Greetings people, I'm Shin the author of this story. I am honored to have my story featured in Magnetar and am grateful for any and all who listen. Any critiques and feedback is welcome as it helps me become a better creative writer. Thank you and have a great week!!✋ EDIT: PLEASE READ!! Part of me wishes I didn’t have to make this statement, but it’s come to my attention that the story I wrote being narrated above was stolen by an unknown Reddit user, while most is correct some words and phrases I didn’t write were added in towards the end! The Reddit user also changed half the title. I’ve spoken with Magnetar on this matter and I want to clarify to everyone that this is NOT Magnetars fault!! My original manuscript was taken and edited by a Reddit user. I just want to clear things up on my end as I do not wish to take credit for things I did not write, nor do I condone plagiarism of any kind. I am utterly grateful for the opportunity of Magnetar featuring my work on his channel, but I wished to get this out there to not only protect my name, but clear things up on my end. If you want to find the original manuscript you can find it at Creepypasta.com under a similar title. Thank you all.
Everyone, here is a link to the original and un-altered version written by Shin: www.creepypasta.com/i-was-the-first-human-to-walk-on-venus-something-deadly-is-here/ I am horrified that this happened. Shin contacted me months ago about his work, having only recently started to record it I Googled the title because I had lost the email he originally sent. I found the version here (the true version) www.creepypasta.com/i-was-the-first-human-to-walk-on-venus-something-deadly-is-here. and another version on Reddit that was more recent and had some edits, like to the title. I WRONGFULLY assumed it was just an updated version of the original story posted by the original author. That was not the case. I apologize to Shin. I should have confirmed which version to use - that would have allowed us to catch this much sooner. I encourage everyone to check out the original non-plagarized version, www.creepypasta.com/i-was-the-first-human-to-walk-on-venus-something-deadly-is-here/
@@MagnetarYT Thank you a thousand times over once more my guy, and no sweat. I hope you’ll consider me in the future for another story I may come up with. And thank you to everyone else who recognized my work, it’s an honor.
I have one criticism. The beginning has a lot of exposition about the character history that could have been melded into the story a little better. Other than that great story!
@@oddiocurtiss Fair point. I notice that as well, exposition dumps can be too much of a mouthful. I will consider that in the future, thanks for the feedback.
I'm so disgusted that someone stole your story! Thankfully it's here and you can do something about it, may you have the best of all possible outcomes and thank you for writing it!
Greetings people, I'm Shin the author of this story. I am honored to have my story featured in Magnetar and am grateful for any and all who listen. Any critiques and feedback is welcome as it helps me become a better creative writer. Thank you and have a great week!!✋
I want to be the first. But only if I get to "over prepare" in every possible way. Making sure to have at least 10 redundancies and emergency protocols
Great high quality narration. I'll sub. I don't really see why anyone would be surprised by life being on Venus. It's in the habitable zone and is thought to of been very much like Earth at one point and we have creatures living in insane environments here on our own planet. I wouldn't be at all surprised if Venus had life that was able to evolve with the environment and survive it's current state.
That was quite an engaging story. There was enough detail to get my mind working on fleshing it out, and there was enough left unsaid to think about after. The main thing that I am pondering is, if "they" have created a foothold in the minds of humanity, did they require close contact to do so. And what is their ultimate goal. They want us to believe that they are majestic and beautiful, for what purpose? I've got some childhoods end vibes ruminating in the back of my brain.
Stories like this need to be made into a series because we are missing a good scfi and military horror shows. This would be great on Netflix. Well done shintaro797.
Interesting story. Seemed to drag a bit in places that I felt should've been faster paced. Would've wanted a more definitive ending. But we'll written and well done.
Timestamp ~32:20 ...I was able to enjoy it... and then had to pause. Wouldn't corporate spaceflight DEMAND always-on cameras and bio-monitoring? The presence of something seen outside the window would be recorded. Everything would be documented. Ah well. Once I suspended disbelief (and convince myself that a landing crew would NOT send images of IT back to Earth), I was able to enjoy the tale again.
I lover your videos . They get me through the long night shifts ! Quick question though . I remember listening to a Amongus based story but can't seem to find it for my kid to listen to . Do you still have it in the channel or a link for it ?
@@MagnetarYT I swear it was your channel lol . I think it was one of the first videos I watched 😭 it was never stated basically just implied based on the colored crew suits. But dang if it was someone else my whole life is a lie now 🤣
Yes, but the story is implying that the creature is influencing the main character's decision making. Right at the end he does a total 180 from describing the creature in fearful terms to describing it as striking and beautiful, and even hoping it would be revealed to humanity.
I have such a back log. I'm also trying to figure out the best way to share it. Do I want to make a video where you can see me turning the pages, do I scan each page and show the art work, etc.
The scariest part for me was to hear Nova Scotia , lived a few years in Halifax for work , cursed place ... fine people though and beautiful landscape in the maritimes ..but yeh , cursed.
Um, one question. Why didn't they use radar to map the landing zone instead of just landing blind? There is a radar map of Venus. Other than that, the story was fine.
There were a LOT of issues with the story. I still don't understand the ending. There really isn't an ending, it just feels like the story "stopped" rather than having any resolution.
I feel like I missed something here. They took a bunch of pictures of the creature and hellscapes and nobody on Earth asked about the creature in the photos? Why would these astronauts be so celebrated for years for this and yet nobody else ever took another trip out to Venus and find out for themselves that it's a literal hellhole complete with demons? Wouldn't they expose these astronauts as liars that put other space travelers in major danger if they decided to land on Venus as well?
Good, but few details doesn’t make much sense. What author is describing is basically moon missions with monsters, rather than true Venus mission. Also why would not astronauts would report such a profound discovery as obvious complex life on another planet. Their first priority would be to collect specimen of the creature to study its biology, than continue with collecting rocks and weather station. Furthermore even if the crew wanted to cover this up, they would not be able to, there are tons of video, audio recordings. The seismic sensors would pick up creatures walking etc. Overall it’s an interesting attempt and Venus retell explored as place to visit, but author needed to study the science much better i.e. they can’t see the surface in visible light, but they can see with radar, and they obviously used radar to determine the distance to surface.
Gimme a break. He’d go from hero to absolute zero for holding on to that kind of important information. Practically killing anyone else that would go there later. 🙄
Before they go to Venus, how about they manage to take a real picture of the earth? I don’t know about you, but if I had actually been on the moon, I would have taken plenty of pictures of the earth! Lol
@@MagnetarYT always!! Sorry, this one took longer to get through, my daughter being on spring break is killing meeeeee!!! Lol! Amazing, as always!! ♥️♥️♥️♥️
Uhm...you do know the history* of what eventually became the USAF f 16👀 and several space related robotics to aeronautical hard and software advancements in say the last 40 or so years👀... Don't take my word for this...it can actually be looked up and learned...this story tho...idk
@@brianknapp6215 ahem... But the innovations to jet engines became... But meh . Kids these days don't do model kits ..much less reading about jets, engines, shuttles blah blah blah🤣🤣
... I don't normally comment twice on the same video but I feel compelled to. The pilot being the mission commander? Seeing a massive alien lifeform that appears hostile resulting in casually warning another mission member and not reporting that up the chain or even to your team in orbit? Just gonna go on and do normal planned tests and ignore it till later? Lmao what kind of story is this? MC is the mission geologist, pilot and mission commander while making constantly horrible decisions. Cringe. Amazing narration done but the story itself is pretty bad.
Greetings people, I'm Shin the author of this story. I am honored to have my story featured in Magnetar and am grateful for any and all who listen. Any critiques and feedback is welcome as it helps me become a better creative writer. Thank you and have a great week!!✋
EDIT: PLEASE READ!!
Part of me wishes I didn’t have to make this statement, but it’s come to my attention that the story I wrote being narrated above was stolen by an unknown Reddit user, while most is correct some words and phrases I didn’t write were added in towards the end! The Reddit user also changed half the title.
I’ve spoken with Magnetar on this matter and I want to clarify to everyone that this is NOT Magnetars fault!! My original manuscript was taken and edited by a Reddit user. I just want to clear things up on my end as I do not wish to take credit for things I did not write, nor do I condone plagiarism of any kind.
I am utterly grateful for the opportunity of Magnetar featuring my work on his channel, but I wished to get this out there to not only protect my name, but clear things up on my end. If you want to find the original manuscript you can find it at Creepypasta.com under a similar title. Thank you all.
Everyone, here is a link to the original and un-altered version written by Shin: www.creepypasta.com/i-was-the-first-human-to-walk-on-venus-something-deadly-is-here/
I am horrified that this happened. Shin contacted me months ago about his work, having only recently started to record it I Googled the title because I had lost the email he originally sent. I found the version here (the true version) www.creepypasta.com/i-was-the-first-human-to-walk-on-venus-something-deadly-is-here. and another version on Reddit that was more recent and had some edits, like to the title. I WRONGFULLY assumed it was just an updated version of the original story posted by the original author. That was not the case.
I apologize to Shin. I should have confirmed which version to use - that would have allowed us to catch this much sooner.
I encourage everyone to check out the original non-plagarized version, www.creepypasta.com/i-was-the-first-human-to-walk-on-venus-something-deadly-is-here/
@@MagnetarYT Thank you a thousand times over once more my guy, and no sweat. I hope you’ll consider me in the future for another story I may come up with. And thank you to everyone else who recognized my work, it’s an honor.
I have one criticism. The beginning has a lot of exposition about the character history that could have been melded into the story a little better. Other than that great story!
@@oddiocurtiss Fair point. I notice that as well, exposition dumps can be too much of a mouthful. I will consider that in the future, thanks for the feedback.
I'm so disgusted that someone stole your story! Thankfully it's here and you can do something about it, may you have the best of all possible outcomes and thank you for writing it!
Greetings people, I'm Shin the author of this story. I am honored to have my story featured in Magnetar and am grateful for any and all who listen. Any critiques and feedback is welcome as it helps me become a better creative writer. Thank you and have a great week!!✋
I'm honored to be able to share your work with everyone! Thank YOU, Shin 🙏 👾
Great story shin.. I'm a avid reader and listener if you ever write a book I'll gladly give it a read. Keep up the good work.
That ending was haunting. Well done!
Great story!❤
Shout out for having the space ship use the same engine that they used in the Lifeforce space vampire movie BTW....I see what you did there
One thing I can guarantee, I don’t EVER want to be the first person to do anything in space!
You don't even want to be in the first thousand to do something in space
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I want to be the first. But only if I get to "over prepare" in every possible way. Making sure to have at least 10 redundancies and emergency protocols
Amen
Knowing my luck I'd fuck up n find kathulu
Great high quality narration. I'll sub. I don't really see why anyone would be surprised by life being on Venus. It's in the habitable zone and is thought to of been very much like Earth at one point and we have creatures living in insane environments here on our own planet. I wouldn't be at all surprised if Venus had life that was able to evolve with the environment and survive it's current state.
Highly underrated narrator... previously a lurker, now a subscriber.
That was quite an engaging story. There was enough detail to get my mind working on fleshing it out, and there was enough left unsaid to think about after. The main thing that I am pondering is, if "they" have created a foothold in the minds of humanity, did they require close contact to do so. And what is their ultimate goal. They want us to believe that they are majestic and beautiful, for what purpose? I've got some childhoods end vibes ruminating in the back of my brain.
I just stumbled on your channel and your voice is so magnetic, very underrated!
That's for stopping by and giving me a chance 👾 ♥️
What an awesome concept, it has been talked about but seems impossible, even with future technology.
Always a great day when we get a new Magnetar story!!! Thank you! 😊
You and Juju are definitely the best two narrators out there for cool as Fuck sci-fi like this. That ending was great.
Both actually narrate as they supposed to. People who went through hell. They sound scared, as if retelling the story hurt them.
I'm really enjoying this, thank you!
21:05---How could you not report that? If anyone doubts it I'm sure they'll be very sorry later.
And the next line is about being responsible for the crew’s safety
@@StoneCorazon It's all the Star Trek I've watched.
So glad YT recommended you tonight. We're in the same business.
There’s no reality where the commander of the first mission to Venus walks off alone to explore something.
Or the pilot being the mission commander but I forgive small mistakes in stories lol
They've just seen a giant dangerous monster with claws and red eyes watching them, and then they decide to continue with science experiments
Awesome narration, Mag!!! 👏😊👍
💙❤💜
BEASTLY narration as ALWAYS bro. Keep killin it
just finished the story, that was AWESOME-you did a great job narrating and the story itself was brilliant.
Stories like this need to be made into a series because we are missing a good scfi and military horror shows. This would be great on Netflix. Well done shintaro797.
Quite an amazing story !!! Space 🌌 in itself is quite amazing & yet terrifying.
This was an amazing story. Much thanks to you Magnetar and the author. Job well done. Have a wonderful weekend 🤗❤️🌟
Interesting story.
Seemed to drag a bit in places that I felt should've been faster paced.
Would've wanted a more definitive ending.
But we'll written and well done.
Underrated channel
Pauses 22 minutes in. "I chose not to tell anyone" aaaaaaand that's always the mistake.
5Hrs of sleep after a 14hr day before I go do it again. I’m happy this long beast starts my morning
I have something to tell but I'm very scared to,last time they punished me for telling.
What?
the real horror is the commercialization of space
Timestamp ~32:20 ...I was able to enjoy it... and then had to pause. Wouldn't corporate spaceflight DEMAND always-on cameras and bio-monitoring? The presence of something seen outside the window would be recorded. Everything would be documented. Ah well. Once I suspended disbelief (and convince myself that a landing crew would NOT send images of IT back to Earth), I was able to enjoy the tale again.
Unlike you can't do that so I'm out. I wish I didn't read your comment. Damn.
Thanks Brother. Hope your evening is going well and good. I'm going to sit down, listen and take it easy for a few. Thanks for the break lol 😆
I lover your videos . They get me through the long night shifts ! Quick question though . I remember listening to a Amongus based story but can't seem to find it for my kid to listen to . Do you still have it in the channel or a link for it ?
Hm, you may be thinking of another creator. I don't recall an Among Us story 🤔
@@MagnetarYT I swear it was your channel lol . I think it was one of the first videos I watched 😭 it was never stated basically just implied based on the colored crew suits. But dang if it was someone else my whole life is a lie now 🤣
@@MagnetarYT and even if it ended up being some one else's channel . I still love you and your stories 🫡
♥️ 👾
This made me think more than most.
As a fellow Canuck, not to mention my folks being from Nova Scotia, it's nice to see us getting some representation. 😊😊
This story was excellent. 🤘🤘
Fantastic narration and story!
Hello. Just for future reference we use SAR imaging a type of microwave radiation to see through the Venus clouds. So... Yeah.
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@@Got-2B-Said Yes… I am that guy… lol.
You find something like that out there you need to tell relevant people so that it could be addressed if it were to become a problem in the future
Yes, but the story is implying that the creature is influencing the main character's decision making. Right at the end he does a total 180 from describing the creature in fearful terms to describing it as striking and beautiful, and even hoping it would be revealed to humanity.
Awesome story. And a good amount of time too! Perfect.❤
Ty Shin this was an Amazing story & you hv thee most Amazing narrator reading it for you l hope that we hear many more stories from you ❤️
I thought he was describing Cthulhu at first but it’s face wasn’t right.
So my new theory is it that creature might be a family member of Cthulhu.
The stepson no one in the family talks about.
The creature is basically Slenderman, the rake and Cthulhu combined
I can't wait to listen also when is tales from the flood coming out I've been waiting for a while lol
I have such a back log. I'm also trying to figure out the best way to share it. Do I want to make a video where you can see me turning the pages, do I scan each page and show the art work, etc.
@@MagnetarYT scanning the artwork and showing it as you narrate it sounds awesome
Neat, I'm from Nova Scotia
The scariest part for me was to hear Nova Scotia , lived a few years in Halifax for work , cursed place ... fine people though and beautiful landscape in the maritimes ..but yeh , cursed.
I really injured this story. Congratulations your a very amazing writer.
I did not write this. Shin is the writer. Please check the description for a link to his posted story!
Why'd you hurt the story?
@@OnceUponReddit lets give it a band-aid
I've listened to this three times now.
I hope it was out of love and not hate
@@MagnetarYT It was mostly because three children were distracting me from listening... but let's say love.
Um, one question. Why didn't they use radar to map the landing zone instead of just landing blind? There is a radar map of Venus.
Other than that, the story was fine.
There were a LOT of issues with the story. I still don't understand the ending. There really isn't an ending, it just feels like the story "stopped" rather than having any resolution.
How many times does he mention emblems on suits ? So f@#ckin many i would be passed out drunk if they were shots halfway through but good tale
What an amazing story!
No recording devices then.
No one will ever leave earth
Better narrator then mr creeps💯
That's so kind of you 👾
Shots fired.
Yeah for how small his channel is he does excellent Narration. My all time favourite will be The Dark Somnium. But magnetar is a close second
Actually Ezekiel was the first human in space. An all likely was the first on the moon.
Commercialization of space. On the trusty ship called Starcaster (brought to you by Fender Guitars).
Good story but theres one problem. The Canadian guy didn't say "Eh" once or talk about getting a coffee from Tim Hortons.
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I feel like I missed something here. They took a bunch of pictures of the creature and hellscapes and nobody on Earth asked about the creature in the photos? Why would these astronauts be so celebrated for years for this and yet nobody else ever took another trip out to Venus and find out for themselves that it's a literal hellhole complete with demons? Wouldn't they expose these astronauts as liars that put other space travelers in major danger if they decided to land on Venus as well?
Why did they have an axe but no weapons?
As a tool I'd assume
@@MagnetarYT but there wasn’t supposed to be any tree or bush there so it’s weird that they brought one
Can be used for much more than just to cut down plants
@@MagnetarYT dig? Because there wasn’t supposed to be anything to cut there
As an emergency tool to cut anything, rope, break a rock, open shit up the ship. Has many use cases
I can suspend disbelief for a story but… Canada? Really? 🤣
Good, but few details doesn’t make much sense. What author is describing is basically moon missions with monsters, rather than true Venus mission. Also why would not astronauts would report such a profound discovery as obvious complex life on another planet. Their first priority would be to collect specimen of the creature to study its biology, than continue with collecting rocks and weather station. Furthermore even if the crew wanted to cover this up, they would not be able to, there are tons of video, audio recordings. The seismic sensors would pick up creatures walking etc. Overall it’s an interesting attempt and Venus retell explored as place to visit, but author needed to study the science much better i.e. they can’t see the surface in visible light, but they can see with radar, and they obviously used radar to determine the distance to surface.
Gimme a break. He’d go from hero to absolute zero for holding on to that kind of important information. Practically killing anyone else that would go there later. 🙄
It hust won't stop feeling ai no matter how long i listen.
haven't visited this channel in a while, just checking in if you got the Spotify podcast already or not? 😄
No sorry
@@MagnetarYT no worries my dude, i'll wait
Really good story. The sentience structure needs work. Some of them, are just formulated poorly. Over all a good story, nice narration
Sibilance is a bit hot on the new mic.
Working on it ✌️ 👾
But not disclosing it will only endanger the future astronauts who would too wanna place their flags in and likely never return for going in blind.
Canadian space program eh?
I want to kiss the mouth that produces this voice 😂❤
👀
Very nice😊
Before they go to Venus, how about they manage to take a real picture of the earth? I don’t know about you, but if I had actually been on the moon, I would have taken plenty of pictures of the earth! Lol
There's videos of earth...
So does that mean he didnt make it?
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Oh em geeeeee!!!! Listening now!! 😍😍😍
Lol, glad to see you here ♥️
@@MagnetarYT always!! Sorry, this one took longer to get through, my daughter being on spring break is killing meeeeee!!! Lol! Amazing, as always!! ♥️♥️♥️♥️
I wish I had spring break as an adult 😭
@@MagnetarYT don’t we all?!?! 😩😩😂😂 If we get enough people together on this, maybe we can make it happen??? 🤔🤔😂
Now that's starting to sound like a nationwide General Strike.... And I'm here for it. ✊ 😉
Did anyone else kinda think of Destiny???
Man I’m missing large parts of the audio
I haven't heard anyone else have that issue
@@MagnetarYT never mind, it was on my end….don’t even ask
@@theinfidel6301 But we must, we must!
This is quite possibly the least realistic creepypasta I've ever heard. No way in hell would _Canada_ be a global leader in aerospace.
😂
Uhm...you do know the history* of what eventually became the USAF f 16👀 and several space related robotics to aeronautical hard and software advancements in say the last 40 or so years👀... Don't take my word for this...it can actually be looked up and learned...this story tho...idk
Read up on the Avro Arrow- the most advanced jet fighter of the late 1950s _NEVER_ produced...
@@brianknapp6215 ahem... But the innovations to jet engines became... But meh . Kids these days don't do model kits ..much less reading about jets, engines, shuttles blah blah blah🤣🤣
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Space herpes
Lmao ain't no way a Canadian company could do something merica couldn't specially something to do with space travel....
Is this a true story? 😲
Yes 3%
... I don't normally comment twice on the same video but I feel compelled to. The pilot being the mission commander? Seeing a massive alien lifeform that appears hostile resulting in casually warning another mission member and not reporting that up the chain or even to your team in orbit? Just gonna go on and do normal planned tests and ignore it till later? Lmao what kind of story is this? MC is the mission geologist, pilot and mission commander while making constantly horrible decisions. Cringe. Amazing narration done but the story itself is pretty bad.
Like 660
Silly nonsense.
......First
Ok sorry but I can’t get past 10:00 it’s so boring