How does the control panel p of the cannon not have anyone working it? How did she get into the ship to try and turn off the cannon. Story sounds like the control panel is on the outside of the ship. Not feasible. Continuity is key.
@darrylblackshear710 Thank you for the Criticism. OK, just a story. But, there are STORIES, then there are Stories and lastly, there are stories. Like Diogenes with his Lampe, I keep looking for the first. My criticisms are not meant to be ascerbic and vitriol so much as much as they are suggestions where a Tale might benefit from modification. JOYEAUX NOEL.
Good Story
How does the control panel p of the cannon not have anyone working it? How did she get into the ship to try and turn off the cannon. Story sounds like the control panel is on the outside of the ship. Not feasible. Continuity is key.
OK, the final battle in the VACUUM of Space. How do Dragon Wings work in a vacuum ? Very poorly thought out. Bad story ! Ten Point Scale: -30/10.
Obviously thy ride the solar winds or some other BS! LOL, It’s just a story.
@darrylblackshear710 Thank you for the Criticism. OK, just a story. But, there are STORIES, then there are Stories and lastly, there are stories.
Like Diogenes with his Lampe, I keep looking for the first. My criticisms are not meant to be ascerbic and vitriol so much as much as they are suggestions
where a Tale might benefit from modification. JOYEAUX NOEL.
Hell, Didn’t know that the Galactic Council was Mu.slim, as they’re the only known people who behead innocent victims. Wow.