Critique of the Week | January 3, 2025

For this Critique of the Week, we'll move quickly through the oldest submissions in the queue. Tune in, share your thoughts, and learn a little in the process!
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[@simonelavigne8618]

I kind of like the last line because it hints that something bad is going to happen because of the deluge.

[@PoetStaley]

in the second poem of the critique, i thought "the tiny green, blue, red peas / awash with salt polish" was referring to sea glass

[@Mayknee]

thanks for the critique this week! i find it difficult to "hear" slant rhyme even when it's pointed out - i tend to think "but those don't sound like each other at all" - how do i get better at this, or is it something mostly innate?

[@simonelavigne8618]

Transfer is about the conception of a baby. That is why she was ecstatic. Maybe the people with hurt necks were watching from their cars. The embryos that got away were too small for names. Sainthood was a reference to not doing the things that she was doing in the car that icy morning. Then I think she is being rewarded for being good. Her mother , the grandmother of the baby, is an angel and helped make the pregnancy happen. I do not think that adding the word “is” would be good before the scepter. I am confused about several points, but i think that poetry is often confusing to those who do not get every single detail.