I like the premise of the video and the suspenseful style that builds up quite well. The editing and music and everything about it is well done. However, I think the actual pacing of the narrative across the video isn't quite right. I say that, because I am left at a few points in the video a little bit lost. I think this has the chance to be phenomenal, so here's what I would probably have changed. 1. I would have framed the idea of butterfly effect a little more clearly within the context. You used a football metaphor (montana -> brady -> maholmes) without saying specifically why they are connected. Maybe there is an assumption that everyone knows they are connected, but I would spell it out for the audience, how they relate, how each QB was effected in style by their predecessors. If its not easy to explain, I'd maybe try for a simpler real-world example first, like how MacDonalds shaped the fast food industry. And then shift into football metaphors. 2. I would have emphasized my points more. For example, between minute 3:40 and 5:40 we are talking about what if scenarios. But leading into this we don't give good context for why would should care about these what ifs, why it matters that there are always other options. I think bringing this back to Wilson specifically and that mention of him sitting on his couch watching OBJ would have helped hammer this down. Having an opening sentence like "Wilson's talents, skills and his very playstyle at WR were shaped by his idols, what he watched and what he saw. Without these his future would have looked very different." 3. I think the Brendan Carr example is really good, its a catalyst event here in this story. But I would try and disentangle the two examples you have going here so it is clearer. Before getting to how Carr being there was a key factor in shaping the catch, I'd really try and nail down how the catch was a key factor in shaping future generations of WR. Only once you've convinced the audience of this should you move onto the Carr story. This would then change the flow of the video to look more like Context/Intro -> How Odell shaped the future of wides > what the future might have looked like without OBJ's catch -> How Brandon Carr, played a pivotal role as catalyst of this -> What the future might have looked like without Carr -> What does this mean for the world, for kids, etc. Hopefully this is somewhat helpful feedback. I love your videos and I can't wait to see you grow and get a lot of subs!
Thank you so much for support and I really appreciate the feedback given, this is my first video in a long time and any feedback will be used in future videos.
Horrible idea to do a split screen in the beginning because you wana watch both but you cant... just some feed back. Maybe have one on pause while the other plays then when ones finish pause that one then play the other and then u can play the catches moment together zoomed in in slowmo. juuuuust a thought as a viewer
I like the premise of the video and the suspenseful style that builds up quite well. The editing and music and everything about it is well done. However, I think the actual pacing of the narrative across the video isn't quite right. I say that, because I am left at a few points in the video a little bit lost.
I think this has the chance to be phenomenal, so here's what I would probably have changed.
1. I would have framed the idea of butterfly effect a little more clearly within the context. You used a football metaphor (montana -> brady -> maholmes) without saying specifically why they are connected. Maybe there is an assumption that everyone knows they are connected, but I would spell it out for the audience, how they relate, how each QB was effected in style by their predecessors. If its not easy to explain, I'd maybe try for a simpler real-world example first, like how MacDonalds shaped the fast food industry. And then shift into football metaphors.
2. I would have emphasized my points more. For example, between minute 3:40 and 5:40 we are talking about what if scenarios. But leading into this we don't give good context for why would should care about these what ifs, why it matters that there are always other options. I think bringing this back to Wilson specifically and that mention of him sitting on his couch watching OBJ would have helped hammer this down. Having an opening sentence like "Wilson's talents, skills and his very playstyle at WR were shaped by his idols, what he watched and what he saw. Without these his future would have looked very different."
3. I think the Brendan Carr example is really good, its a catalyst event here in this story. But I would try and disentangle the two examples you have going here so it is clearer. Before getting to how Carr being there was a key factor in shaping the catch, I'd really try and nail down how the catch was a key factor in shaping future generations of WR. Only once you've convinced the audience of this should you move onto the Carr story. This would then change the flow of the video to look more like Context/Intro -> How Odell shaped the future of wides > what the future might have looked like without OBJ's catch -> How Brandon Carr, played a pivotal role as catalyst of this -> What the future might have looked like without Carr -> What does this mean for the world, for kids, etc.
Hopefully this is somewhat helpful feedback. I love your videos and I can't wait to see you grow and get a lot of subs!
Thank you so much for support and I really appreciate the feedback given, this is my first video in a long time and any feedback will be used in future videos.
Horrible idea to do a split screen in the beginning because you wana watch both but you cant... just some feed back. Maybe have one on pause while the other plays then when ones finish pause that one then play the other and then u can play the catches moment together zoomed in in slowmo. juuuuust a thought as a viewer
Thank you for the feedback.
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Neat video, anything can happen, and everything will
dam dude love the video its so fire. gives me jimmyhighroller vibes if you know who that is
you sound choppy do multiple takes to make it sound like you’re not reading off a script but keep up the good work stay consistent
Dope video, but your view count looks like mine.