Sorry to say it, but it's seeming like something is missing as its not sounding like your previous narrations. I don't know why but it might not be the best but the story has a good description and I like It. Well it seems at some points that you are in hurry. Well I am no one to judge but I have heard better than this from you
Boht sohne andaz ch kahani snaon li shukria
Dharti Di hik ch khoni punjaba, ਏਹ ਬੁੱਕ ਜ਼ਰੂਰ ਸੁਣਾਇਆ ਜੇ
I don't know about story but Lahore de bare sara kuj pta lag geya ki kidda da hunda si
Sorry to say it, but it's seeming like something is missing as its not sounding like your previous narrations. I don't know why but it might not be the best but the story has a good description and I like It. Well it seems at some points that you are in hurry. Well I am no one to judge but I have heard better than this from you