A good short story is a gem. This story was good. It kept my attention. It was a story that flowed, encompassing much, with magic and elegance. Thanks for keeping the dream alive.
It's a good plot and well written - obviously the most important things. But it was also free of intrusive spelling and grammatical mistakes, and the robo narrator worked well. The second half had rather a lot of exposition in it, and it would have been nice to have a more personal perspective of those galaxy-sweeping events, but that's always easier said than done.
You repeat yourself to much, most of what you say doesn't progress the story. Learn to proofread not only to check your English but to see whether or not what you are saying is illuminating a character or moving the story along. This is tedious. Good Luck, I'll keep checking in. Thanks
A good short story is a gem. This story was good. It kept my attention. It was a story that flowed, encompassing much, with magic and elegance. Thanks for keeping the dream alive.
A Positive Story - Well Timed For These Troubling Times We Live In Today - Thank You
Very good story. Very enjoyable
The three words I always dread hearing "far from over" unless it's at the end of the story which it never is and often it's repeated numerous times.
I would love to read or hear Seth's journal.
It's a good plot and well written - obviously the most important things. But it was also free of intrusive spelling and grammatical mistakes, and the robo narrator worked well. The second half had rather a lot of exposition in it, and it would have been nice to have a more personal perspective of those galaxy-sweeping events, but that's always easier said than done.
Stop saying "indomitable will". Every one of these hfy stories goes off on a rant about it.
Then write one better.
You repeat yourself to much, most of what you say doesn't progress the story.
Learn to proofread not only to check your English but to see whether or not what you are saying is illuminating a character or moving the story along.
This is tedious.
Good Luck, I'll keep checking in. Thanks