Giga Chad move of Pariah for INTENTIONALLY forgetting that Knuckles is supposed to Guard the Master Emerald on Angel Island. He’s truly staying true to The source, and I mean that genuinely.
Knuckles doesn't even have a reason to not be doing his job in the Riders games. He's just hanging around with Sonic and Tails before the plot kicks in XD
@@felipe_drawmania1604Whaddya talking about? Knuckles always hangs with Sonic & Tails because his existence revolves around Sonic because The “Mega Sega Brand Power” has controlled his Will of choice and fate in life.
We would not have this establishment crisis, If they'd just made Knuckles keep the master emerald shrunk and kept with him for the entirety of the series.
I gotta say, the moment where each of the New Rogues got a chance to work together with their Sonic counterpart gave me a huge smile. It just feels so perfect, especially considering how their relationship started in the First Riders. It also feels perfect using extreme weather as the basis of the story as the Rogues are inspired by Japanese Tengu, which are youkai that can control whirlwinds. I kinda wished you had mentioned that in the actual video.
you genuinely have a great grasp on what made these characters so appealing to those of us who became fans in the 2000s. I could picture so many of these scenes in my head and all the setups and payoffs were really satisfying. by the end with the comet I couldn’t help but smile lol. you should seriously pursue writing for the series in some way officially
Admittedly as awesome as this story is, for early 2000s Sonic, it verbalizes emotion a lot more than usual. Typically this era relied on body language or implications to do the heavy lifting through subtlety.
As a die-hard Riders fan and amateur metaphor writer myself, I need this as a real game yesterday. This was exceptionally entertaining to listen to. If it were up to me, I would've personally called the game Sonic Riders: Gale Force for a multitude of reasons, but I'm willing to bet you already thought of that ahaha. I cannot wait to hear what other ideas you're brewing up, especially as someone who is largely influenced by Japanese Sonic in my own modern projects.
Really like the detail that both Mute and Talon have a very washed out color pallete, meanwhile Gale has that really contrasting orange. It goes to show that he is the main deal of that team, while the other 2 characters don't matter much compared to him. (I don't mean this as a bad thing, both of their designs really rock, especially Talon imo) Needless to say the story was fantastic. I especially really liked the thing with the comet, like as soon as I realized what that scene with Amy and Jet was setting up, I couldn't help but smile.
I hope this becomes a series because you generally have pretty good ideas for Sonic and also I like hearing you talk about Sonic. I am curious to see what your Storybook type game would be about
If there was a third story book game, I imagine it would be a Greek mythology thing, or maybe even nordic, some people even suggest pirate or even cowboy and biblical themes, but I think those first two fit more aptly with the officials. I wonder which of the stories in those mythos it would be about, and how they would've subverted them like they did with the first two. If it was greek mythology, it would probably be some kind of play on the Hercules mythos, but I don't know enough about nordic mythology to have a hypothesis on that one... But yeah, I really hope Pariah does a storybook at some point. Maybe even alongside an improvement/total rework of the Storybook saga's gameplay if he feels like tackling something bigger then, because those games definitely need some help on that aspect.
Pariah, I just want to thank you for making the sonic story videos. I used to dream about writing good stories, but I didn't know how to write them. I didn't know about the core point of making a good story. But thanks to you, I understand now what makes a good story and what doesn't. I have the ability to say what's on my heart and mind through a new medium, thanks to your videos. I'll probably never become a proper writer, but I'll surely make a plenty of little stories for my short animations till I or the animation industry will die. Thank you, Pariah ❤
I really like this. It manages to hit all the emotional moments properly and handles the absent parent plot in a mature manner. Plus, it progresses Jet’s rivalry with Sonic to something he can genuinely enjoy. I also really like Mute. He’s the kind of guy that has one gimmick to his character but it’s entertaining.
To anyone who thinks this is somehow connected or related to the recent IDW Sonic arc you should read all the details in the description, just to warn you about this and get it out of the way
You know, if it's YOU writing OC's into a story you yourself make, then I have full confidence you know what you're doing. There's no way you would be writing Coldsteel The Hedgehog 2.0, with all the same issues. Despite popular opinion, not all fan characters are cheesy and stupid, nor are they all just Mary/Gary Sues. I would like to make special mention to some fan-made villains like Nazo, Seelkadoom, and Aeon. I think those OC's are perfectly fine, or even better, they're well done. Although, Aeon is more so part-Mega Man/part-Sonic fan character. I think that is what makes him so iconic. He is the twisted mirror to the whole crossover-concept of SFF. I do hope we get to see more of Aeon in the future though, if BlackDevilDX ever considers continuing the series. I see a lot of potential for that character!
Fantastic story. Got me emotional at the end with the father and son relation. Love it. Amazing work, the fact you actually consider it as a game story and embrace that, was stellar. Keep on, my most sincered and deserved congratulations.
I just wanna say thank you for all the efforts you put in your videos and writing. Your content, passion and enthusiasm towards this series helps me alot and i can't express my genuine appreciation for it, and even if you're close to be done with this series, im happy it will be a great, most enjoyable end to it
Just finished watching this, and man, was that amazing. It feels like something straight out of the late 2000s. The Ocs fit very well with the main cast, and I loved the themes of environmentalism and the story about Jets' father. It really helps with building on top of what was already established in previous games. I think some more original game stories and concepts would be sick in the future.
You did a fantastic job with this story, it’s so true to everything sonic was at the time, and is also a great story, I got really invested in everything that was going on and got so hyped at the last chapter, I appreciate you giving Amy her own chapter and moments to shine, if this was a real game I’m sure people would be surprised at that. Also I’ve seen some people comment on how Sonic doesn’t really do much in this story, but I have to argue that that is kinda staying true to other stories at the time, where the focus was more on the new characters than him but he was still doing his thing and being Sonic, like how in ZG he was just like ok we’re done here that was fun see ya later, here he’s not really getting involved in Jet and his father’s conflict, he’s here to get things going and in a very him way, he rejects the horn and then destroys it, very in line with what he was at the time, just a way for other characters to have their own stories and grow, it ain’t always about him.
Pretty good story! Just 2 problems: 1. Sonic doesn't really do anything of note. He's just kinda there. I would like him to engage in the rival banter with Jet as well, would make their dynamic more interesting. 2. Tails and Wave don't really interact at all until the final moment, which kinda comes out of nowhere. Tails and Wave are rivals in the Riders games so I would like to see them bicker about. It would also make the moment where Tails helps Wave more interesting. But overall, I'm really impressed with the result here. I like that you gave Amy her own little chapter, since she's not a part of any team in the Riders games and ends up feeling disconnected. Really good stuff.
To be fair for point 1, that isn't exactly inaccurate to some of the stories that were in Sonic games in this era he's trying to emulate (06 for example), Sonic sometimes was just kinda...there while the story focused more on the other characters.
@@legoboy7107 This story is meant to be a sequel to Zero Gravity however, around 2009 or so. By then we already have the storybook games that really utilize Sonic's character very well. I understand what you're saying here but personally the direction they took Sonic's character in 06 is something I really dislike as he comes across as extremely boring in that game. So even if this was an intentional choice by Pariah, I would still prefer if Sonic had more energy to him instead of being a bland protagonist like he's in 06.
1. This point doesn’t really stand because we have sonic shattering the wind gizmo and sonic stories aren’t typically revolved around sonic, this story is more focused on Jet (ergo him being the final character you play) I think it’s a nice change of pace away from sonic to make jets character grow more. 2. This point also doesn’t really stand because this story is written off the assumption that you played zero gravity and riders. It’s supposed to be an ending to their dynamic from the previous games. I will admit that I had some of these criticisms when getting into the story but after it was done I was left feeling fulfilled most of your criticism doesn’t exist simply because of the past riders games.
Okay wow I did NOT expect it to feel like a Sonic story this MUCH, but I would say it actually fits perfectly for a Sonic Riders story. Got some of that humor in it but for a change it added some character arcs for Jet and Wave. I don't remember if they had ones in riders and zero gravity but I am pretty sure they did not. But anyways that was amazing. I could totally see this as an official story because it just feels like something that can come out of a Sonic story. Great job Pariah❤
Your method of storytelling is pretty cool, the way Jet says "Wait" but Gale takes off anyway, shows their relationship, and Amy's superstitious nonsense with the comet thing also kinda serves as foreshadowing. I love the scene with Wave and Tails working together, and Amy telling Jet and Gale to be more honest instead of arguing. Though Sonic kinda doesn't really do anything in this story, and he's kinda impulsive, it's in character for him to not want the wind artifact, but it's dangerous, so you'd think he'd wanna get rid of it instead of leaving it to people like Jet and Gale. And when he does smash it, it's kinda cool, but also kinda stupid like that could've been very dangerous, it could've triggered a crazy cyclone or something. Mute is crazy op, like he's stronger than Knuckles, and much faster than him too, so he's gotta be almost as fast as Sonic, while being the strongest character in the series. This story's themes are kinda insane with how heavy they are, having a deadbeat father, then having him die, these could use more fleshing out, maybe. Though this simple optimistic outlook on it is pretty fitting for the Sonic franchise, and kinda nice. It also seems like Gale got everybody killed by telling Talon to not turn off the security, so his arrogance, and once he comes back for a day he's still as arrogant as ever. I feel like he could've had a character arc about overcoming that arrogance and accepting his mistakes.
Going forward Jet's development can be that he doesn't care about comparing himself to others like being the fastest or faster than Sonic, and instead just wants to do his best for his own sake
i noticed that there's some clunkiness to some stuff characters say,but that was probably a byproduct of how you kinda did the bits of dialogue like the actual sonic game dubs of the 2000s,which feels very authentic.
I love the thought that went into your OC's. Jet's father surfer motif, His soap opera with His son and their farewell at the end Is beautiful (also at the end I got an AD for a song called "Pa que te fuiste" by Elena Rose and it's ironically funny how the lyrics fit...) Mute's gag doing what owls do Is morbidly funny, and oddly enough I had my own Babylon Rouge Croe design with purple clothing idea, so I love Talon too jsjsjs.
I had such a big smile on my face while listening to this. It's so 2000s Sonic, and I love it! I really wish this could be the story of a new Riders game. Also, I would love to see more of your writing in the future, whether it's Sonic-related or not.
this is a genuinely brilliant conclusion to the sonic riders series, i'd really want to play this game if it actually existed. maybe it could be called 'sonic riders: extreme turbulence' or smth like that considering the extreme weather conditions concept of this story
I just finished watching this video and holy crap. This was super good. This is much better than either of the Sonic Riders games before it. The OCs fit right in alongside the main cast, and their characterization is superb. One thing that I don't really like is that Eggman is treated like much more of a joke in this story than I'd like for him to be. That's a small thing, though. This was clearly a very inspired idea, and it was executed very well. I liked Jet's relationship with his father and how that was handled, and I like Sonic's mentality reguarding the Breath of Tera and the wind. I'm a sucker for a good father-and-son story, and this is GOOD. I have just two suggestions, and they're pretty small. First of all, during the final boss, maybe you could switch characters every time you hit the boss, like SA2. Jet would still get the final hit, though, because this is basically his story. My second suggestion is that when Jet and Gale start racing eachother at the end, maybe Sonic would see this, go to grab his extreme gear to join them, but then he'd stop. He'd look at them, see how much fun they're having with each other, and simply smile. Maybe Amy could be the one to stop him as well. I just think that'd be a small thing for Sonic's character. To summarize this "Kissing up to Pariah695 Session", I just have one thing to say: "Sega, hire this man."
Pariah, you slayed with this fan story! This was so well written that I really can't think of any criticism. The emotional pay off at the end was really good. I usually don't say this but when a story is so good that I can visualize everything play out in my head, it means to me thatt you've done a great job with your storytelling. I really look forward to you finishing up Shadow Apocalypse and any stories you got brainstorming.
I recently watched the nazo unleashed fan work that you reccomended, and also the start of SMBZ, and after hearing about your story, i start to realize the many sides of a sonic story, while the fan series lean towards shonen action, your story leans more into the emotional and deep. Also reminds me about how sonic is seen as that mysterious good force of nature spoken in legends. And now i wonder if a spin-off game sonic story could empathize this "whimsical sonic" side. Maybe in a paper mario counterpart ? Sorry, was going offroad lol, either way i adored the way the story was done, i'm taking it as a lesson on how to set up things to climax a story better ! Also i love how official the old babylon rogues look and feel ! Maybe would've loved for Amy to get a bit more spotlight and the natural disasters gimmick to be a bit more worked on, but that might be more personal taste ! Overral, i think the story's awesome and i'm sure i'm gonna mistake it as a real game when i'll think about it. Congrats man !!
this is awesome! I like the new characters and story, you should totally do more of these, I would watch more of these fan story videos from you pariah! (maybe if could become one of you series like sonic was always good/the story of sonic)
I'm not half way through the video, yet I can confidently say this is so much better than IDW's own Sonic Riders story (Phantom Rider). Despite Gale being an OC, I instantly believed his relationship with Jet. The OCs feel like a natural extension of the original cast and world, and not just OCs awkwardly inserted in already existing conflicts. The bit of Eggman explaining about the Earth being alive and the artifact that produces wind is straight up a cutscene from a 2000's Sonic game.
I gotta say that that ending was such a perfect sonic like story ending. The story on its own was very good but the dialogue at times felt like an actual movie and not like a sonic game and I don't know if that is necessarily bad? Also I love that you focused this story of Jet more than any of the riders games but for me personally, my favorite sonic stories are ones that the problem is fixed by sonic's example. Sonic did the environmentalist thing but the plot line with Jets dad was nearly detached from him. This felt more like a spin off game like Shadow The Hedgehog instead of a Sonic game which again isn't bad but with what you were trying to accomplish, probably not the best thing.
I think Tails lacked more standout scenes. I would give more prominence to Jet; in my opinion, he is the main character of the Riders franchise. Other than that, it was perfect. Congratulations on the work! ❤️
I smiled at the ending there. I think the story you've laid out is very good and rather entertaining, not to mention I think the way you wrote the characters is really well done. For some reason, I particularly like the idea that Sonic gets the prize at the end and is like "screw that" and smashes the object of importance. If you ever wrote this in a proper book format, or maybe like a light novel with the occasional illustrations, I'd probably pick that up.
Im tapped into this channel way too much because i found this 30 seconds after it was posted, with no notifications 😂 this one should be good though, Pariah fanfic lets goo!!
Potential other name “Sonic Wind Riders” because all the wind related stuff (Gale, the breath of Tera, extreme gear, wind storms, and obviously riding the wind as in going fast)
The story is peak!! I Love the through, the ideas and the expantion on the riders games and the sending almost made me cry with Gale's development. Can you please make more sonic stories like this or new that aren't made for video games? Very please.
I’m really mad. Not because this is bad or anything. I’m mad because this is such a cool story for a Sonic Riders game and I love Sonic Riders so so so much… but we will never ever get a game like this. EDIT: I was at work so I couldn’t give my whole thoughts on this so I’m back to do that! I hate that the term OCs has such an immediate negative connotation to it, because the older generation of Babylon Rouges that you have come up with are awesome. Genuinely, if this was a real Sonic Riders game in 2009 instead of Free Riders, then I think Gale, Mute, and Talon would be some of my favorite characters in the series. The ending got me in my feels, which is something I have never felt about Jet the Hawk of all characters. And the idea of natural disasters breaking up the tracks and causing each lap to be unique or whatever sounds like a super fun idea for a racing game! Man all of this is just quintessential Sonic to me and I love it. My one critique is that it kinda feels like Sonic, Tails, and Knuckles don’t really have much to do until the end, it’s sorta back loaded in that way, and some of the chapters feel much less significant than others, but overall I’d say you nailed this. As amateur game dev, I’d love to make this a fan game and turn it into a straight up true Sonic Riders 3. If anybody else is down with this idea, I’d love to pursue it!
This feels pretty natural to a Sonic story of that era, it's also a nice way to end this one in particular... Damn it now im sad that we are never getting more Sonic Riders game officially, I mean Tournament edition and DX are amazing, same for Regravitified and Free Riders without kitnet... But still until a really good fan projects comes this is it for the riders series... And while i like that majority of the sumo racing games... Unless we have all of Sega characters involve, after playing Riders for so long, it just doesn't feel right for Sonic.
This was a fantastic story I love it so much I’m genuinely impressed! I think a sequel to the story should actually involve different characters this time. Mainly team rose and team chaotix and team dark. It can be sort of a spinoff of the spinoff of the riders series. It can be like a tournament with an all-star cast that’s in the realm of racing and it’s over some thing important enough that all these different teams want a piece of it. It can play like a traditional anime shonen tournament arc where every character in the story faces off against each other 1v1. And maybe trios and duos facing off against each other. Team sonic and team Babylon will also be there as well as team Eggman with metal sonic playable. And the moveset could be expanded to have more combat capabilities.
This was a GREAT story. U addin the extra Amy story before the last was incredibly smart & was jus a great utilization of her the entire way through wit the right amount of payoff for her own groth in this series & how she helps others. kinda genius move ngl. This was very authentic to me(even wit the jp phrases) & it'd be cool if a fan game used this story. That'd be awesome. I was interested since u 1st mentioned makin this & it was better than I expected. Everyone jus FEELS like themselves so effortlessly. Especially sonic. He didn't play too much part but wut lil he did do or say was all so sonic & ties perfectly wit themes in the game as a whole. Even the old babylon rogues gen were used really well & there's a good amount of proper focus. Feels like u could start a whole new saga after this or leave it. I don't have anythin to critique tbh. So I'll say u should make a 2nd name for this story that ties more thematically to the whole thing. Like the jp title of the game the west never got(I'm thinkin of 0grav which is called shooting star story in jp kinda like wit unleashed & how it's world adv in jp). I really enjoyed this
Very good story all around. I love the new characters and their energy, the other characters were more-or-less authentic and Amy's little story was pretty good. I do wish there was a setup for her doing the wind thing, though. The lack of one doesn't ruin it but its presence would be preferred.
I just gotta say i love that design for jet's dad it's amazing, and i could totally see it. And this story is really good too i would love to see it or something similar in a game, or hell the fact that we have official and you have fan designs of the characters you could make a whole fan comic with this.
Pariah isn't really an official author yet, so for now it's very unlikely. Maybe if he finally publishes a work via a publisher SEGA will keep an eye on him.
Giga Chad move of Pariah for INTENTIONALLY forgetting that Knuckles is supposed to Guard the Master Emerald on Angel Island. He’s truly staying true to The source, and I mean that genuinely.
Knuckles doesn't even have a reason to not be doing his job in the Riders games. He's just hanging around with Sonic and Tails before the plot kicks in XD
@@felipe_drawmania1604Whaddya talking about? Knuckles always hangs with Sonic & Tails because his existence revolves around Sonic because The “Mega Sega Brand Power” has controlled his Will of choice and fate in life.
@@themissingbits6375 Sonic & his friends-trademark. TM&Knuckles
@@FallenDefender100 YES.
We would not have this establishment crisis, If they'd just made Knuckles keep the master emerald shrunk and kept with him for the entirety of the series.
Pariah is running out of sonic stories to talk about so he just makes his own.
And yet, my interest has not been lost 🤔
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I gotta say, the moment where each of the New Rogues got a chance to work together with their Sonic counterpart gave me a huge smile. It just feels so perfect, especially considering how their relationship started in the First Riders.
It also feels perfect using extreme weather as the basis of the story as the Rogues are inspired by Japanese Tengu, which are youkai that can control whirlwinds. I kinda wished you had mentioned that in the actual video.
Yeah, that was really cool :D!
15:02 I nearly had a panic attack after hearing that
Pariah, blink twice if you're possessed by Ian Flynn
🤣🤣🤣
That seems like the case in shadow generations.
Made Of? *Songs starts playing*
…say that again
He can't, he's a mask ;)
you genuinely have a great grasp on what made these characters so appealing to those of us who became fans in the 2000s. I could picture so many of these scenes in my head and all the setups and payoffs were really satisfying. by the end with the comet I couldn’t help but smile lol.
you should seriously pursue writing for the series in some way officially
oh my god storm going "G-G-G-GHOSTS!!!!!!!!!!!" was foreshadowing the entire time
Admittedly as awesome as this story is, for early 2000s Sonic, it verbalizes emotion a lot more than usual. Typically this era relied on body language or implications to do the heavy lifting through subtlety.
As a die-hard Riders fan and amateur metaphor writer myself, I need this as a real game yesterday. This was exceptionally entertaining to listen to.
If it were up to me, I would've personally called the game Sonic Riders: Gale Force for a multitude of reasons, but I'm willing to bet you already thought of that ahaha. I cannot wait to hear what other ideas you're brewing up, especially as someone who is largely influenced by Japanese Sonic in my own modern projects.
Really like the detail that both Mute and Talon have a very washed out color pallete, meanwhile Gale has that really contrasting orange. It goes to show that he is the main deal of that team, while the other 2 characters don't matter much compared to him. (I don't mean this as a bad thing, both of their designs really rock, especially Talon imo)
Needless to say the story was fantastic. I especially really liked the thing with the comet, like as soon as I realized what that scene with Amy and Jet was setting up, I couldn't help but smile.
I hope this becomes a series because you generally have pretty good ideas for Sonic and also I like hearing you talk about Sonic. I am curious to see what your Storybook type game would be about
If there was a third story book game, I imagine it would be a Greek mythology thing, or maybe even nordic, some people even suggest pirate or even cowboy and biblical themes, but I think those first two fit more aptly with the officials.
I wonder which of the stories in those mythos it would be about, and how they would've subverted them like they did with the first two. If it was greek mythology, it would probably be some kind of play on the Hercules mythos, but I don't know enough about nordic mythology to have a hypothesis on that one... But yeah, I really hope Pariah does a storybook at some point.
Maybe even alongside an improvement/total rework of the Storybook saga's gameplay if he feels like tackling something bigger then, because those games definitely need some help on that aspect.
I like that
@@CableSpark872 Journey to the West is the obvious answer. It already inspired plenty of stories in East Asia for centuries even ignoring Dragon Ball.
Finally, the Pariah Movie is now in theatres.
Pariah, I just want to thank you for making the sonic story videos.
I used to dream about writing good stories, but I didn't know how to write them.
I didn't know about the core point of making a good story.
But thanks to you, I understand now what makes a good story and what doesn't.
I have the ability to say what's on my heart and mind through a new medium, thanks to your videos.
I'll probably never become a proper writer, but I'll surely make a plenty of little stories for my short animations
till I or the animation industry will die.
Thank you, Pariah ❤
Happy to hear that man. Have a happy Christmas.
@editman25jdurj You too good soul.
Yknow, this story has the perfect amount of characterisation about the old babylon rouges. It almost made me shed a tear at the end
If this were in an actual game, I would've cried. This video made me come really close to it, though.
Dude it sounds fantastic. I'm genuinely bummed that this most likely will never happen
Man. That ending. That is pure 2000’s Sonic. I love it.
I really like this. It manages to hit all the emotional moments properly and handles the absent parent plot in a mature manner. Plus, it progresses Jet’s rivalry with Sonic to something he can genuinely enjoy.
I also really like Mute. He’s the kind of guy that has one gimmick to his character but it’s entertaining.
To anyone who thinks this is somehow connected or related to the recent IDW Sonic arc you should read all the details in the description, just to warn you about this and get it out of the way
You know, if it's YOU writing OC's into a story you yourself make, then I have full confidence you know what you're doing. There's no way you would be writing Coldsteel The Hedgehog 2.0, with all the same issues. Despite popular opinion, not all fan characters are cheesy and stupid, nor are they all just Mary/Gary Sues. I would like to make special mention to some fan-made villains like Nazo, Seelkadoom, and Aeon. I think those OC's are perfectly fine, or even better, they're well done. Although, Aeon is more so part-Mega Man/part-Sonic fan character. I think that is what makes him so iconic. He is the twisted mirror to the whole crossover-concept of SFF. I do hope we get to see more of Aeon in the future though, if BlackDevilDX ever considers continuing the series. I see a lot of potential for that character!
BlackDevilX passed away last night, rest in peace
Coldsteel is a parody of Sonic OCs, not an actual OC someone made genuinely
Fantastic story. Got me emotional at the end with the father and son relation. Love it. Amazing work, the fact you actually consider it as a game story and embrace that, was stellar. Keep on, my most sincered and deserved congratulations.
I just wanna say thank you for all the efforts you put in your videos and writing. Your content, passion and enthusiasm towards this series helps me alot and i can't express my genuine appreciation for it, and even if you're close to be done with this series, im happy it will be a great, most enjoyable end to it
Just finished watching this, and man, was that amazing. It feels like something straight out of the late 2000s. The Ocs fit very well with the main cast, and I loved the themes of environmentalism and the story about Jets' father. It really helps with building on top of what was already established in previous games. I think some more original game stories and concepts would be sick in the future.
07:00 The gimmick actually sounds interesting as a gameplay concept. Reminds me a lot of Motor Storm
You should call it Sonic Riders Turbulence
Get this pinned
You did a fantastic job with this story, it’s so true to everything sonic was at the time, and is also a great story, I got really invested in everything that was going on and got so hyped at the last chapter, I appreciate you giving Amy her own chapter and moments to shine, if this was a real game I’m sure people would be surprised at that.
Also I’ve seen some people comment on how Sonic doesn’t really do much in this story, but I have to argue that that is kinda staying true to other stories at the time, where the focus was more on the new characters than him but he was still doing his thing and being Sonic, like how in ZG he was just like ok we’re done here that was fun see ya later, here he’s not really getting involved in Jet and his father’s conflict, he’s here to get things going and in a very him way, he rejects the horn and then destroys it, very in line with what he was at the time, just a way for other characters to have their own stories and grow, it ain’t always about him.
I REALLY love the new characters and the ending to this story. Wonderful job here, Pariah!!
Pretty good story! Just 2 problems:
1. Sonic doesn't really do anything of note. He's just kinda there. I would like him to engage in the rival banter with Jet as well, would make their dynamic more interesting.
2. Tails and Wave don't really interact at all until the final moment, which kinda comes out of nowhere. Tails and Wave are rivals in the Riders games so I would like to see them bicker about. It would also make the moment where Tails helps Wave more interesting.
But overall, I'm really impressed with the result here. I like that you gave Amy her own little chapter, since she's not a part of any team in the Riders games and ends up feeling disconnected. Really good stuff.
To be fair for point 1, that isn't exactly inaccurate to some of the stories that were in Sonic games in this era he's trying to emulate (06 for example), Sonic sometimes was just kinda...there while the story focused more on the other characters.
@@legoboy7107 This story is meant to be a sequel to Zero Gravity however, around 2009 or so. By then we already have the storybook games that really utilize Sonic's character very well.
I understand what you're saying here but personally the direction they took Sonic's character in 06 is something I really dislike as he comes across as extremely boring in that game. So even if this was an intentional choice by Pariah, I would still prefer if Sonic had more energy to him instead of being a bland protagonist like he's in 06.
1. This point doesn’t really stand because we have sonic shattering the wind gizmo and sonic stories aren’t typically revolved around sonic, this story is more focused on Jet (ergo him being the final character you play) I think it’s a nice change of pace away from sonic to make jets character grow more.
2. This point also doesn’t really stand because this story is written off the assumption that you played zero gravity and riders. It’s supposed to be an ending to their dynamic from the previous games.
I will admit that I had some of these criticisms when getting into the story but after it was done I was left feeling fulfilled most of your criticism doesn’t exist simply because of the past riders games.
I don't know what to say except *you get it*, man. This nails that _je ne sais quoi_ 00s Sonic had. Shoutout to the artists for the sick designs too.
Okay wow I did NOT expect it to feel like a Sonic story this MUCH, but I would say it actually fits perfectly for a Sonic Riders story. Got some of that humor in it but for a change it added some character arcs for Jet and Wave. I don't remember if they had ones in riders and zero gravity but I am pretty sure they did not. But anyways that was amazing. I could totally see this as an official story because it just feels like something that can come out of a Sonic story. Great job Pariah❤
Holy peak that ending was soo fuckign good. The emotions were so right
I hope to see more of your original Sonic stories. This is cool!
Your method of storytelling is pretty cool, the way Jet says "Wait" but Gale takes off anyway, shows their relationship, and Amy's superstitious nonsense with the comet thing also kinda serves as foreshadowing. I love the scene with Wave and Tails working together, and Amy telling Jet and Gale to be more honest instead of arguing.
Though Sonic kinda doesn't really do anything in this story, and he's kinda impulsive, it's in character for him to not want the wind artifact, but it's dangerous, so you'd think he'd wanna get rid of it instead of leaving it to people like Jet and Gale. And when he does smash it, it's kinda cool, but also kinda stupid like that could've been very dangerous, it could've triggered a crazy cyclone or something.
Mute is crazy op, like he's stronger than Knuckles, and much faster than him too, so he's gotta be almost as fast as Sonic, while being the strongest character in the series.
This story's themes are kinda insane with how heavy they are, having a deadbeat father, then having him die, these could use more fleshing out, maybe. Though this simple optimistic outlook on it is pretty fitting for the Sonic franchise, and kinda nice. It also seems like Gale got everybody killed by telling Talon to not turn off the security, so his arrogance, and once he comes back for a day he's still as arrogant as ever. I feel like he could've had a character arc about overcoming that arrogance and accepting his mistakes.
The OCs look insane btw, some of the best I've seen
Going forward Jet's development can be that he doesn't care about comparing himself to others like being the fastest or faster than Sonic, and instead just wants to do his best for his own sake
The flashback with the security is actually before the mission that got them killed.
We don't really know what happend there.
Oh gale lasr race against jet got me in tears while buying stuff at the supermarket. Great stuff
Love the story, excellent setups & payoffs, the ending even got me a bit emotional, very well done & very Sonic.
That Crow design is fire
1:11:18 Just finished the story. You got me laughing, a genuine satisfied laugh. I love it. Perfect ending.
i noticed that there's some clunkiness to some stuff characters say,but that was probably a byproduct of how you kinda did the bits of dialogue like the actual sonic game dubs of the 2000s,which feels very authentic.
It absolutely was intentional
I love the thought that went into your OC's. Jet's father surfer motif, His soap opera with His son and their farewell at the end Is beautiful (also at the end I got an AD for a song called "Pa que te fuiste" by Elena Rose and it's ironically funny how the lyrics fit...)
Mute's gag doing what owls do Is morbidly funny, and oddly enough I had my own Babylon Rouge Croe design with purple clothing idea, so I love Talon too jsjsjs.
This was very well-thought out, feels very authentic to the 2000s Sonic stories, like the ending especially. Well done.
I had such a big smile on my face while listening to this. It's so 2000s Sonic, and I love it! I really wish this could be the story of a new Riders game. Also, I would love to see more of your writing in the future, whether it's Sonic-related or not.
This was beautiful.
this is a genuinely brilliant conclusion to the sonic riders series, i'd really want to play this game if it actually existed. maybe it could be called 'sonic riders: extreme turbulence' or smth like that considering the extreme weather conditions concept of this story
This was very enjoyable to listen to, you did a great job with it
I just finished watching this video and holy crap. This was super good. This is much better than either of the Sonic Riders games before it. The OCs fit right in alongside the main cast, and their characterization is superb. One thing that I don't really like is that Eggman is treated like much more of a joke in this story than I'd like for him to be. That's a small thing, though. This was clearly a very inspired idea, and it was executed very well. I liked Jet's relationship with his father and how that was handled, and I like Sonic's mentality reguarding the Breath of Tera and the wind. I'm a sucker for a good father-and-son story, and this is GOOD.
I have just two suggestions, and they're pretty small. First of all, during the final boss, maybe you could switch characters every time you hit the boss, like SA2. Jet would still get the final hit, though, because this is basically his story. My second suggestion is that when Jet and Gale start racing eachother at the end, maybe Sonic would see this, go to grab his extreme gear to join them, but then he'd stop. He'd look at them, see how much fun they're having with each other, and simply smile. Maybe Amy could be the one to stop him as well. I just think that'd be a small thing for Sonic's character.
To summarize this "Kissing up to Pariah695 Session", I just have one thing to say: "Sega, hire this man."
Local youtuber understands sonic stories better than Ian, publishes his own for an even smaller audience than IDW
Funny that it's also better than the Riders arc that IDW just finished making lol
I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH
MY NEW FAVORITE SONIC STORY GREAT JOB
Pariah, you slayed with this fan story! This was so well written that I really can't think of any criticism. The emotional pay off at the end was really good. I usually don't say this but when a story is so good that I can visualize everything play out in my head, it means to me thatt you've done a great job with your storytelling. I really look forward to you finishing up Shadow Apocalypse and any stories you got brainstorming.
How do you watch the whole video it's only been out for 25 minutes?
@WhATUpmAN301 Pariah releases videos early on his Patreon.
that was so beautiful...
I recently watched the nazo unleashed fan work that you reccomended, and also the start of SMBZ, and after hearing about your story, i start to realize the many sides of a sonic story, while the fan series lean towards shonen action, your story leans more into the emotional and deep. Also reminds me about how sonic is seen as that mysterious good force of nature spoken in legends. And now i wonder if a spin-off game sonic story could empathize this "whimsical sonic" side. Maybe in a paper mario counterpart ?
Sorry, was going offroad lol, either way i adored the way the story was done, i'm taking it as a lesson on how to set up things to climax a story better ! Also i love how official the old babylon rogues look and feel ! Maybe would've loved for Amy to get a bit more spotlight and the natural disasters gimmick to be a bit more worked on, but that might be more personal taste ! Overral, i think the story's awesome and i'm sure i'm gonna mistake it as a real game when i'll think about it. Congrats man !!
Honestly? "Breath of Terra" suffices as a subtitle to me!
This was really cool. I really like it.
30:15 Legend of Sonic: The Wind Waker
1:10:34 Man, the payoff on this part is so cleaver
Legit wasn't expecting that to actually be true
this is awesome! I like the new characters and story, you should totally do more of these, I would watch more of these fan story videos from you pariah! (maybe if could become one of you series like sonic was always good/the story of sonic)
Beautiful work, I really enjoyed how everything came together!
Very easily my favorite riders story and I'm kind of pissed it's not actually real
@@BakuganRey right lmao
This is insanely good.
Now we wait for someone to make a fangame of this.
Absolute cinema
It was so good!
Id say this is flawless
Very on point, very in line, Very Freaking Cool Stuff
I'm not half way through the video, yet I can confidently say this is so much better than IDW's own Sonic Riders story (Phantom Rider).
Despite Gale being an OC, I instantly believed his relationship with Jet. The OCs feel like a natural extension of the original cast and world, and not just OCs awkwardly inserted in already existing conflicts. The bit of Eggman explaining about the Earth being alive and the artifact that produces wind is straight up a cutscene from a 2000's Sonic game.
Huh….I really like this!
I gotta say that that ending was such a perfect sonic like story ending. The story on its own was very good but the dialogue at times felt like an actual movie and not like a sonic game and I don't know if that is necessarily bad? Also I love that you focused this story of Jet more than any of the riders games but for me personally, my favorite sonic stories are ones that the problem is fixed by sonic's example. Sonic did the environmentalist thing but the plot line with Jets dad was nearly detached from him. This felt more like a spin off game like Shadow The Hedgehog instead of a Sonic game which again isn't bad but with what you were trying to accomplish, probably not the best thing.
48:50 I imagine Pariah rubbing his hands like he's up to some nefarious activities while saying this lol
Pariah695 is The Evil version of Pariah, after all ;)
I think Tails lacked more standout scenes. I would give more prominence to Jet; in my opinion, he is the main character of the Riders franchise. Other than that, it was perfect. Congratulations on the work! ❤️
I smiled at the ending there. I think the story you've laid out is very good and rather entertaining, not to mention I think the way you wrote the characters is really well done. For some reason, I particularly like the idea that Sonic gets the prize at the end and is like "screw that" and smashes the object of importance.
If you ever wrote this in a proper book format, or maybe like a light novel with the occasional illustrations, I'd probably pick that up.
Im tapped into this channel way too much because i found this 30 seconds after it was posted, with no notifications 😂 this one should be good though, Pariah fanfic lets goo!!
Dr. Eggman:"Mr. AaAnderson, I've been expecting you."
Sega hire this man pls
It's a nice story, gj Pari
I'd say it's pretty good with a good sense of finality too.
Potential other name “Sonic Wind Riders” because all the wind related stuff (Gale, the breath of Tera, extreme gear, wind storms, and obviously riding the wind as in going fast)
The story is peak!! I Love the through, the ideas and the expantion on the riders games and the sending almost made me cry with Gale's development. Can you please make more sonic stories like this or new that aren't made for video games? Very please.
1:06:00 I think to be true to 2000s era Sonic games Sonic should be racing the final boss regardless of how important others are
I’m really mad. Not because this is bad or anything. I’m mad because this is such a cool story for a Sonic Riders game and I love Sonic Riders so so so much… but we will never ever get a game like this.
EDIT: I was at work so I couldn’t give my whole thoughts on this so I’m back to do that!
I hate that the term OCs has such an immediate negative connotation to it, because the older generation of Babylon Rouges that you have come up with are awesome. Genuinely, if this was a real Sonic Riders game in 2009 instead of Free Riders, then I think Gale, Mute, and Talon would be some of my favorite characters in the series. The ending got me in my feels, which is something I have never felt about Jet the Hawk of all characters. And the idea of natural disasters breaking up the tracks and causing each lap to be unique or whatever sounds like a super fun idea for a racing game! Man all of this is just quintessential Sonic to me and I love it. My one critique is that it kinda feels like Sonic, Tails, and Knuckles don’t really have much to do until the end, it’s sorta back loaded in that way, and some of the chapters feel much less significant than others, but overall I’d say you nailed this. As amateur game dev, I’d love to make this a fan game and turn it into a straight up true Sonic Riders 3. If anybody else is down with this idea, I’d love to pursue it!
This feels pretty natural to a Sonic story of that era, it's also a nice way to end this one in particular... Damn it now im sad that we are never getting more Sonic Riders game officially, I mean Tournament edition and DX are amazing, same for Regravitified and Free Riders without kitnet... But still until a really good fan projects comes this is it for the riders series... And while i like that majority of the sumo racing games... Unless we have all of Sega characters involve, after playing Riders for so long, it just doesn't feel right for Sonic.
Great job I loved the story
This was a fantastic story I love it so much I’m genuinely impressed! I think a sequel to the story should actually involve different characters this time. Mainly team rose and team chaotix and team dark. It can be sort of a spinoff of the spinoff of the riders series. It can be like a tournament with an all-star cast that’s in the realm of racing and it’s over some thing important enough that all these different teams want a piece of it. It can play like a traditional anime shonen tournament arc where every character in the story faces off against each other 1v1. And maybe trios and duos facing off against each other. Team sonic and team Babylon will also be there as well as team Eggman with metal sonic playable. And the moveset could be expanded to have more combat capabilities.
This was a GREAT story. U addin the extra Amy story before the last was incredibly smart & was jus a great utilization of her the entire way through wit the right amount of payoff for her own groth in this series & how she helps others. kinda genius move ngl. This was very authentic to me(even wit the jp phrases) & it'd be cool if a fan game used this story. That'd be awesome. I was interested since u 1st mentioned makin this & it was better than I expected. Everyone jus FEELS like themselves so effortlessly. Especially sonic. He didn't play too much part but wut lil he did do or say was all so sonic & ties perfectly wit themes in the game as a whole. Even the old babylon rogues gen were used really well & there's a good amount of proper focus. Feels like u could start a whole new saga after this or leave it. I don't have anythin to critique tbh. So I'll say u should make a 2nd name for this story that ties more thematically to the whole thing. Like the jp title of the game the west never got(I'm thinkin of 0grav which is called shooting star story in jp kinda like wit unleashed & how it's world adv in jp). I really enjoyed this
1:06:18 THIS IS SONIC!!!
Very good story all around. I love the new characters and their energy, the other characters were more-or-less authentic and Amy's little story was pretty good. I do wish there was a setup for her doing the wind thing, though. The lack of one doesn't ruin it but its presence would be preferred.
I Can now 100% confidently say that you need to be a writer for Sonic. Great work, dude!
“STOP FIGHTINGGGG!!” - Amy Rose
I just gotta say i love that design for jet's dad it's amazing, and i could totally see it. And this story is really good too i would love to see it or something similar in a game, or hell the fact that we have official and you have fan designs of the characters you could make a whole fan comic with this.
That's pretty good
34:18 Lmfao amazing 🤣
Finally, a proper dilf in the sonic series.
This is great
It was perfect 🤧
Some one make it a movie 😁
Yeah this is honestly so fucking awesome.
Please make more of these…
Was hoping that the story would be about Sonic & Jet racing each other, and whoever wins gets to kiss Shadow
Lol. Personally, I kinda hoped we Got some kind of conclusion to Sonic & Jet’s rivalry. But The story we Got to hear is pretty cool.
Tonight's gonna be fun. Gaming and one hour Pariah video playing in the background
One day Pariah will be the writer of official Sonic games.
Pariah isn't really an official author yet, so for now it's very unlikely. Maybe if he finally publishes a work via a publisher SEGA will keep an eye on him.
If only
Bro pretty much made motorstorm apocalypse but with sonic characters
I'd like to see this story become a real fan game
The amy being jet girlfriend bit
Was genuinely funny 😂😂😂
I would love to see that to come this to realty maybe in a au this game was made.
I like it and if in gameplay Sonic doesn't boost and generate lightning then I'm game.
GOATED!