I really enjoyed the gritty, claustrophobic atmosphere of the story, and the writing and voice-acting helped make the atmosphere what it was. Your voice-acting was amazing, and the writing was very entertaining. Even though it ends kind of abruptly, I think it's a perfectly suitable ending, especially if it's the first part or chapter to a longer work. Even if you never end up finishing it, I appreciate you sharing it.
Holy crap you have some talent, in writing as well as voice acting, very smooth radio voice. I hope you keep at it, I could see a channel like this catching on easily.
Need a follow-up my dude. Interesting, I feel like you spent a little too much time on the drive thru section, entertaining as it was, felt like it slowed the story down. Any ideas or thoughts on where the story goes from here or are you done? Been two years since the original post date
I appreciate the encouragement! It’s just tough for me to get back to a piece of work like this when I’ve got a job, college, and VR Gaming Community to look after. Maybe one day, but I am unsure if or when that would be… but I appreciate your feedback and enjoyment of this little story.
@@Phoolery I’m writing a feature length screenplay based on my view of the cyberpunk universe and my influences growing up. Character driven. Very fun. Looking into stuff like this to get inspiration, came across your story. It was fun and unique. Really wish we could have more, but I understand, it’s hard to pick up an old project when there are things you’re more interested in, pulling your attention. Maybe one day
Is there more? Like the voice acting, could use to make the different voices more distinct so as to make it easier to tell who is talking and when it is the narrator. Is there a part 2??????
I may write a part 2 down the line, you flatter me! Love the praise and the constructive criticism! Between work and college I don’t have much time to write, narrate, and produce audio shorts like this but one can dream!
Can’t believe I just now found this.
I like it. This feels like 2000 AD. The way she offed the debtor feels like a Street Judge.
I really enjoyed the gritty, claustrophobic atmosphere of the story, and the writing and voice-acting helped make the atmosphere what it was. Your voice-acting was amazing, and the writing was very entertaining. Even though it ends kind of abruptly, I think it's a perfectly suitable ending, especially if it's the first part or chapter to a longer work. Even if you never end up finishing it, I appreciate you sharing it.
Holy crap you have some talent, in writing as well as voice acting, very smooth radio voice. I hope you keep at it, I could see a channel like this catching on easily.
Thanks so much!
Great voice acting!
Need a follow-up my dude. Interesting, I feel like you spent a little too much time on the drive thru section, entertaining as it was, felt like it slowed the story down. Any ideas or thoughts on where the story goes from here or are you done? Been two years since the original post date
I appreciate the encouragement! It’s just tough for me to get back to a piece of work like this when I’ve got a job, college, and VR Gaming Community to look after. Maybe one day, but I am unsure if or when that would be… but I appreciate your feedback and enjoyment of this little story.
@@Phoolery I’m writing a feature length screenplay based on my view of the cyberpunk universe and my influences growing up. Character driven. Very fun. Looking into stuff like this to get inspiration, came across your story. It was fun and unique. Really wish we could have more, but I understand, it’s hard to pick up an old project when there are things you’re more interested in, pulling your attention. Maybe one day
Is there more? Like the voice acting, could use to make the different voices more distinct so as to make it easier to tell who is talking and when it is the narrator.
Is there a part 2??????
I may write a part 2 down the line, you flatter me! Love the praise and the constructive criticism! Between work and college I don’t have much time to write, narrate, and produce audio shorts like this but one can dream!