IELTS Essay (7-band), with analysis and rewrite to band 9

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  • See a test takers sample essay that scored a band 7. The essay is analyzed according to the 4 criteria:
    Task response (6)
    Cohesion & Coherence (6.5)
    Lexical Resource (7)
    Grammatical Range & Accuracy (8.5)
    Total: 7
    Task: The cost of flying has decreased significantly over the last decade. This has made overseas travel much more accessible. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.
    You can also see how I rewrote this essay to get it to a band 9. See the essay at:
    writetotop.com/ielts-toefl/ie...
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КОМЕНТАРІ • 13

  • @Coxalogia
    @Coxalogia 16 днів тому +1

    Great material and content. I've been studying for the BAR exam and your videos are valuable. I will certainly recommend to other students.

  • @foodmove3128
    @foodmove3128 18 днів тому +3

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    • @WritetotheTop
      @WritetotheTop  14 днів тому

      Congratulations. Good job :) I'm glad I could help.

  • @mohammademran1098
    @mohammademran1098 16 днів тому +1

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  • @ArtemHahauz-nm7bk
    @ArtemHahauz-nm7bk 17 днів тому

    Sir Adam, I have a punctuation-related question: Could you, please, explain how to use curly quotes?
    Thank you in advance!
    Best regards from Ukraine!
    Looking forward to more videos regarding the topic of crafting decent essays!

    • @WritetotheTop
      @WritetotheTop  14 днів тому +1

      " " are generally used for direct quotes (i.e., repeating what someone said or wrote elsewhere). It tells the reader that the words in the quotes are a direct copy of the original.
      Is this what you had in mind?

    • @ArtemHahauz-nm7bk
      @ArtemHahauz-nm7bk 14 днів тому

      Excuse me, but not really.
      I meant to ask what the difference between straight and curly quotes lies in, and how to correctly use them.

    • @Selma7909
      @Selma7909 9 днів тому +1

      The two main types of quotation marks:
      Curly quotes are often referred to as smart quotes. That’s because they curve toward the text you’re quoting. This is done automatically in most word processors.
      Straight quotes are what they sound like - straight, vertical marks without any indication of which word or phrase it’s surrounding. When you look at most keyboards, you’ll see straight quotes instead of curly quotes

    • @ArtemHahauz-nm7bk
      @ArtemHahauz-nm7bk 9 днів тому

      But please tell me how to make smart quotes in Google docks
      Thank you so much for the response!
      @@Selma7909

  • @manuelgordillo520
    @manuelgordillo520 17 днів тому +1

    as a teacher that I was, the worst thing you can do when going over an essays is cross -- deleted in order to making an art of work instead of backing up the student. Were I to get my essay with such a disapointed crossing-deteled nearly all my words I would problably give up learning a Language. The best method is not how teachers want to read. Being perfect is a deterrent. So , let the student some slack. Deterrent reviews must be get ride of teaching. Dishing it out. One thing is back up reviews and other is rewriting the essays by teachers.