FNAF: SB REWRITTEN - CH 24 (AO3 WRITTEN VERSION AVAILABLE!)

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  • Опубліковано 13 лип 2023
  • HERE IS CH 23’S CORRECTED LORE VID: • CORRECTED Ch 23’s Lore...
    Yeah, things are not looking good for Vanessa in this chapter lol
    Link to written version: archiveofourown.org/works/454... (currently updated with today’s chapter)
    Link to next episode: (will be released in two weeks - if nothing goes wrong)
    Link to previous episode: • FNAF: SB REWRITTEN - C...
    Link to full playlist: • FNAF: SB REWRITTEN (NEW)

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  • @kiwiqueen138
    @kiwiqueen138  11 місяців тому +16

    HERE IS CH 23’S CORRECTED LORE VID: ua-cam.com/video/LCSe2lB_SLs/v-deo.html
    Yeah, things are not looking good for Vanessa in this chapter lol
    Link to written version: archiveofourown.org/works/45445291?view_full_work=true (currently updated with today’s chapter)
    Link to next episode: ua-cam.com/video/zSCH4SELjDg/v-deo.html
    Link to previous episode: ua-cam.com/video/dlEEupBflcg/v-deo.html
    Link to full playlist: ua-cam.com/play/PLKMzqZUiHWUjzZj0jfJym1CTORp4rdEDD.html

    • @camber_courtney5250
      @camber_courtney5250 11 місяців тому +2

      Thanki you for touching on Disassociate Identity Disorder without portraying it as something scary and evil. That means more than you realize

  • @squiddyflip3039
    @squiddyflip3039 11 місяців тому +21

    GREGORY HE'S MOSTLY ALIVE HAUHHH HAOHGH AHH

  • @collinlane3893
    @collinlane3893 11 місяців тому +27

    Well, gregory did what no afton could.....he survived the bite...jesus this is fucking gut wrenching.
    Thank you so much for making this

  • @kayleighdriessen
    @kayleighdriessen 11 місяців тому +8

    23:09-23:40 that's some of the best acting I've ever heard, and to think this did not became canon in FNAF:SB

  • @whisper_ishere518
    @whisper_ishere518 11 місяців тому +22

    Updated subject numbers from what I can gather:
    Subject 1: DJ Music Man
    Subject 2: Glamrock Bonnie
    Subject 3: Roxanne Fox
    Subject 4: Daycare Attendant
    Subject 5: Either Freddy or Chica
    Subject 6: Either Freddy or Chica
    Subject 7: Montgomery Gator

    • @cycloneabsol9405
      @cycloneabsol9405 11 місяців тому +5

      The lore from last chapter confirmed it almost perfectly, and you are close.
      1: DJ
      2: Bonnie
      3: Freddy
      4: Sun/Moon
      5: Chica
      6: Roxy

    • @Lizzy_Stories09
      @Lizzy_Stories09 11 місяців тому +3

      Rewrite I’m listening to, answers=
      I haven’t figured out yet if Monty is a subject yet. If so I guessing he’s subject
      Subject 6=Roxy; incident. does not like to lose, talks back, and finds ways to not curse but find loop whole as substitute (September 14 2075)
      Subject 5=Chica; incident. eating disorder (December 17 2078)
      Subject 4=Sun and moon; incident. scared of unknown creature/animal: dog (April 7 2073) two people inside this subject
      Subject 3=Freddie; incident. scared of the dark/ storms (June 20th 2074) (has stage fright) O.N.N. Comet
      Subject 2=Bonnie; incident. didn’t clean the bowling alley on time (October 11th 2076) O.N.N. Bubblegum
      Subject 1=Dj; incident. Stood up for Freddie (March 21 2082), but chapter 23’s cannon lore time stamp 6:33 through 6:47 said no connection to past self (there was nothing stating where in the timeline it was posted so it can not be confirmed, nor denied) O.N.N.Snowball
      O.N.N. Means old nickname
      Unknown codes?
      1. P over 2
      2. B over 4
      3. M over 7
      4. L over 13

  • @sydney._.719
    @sydney._.719 11 місяців тому +10

    It took me 4 days to catch up with everything and I just gotta say this is FANTASTIC. I’d love what you’ve done and you should feel very proud of yourself. 😁

  • @lithaline1726
    @lithaline1726 11 місяців тому +8

    Bro, I can't handle this. The James thing continues to freaking tear me apart every time it's mentioned and I LOVE THE ANGUISH I COULD SCREAM. ahem.

    • @ceinwenchandler4716
      @ceinwenchandler4716 11 місяців тому +2

      Me too. I still can't accept that the kid's actually dead. How is Gregory going to deal with that, once he's out of survival mode and he has a moment to sit down and think about the fact that HIS BROTHER IS DEAD?

    • @lithaline1726
      @lithaline1726 11 місяців тому +2

      @@ceinwenchandler4716 therapy 🗿. I just wonder what the workers are gonna think when they show up to work at a normal hour and just see the broken animatronics, a bloody child and a mutilated one

    • @ceinwenchandler4716
      @ceinwenchandler4716 11 місяців тому +3

      @@lithaline1726 Oh, yeah. That maintenance is going to take some serious explaining.
      That's one thing I really like about this story. Unlike in the games, we're not going to walk out at the end with no sort of wrap-up. It's not going to be "yay, we survived the night, and we don't need any sort of epilogue." Not that there's anything wrong with that, but after seeing it so many times, this is way more interesting. Gregory's not going to get over what just happened in one night. What happened will take far longer than this story's duration for him to deal with... and the same goes for Bonnie. Gregory's whole family is going to be shattered by this, if they weren't already. Since for once, the killer can actually face consequences, Vanessa's probably going to be dealing with the justice system for a while - if she doesn't die by the end of the story, which frankly sounds better to me, considering how inept the justice system is. Then again, maybe it's better in the future. The other animatronics? They have YEARS of problems building up, and tonight might resolve some of them, but it'll definitely add more as well. There are so many long-term implications. And I find myself trusting that Kiwiqueen will wrap them up competently. The games almost NEVER made me think about what would happen to the characters after the game was over. (Except for game three. Springtrap should've died in that first fire. End of story.) This story is very... human, even though most of the characters are robots.

    • @lithaline1726
      @lithaline1726 11 місяців тому

      @@ceinwenchandler4716 dang that's a wall of text and a half (/lh). But I wholeheartedly agree and will die on the hill that stories should almost never have a happy "they're alive and totally not mentally scarred :D" sort if ending. ESPECIALLY for the Fnaf series. The closest thing is pizza sim's true ending where everyone is finally laid to rest. But just James' death alone is going to damage Gregory and the animatronics' mental health, especially the child's. The YOUNG CHILD'S. I think Kiwi said that they are going to expand on the aninatronics after the climax of the story, and I can't wait. Let Gregory nap, recover and get medical treatment. The poor kid. Even if it's horrible I love all the angst lol

    • @ceinwenchandler4716
      @ceinwenchandler4716 11 місяців тому +1

      @@lithaline1726 Haha. Yeah, I tend to ramble :) LIke you said, really looking forward to whatever Kiwi does next :)

  • @Thunderdransword
    @Thunderdransword 11 місяців тому +4

    That ending was so good and since Bonnie joined the party Vanny Is going to be screwed like to infinity and beyond levels of being screwed if she survives the story it’s going to take nothing short of a miracle

  • @astrumcat64.mp4
    @astrumcat64.mp4 11 місяців тому +11

    IM SO SCARED YET SO HYPED!!
    UPDATE: OHMYGOD. BONNY???? WAS RESPONSIBLE FOR WHAT HAPPENED TO????????? OH MY GOD???????? I WONDER IF GREG IS WILLING TO FORGIVE HIM :0
    EDIT 2:"SHE CHANGED TACTICS AT BREAKNECK SPEEDS"
    THIS MADE ME GIGGLE HSHSBDJD

  • @Thebluemamott
    @Thebluemamott 11 місяців тому +9

    This has been amazing I am literally in tears.

  • @BaneOfMyExistence1929
    @BaneOfMyExistence1929 11 місяців тому +16

    YIPPEE
    Edit: question
    Kiwi, will you release a reference sheet for Bonnie? I wanted to try to write the fight scene from the 22nd chapter but I don’t wanna get his design wrong-

    • @kiwiqueen138
      @kiwiqueen138  11 місяців тому +7

      Right now, my hands are still sore from editing this chapter, BUT in five days or so once they’re better, I’ll make a video displaying the reference sheets that i use for the rewrite’s designs :)

    • @kiwiqueen138
      @kiwiqueen138  11 місяців тому +1

      Update: Sorry, I had a three day long migraine after my hands were healed, so that wasted a lot of time, and now I’m just busy trying to finalize chapter 25, so I’ll probably have to put the reference sheet video on hold. Sorry

    • @BaneOfMyExistence1929
      @BaneOfMyExistence1929 11 місяців тому +2

      @@kiwiqueen138 you don’t have to apologize 😭 you work at your own pace! There no rush or anything I didn’t even realize you saw my comment-

  • @squiddyflip3039
    @squiddyflip3039 11 місяців тому +4

    37:22 I love moments like this

  • @intothewoodsatdark
    @intothewoodsatdark 11 місяців тому +5

    YESS IM SO EXCITED
    Omg no GREGORY 😭
    NO BONNIE 😭😭
    OMG JAMES
    IM GOING TO CRY
    IM SO EEEEEEE

  • @CatLover3509
    @CatLover3509 11 місяців тому +11

    WAS THAT THE BITE OF 87!?

    • @Lizzy_Stories09
      @Lizzy_Stories09 11 місяців тому +2

      I was going to say it was the bite of 83 instead but Gregory survived so actually yes 👍

  • @lexxblep-groundzero1369
    @lexxblep-groundzero1369 10 місяців тому +2

    I love this so far Bonnie has clearly been manipulated his grief and pain of being abandoned is well all coming upon him
    It's clear that the chip was just enhancing his anger getting rid of his sympathy and just erasing his apathy towards everybody That's the reason he's so confused All of his true emotions are coming up to him The fact that he misses his family
    The fact that he feels horrible how guilty he feels for what he was trying to do
    Just like with everyone else the chip brings out your worst traits and it's clear that Bonnie's worst trait was anger and abandonment

    • @lexxblep-groundzero1369
      @lexxblep-groundzero1369 10 місяців тому

      Oh my god hearing Bonnie realizing what he had done is horrible 30:10-34:44

    • @lexxblep-groundzero1369
      @lexxblep-groundzero1369 10 місяців тому

      I'm getting mother knows best from Vanessa and Bonnie's relationship

  • @Glitch_Shift
    @Glitch_Shift 11 місяців тому +4

    Oh! I’ve been waiting for this masterpiece to rear its beautiful head!

  • @Rainbow_arts3
    @Rainbow_arts3 11 місяців тому +8

    Hey kiwi? Remember when you finished the steven universe rewrite you said youd never do this again?

    • @Kit_the_bip
      @Kit_the_bip 11 місяців тому +2

      LOL you still remember that ? 😂

    • @Rainbow_arts3
      @Rainbow_arts3 11 місяців тому +2

      @@Kit_the_bip I mean... I do watch it like... once every 1 or 2 months.... it's good!!! I am a really big fan of the original series... and I crave content!

  • @camber_courtney5250
    @camber_courtney5250 11 місяців тому +3

    Im cross faded and im so stoked. Its going to be awesome

  • @swiftyoooo
    @swiftyoooo 11 місяців тому +4

    NO VANNY YOU BCSJAGASH LET MY BOY GO GRGRGRGRRR

  • @Alice_The_Person3707
    @Alice_The_Person3707 11 місяців тому +2

    WOOOO LETS GOOOO!!

  • @forestkitsunerosa8514
    @forestkitsunerosa8514 11 місяців тому +3

    I wish there were some comic images in it. It is still col any way.

  • @syraxthedragonninja7087
    @syraxthedragonninja7087 11 місяців тому +1

    This whole rewrite made me paranoid....AND I'M LOVING IT!!!!!!💖😅😨🥰❤

  • @Lizzy_Stories09
    @Lizzy_Stories09 11 місяців тому +4

    I figured out sun and moon:
    Rewrite I’m listening to, answers=
    I haven’t figured out yet if Monty is a subject yet. If so I guessing he’s subject 7
    Subject 6=Roxy; incident. does not like to lose, talks back, and finds ways to not curse but find loop whole as substitute (September 14 2075)
    Subject 5=Chica; incident. eating disorder (December 17 2078)
    Subject 4=Sun and moon; incident. scared of unknown creature/animal: dog (April 7 2073) two people inside this subject
    Subject 3=Freddie; incident. scared of the dark/ storms (June 20th 2074) (has stage fright) O.N.N. Comet
    Subject 2=Bonnie; incident. didn’t clean the bowling alley on time (October 11th 2076) O.N.N. Bubblegum
    Subject 1=Dj; incident. Stood up for Freddie (March 21 2082), but chapter 23’s cannon lore time stamp 6:33 through 6:47 said no connection to past self (there was nothing stating where in the timeline it was posted so it can not be confirmed, nor denied) O.N.N.Snowball
    O.N.N. Means old nickname
    Unknown codes?
    1. P over 2
    2. B over 4
    3. M over 7
    4. L over 13
    I love your rewrite!!!

    • @cycloneabsol9405
      @cycloneabsol9405 11 місяців тому

      You clearly like the lore as much as I do. And so, I feel like you would quite like this lore document I've been working on! I have every chapter's lore laid out clearly, with an analysis of it when there's anything worth talking about, as well a timeline, short character bios, and lingering questions down at the bottom.
      docs.google.com/document/d/13cv5vH3MLErtsKX_7d_D6WB4ZJBWIHDYqvvpW-eNXkg/edit

  • @swiftyoooo
    @swiftyoooo 11 місяців тому +3

    the twins are sun and moon omg

    • @swiftyoooo
      @swiftyoooo 11 місяців тому +1

      waaaaaaaaait this just clicked in my brain

  • @matteov3195
    @matteov3195 11 місяців тому +2

    32:24 *W H A T!?*

  • @Alice_The_Person3707
    @Alice_The_Person3707 11 місяців тому +2

    I was just about to ask when act 4 would be lol

  • @cycloneabsol9405
    @cycloneabsol9405 11 місяців тому +4

    Quick question (if this isn't too spoilery):
    Will we ever hear the full, unredacted version of Victor's journal?

  • @malinok4889
    @malinok4889 11 місяців тому

    YAY HUGS!

  • @swiftyoooo
    @swiftyoooo 11 місяців тому +1

    i want to squeeze bonnie hes a little guys hes just a little guy grgrgrgrhgr

  • @phoebeanjanakoch2008
    @phoebeanjanakoch2008 11 місяців тому +1

    Vanny is so screwed right now 😈

  • @muffincat8634
    @muffincat8634 11 місяців тому +1

    yess 🎉🎉🎉

  • @christopher11gamer
    @christopher11gamer 11 місяців тому +2

    i wonder if bonnie will forgive monty🤔 i would if i was bonnie!

  • @felipeamezquita7827
    @felipeamezquita7827 11 місяців тому +1

    Lets go

  • @sparkleheart14
    @sparkleheart14 11 місяців тому +1

    Yay

  • @mjtubeme
    @mjtubeme 9 місяців тому

    So i've binge watched this whole thing in about a week. I think I have a problem...

  • @cyanide_crow7970
    @cyanide_crow7970 11 місяців тому +3

    I'm not the same person I was before seeing this

  • @marcsuraci7759
    @marcsuraci7759 11 місяців тому

    Headcanon voice for Glamrock Bonnie: Michael McKean ( Chuck McGill )

  • @christopher11gamer
    @christopher11gamer 11 місяців тому +2

    kiwi i wonder if peepaw willy will come bac-

  • @whisper_ishere518
    @whisper_ishere518 11 місяців тому +1

    YOOOO

  • @Tarpick
    @Tarpick 10 місяців тому

    What’s music man doing

    • @kiwiqueen138
      @kiwiqueen138  10 місяців тому +1

      DJ can’t follow them because he’s too big, he can’t hear what’s going on, and he can’t go outside to warn anyone, so all DJ can do is just sit in the lobby and worry about his friends.

    • @Tarpick
      @Tarpick 10 місяців тому

      @@kiwiqueen138 just finished all of the videos that you uploaded so far and I got to say what Gregory does in the end is genius because now moon can see vanny

    • @Tarpick
      @Tarpick 10 місяців тому

      @@kiwiqueen138 also I loved Steven universe future rewritten

  • @lahmacunseverbiri
    @lahmacunseverbiri 11 місяців тому

    Annnnnnnd i am here 🦥

  • @dylanwoods1470
    @dylanwoods1470 11 місяців тому

    I have a new idea for you

  • @christopher11gamer
    @christopher11gamer 11 місяців тому +2

    first