4 Common Clichés to Avoid in Your Writing
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- What clichés should you avoid in your writing? Glad you asked! Here are four very common ones you should consider working around.
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So... wattpad.
Sound Boom lol
Echo Jinx though the site is best used for sharing stories between friends
Lol
lol I use wattpad to publish my stories and i don't completely hate my writing plus its not a fanfic nor a fiction story
Yeah kinda.
The cliché I truly _hate_ is the old _bump on the head that causes memory loss_ crap, usually followed up by _a second bump on the head that causes the memory to return._
That is the dumbest _ever_ way to create conflict in a story, and to me it signifies a very bad writer. That shit goes straight into the garbage bin!
Ohhhh yeah that's a good one too. I've definitely seen that a lot.
Paul Gross Memory loss is quite important to my story. BUT it's not due to a bump on the head.
Basically the general public on the planet it takes place on had their memories erased by technology invented by a secretive society. Their memories were replaced with false ones so they believe that they are following this secret society. (The technology is powered by a ring found at the bottom of a lake. The ring also managed to give both the MC and the antagonist telekinetic powers).
So yeah, you can have memory loss. But bumps on the head are an overused way to do it. :)
Gordon Barnes - yeah the Sci-Fi / fantasy use is quite different because it has to do with technology / magic. Quite separate from real-world brain injuries.
In the real world a head trauma that causes memory loss, even a temporary loss, is extremely serious. Any neurologist or neurosurgeon would agree, and it comes with a host of other problems that are far more serious and debilitating than just memory loss.
And in the elderly, memory loss is a truly sad thing, something I know from personal experience. A much-loved family member who confuses their own daughter for a cousin, and who speaks of the 1950s as if it was today is painful for everyone concerned.
The abuse of memory loss in fiction using the bump-in-the-head method occurs too frequently in the romance genre as a cheap tool to create conflict between lovers. I can't stand that crap!
Paul Gross hahahaha!so true!!! I just hate it!!! I've seen quite a few movies and series(I live in India and here, getting a bump on the head which leads to memory loss is so common in plot!! it is like a normal thing!I'm just sick of it! People with delicate head lol!!😂
Paul Gross i see this cliche everywhere
Haha, I'm in my 50s. I looked in the mirror this morning and said, "I have grey hair and . . . and a ZIT! God has a sense of humor."
I'm in my 30's with grey hairs and zits. I'm not so polite when I talk to the mirror XD
NaomiPhoenix oh trust me, being a shy extrovert is such a comedy starter!
This video is kind of a relief to me, cus I never did any of those clichés.
The Metal Worm Same. I've never done any of these things and have done the things that you should do.
Nice!
Same
The Metal Worm thank god I saw this cause I was sort of leaning to a really awful cliche and I’m glad I can avoid it now before it’s too late hahah
"Be magically cured and their disability goes away."
That pretty much describes all the endings to Disney movies.
what disney characters have disabilities?
chrstina
Apparently every Disney character because they act like mannequins
But what if thats the character's goal throught the story? To find a cure to an illness or disability? Is it still wrong then? Would i still have to keep my character with said disability or illness and send the message that disabled people cant accomplish their goals in life?
@AbnormallyNormal thanks for the advice. Though i should have mentioned that im more of a fantasy writer than a rl writer. Thank you though
@AbnormallyNormal I agree it all depends on the story. I guess if the point of the story is to cure the illness or disability and it makes sense in the context of the book then it'd probably be ok 🤷🏻♀️ like imagine every child in a certain village was born without the ability to speak (because of a potion or something) and there's a tyrant monarchy that keeps a lot hidden away from the people. Maybe the protagonist goes on an adventure and finds the cure or reverses the effects of the potion or whatever. Technically that could work and it's make sense 🤷🏻♀️ or maybe the protagonist doesn't find the cure and the adventure gives them some other benefit like freedom from the tyrannical government or something.
That last one triggers me SO MUCH and I'm not even disabled! I can only imagine how insulting that must be for those who are!
It is very, very aggravating for sure.
Yes, that’s why in my book I want to do something different. You see it’s a world full of creatures each with their own power, which they call their special skill.
Then there’s the Scarlette, a creature with wings who spends nearly the entire book trying to learn how to fly, with no luck.
Fallicity, the strongest creature in the group and their protecter gets killed and all hope is lost. Scarlette and her friend rises up and defeats the villain and saves all the creatures.
And then at the very end, another creature tells her that Fallicity, the most powerful, impactful creature of the group, never got her special skill either. At that moment she smiles, looks up at the sun as it rises to a new day and vowels head that she will be like her.
My story isn’t about someone defeating evil and saving the day.
It’s a message, because even if you’re at a disadvantage, doesn’t mean you can’t shine.
DJDCAL
It is, indeed.
Insulting? Meh. Just dumb.
i have done the mirror thing every morning telling myself how great i am sorry i have to start my morning on a good note
Same.
Mocha y’all funny😂😂😂
I really love your videos and even though you don't know the 13 year old Austrian girl that is writing this comment, I want to say thank you! Have a good day!
“Depression is a character flaw”
At the beginning of my book I’m writing my main character wakes up in the woods to the burning of bodies and buildings and doesn’t fully remember how she got there apart from little snippets and she manages to get back home and remembers. Is that alright because she suffered from retrograde amnesia which is forgetting stuff before you sleep or blackout
I used to start my novels with the MC waking up and looking at herself in the mirror for many years because I thought it was normal. (I was reading a lot of wattpad books when I was in middle school.) Of course, normal doesn't equal good but... I don't know why my weird middle school self did it, maybe it was the bad influence most wattpad books are^^ Thanks for reminding me to never do it again.
you do wattpad too??
@@moony1770 Yes
I kinda did this thing about the "you complete me" one and the mental illness cure one combined, but I'm trying to make it VERY clearly unhealthy to everyone but the protagonist.
The story switches perspectives every chapter between 3 people (Naomi, Mallory and Jeffrey). Mallory is a childhood friend of Naomi, and is appalled at Naomi's obsession with Jeffrey as he is toxic and so is her behavior. She ends up calling out her out. Naomi is claiming that Jeffrey, their sudden relationship (which she jumped into) is all true love and that she completes him, he cures her depression and all of that. Mallory then rushes off to go tell Naomi's mother (who has no idea Naomi has a boyfriend and is pretty strict), much to Naomi's dismay. And believe me, Naomi does eventually learn why you should never act so dependent.
What if my book starts with falling asleep?
Actually, theres a story in the bible where a disabled man was unable to work because wheelchairs were not invented so he became homeless, this was during Jesus's time on Earth. Jesus had cured him to live a normal life
I think thats a good way to do dat
Ok literally your videos help so much and i'm embassrased to say ive used these clichés before 😁
Ha ha it's okay, I've used some of them too in the past. They wouldn't be clichés if people didn't use them often!
I only describe my characters by another character insulting them and other pieces of dialogue
At least you know now.
my first draft started with my protagonist mugging someone after jumping off a roof .......yeah
Natalie Wood this comment gave me deja vu
my pov character is clearly mentally ill and traumatised from events in her childhood, but it isn't really a big plot point at all - she just gets spacey and scared and sad very easily. i reference her past therapy and she explains her trauma (childhood kidnapping) to another character, but i don't really directly address it. do you think this is okay, or would readers want more resolution on her mental health? as someone who suffers myself i wanted to show that its just part of her life, not directly related to the plot, but now i'm unsure ! thanks for your videos btw ava!
helenarambles My protagonist is similar. Shes faced alot so her mental health isnt all there. So I understand what u mean!
I don't think you need a resolution to anyone's mental health because there isn't a real neat resolution IRL! So I like the idea of showing that it's just a part of her life-and no, it doesn't have to be directly related to the plot. :)
thank you so much for saying the thing about disabled people 💙 it's damn true, we don't just get magically cured overnight and it's so frustrating to see that in fiction. like we don't already have enough issues fitting in irl 😂
What kind of a world do we live in that Divergent is the only book to execute something properly...
I did the first one only because dreams are reoccurring throughout the book and part of the supernatural world
One cliche that I see ALL the time is a more focused version of your last one. The character is dead in his/her loved one's arms, then the hero/heroine starts crying and THEN when a teardrop his the dead person's face, they wake up all better.
2:20 Question that entered my mind: Writing a book where the MC is given nightmares by a supernatural being that tells him he’s literally the Anti-Christ. Book starts with MC waking up panting because he just woke up from the nightmare. Then, he wills himself to sleep only for the reader to experience a time where the nightmare lasted longer than it ever has. Would this work?
I mean I'd say yes but clearly I'm not an expert on writing so idk
I feel like the exception to the "waking up" cliche is if your story has an unearthly setting of sorts, where one's daily routine is out of the ordinary for one reason or another.
I think a nice exception to the third one was from 'Hellblade'.
The protagonist, Senua, suffers from severe psychosis, which is exacerbated by trauma. The support she gets from her lover, Dillion, doesn't cure her illness, but reduces it.
When she can't be with him anymore, it gets worse. The narrative from that point on is her having to learn to let go of him and cope on her own.
I agree. I think if the main focus of the narrative is overcoming psychosis then it's totally fine for that to happen. I think the real problem is if it becomes a Deus Ex. Senua went through some shit to fight her demons...
Haven't seen Hellblade, but there are definitely ways to work around problematic tropes for sure.
Bayaz from Joe Abercrombie's First Law trilogy. :D
I'm so sorry but I can't tell if you're Male, Female, Non-Binary, or what.
she's a woman.
'thats a lil diffrent' lmao im dying laughing
Someone I know broke the "waking up in the morning" cliche unknowingly with the protagonist waking up to escape from his house from an intruder who broke in when he was asleep.
The “Magical cures” cliche reminds me of a role-play I was in a few years ago lol. (I didn’t know what Wattpad was, but I had Roblox 😂)
I might’ve been in middle-school at the time, so I didn’t know too much about writing, but I managed to find a group with reasonable* characters/players. I was basically a mute side character-a dragon specifically-who was burdened by an over abundance of smoke, originating from their “broken” fire-breathing ability. However, in the end, after some people left and we concluded the main conflict, the main character “cured” my smoke-breath after randomly finding magic or something. I was pretty confused and disappointed, and I ended up leaving soon after that... It just felt wrong to continue on, especially since my character’s life wasn’t all that endangered 😅
My manuscript starts with waking up, but he wakes up out of paranoia of who's knocking on the door early in the morning. Is that fine or no?
As I've told a few other people, it's impossible for me to say whether or not something works in your manuscript without looking at it, so I recommend working with critique partners because they'll be able to tell you whether or not it's working!
With the completing each other think, that only works in A Court of Mist and Fury by Sarah J.Maas.
agreed.
Yeah it does (but I didn't really like Feyra)
Beginning of my very first book,
(note, it wasn't the first beginning)
"No! No!!" Steven shouted.......
My solvings in my story for these:
1 - Describing MC in the mirror
"I was met with my brother's light blue eyes, which we both inherited from our mother."
"[Love interest]'s hand brushed through my jet black hair that I always let fall onto my shoulders."
2 - Starting with MC waking up
Uhm I didn't solve this but I did introduce MC's brother and sorta told how bad the mom was
3 - Curing MC
In my book, I'm going to try to write the love interest to introduce more problems for the MC.
4 - Magic cure
Not doing it because MC grew up in a household where he basically sold his body- It left PERMANENT body issues and fear of older men and women- Strangely, not enby people
I like your work.
But, the room sound is distracting.
Your voice by itself is enough.
Try listening to NPR... no room ambience at all.
✌
That morning I woke up to the sound of birds chirping outside the window. I stretched my arms, tied my golden hair into a ponytail and climbed out of bed. As I walked past the mirror, I caught a glimpse of my ocean-colored eyes, sparkling brightly with the sun streaming from outside. My pale skin always looked so soft in the morning, my thin lips defined against my freckled face.
I showered and went to make myself some coffee, along with scrambled eggs and buttered toast. When I turned on the television, my heart stopped at the news report that was broadcasting. There was a massive explosion in the downtown area. Dozens of orphans died in the tragic accident.
Tears streamed down my blue eyes and I cried as I munched on my buttered toast. How horrible. Many kids died. Nobody was there to save them.
Suddenly, a magical elf burst into the kitchen, shattering the window. I startled. Frozen in my seat, I stared as it muttered an incantation, pointing a long-nailed finger at my face.
"You are now the savior of this world," it said, a wild grin on its face. "Go after them, kiddo."
With my soft, delicate hands, I reached up to my head to feel my ears---they were long and pointy now. I felt powerful. Strong. Alive. Without a second thought, I jumped from my chair and sprinted outside. Those poor orphans suffered a tragic death, but I was still alive. I would do everything in my power to seek revenge.
With the elf's powers, I jumped into the sky and rocketed through the air with lasers coming out of my puckered asshole. Those responsible for the explosion would pay back for what they did.
For I was Elf Girl, seeker of revenge.
Thank you for reading my beautiful story. I shall await my Nobel Prize for Best Literature in the Universe.
I've... sorta done the mirror description thing (don't shoot! Let me explain!). However, it's because she's about to go into a job interview and the building has a glass door, so she has a last-minute check. It also shows more of her personality than her physical appearance, particularly her insecurities, which are kind of a major theme throughout the book. So, I think it's justified. Or maybe I'm just contrary.
The only example I know of getting heard is The Secret Garden (by Frances Hodgson Burnett). There's a boy called Colin who has some problem, but is treated more seriously than in really is, and he's locked in house (a horrible way to get better). And in the end, when he goes out and tried to walk, he secceds. Not in the first attempt, but still. Unlike what you said (people can't be happy if they are sick), I think the message here is different: Don't give up on your dream. Try your heardest. Dpn't let other tell you can't do a thing.
Okay but I describes myself in the mirror everymorning and night caz I somehow feel like I look so different from yesterday so....
Crazy Rich Asians have millions of "cliches" that are not told in different ways or does not have plot twist that could make it different from the usual "cliches" but both the book and movie are hits sooo...!?!?
I really don’t like Clichés,it gets rid of creativity and originality I’ve seen so many Stories like this.
The hitchhikers guide to the galaxy starts with the ordinary wake up scene but its followed right with the protag lying in front of a bulldozer to save his house so...that works to I guess
I think the one thing that i hate most its when it comes to fantasy novels, they say totally unique races, then you look and its goddamn Elves, Dwarves and Orcs, like actually take time and make your own races.
Just wanted to add a tip in writing for anybody reading this: I find that if I’m having trouble starting a chapter. Ex. I was planning on having my MC in a later chapter waking up in a strangers house after falling unconscious in the middle of the street (yes i know a little cliche) but I found that every time I started writing it, it felt forced or out of characters or just plain awkward. So advice I give to you, start your chapter at a different point in time. So, I tested this out. I started my chapter with my MC already woken up, dizzy, not really sure when they woke up, or when they got the strangers name of the house they are in. I started the chapter with my MC in the middle of a conversation they can’t even remember starting. And I found it felt more natural, and I could build more into the chapter. So if you ever find that your chapter beginning is stale, start the chapter at a different point in the fictional worlds time.
You made me fall asleep just listening to these crazy boring tropes.
thank you SO much! I will surely take your advice. 💜
THE LAST ONE AMEN
What if the bad guy temporary gets rid of the disability, to get the protagonist to join him, but when the protagonist doesn't join him he makes the disability come back. Is this ok?
I have no disability myself, so I'm not directly concerned, but it looks interesting... It kinda emphasize that having a disability isn't the worse thing that can happen to you, and that's getting rid of it isn't the protagonist 1st priority. And that you can be a good, happy person with a disability, "cure" isn't worth it if it asks for too many sacrifices.
I don't know, but it seems to be quite of a positive message from my point of view !
Des Livres et des Loutres oh thanks 😁 I thought it was a good idea myself, but I wanted to make sure.
I think that it's OK if you execute it nicely. I would emphasize the fact that only the antagonist can cure the disability and that even if the protagonist wants to get rid of it he realizes (he doesn't have to realize it immediately) that there are greater things than his health.
Actually it's not cliche at all
I would probably make the character extremely happy then destroy him when he gets it back
But make it more like an illness not a disability because people with disabilities can live happily
The Metal Worm well I was gonna make be missing a arm or leg
Hahahah Ava... you are super awesome.... I just love the way you give your opinions with those cute expressions.haha... big fan..😍😍
I see it in wattpad, in romance, the girl is so pure and weak and her step father tried to rape her, and the man she falls in love with is so handsome and tall and rich and he can put a bullet in someone's head just like that and also he has to be a mafia boss. God save me I hate these stupid short stories just move on people! Like I mean EW! Gross
Question on 3 is it okay to use this cliche but not complete the main character and help them deal with the mental illness they suffer by having their love interest save them.and is it okay to use this but build it up first?
You’re really cute. Why do I have a thing for women with short hair?
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Can you tell me plz
What is synopsis and how it's write perfect
My book is about a dog befriended a bear so at least the first one shouldn’t be a problem. Still good video.
2:29 i needed to hear this! i wasn’t satisfied with my characters writing and i now know why, thank you so much!
For my main character it starts with her doing the first day of school since the next day she is being put up for adoption
what do you think about Pixar's writing?
SOMEONE, PLEASE EXPLAIN HOW TWILIGHT GOT SO POPULAR SERIOUSLY BELLA IS SUCH A UNREALISTIC FEMALE CHARACTER
escapism + immortal beings. i actually think bella is pretty realistic - she's an average girl?
I personally didn't relate to Bella but I do have friends who did/do so I guess it depends on the age group and who the person is
The mirror scene in Fairest also works cuz Levana was looking at her true self.
Oh Lord have mercy. Manic pixie dream girl/guy. My protagonist has autism but her relationship doesn’t change that. In fact, her love interest goes out of his way to understand her.
Nice :)
1:33 this is what i always wrote when writing english in high school. Lol
who remembers Rio, yeah, it broke cliche # 3
Male characters (at least in movies and shows) can suffer from being told "she's your other half". I think too many people IRL also think along the lines of "I'm empty unless I'm in a relationship"
I kinda did number 1 while avoiding number 2. thankfully it wasn't a serous novel or anything.
If you can't describe the main character how is the reader suppose to know what they look like? also, does this count for body language too?
Never said you can't describe your main character, just said probably don't do it with them looking in a mirror for the reasons I mentioned in the vlog.
I have a describing mirror bit but it's after she's been running through the woods away from her friends killer and this is the first time she's seeing herself with all the mud and dirt and blood everywhere...I think that's okay?
Sim Junkie that sounds okay, specifically if she gets shocked from gashes, cuts or bruises and blood ruining her pretty face
I'll be honest, it 100% depends on execution and the only ones who will be able to tell you whether or not it's working are your critique partners!
I used the mirror to show how my character felt about herself
One of the ways i think is a good way to discuss your characters appearance would if they had something that made people stare. Example "Starting my new job i noticed my new co-workers were staring at me. I already knew the reason. They were staring at...." I enjoy novels like that
I said he's looking at himself cause he woke next to a river and he wanted to wash his face, and tada! He saw his reflection. and I added things that showed just how messy he was (and not jusy because he woke up).
Your words were so helpful thank you
Wait, my story began with the character waking up, however it was told by the point of view of a different character because she noticed my other character's odd change in behaviour. Is this alright or is it too clique?
I am curious for you're feedback.
I sympathised with each time she cringed.
Some of the chapters of my novel start with the characters waking up. But does it really mean that they (the chapters) are cliches? Those scenes aren't super important to the plot but they help to understand the daily life of those characters and in some of them; small details about the relationship between two MC
Laia Skovsted It’s mostly a book beginning with waking up that’s the cliché. Having a chapter begin with a character waking up can be okay, but I’d caution not to do that too many times in the same story, as it can start to feel repetitive.
I hate when the female has to have to be in love!!!!
When I first started writing again a few years ago, the first novel I worked on was like cliche 101. Like it started with the MC waking up and going to shower and looking in the mirror to go make coffee and meet the beautiful new next door neighbor who was now the love of his life and it only took 3 chapters for that to happen. I read it again recently and I laughed so much.
Ryan Medina Yeah. Some of my WIPs, are so bad that I think someone else wrote it. My writing has much improved since my beginning 4 years ago.
Ha ha ha that's so great that you can recognize it and laugh at yourself now, though!
*speaks of point 4*
Jojo part 7:
My story starts with the villain, and slowly goes into hinting about the protagonist, Who features in the second chapter. Is this cheesy or an okay idea?
DeathDefyingStar 1000 No. That's great. My story has the same idea, where a member of the antagonists group literally ending the world, and then introduces the main character in the second chapter. Though, make sure there is a reason to have it transition to the main character, there has to be a connection in the first chapter, like mentioning him specifically or something.
Divine Hazard OK. I'm gonna have to do some editing. Thx for the advice!
Uh...I mean, I can't really say whether or not that works without looking at your manuscript, so I recommend getting some critique partners!
Interesting idea!
what about the stranger that comes in to someone's life and changes everything for the better. like the manic pixie dream girl or rebal who everyone thinks is bad except for the protagonist
Yeah, that's a pretty common one too. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't.
Mean themes, and ablest
This is like so real
I literally have no clue how to start writting a story, but your video really inspired me to do so.
Since I was little I always dreamed about being a videogame programmer and creating my own games. Now that I'm studying something related to programming my dream is getting closer, but one idea has recently shown up in my mind that I haven't stopped thinking about it...
The story of the game of my dreams; It may sound a little too childish to call it that way "the game of my dreams" but I do it for a reason, which is, that it's literally the game of my dreams.
back then when I was a child I used to have dreams about characters that later on turned into my "imaginary friends", although I couldn't see them awake, I used to get really excited to see them asleep. Since then I have created a world inside my head, a world with big events that started a canvas for a story, a story I would like to picture in a videogame.
I was worrying too much about getting better and better at programming, but it didn't crossed my mind that the story is as important.
I won't give details about the ideas I have for the story but I think they're pretty big and I'm really worried about me being overambitious.
(Sorry if my grammar isn't great, English is my second language).
If anyone wants more details to give me a proper advice, just ask for them.
God loves you :D
I hate clichès.
thanks lady.
I thought about Divergent when you said look in the mirror before you mentioned it
Yeah, it's a pretty well-known exception!
I just scrabbled through my piles of childhood stories and I think the one most common cliché in them was the fact that the MC was constantly bullied, and then the bullies become his friends. I mean, I would be fine with it in 1-2 books, but that plot took up the majority of them. 🧶 Wish I was more creative.
LOL !
I’m really proud I didn’t use any of these cliches in my story, even though I think my book is really bad and I’m afraid people will hate it. I want to get my brother (a published author) to read it, but it’s about magic and stuff and I feel like he might think it’s childish or immature. I did write it to be geared towards young readers, but not super young. Any tips on getting over my fear of what other people will think about my book?
Very helpful video, thanks!
Also, I was thinking of Divergent just a you said it, lol
Regarding some of the cliches...can you get away with it if the first scene depicts the protagonist waking up in an unfamiliar place? Like a hospital? In somebody else body? In my story I guess it's okay if the protagonist also describe his apperance so that the reader understands why the character panics?
so I'm trying to write a book and there's a small prologue before the first chapter. But one of my protagonists is waking up to the first day of school. The inciting incident happens when she ditches school with her friends a few hours later. Is that okay or should i change it?
My MC is based off me. I, like him, have Aspergers. He though has two more things that hold him back. Those two he overcomes but the Aspergers was tricky. He and I asume to much, need assurance, don't get certain social ques and fixsate on one thing in a conversation. So yeah tricky.
My first novel begins with my character awake in bed waiting for her caregiver. Somehow I don't think that's the same.
I came here to see what not to do because I recently started really buckling down and writing my first book and figuring out what I want to do with these characters that I’ve had since i was young and I have thus far successfully avoided each and every one of these and I am Very proud of myself
I don’t think it was the intended purpose, but waw- this video made me feel so much better about my own writing! I didn’t realise such things could be so prevalent as to become cliched in writing circles.
Another one I have come across repeatedly is characters with purple, or otherwise bizarrely unnatural eye colours-what the hell is that all about? Is it a Manga thing?
Besides-who goes around inspecting the colours of people’s eyes anyway? It’s a weird detail to zoom in on.
Mirror description made me cringe so hard. I've seen people do this a lot. I did it when I was younger. It's so embarrassing.
My story starts with my protagonist waking up underground in what is essentially her unmarked grave, in the middle of nowhere. i think i beat it 😂
The reason waking up works in your novel is because having a gun to your head isn't a normal way of waking up.
a good way to describe what your character looks like is to say "she moved her long, straight, blonde hair out of her face" or to say "her blue eyes watered of sadness"
Just out of curiosity...for number one: What if you are in the third person and the narrator is describing it in a general manner?
What is your age
I hate the whole love curing depression thing. It's just kinda not true.
I’ve used my imagination to describe my characters. But never for a story or a beginning of a story. I draw my inspiration from whatever I am doing or listening at the moment. Then let my imagination sore. Great video. 😀👍
So basically, if it just doesn't make sense, don't but it in your story I guess.
Nice to know I'm not planning to do any of these in my book! Oh and what do you think is a GOOD way to describe your protagonist? I know the mirror way is crappy hahaha
In my book it starts with her waking up but out of fear of her ...step-father? foster dad?