The Look of Avarice - Woven Man (Demo) [read description]

One of my bands finished tracks. Figured I'd post here to see what sort of reaction I'd get. I'm aware it's not my typical content, but I just felt like sharing it! I'll get back to posting BN stuff once I find it in me to play it again :sobchamp:
I'm on vocals and guitar(s?). I did my best at mixing/mastering so don't, like, expect an industry standard mix.
Anyway, lemme know what you think!
Lyrics:
(Intro)
Let’s go!
(Verse)
“DRAG HIM DOWN, DRAG HIM DOWN”
THEY DROWN ME SO I CANNOT BREATHE
“BROKEN HEART, BROKEN MIND”
ENDLESSLY THEY HAUNT ME
“TAKE HIS ARM, TAKE HIS LEGS”
I’M FALLING FOR ETERNITY
IN THIS EVERLASTING SORROW!
“BEAT HIM DOWN, BEAT HIM DOWN”
I CAN HEAR THEM GETTING CLOSER
“NOWHERE NEAR, NOWHERE NEAR”
HELP IS NOT GETTING HERE
“NEEDLESS PAIN, AND MOCKERY’
LIKE GHOSTS WARPING MY PERCEPTION
OF THIS ETERNAL ONSLAUGHT
(Chorus)
Struggling in this hell,
Is it one of my creation?
My past, it swallows me whole
Into deeper waters
Now I know,
It’s not okay,
I shouldn’t stay this way,
But I hope that you see
I’m trying…
TO HEAL
(Verse 2)
“SHATTERED TRUST!”
“YOU LIED TO ME!”
“MISPLACED LOVE!”
“HOW COULD YOU!?”
STOP!
(Chorus:)
Struggling in this hell,
Is it one of my creation?
My past, it swallows me whole
Into deeper waters
Now I know,
It’s not okay
For me to stay this way,
But I hope that you know,
I’m trying…
TO HEAL
GO!
(chorus:)
Struggling in this hell,
It’s one of my creation?
My past, it swallows me whole
Into deeper waters
Now I know,
It’s not okay,
For you to see me this way,
But I hope that you know,
I’m just a…
WO-VEN-MAAAAAN!

[@BlueStarSixtyFour]

not bad, i like it

[@BeefBN6]

Thanks broski. Love yoru channel so that means a lot

[@MegaTomPlays]

Yo this is really good

[@BeefBN6]

thank you!

[@PBStriker101]

Yo, I DO like this! Very nice work!!!

[@BeefBN6]

Thank you!

[@philipscott6256]

☺️ Promo_SM

[@tompatterson3163]

I was waiting for something like this! This channel needs smzeus!