Really useful! Much easier to prune these redundancies while editing rather than worrying about them while writing, since all of us will unavoidably use these in conversation now and again without even thinking about it.
I understand that it's probably better to describe the feeling of something but wouldn't the character know she's blushing if she knows what blushing feels like? It's like saying the wind blew through my hair. Can I see it at all times? No. Do I know what it feels like? Yes. All that being said, sometimes we feel like we're blushing when it's not even noticeable to anyone else.
Thank you, this video helped me with my essay because I was writing many words without saying anything. My goal was to write 250 words as was the requirement for my homework.
So helpful thank you as I'm working my first self edit of my first novel now! Thanks so much looking forward to searching more of you editing videos. I must say that you ROCK! ;)
I can't believe how many unnecessary "downs" I had in my WIP! Genuinely a bit horrified as there were about 100. I also searched for all the "thens" and found 100 in 50k words! I decided to delete them all in one go. So far, I haven't noticed their absence during re-reading.
@@electrosonicnebula Yes probably true. I have a few "then" but I sue them sparingly; usually when I want some drama... e.g. "Then, the bomb's fell" (or something like that)
2:00 - I struggle with this one. The only time I include these is if the POV character assumes something about another character. I don't know whether or not to keep them, but I also look forward to another set of eyes reading through my novel because what the character assumes may be obvious.
I don’t know why, but that I held the mug in my hand made me laugh. How do you know I wasn’t holding it with my foot? 😂😜 I don’t know, feeling loopy...
Circumlocations are really something to learn from. They can honestly be something that is so useful to shortening your sentences and make them flow way better!
Wouldn't it sometimes be a good thing to intentionally use vague words? For example, if you meant for the narrator to sound unsure so their confusion/nervousness/fear/etc. would come through clearly to the audience.
Great video but I just wanted to add that when someone say's "He screamed." It isn't always obvious if they are angry and for all I know he could be in terror or he could scream out of shock, so if you go rid of angerly you don't really know what emotion he is feeling just based off of that.
How to edit out the "to be" verbs in the following paragraph: The British ocean liner Titanic was a large ship that thought to be unsinkable. The Titanic made its first in 1912. It was scheduled to sail from England to New York The ship was about 1,600 miles from New York when it collided with an iceberg in the North Atlantic. This collision caused a gash 300 feet long in the ship's hull. It took two hours and forty minutes for the Titanic to sink. The worst part was that there were not enough lifeboats for everyone. Tragically, about 1,400 people died that night. Due to many lives lost, the sinking of the Titanic is considered to be the deadliest peacetime, maritime disaster in modern history. The Titanic has undoubtedly become one of the most famous ships in history. Their memory is kept alive by numerous books, folk songs, movies, exhibits, and memorials.
@@cbrockbishop1566 she has like a very slight accent. I could tell when she says "about" which sounded like how Canadians say it. I like it though, it sounds nice.
I always wonder how early novelists knew all this. Jane Austin, for example. Or did they simply speak that way and modern language has introduced a lot of nonsense...?
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Really useful! Much easier to prune these redundancies while editing rather than worrying about them while writing, since all of us will unavoidably use these in conversation now and again without even thinking about it.
Simple, straight to the point, and helpful.
One of the most helpful videos on line editing, like, ever! Thanks for your tips! :D
So happy it helped!
I know most of this but it's a great reminder. This is the best short video on line editing I've seen.
Great, as a new writer I love the way these tips encourage a more creative choice of words.
I have tried watching other videos on this subject and deleted them in disgust. Your video says it all. Thanks.
Thanks, that was concise and helpful.
I love your elocution.
I love how Reedsy videos condense so much information/advice in short videos!
This was super helpful! Your voice is clear and pleasant to listen to - plus, I learned great tips about editing. Thanks so much for posting!
I'm beginning to think editors are worth every penny.
Yeesh, you're good! Best videos on UA-cam. Direct and well-delivered. Thank you.
I understand that it's probably better to describe the feeling of something but wouldn't the character know she's blushing if she knows what blushing feels like? It's like saying the wind blew through my hair. Can I see it at all times? No. Do I know what it feels like? Yes. All that being said, sometimes we feel like we're blushing when it's not even noticeable to anyone else.
Thank you, this video helped me with my essay because I was writing many words without saying anything. My goal was to write 250 words as was the requirement for my homework.
So helpful thank you as I'm working my first self edit of my first novel now! Thanks so much looking forward to searching more of you editing videos. I must say that you ROCK! ;)
I'm half way through drafting a verse novel so this (and all your videos, really) is solid gold -- thank you
I can't believe how many unnecessary "downs" I had in my WIP! Genuinely a bit horrified as there were about 100.
I also searched for all the "thens" and found 100 in 50k words! I decided to delete them all in one go. So far, I haven't noticed their absence during re-reading.
That sounds really strange. "Then" is also perfectly functional. So surely you'd have to go case-by-case to see which ones are superfluous.
@@electrosonicnebula Yes probably true. I have a few "then" but I sue them sparingly; usually when I want some drama... e.g. "Then, the bomb's fell" (or something like that)
This was awesome and amazingly helpful for reference! Thank you for making it!
Shaylen, you are awesome. I love all of your videos. Thanks.
This was really really really helpful!
Excellent video, thank you!
Thanks for telling me what i already knew but didn't see them for the damage they were.
2:00 - I struggle with this one. The only time I include these is if the POV character assumes something about another character. I don't know whether or not to keep them, but I also look forward to another set of eyes reading through my novel because what the character assumes may be obvious.
Excellent set of tips! I will recommend this to my adult ESL student.
I don’t know why, but that I held the mug in my hand made me laugh. How do you know I wasn’t holding it with my foot? 😂😜 I don’t know, feeling loopy...
Thank you so much Shaelin. This is so helpful
Very much appreciated. Took a lot of notes.
Excellent material. Does anyone know where to take an online course/certificate in editing writing?
Udemy
Ugh I’m so guilty of circumlocution! Thanks so much for this video. You give the best writing advice.
Hello Reedsy. Where's the list of filter words that was mentioned to be linked in the description? Thanks.
Google filter words and there will be plenty of articles and videos.
Circumlocations are really something to learn from. They can honestly be something that is so useful to shortening your sentences and make them flow way better!
So helpful thank you!
Could you please make a vedio shows how to make summary for articles
You really know your subject. Are you a robot?
Maybe am maybe I'm not :)
👍Thanks for the video. It's helpful.
"For the video" is redundant. Glad I could help 😂
brilliant!
Thanks 🌎
Thanks for the video.
Wouldn't it sometimes be a good thing to intentionally use vague words? For example, if you meant for the narrator to sound unsure so their confusion/nervousness/fear/etc. would come through clearly to the audience.
Mmm... Possibly.
:D
Superb👏👏
Very nice
Thanks
Great video but I just wanted to add that when someone say's "He screamed." It isn't always obvious if they are angry and for all I know he could be in terror or he could scream out of shock, so if you go rid of angerly you don't really know what emotion he is feeling just based off of that.
‘Circumlocution’! 🤔🤷♂️ but, apart from that goof, really useful vid - thanks!
I had to trim a lot of wishy-washy bits from my essays. 'But', 'although', 'at the same time', 'however', 'on the other hand', etc.
What if some of these are meant to create voice?
It's usually best to create voice through the strong words in your piece, rather than creating voice by leaving in weaker words!
Helpful!
Thank you
Circumlocutions?
Thanks!
please refer some books for copyeditors
How to edit out the "to be" verbs in the following paragraph:
The British ocean liner Titanic was a large ship that thought to be unsinkable.
The Titanic made its first in 1912. It was scheduled to sail from England to New
York The ship was about 1,600 miles from New York when it collided with an iceberg
in the North Atlantic. This collision caused a gash 300 feet long in the ship's hull.
It took two hours and forty minutes for the Titanic to sink. The worst part was that
there were not enough lifeboats for everyone. Tragically, about 1,400 people died
that night. Due to many lives lost, the sinking of the Titanic is considered to be the
deadliest peacetime, maritime disaster in modern history. The Titanic has
undoubtedly become one of the most famous ships in history. Their memory
is kept alive by numerous books, folk songs, movies, exhibits, and memorials.
Yep I use them when I talk. Did you see my short story? Give her access!
It's etcetera, not ec, right before 5:00.
Mandela Effect
Bob Igor is hired as a writer.
Irrelevant question but.. are you Canadian?
Yes she is.
How could you tell?
@@cbrockbishop1566 she has like a very slight accent. I could tell when she says "about" which sounded like how Canadians say it. I like it though, it sounds nice.
@@mr.berimbolo827 LOL, shes my kid, so i was not aware she has an accent! I guess i do too
@@cbrockbishop1566 wow no kidding?! You must get some good reads then. And yeah I bet you got an accent too. Embrace it!
I hope this helps me
Modi gets access.
❤
I feel sad how the editors get paid very less despite having lot of content knowledge
They're circumlocUtions!
It’s time to fix my stomach. It’s like eating sulphur.
I prefer to let my editors do all the work. 🤣
you make me laugh, thanks!
I always wonder how early novelists knew all this. Jane Austin, for example. Or did they simply speak that way and modern language has introduced a lot of nonsense...?
Break the other leg, or any limb would do. Keep doing it, until his todger is broken too.
Stop the extra awkwardness plan. It sucks and there’s no point to it.
Please, "circumlocutions" NOT "circumlocations'.
Weak two beavers.
STOP TRYING TO DEDUCT OUR WORD COUNT!!!!!! ;)
Don't keep seeing the nose ring. Don't keep seeing the nose ring. Don't keep seeing the nose ring. FUCK! I keep seeing the nose ring!
weirdo
good pints. but speaking is poor...sorry but just heard it number of times to understand
Amazing, very helpful. Thanks.
thank you!