Why this vulnerable personal statement got accepted to Johns Hopkins University

"I believe in using negative experiences as a catapult that pulls be back only so I can charge forward with more force than before."
Here’s the tea on the personal essay in your college application. It has to be just that-deeply, incredibly personal. The essay is about inner you-the you they can’t get to know anywhere else in your application.
But when writing about topics that are close to home, many applicants ask themselves is this too risky? Is writing about family dysfunction taboo? Will admissions readers roll their eyes/dismiss it? Should I just write about something else? I have a lot of activities/leadership positions that I could pull from, but I don’t know if they convey as much about my personality in an original/unique way.
In this episode of the College Essay Scoop, we break down an essay that boldly embraced difficult family circumstances as a catalyst for personal transformation. Risky? Sure. Effective? Absolutely.
If you choose to write about your family, remember, the college essay should always be about you, not your family. You should approach writing this essay by keeping YOUR story at the forefront, relying on secondary characters only as a way to demonstrate your character traits, no one else's.
Timestamps
Introduction 0:00 - 1:09
1:09 - 2:45 Not wanting to tell your personal story
2:45 - 10:20 Essay excerpt and analysis
10:20 - 11:37 Why the essay worked
11:37 - 13:00 Just start writing
13:00 - 15:00 Insights from the essay
15:00 - 16:00 Connecting thread through the profile
16:00 - 16:28 Conclusion
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