Beta read and crit No Name Shattered Part B of Chapter 1-2 by Dontrike

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  • Опубліковано 29 гру 2024

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  • @aven78
    @aven78 8 годин тому

    Author here, I could have sworn I cleared up Elana's thoughts and italicized them, per another reader's suggestions, and tossed out the quotations. Either I missed those or gave you the wrong one.
    Rhys's teasing about Elana being into other women was the "Elana looked Phy up and down" and now that I hear your questioning it's clear that something more needs to be clear about Elana's sexuality.