Writing The Perfect Story For Your GCSE Exam

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  • @user-jy5yn2od7q
    @user-jy5yn2od7q 3 роки тому +278

    Schools need more English teachers like you.

  • @WhosParx
    @WhosParx 2 роки тому +68

    If anyone thinks they might need this:
    25 Language Devices: Defined & Explained!
    1. Pathetic Fallacy
    Is when the weather or the atmosphere describes the mood.
    For example, when the weather is rainy people are sad and depressed
    2nd example, the dark night could symbolise something supernatural like 3AM Satan etc…
    2. Personification
    Is when a non-human is given human qualities.
    For example, the tree is waving to John as drives away.
    3. Simile
    When you are comparing two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’
    For example, his facial vision looked like a falcon’s eye
    4. Metaphor
    Is when you are comparing two things with is or are
    Example He is an orc
    5. Extended Metaphor
    Pick a metaphor and explain how --- > turn in to an extended metaphor
    Metaphor --- > Life is a rollercoaster. Now turning into extended metaphor add explanation so, Life is a rollercoaster you don’t know when you will be at the top or at the bottom, it will all happen in an instance, at the greatest heights you will be at the greatest heights and at times it will crash, but every day is never the same, just like in a turn in a Rolle coaster is never the same.
    6. Oxymoron
    2 opposite words side-by-side
    Example, the small giant
    7. Juxtaposition
    You explain an oxymoron.
    The small giant tip-toing trying to reach the top shelf, however, his small arms and puny fingers prevented him from grabbing the bar of jam.
    8. Symbolism
    Is when objects represent a meaning.
    For example, moon and the star represent Islam.
    2nd Example, if you get a priest you will think someone died.
    In Macbeth the dagger links to death.
    9. Semantic field
    Is where words are linked to an idea.
    For example, PPE, 2m and Hand Sanitiser, Head of Year link to COVID.
    10. Irony
    Is when events in the text surprises the characters. Something not expected!
    Mr Birling offering a 1000.
    Scrooge changing his nature.
    11. Rhetorical Question
    Question does not require an answer
    12. Hyperbole
    Is when you hype, when over-exaggerating.
    I am going to eat the whole restaurant.
    13. Assonance
    Is the repetition of the vowel sound.
    I am too cool for school. Oooooo
    14. Alliteration
    Words in a row begin with the same letter.
    15. Sibilance
    Is when words in a row have the s letter or the s sound
    Example: the snake was slowly hissing
    16. Euphemism
    Is when you say something in an indirect manner.
    He is not with us anymore.
    17. Emotive Language
    Is when the writer makes the reader feel emotional. By making them angry.
    18. Onomatopoeia
    Words describe the sound
    Boom bang skirr pop
    19. Ruel of 3 / Power of 3 / Triplets
    Words or phrases in a row describe something (3)
    The table is black, hard and wide
    20. Facts/ Stats
    Uses evidence to support their facts.
    50 % of the students prefer using email rather than social media .
    21. Plosive
    Reptation of harsh sound
    Words such as 'P' 'D' 'B'
    22. Zoomorphism
    Is when you give a person animal features.
    Example John barked at me / John shouted at me.
    23. Opinion
    24. Repetition
    Language Device and Structure.
    Is when the writer uses the words repletely to create an effect.
    Where is being repeated and why is that important
    25. Noun, Verbs, Adjectives, Adverbs
    Structure
    Flashback - when you go back in time ,3 days ago etc..
    Foreshadowing - when the writer gives clue about future ‘my heart was beating fast’
    Zoom in - focus on one thing for example ‘pen’ , ‘specific character ‘
    Zoom out - normally used to talk about setting
    Dialogue - when the character speak ‘hey there !’
    New character
    New setting
    Change in tone
    Short sentence - to build up tense
    Long sentence - add details and slow down the narrative
    Short /long sentence - may show importance in both
    Shift in focus - talks about object then talks about another object for example ‘pen’ to ‘table’
    Cyclical structure - similar stuff happening with beginning and ending
    Juxtaposition
    Extended metaphor
    Pace
    List
    Pov
    Overall tone
    Chronogical order
    Climax
    Repetition
    Links
    Mood , pathetic fallacy 1. Abhorrent/Heinous (means bad)
    2. Euphoric/Jubilant (means happy)
    3. Melancholy/Morose (means sad)
    4. Indignant (means angry)
    5. Swift/Rapid (means fast)
    6. Colossal/Gargantuan (means big)
    7. Minuscule/Microscopic (means small)
    8. Bemused/Befuddled (means confused)
    9. Astute/Shrewd (means smart)
    10. Feeble/Decrepit (means weak)
    11. Dash (means run)
    12. Plunge (means jump - may not always fit so be careful how you use it)
    13. Cordial (means nice)
    14. Lackadaisical (means lazy)
    15. Paradoxical/Outlandish (means strange)

    • @mynameispie8442
      @mynameispie8442 2 роки тому +1

      Ur a hero😊

    • @WhosParx
      @WhosParx 2 роки тому +1

      @@mynameispie8442 ive just updated it

    • @mynameispie8442
      @mynameispie8442 2 роки тому

      @@WhosParx I really needs this for tommrow. I’m hoping for a 6

    • @WhosParx
      @WhosParx 2 роки тому

      @@mynameispie8442 same i need it for maths further maths and physics in my school i have to get a 6 in 6 subjects

    • @mynameispie8442
      @mynameispie8442 2 роки тому

      @@WhosParx I just need a 7 in math and science for maths physics and chemistry

  • @bmsbeauty9408
    @bmsbeauty9408 3 роки тому +88

    He's got a good sense of humor as well. I liked it! I want him to be my teacher for sure.

  • @chewypiano7194
    @chewypiano7194 4 роки тому +172

    Could you maybe go through a 40/40 answer and tell us which bits got great amounts of marks

  • @saimfarooqi3887
    @saimfarooqi3887 3 роки тому +64

    Imagine being that one person who disliked this video. You deserve a sub!

  • @adityachandra7772
    @adityachandra7772 3 роки тому +48

    i swear u make english look so much fun then reality

    • @MrEverythingEnglish
      @MrEverythingEnglish  3 роки тому +3

      Thank you

    • @taod01
      @taod01 3 роки тому +8

      yes man this guy gives me hope about English but everytime I go to my English class that hope is crushed

    • @munazzahmir6242
      @munazzahmir6242 3 роки тому +2

      @@MrEverythingEnglish should have corrected him your an english teacher!
      it's *than not then

    • @theultimateamazing3722
      @theultimateamazing3722 3 роки тому

      ikrrrrrrr

    • @muqitasid
      @muqitasid 2 роки тому

      @@munazzahmir6242 you're*

  • @chloebradley3481
    @chloebradley3481 3 роки тому +232

    Me watching this 45 minutes before my mock

  • @seaeroh188
    @seaeroh188 4 роки тому +56

    You’re literally the best English teacher out there, these videos are a lifesaver. Is it possible to use this plan for the description question? If not could you make a video please on planning for the description question.

    • @MrEverythingEnglish
      @MrEverythingEnglish  4 роки тому +10

      Yes you can use the same plan for that question, you can also use the same plan for transactional writing- thanks for the kind words 👍

    • @seaeroh188
      @seaeroh188 4 роки тому +3

      Mr Everything English 🙌 and what tips would you have for us if we run out of ideas/points to write about?

  • @frostedflakes3982
    @frostedflakes3982 3 роки тому +27

    I got one of my re sit exams tomorrow. Thanks man

  • @phyllisb-chronicles3358
    @phyllisb-chronicles3358 3 роки тому +14

    I love your style. I’m a Business teacher who has taught English for a few years. I was not sure if I could deliver my English lessons in the same way I do Business ones. Having watched you I will go ahead and be relevant to the kids I teach. Great job.

    • @MrEverythingEnglish
      @MrEverythingEnglish  3 роки тому +3

      Thank you for such kind words- teaching is 70% human/people skills, 30% content. Learning how to deliver the message is as important to what you will deliver imo- good luck with your lessons!

  • @poppop9448
    @poppop9448 4 роки тому +21

    Just found this channel and it’s really helping me with my mocks. Thanks for this man.

  • @nilemaali6665
    @nilemaali6665 4 роки тому +19

    Jazzak Allah Khair. Found this video really helpful. I'm an distance learning student who needs to get all my assignments in for evidence. Never liked English as hated the airyfariness of the marking, really appreciated your structured approach!

    • @MrEverythingEnglish
      @MrEverythingEnglish  4 роки тому +5

      Thank you for the kind words- I hope my videos on here and Instagram are beneficial for you

  • @nikkyshineshine5605
    @nikkyshineshine5605 Рік тому +2

    I have been reading, and reading to understand how start my story in exams. Thanks to you I now know how to start and even progress. Thank you so much.

  • @ami7670
    @ami7670 3 роки тому +12

    ah your name will be in my duas🥺❤️

  • @th3Vexnoc
    @th3Vexnoc 3 роки тому +16

    Your amazing, I need a teacher like you in school. Keep It Up Man 🙂

  • @mel.jane84
    @mel.jane84 2 роки тому +8

    Hey if possible could anyone mark this for me or give me a rough idea of a grade? Thank you :)
    It was a serene sight as I woke up. The clouds danced above, filled with laughter as they jumped along the skyline. As I lifted myself up from the marble ground below, I felt an instant sharp pain through my chest. I glanced down and shuddered at the sight. A scarlet, gaping hole was clear in the middle of my chest. Gasping, my hand began to shake by my sides as I could not tear my eyes away from it. I forced myself to shut my eyes, to slow my breath. Silence stood around me. It was like everything had come to an end. I opened my eyes again, taking time to truly notice where I was. There was no one. Not a single person walked upon this desolate land. A hole in my chest. No people. A serene surrounding. I was…dead. Death was abhorrent to me. I could not accept my fate so easily. Surely not! Nevertheless, my future was awaiting me, at the top of those mountainous stairs. I would meet my father, my God who I had aspired to throughout my life.
    Heaven was awaiting me.
    Immediately, I began to ascend the stairs I noticed the beauty of a picture began to appear. All around me, I watched as nature began to grow, form, to reach a new height of incredible ability. Nature had been a loved thing of mine. When I was most awake, most present in the moment, every sense of nature converged into a single euphoric joy. It was as if there was a feeling passing between each living thing, a bond that appeared so tangible and blended, a melody beyond the range of ears but available for the heart. As each leaf twirled in the wind, a part of me did too. There was something so irreplaceable about it. It was the very essence (besides God) that made up my being, that made up millions of other beings - the glue of the universe. My fate was not so doomed, if I remained with both God and nature, I would feel complete. Only a few dozens of stairs were present on the staircase. All I had to do was climb just a little bit more and my glorious death would be worthwhile.
    My chest had a burning sensation, even though the circumstance of my death had long passed, and I was in a place of peace now. A shivering breath rocked through my body, but I had completed the stairs now. I had made it. In front of me appeared a glistening gate. A lengthy piece of glimmering and glowing gold wrapped and wrapped around each rail, drawing me to them. I hobbled over to the gate; a broad smile spread across my face. It was unbelievable, incredible, astonishing! I was here at the gates of heaven. My hand reached out to pull the gate open, but an apoplectic voice howled at me. I could not understand a single word it said, so I reached toward the gate, hoping this time I would be let in. Again, the tempestuous voice shook the very ground I was standing on. If I could not enter… There was only one other place that lay in the afterlife.
    Hell was awaiting me.
    What indignant heaven that turned out to be. I had done well all my life. I helped the poor, I prayed to my god every night, I was kind to others, I greeted all with respect and interest. All my life, my entire service was dedicated to God, my holy father and even he did not want me. Plodding down the stairs, I glared at the face of nature. There was no longer a euphoric joy: only an animosity felt towards it. The only feeling that passed between us, was one of bitterness and disgust. The clouds mournfully gathered in the sky, and I suddenly felt my teeth chatter. The leaves blustered as the clouds and the sky began to conjure mighty wind, causing me to stumble down these staggering stairs.
    Why me? What had I done that was so erroneous for God to send me to the lamentable depths of hell? I finished my descent on my stairs; I was right where I had awoken only a mere hour ago. However, this time a polished ebony gate stood with a piece of flame ruby wrapped up each rail. Trembling, I tiptoed towards it feeling every bone shake in my body. A morose fate this was, and I was to accept it. The gates began to creak open, even though I was several metres away. I breathed quickly in, and I walked towards those dreadful doors. There was nothing I could do now.

    • @thewaffle2570
      @thewaffle2570 2 роки тому +3

      Dude it's so good! I suck at creative writing, any tips?

    • @blues3483
      @blues3483 Рік тому

      im using this for my exam tommorow for question 5 english gcse ty

  • @elizaclouds
    @elizaclouds Рік тому +3

    I have a paper 1 mock tomorrow and this video has helped so much. Thank you!

  • @chidelovesyou
    @chidelovesyou 4 роки тому +55

    New subscriber, this is so helpful 👍🏽

  • @aumtaz
    @aumtaz 4 місяці тому

    thanks, this got my response from 20 marks to 30 marks, an insane jump from only watching this once

  • @madiha6282
    @madiha6282 3 роки тому +7

    im literally trying to watch all his videos to understand English language for my mocks in January, lets just say im putting all of my trust in him. I hope this doesnt let me down.

  • @mm-ob9bw
    @mm-ob9bw 3 роки тому +6

    Thank you sir, this has been incredibly helpful and has raised my confidence. Inshallah I do well in my mock tommorow.

  • @theultimateamazing3722
    @theultimateamazing3722 3 роки тому +4

    it is indeed bulletproof. Thank you so much

  • @liangchen4679
    @liangchen4679 Рік тому +2

    just memorise stories

  • @moanees8866
    @moanees8866 4 роки тому +4

    Famm this guy is tooo sick unoo

  • @owl9098
    @owl9098 2 роки тому +3

    watching this two hours before my english language paper 1 gcse

  • @pll4l1fe
    @pll4l1fe 2 роки тому +2

    i have my english language moc exam today , this video has really helped me thank u

  • @dhruvesharma911
    @dhruvesharma911 2 роки тому +1

    This is the best video i have seen in this topic on youtube

  • @MatthewSedgley
    @MatthewSedgley Рік тому +1

    You sir are a life saver

  • @ihtishamulhaq900
    @ihtishamulhaq900 4 роки тому +33

    When are your gcse predictions coming out

  • @nathankaiser2511
    @nathankaiser2511 Рік тому +3

    Fantastic session brother, thank you for sharing your thoughts Amen 🎉

  • @leonrowley619
    @leonrowley619 3 роки тому +1

    honestlly you are the best teacher please do more like this

  • @ikrahmahmood527
    @ikrahmahmood527 4 роки тому +4

    Mad
    Such a helpful video thanks

  • @berfinyigit8749
    @berfinyigit8749 3 роки тому +3

    Lesson was really helpful for gcse. Thank you ❤️

  • @selecto3215
    @selecto3215 4 роки тому +4

    I aced the test today thanks for your help!

  • @victorialiao4695
    @victorialiao4695 2 роки тому +1

    Thank you! I am struggling on my gcse exam, but your video is very helpful!

  • @kashifalvi4000
    @kashifalvi4000 Рік тому +1

    simply impressive! I learned a lot

  • @yuh6646
    @yuh6646 3 роки тому +1

    This guy is what we need in my school🤧🤧🤧🤧

  • @zawadulayman7802
    @zawadulayman7802 Рік тому +1

    me watching b4 the day of my olevels:')

  • @hollowknightshade4208
    @hollowknightshade4208 3 роки тому +1

    Paper 1 tomorrow :O
    Thanks for the vid

  • @byebye9304
    @byebye9304 Рік тому +2

    Hi,
    I have my GCSE Language Paper 1 next Monday. I was wondering it I would get in trouble for using someone else’s story ( this plot). I love it but won’t it create concern by the exam board if couple students have a similar plot? My boards id edexcel pearson. Thank you sir, I love this plot.

  • @humzdaza6753
    @humzdaza6753 3 роки тому +10

    Got mocks in 7 hours 😳 hope i do well!

  • @LePrincee
    @LePrincee Рік тому

    Jazak Allahu Kulli Khairan Akhi you really helped me a lot.❤️

  • @santhoshlal27
    @santhoshlal27 Рік тому +1

    Thank you very much for this video! Ishaan.

  • @iqra665
    @iqra665 3 роки тому +3

    Sir, I see you took the idea I wrote about ages ago in my GSCES.

  • @touresaran76
    @touresaran76 4 роки тому +1

    that's amazing well explained thanks very much 🙏🙏🙏

  • @Elfd267
    @Elfd267 4 роки тому +6

    The question said "a time when YOU felt abandoned". Are you allowed to change it to "somebody" in the exam or was that just for an example?

  • @purplerainred
    @purplerainred 2 роки тому

    Should the story also have a rising action climax and resolution

  • @lovelight7005
    @lovelight7005 Рік тому +1

    Thank you.🌷

  • @maryamashrafiftikhar2920
    @maryamashrafiftikhar2920 3 роки тому +5

    New subsciber, this is so helpful thank you

  • @blondedsan
    @blondedsan 2 роки тому +1

    Thank you so much, this was an extremely helpful video.

  • @amk4606
    @amk4606 Рік тому +1

    POV: me watching it 1 day before my mocks

  • @mrhammadmossop1988ul-haq
    @mrhammadmossop1988ul-haq Рік тому +1

    I've got a bit of a problem with writing my story

  • @OJADS160
    @OJADS160 10 місяців тому

    Very good teacher

  • @ami7670
    @ami7670 3 роки тому +5

    alhamdulillah this has been so helpful

  • @fastoven
    @fastoven 9 місяців тому +1

    Me watching 2 years before my exam

  • @applechan2804
    @applechan2804 3 роки тому +2

    Great teaching!

  • @puddin6424
    @puddin6424 Рік тому

    Now this is poggers 💯💯💯

  • @SilviaBobokova
    @SilviaBobokova Рік тому +1

    Hi, could you please clarify, that if the topic says "Write a story about a time YOU felt abandoned" I don't need to refer to my own experience? Can I use imaginary person instead? Thank you.

  • @fahmiakhter7531
    @fahmiakhter7531 2 роки тому

    Best of best!!! Loveed it❣❣

  • @kyracheshire541
    @kyracheshire541 3 роки тому +2

    I am having to do an equivalency test. The last question is where I chose between a photo (describe + story) or a title (narrative), I’ve been advised to always chose the photo as it’s easier. Any tips to utilise the stuff within this video for a photo question?

  • @nazar5219
    @nazar5219 3 роки тому +3

    20 min gang before exams, where u at

  • @muradhayat1346
    @muradhayat1346 Рік тому +1

    how long should be the ideal length of a story .and a great lecture by the way

  • @saverasyed2080
    @saverasyed2080 3 роки тому +3

    Thank you so much! That same question somehow came onto my mock test and i used the plan of your’s(Ellie ) and started my story. Tried to include everything that you told me so hopefully i should get some good marks.. But seriously you are such a great teacher!

    • @MrEverythingEnglish
      @MrEverythingEnglish  3 роки тому +1

      Thank you, hope it went well

    • @sidra7771
      @sidra7771 2 роки тому +1

      what was the plot for the end of your story?

    • @saverasyed2080
      @saverasyed2080 2 роки тому +1

      @@sidra7771 It has been over a year now so i cant really remember it clearly but i wrote around 4 paragraphs each focusing on different aspects eg - Pg1:Sudden awakening in a coffin. Pg2:Memories reflecting back
      Pg3:Trying to escape
      Pg4:Failure
      I also got a grade 8 at the end of the day soooo happy with that!💕

    • @sidra7771
      @sidra7771 2 роки тому

      @@saverasyed2080 that's great! Thanks x

    • @justsomeone5660
      @justsomeone5660 Рік тому

      so using this plan will secure me good marks right? please confirm since I have my exams soon! 😭

  • @selecto3215
    @selecto3215 4 роки тому +1

    Thank u this might just save me from my test next week

  • @gmcraig
    @gmcraig 2 роки тому +1

    Bro you really helped me
    Thanks

  • @sandrarr5434
    @sandrarr5434 3 роки тому +1

    This was really helpful thanks

  • @leilakazemipourchenijani4218

    Thank you its prefect
    it is possible to write whole story

  • @mrhammadmossop1988ul-haq
    @mrhammadmossop1988ul-haq Рік тому

    How awesome is this

  • @markbardett4557
    @markbardett4557 3 роки тому +1

    Just 1 decent punctuation for each paragraph?
    How many language and Structural devices for each paragraph?

  • @xexpert_gamer2506
    @xexpert_gamer2506 2 роки тому +2

    Me watching this 45 minutes before my gcse

  • @robertcristache9538
    @robertcristache9538 3 роки тому +1

    your channel is helpful

  • @Lk.598
    @Lk.598 3 роки тому +1

    What is a good way to interpret the question?

  • @jamesmdennis2286
    @jamesmdennis2286 3 роки тому

    Very helpful video, thanks.

  • @nasreenakhtar7591
    @nasreenakhtar7591 Рік тому +1

    Hi I'm studying gcse language subject I wouid like some help on writting a story paer 1

  • @precious.a.xx0
    @precious.a.xx0 3 роки тому +1

    Very helpful👌🏾

  • @Amber12327
    @Amber12327 4 місяці тому

    can you please do a video where you plan and write the story i have learnt all your methods and paragraph structures but i feel like im not writing properly so i never get high marks i have my gcses in less then a month 😣😣

  • @SwiftBBC
    @SwiftBBC 3 роки тому

    Brilliant Video thanks so much!

  • @charliedowey9358
    @charliedowey9358 4 роки тому +1

    Wow great help! keep this up please ur fantastic

  • @CodeMusa
    @CodeMusa 4 роки тому +2

    hi can you do predictions for jekyll and hyde, romeo and juliet and love and relationships pls.

  • @88im
    @88im 2 роки тому +2

    Me watching this. Hours before my actual GCSE 🤣🤣🤣🤣

  • @FireFitt
    @FireFitt 4 роки тому +3

    thanks

  • @schweezlenewsvan3683
    @schweezlenewsvan3683 2 роки тому +1

    You got any ideas over a primary school memory’s that is interesting and non fictional?

  • @FireFitt
    @FireFitt 4 роки тому +4

    Sir, how many times have ur predictions been correct

  • @madinahussain8186
    @madinahussain8186 3 роки тому +2

    can ur descrptive story be youreslf first person not a character

  • @houseflyer4014
    @houseflyer4014 4 роки тому +1

    could you analyse kamikaze and my last duchess.
    you're videos are really helpful! thanks in advance

  • @uniquesomar1738
    @uniquesomar1738 3 роки тому +1

    but what else do you say after should you flash back

  • @isaamhud5504
    @isaamhud5504 4 роки тому +1

    Helped alot thanks👍 Also, do you get paid from youtube? If you do, how much bro??

  • @ellaH730
    @ellaH730 2 роки тому +1

    GCSEs might be cancelled again this year and ive got mocks next week, youre really out here saving me sir 😂

    • @fatifatou6704
      @fatifatou6704 2 роки тому

      My teacher told me that is not true

    • @ellaH730
      @ellaH730 2 роки тому

      @@fatifatou6704 Its quite possible with this new variant

  • @balkhan16
    @balkhan16 Рік тому

    Wish he was my teacher.

  • @tialopez9455
    @tialopez9455 2 роки тому +1

    kindly help me how to answer Paper 1 Q3 Q4 and Q5 please? thanks

  • @mrfreerunners1
    @mrfreerunners1 8 місяців тому

    Sir, hope you are well :). Would you class repeatedly practising P1& P2 question 5's as a form of effective exam practise ? many thanks :)

  • @zakiachoudhury1854
    @zakiachoudhury1854 2 роки тому

    Fantastic videos

  • @Billy-zm9oe
    @Billy-zm9oe 2 роки тому +1

    Does this plan work with Edxcel or not

  • @stefansalvas1854
    @stefansalvas1854 2 роки тому +1

    did you do this in first or third person the story

  • @bmsbeauty9408
    @bmsbeauty9408 3 роки тому +2

    NEW subscriber :)

  • @applechan2804
    @applechan2804 3 роки тому

    Would you make more video on how to prepare iGCSE English B? Many thanks! Subscribed

  • @rachelnshi
    @rachelnshi 3 роки тому +2

    ily

  • @amreendana
    @amreendana 4 роки тому +1

    Hello
    Would a punctuation be counted as a language or structure technique?
    Many thanks in advance

  • @jbgamz3783
    @jbgamz3783 Рік тому

    Hi, I was wondering what should you change for the describing her surroundings part

  • @neenaxoxoxo4216
    @neenaxoxoxo4216 3 роки тому +1

    Soo helpful