a couple in the bed, she could have said "i took my glasses". And then I interprete the other part of the phrase "you turn the light out", as the fact that the other one lives in denial. So, it joins your interpretation, meaning they are not on the same page, but it can be interpreted in a stronger way. Maybe she faces the fact that they are not on the same page anymore, and the other one chose to ignore it, so, not only she has to deal with this disconnection in her couple but she also has to deal with being alone confronting the problem.
How I interpreted it was that the one who finds the glasses finally sees the truth or sees what they've been looking for but the other turns the lights out to keep them in darkness
I knew something when i saw you.. Thats beautiful!!
Thank you so much for this I am going to try the 5 metaphors
I LOVE your channel! And YOU are fantastic. I'm inspired on my new songwriting journey. Thank you!
Thank you⭐🌹⭐
Very practical and insightful advice. Thanks 🙏🏻
I love your content, you're an awesome teacher
I love this. Very useful and helpful ❤
I have runaway stuck in my head
was listenin' to the ocean
I saw a face in the sand
But when I picked it up
Then it vanished away from my hands, dah
I had a dream, I was seven
Climbin' my way in a tree
I saw a piece of Heaven
Waitin' in patience for me, dah
And I was runnin' far away
Would I run off the world someday?
Nobody knows, nobody knows
And I was dancing in the rain
I felt alive and I can't complain
But no, take me home
Take me home where I belong
I can't take it anymore
I was painting a picture
The picture was a painting of you
And for a moment I thought you were here
But then again, it wasn't true, dah
And all this time I have been lyin'
Oh, lyin' in secret to myself
I've been putting sorrow on the farthest place on my shelf
La-di-da
And I was runnin' far away
Would I run off the world someday?
Nobody knows, nobody knows
And I was dancing in the rain
I felt alive and I can't complain
But no, take me home
Take me home where I belong
I got no other place to go
No, take me home
Take me home where I belong
I got no other place to go
No, take me home
Take me home where I belong
I can't take it anymore
But I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall
And I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall
And I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall
And I kept runnin' for a soft place to fall
And I was runnin' far away
Would I run off the world someday?
But no, take me home
Take me home where I belong
I got no other place to go
No, take me home
Take me home where I belong
I got no other place to go
No, take me home, home where I belong, no, no
No, take me home, home where I belong, oh, oh, oh
No, take me home, home where I belong, no, no
No, take me home, home where I belong
I can't take it anymore
Wow. Amazing 😂😍
I wish you could be my personal instructor.
You are so good a teacher
Thanks for making this video it really helped and I liked and subscribed 😊
This helped so much. Been listening to hella tool and Maynard Keenan’s writing is just so genius I wanted to make music heavily inspired by them.
This is a great tutorial - thanks v much 👊
Thank you i’m learning so much from you ❤
Very helpful, thanks!
This is concrete advice, with real examples, and it’s incredibly helpful. Thank you! I’m a composer wanting to learn how to write good lyrics, instead of just the music. I can use this!
I came here to get help too! I have an easiness of composing music but struggle with words for lyrics
I love this channel
This is amazing advice!!!!
I felt i made headway on the last song i wrote (Desert) after a lesson of urs…. Now i see all of the imperfections in it after this lesson! Lol thanks for the insight!
Thank you
Loved this one. BTW, “litttle” at about 5:48 is an adjective, no?
great advice
Beautiful🎉
Gord Downie had some unbelievable lyrics, "Nautical Disaster" is a good place to start! Matt Scannell from Vertical Horizon is a living masterclass as well. Check out the album Echoes from the Underground.
Hi Keppie, do you have a video on how to match chord progressions to the metaphors in your lyrics to set a mood?
“ Eating samosas that my neighbor dropped at my door” - oh yum, and now I’m distracted
Yeah - my neighbour's the best ;)
Thanks alot
Wow thank you how useful 🎉
🎉thank you,I have a hard time writing lyrics .
Subscribed 👍
'School Night' - one of my favourite Ani songs. The guitar tuning is murder though but I figured it out - feeling chuffed.
I know you're mostly right about adverbs and adjectives... but I wouldn't go to an extreme. Think of these classic songs:
Isn't she lovely
Tiny dancer
Psycho killer
Brown-eyed girl
Beautiful Boy
American Girl
Purple Haze
Comfortably numb
Born to be wild
And the most classic of all: We are never ever ever getting back together - 4 adverbs in one line! ;P
Can't help it... More successful songs:
Fast Car
Killing me softly
Despacito
Single ladies
Bad guy
Just dance
Used to be young
Jaded
High hopes
'Nobody Home' by Floyd for a highly noun based song
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I have a question. Many songwriters write lyrics based on the phonetics, syllables and consonants first and then fit a story to it. Just making the words sound nice and using language as a phonetic instrument on the melody. Do you have any videos on how to make a story with these nonsense words that sound pleasing to the ear?
( 1st like to your comment ) Maybe I am the Walrus by The Beatles 🤷 . Then again even though I've written songs ( & gotten some of them recorded ) I'm a student here , not 1 of the teachers . ♑️✍️🇳🇴🇦🇺
You don't know how to use metaphors?
This is showing you a metaphoric creation process. She is merely showing how to derive metaphors to use on your own. This is really basic stuff.
Listen for metaphors in 'Suzzane', 'Merriane', 'Hallelujah'by Leonard Cohen, or 'Lungs', 'Flying Shoes' by Townes Van Zandt
I am suggest a different video idea, one that talks about how certain words sound. @@whatabouttheearth
Any Nigerian here??
If you listen to victony you know he's a legend in using this technique.
Well I'm not from Nigeria but from Kenya and I'm a fan of victony
Anyone here a fan of John Darnielle of the Mountain Goats? He's a very prolific songwriter and as a lyricist he's relentlessly astounding.
Well - I AM! ;)
Our love was a death trap: you placed roses on bear traps and left my blood tracked in the snow. Oh I think you know.
You just changed my world hahah tf! So cool
If you’re looking for a case study is amazing lyric writing check out David Wilcox (American musician). His writing on the album how did you find me here is one of my all time favorites