This was actually a solid bit. You have stage presence. You come across in control with an effortless demeanor of "I don't know what I'm doing here." This is a solid stage character you have going on and I genuinely enjoyed your bit. It's fun to watch. Keep going.
where did you find the 70's basement? i'm guessing 75-78, somewhere in that time frame. sorta midwestern feel of someone who visited california. it's the they might be, they might not be swingers vibe place. definitely a wet bar down there. and those are DEFINATELY 70's basement stories with that twinge of shame. awesome bro
Ive listened to it multiple times. Take out the molestation. Not needed. You could simply say "their father didn't hug them enough" and relate that to why you became a comedian because you are seeking approval and then instead of killing him with an axe you actually see yourself in him but you have insurance and yet NOTHING for him to steal, so then maybe it actually might make you feel better to kill him because its more demoralizing that someone broke into your place and there was nothing of value to steal. Button of the bit "so i did buy an axe, a pretty expensive one actually, and the intruder stole that."
This was actually a solid bit. You have stage presence. You come across in control with an effortless demeanor of "I don't know what I'm doing here." This is a solid stage character you have going on and I genuinely enjoyed your bit. It's fun to watch. Keep going.
Why wouldn't I keep going? I'm a successful comedian who makes 6 figures
8:18-8:58 is a GREAT joke!
Great stuff, funny AF.
where did you find the 70's basement? i'm guessing 75-78, somewhere in that time frame. sorta midwestern feel of someone who visited california. it's the they might be, they might not be swingers vibe place. definitely a wet bar down there. and those are DEFINATELY 70's basement stories with that twinge of shame. awesome bro
Its a new bar in LA made up to look like that. The Blind Barber
@@GrahamKayComedy i think that's where i go for mullet maintenance
My table has two leaves. No big deal.
i liked it
Trust me. Take my notes. My gift to you. ❤
loved the last bit
FAFuc!
This is really good
I thought you were hilarious
Thanks dawg!
Ive listened to it multiple times. Take out the molestation. Not needed. You could simply say "their father didn't hug them enough" and relate that to why you became a comedian because you are seeking approval and then instead of killing him with an axe you actually see yourself in him but you have insurance and yet NOTHING for him to steal, so then maybe it actually might make you feel better to kill him because its more demoralizing that someone broke into your place and there was nothing of value to steal. Button of the bit "so i did buy an axe, a pretty expensive one actually, and the intruder stole that."
I appreciate the note. You should try standup for a few years and then you'll understand why i made those choices. Thanks for the time