Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
Essay: "Prestidigitation, P R E S . . ." Admissions: "BORING!" *throws away* Essay: "Thinking about working hard, gets me hard." Harvard: "Bro, want a scholarship?"
There's a certain convention I've learned after taking an English class that focused a lot on using creative writing. English classes teach us every possible fundamental tool for using English. Creative writing (which would apply to these admissions letters), by nature, breaks those fundamentals up for the sake of narrative flexibility and immersion. Creative writing is a whole different world compared to what most English classes try to prepare you for. For example, no author has a grammatically "perfect" style. Most people that would stick to "proper" English usage would make boring stories. Don't let the technical stuff bog you down. Just understand the advantages to using it in certain situations.
Its high school english. 98% of the time the teachers themselves cant write a decent composition or know what one is. They ask kids to read books, then occasionally assign an essay because they have to, and they are bad cookiecutter essays
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
Ok. These essays are supposed to distinguish you from a bunch of people by showing your true self. If you're not making full use of that, you're not gonna stand out. It might even hurt your application chances.
Ok but how can I make my essays better? I need serious help because I am in the process of applying for scholarships but I'm afraid that my essays will just be weak and not good enough to even have a chance at being considered.
I put in my grade 3 assessment sheet asking me to draw what I would like to be when I was older on the first page of my essay. I think its part of what got me in to University.
"Prestidigitation. A cantrip that allows minor magical tricks and effects available to bards, sorcerors, warlocks, and wizards at first level. Prestidigitation."
Being too philosophical in your college essay will make you come off as quite obnoxious so try to avoid those topics unless you’re going into philosophy
Its funny im watching this while in university and i didnt have to do any of the shit this guy and others have been telling me i needed to do for the past 3 years. Ofc it isnt harvard or Cambridge but trust me only one semester in and i fully acknowledge that wont matter once you have a couple of years experience under your belt. I learnt one of the most important things to learn other than academics is the art of talking to and charming people. You can get very far with just the way you talk and present yourself.❤ dont stress, live a little.
The "good one" is so bad. Unless I know what prestidigitation is and care about it, and spelling a word is meaningless and cliche at this point. Tbh, I'm actually way more interested in the "the thinking about working hard gets me hard" applicant.
You actually don’t have a few seconds to catch their attention. Each essay gets read if you meet the requirements. Multiple people read your essay before it gets a decision.
I took a class called career research and decision making and the way they did there essay was exactly how it teaches in that class by doing what they called the sandwich method and it works great
My college advisor told me not to make puns about Hitler’s mustache, when my college I was aiming for asked who we wished we could dine with in history, but honestly I think it is one of several things of what got me into my college. It certainly stood out. Haha. I am definitely an outlandish girl who had great grades. It certainly would not have worked out for me in this day and age though.
Am I going insane? Why is everyone quoting it as “Thinking about working hard, makes me hard” when he clearly said “gets me hard”? Is this some sort of UA-cam censorship thing or are all the top comments mishearing it?
My admission letter was less than 3 complete sentences: I’m [insert name]. I would like to come to this school. I was also auto accepted in Tx cause of my HS ranking and I knew that they couldn’t tell me no
My admission essay to a 4 year university was 12 words. “I think I would make a great addition to the tiger community” I was accepted and have since dropped out because I got depressed. Now I’m just depressed, in debt and have no degree. Yay.
“Thinking about working hard, makes me hard”
A true legend made that quote
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YOU are telling ME that "thinking about working hard,makes me hard" DOESNT CAPTURE YOUR ATTENTION
😂
Ayo 😳🤣
they’d get that acceptance letter real fast
Facts 😂😂
That was the best one right there.
“thinking about working hard, makes me hard” is a pretty engaging hook to me
Yeah that hook was solid
yeah that hook hit hard
On god that sticks with me
@@016_ 😳
@@railx2005 That wasn't the only solid thing...
“Thinking about working hard makes me hard”
ACCEPTED
Hey the voice who was speaking the essay was Gohar
I think they are brothers
Yes
@@crypticfairy7930 yeah, he confirmed it in one of his older videos
@@GatikRaj ohh okay I probably haven’t seen that video yet then
@@crypticfairy7930 it didn’t have that many views, I was kinda surprised that it didn’t
Use the most engaging hook of all... "my father made a large donation to this school"
💀
Or “I’m black and disabled”
@@equinox2655you’re accepted
Definitely Gohar khan doing the voice over
I’m pretty sure they are brothers, might be wrong but they have the same last name and look somewhat alike.
@@crypticfairy7930 yeah I’m pretty sure they are brothers/ cousins
@@crypticfairy7930 they are brothers
I love how they stopped every sound so the “Just thinking about working hard makes me hard” would be so clear
“Thinking about working hard, makes me hard”
Is that david goggins?
😂😂😂
"Stay hard”-David goggins
whos gonna carry the boats???
that should be his hook
@@Youneedsomemilk16 people with erectile dysfunction: am i a joke to you???
WHOS GONNA CARRY THE BOATS - david goggins
My admission's essay started out like this:
She lay their naked screaming...
Can’t even use the correct “there.” Smh 😞
there*
did you get in?
@@Mysterious-Night She got you engaged though so...
What was the essay about
“Just thinking about working hard gets me hard”
Guess what’s going in my college essay
To be honest if you have at least one prestigious you might not get in out it on there.
It worked, got into SUNY Binghamton
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
@@Trimarkovichwait you actually put it in? If so that’s wild
@@Trimarkovichno way-
This reminds me of the dumb greentext that talked about "I throw away half of the resumes I get, I dont want unlucky people."
LMAOOOO
did he say “just thinking about working hard MAKES ME HARD?” Wtf 😂
my cousin wrote about why kanye was her favorite rap artist for her harvard essay back in 2016. she was accepted lol
W
Did Harvard revoke the degree or something
Lol
Essay: "Prestidigitation, P R E S . . ."
Admissions: "BORING!" *throws away*
Essay: "Thinking about working hard, gets me hard."
Harvard: "Bro, want a scholarship?"
😏
Ong aint nobody wanna read some dumb spelling bee shit
@@therickestroller 😳
🥵 @@Ryuisdragon
“Thinking about working hard makes me hard”💀💀💀
I used to do this on essays anyway but High school English class squashed my confidence in it...
Don't Give up..
There's a certain convention I've learned after taking an English class that focused a lot on using creative writing. English classes teach us every possible fundamental tool for using English. Creative writing (which would apply to these admissions letters), by nature, breaks those fundamentals up for the sake of narrative flexibility and immersion. Creative writing is a whole different world compared to what most English classes try to prepare you for. For example, no author has a grammatically "perfect" style. Most people that would stick to "proper" English usage would make boring stories. Don't let the technical stuff bog you down. Just understand the advantages to using it in certain situations.
@@absolootdisaster1060 is there some sort of class or video that can show me an example of that?
Its high school english. 98% of the time the teachers themselves cant write a decent composition or know what one is. They ask kids to read books, then occasionally assign an essay because they have to, and they are bad cookiecutter essays
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
Ok they're so obviously brothers, no cap
yes they are
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
@askredditstudios8055 Umm look I'm Christian too but I feel like that's kinds irrelevant to the video?
“Just thinking about working hard gets me hard”
Nah this is staged, no one would flip past that one 💀
As a Guatemalan just pro tip NEVER start an essay with mission trip to Guatemala
I am from Guate and was going to do that :')
Thinking about working hard gets me hard, I was cracking up
My college essay started with “Humans on this planet are quite interesting.”
did u get in
@@lifeangular62610
Yes
Picks up last page, it says:
‘Ligma’
And he’s like:
‘What’s ligm…
"Create an engaging hook" they said, "capture their attention" they said, now I'm in federal prison thx man..
Goddamn i got you and gohans vids one after another while randomly scrolling
gohar*
Not me thinking he was gonna write prestidigitation on the paper 💀
“Just thinking about working hard gets me hard” ?
Honestly those “personal engaging hooks” are boring to me. They are also just cringe. I would never read the last essay tbh
“There once was a boy.” Was my personal quote for an essay I wrote. It was weird talking about myself in the third person.
Dude my college essay was literally about my mission trip to Guatemala
My essay : im hungry give me food
“Just thinking about working hard, gets me hard”
This had me laughing so HARD
Your brother Gohar was definitely the person who dubbed and probably wrote the all of the essays 😊!
“Just thinking about working hard makes me ha-“ 💀
The collab we needed
If every opening is engaging then none of them are.
Cheer~~~a short piece of writing on a particular subject.😊
If this is legitimately how college boards read their papers, I feel every single one of them should be fired and exiled from any college campus.
They don't have full days to spend and read 1000 each day.
Ok. These essays are supposed to distinguish you from a bunch of people by showing your true self. If you're not making full use of that, you're not gonna stand out. It might even hurt your application chances.
The collab I didn't know i needed! How did i see this so late????
What? Thats how much home works we got in goddamn 2nd year highschool
Gohar really going over the voicing
“i hate the letter-“ immediate throw away
When he got to the last one the writer put the reader in there shoes instead of a reporter style essay where you just list what you did
I swear I heard “working hard gets me har-“
Yep same
To be honest, I have nothing eventful to write about
Ok but how can I make my essays better? I need serious help because I am in the process of applying for scholarships but I'm afraid that my essays will just be weak and not good enough to even have a chance at being considered.
I put in my grade 3 assessment sheet asking me to draw what I would like to be when I was older on the first page of my essay. I think its part of what got me in to University.
Great explanation 🔥
bro literary just said what all my english teachers told me
if i had to make my admission paper catchy, i bet it would be, “aight bro, ima cut to the chase. read my shit rn boy”
"Prestidigitation. A cantrip that allows minor magical tricks and effects available to bards, sorcerors, warlocks, and wizards at first level. Prestidigitation."
But the admissions officer also gets your rest of the profile with the essay too right?
yes
Plot twist, he wrote "absolute garbage" on the paper
“I’m a donkey, Shrek.”
Yesss being a good narrative writer is an important skill
You cant tell me “just think about working hard, makes me hard” isnt a great opener
the goal of all life is death sounds like a cool opening
Being too philosophical in your college essay will make you come off as quite obnoxious so try to avoid those topics unless you’re going into philosophy
That's a verifiably terrible opening.
Its funny im watching this while in university and i didnt have to do any of the shit this guy and others have been telling me i needed to do for the past 3 years. Ofc it isnt harvard or Cambridge but trust me only one semester in and i fully acknowledge that wont matter once you have a couple of years experience under your belt. I learnt one of the most important things to learn other than academics is the art of talking to and charming people. You can get very far with just the way you talk and present yourself.❤ dont stress, live a little.
The "good one" is so bad. Unless I know what prestidigitation is and care about it, and spelling a word is meaningless and cliche at this point. Tbh, I'm actually way more interested in the "the thinking about working hard gets me hard" applicant.
You actually don’t have a few seconds to catch their attention. Each essay gets read if you meet the requirements. Multiple people read your essay before it gets a decision.
Kinda sad you have to rely partialy on your ability to write essays to get to college and not just your exam results
I took a class called career research and decision making and the way they did there essay was exactly how it teaches in that class by doing what they called the sandwich method and it works great
I really like his voice. It's so soothing 😌
that guy should be fired
I already knew that I needed a good hook. My problem is my complete lack of literary skill in crafting engaging hooks
Damn I wish I won a spelling bee so I could steal that for my essay
Bro went to White Castle after this
This couldn’t have popped up at a better time.
This is why I'd rather go to a college that requires no essay or not go to college at all, i cannot write essays to save my life
My college advisor told me not to make puns about Hitler’s mustache, when my college I was aiming for asked who we wished we could dine with in history, but honestly I think it is one of several things of what got me into my college. It certainly stood out. Haha. I am definitely an outlandish girl who had great grades. It certainly would not have worked out for me in this day and age though.
Honestly up to perception
Tbh that opening was more of a beginning to a book rather than an application
It's kinda supposed to be that way
The fact is @Gohar Khan video was right above this video and it was about college essay to lol
Best crossover of the 21st century
You know what’s crazy is if you in an English class and that last one is your first sentence most teachers would instantly take off points
This is definitely how they check your essay
Hooks are the most important part of any essay. How kids applying to top schools will forget that I'll never know 💀
I don't know dude, that trip to Guatemala kinda got me hooked
This reminds me of that one scene from a Christmas story
So to get into Harvard have knowledge and be able to create high viewed shorts and TikTok’s and have a min of 100k followers
What are you doing Step-Gohar khan !?
My essay began “Ants are pretty stupid”
Everyone Gangsta until they realise that the voice was gohar
Im starting with 4 random words like fukin spaghetti hdmi cable bag lettuce or sum
thank you for this tip :)
Me whose in a debate team: 🪦
Am I going insane? Why is everyone quoting it as “Thinking about working hard, makes me hard” when he clearly said “gets me hard”? Is this some sort of UA-cam censorship thing or are all the top comments mishearing it?
So good collages are a “who’s got a better personality contest to get accepted”?
My admission letter was less than 3 complete sentences: I’m [insert name]. I would like to come to this school.
I was also auto accepted in Tx cause of my HS ranking and I knew that they couldn’t tell me no
How i open mine: "My dad has money, and is willing to donate a building..."
Rhis feels like an ad for quiting smoking or smth
Nah just thinking of working hard makes me har-
doom scrolling as a job
My admission essay to a 4 year university was 12 words. “I think I would make a great addition to the tiger community”
I was accepted and have since dropped out because I got depressed. Now I’m just depressed, in debt and have no degree.
Yay.
giving me PSAT flashbacks bro
So you’re saying, make a good narrative and you’re in?
That essay was also boring to hear😂
I don’t think they will throw out your essay after them reading a few opening words.
Pretty sure, “just thinking about working hard makes me hard would grab my attention pretty quick💀”
That last one is still ass he just took it more seriously lol